MN.NEW..PARICHEY...CHP24 LTH#2 at Index Pg 1 - Page 29

Originally posted by: kirti123

the snake thing was so scary

and the way u descried nupurs fear and mayanks reaction was superb

the hospital part was also painful

amazing ff

continue soon

thanks for the pm😊

i know.. me too tooo scared of tht ...😕
thnku so much glad u felt the feeling of this update

will cont soo...

Originally posted by: shafyyy

amazing part

thnks alot

Originally posted by: Irum.

It was very nice update especially snake wala scene the way Mayank handled the situation was very intelligent.Yes bt he got panicked when Nupur fainted.

Yes like others I also feel the pace is slow and in past it feels i m reading sajan story.Bt past is also important because it shows us the bonding,depth,intensity and purity of Mayur's relation.Without that we Won't be able to feel their present relation.

Bt past main hum bohat scences dekh chuke hain and present k I think three, One Nupur's parent in hospital with sajan and second Mayank's arrival and then Mayank in hospital.

Sorry dear If i hurt u bt u asked that's y i said.Its ur FF and u can write as u like.Usually I very rarely talk about pace because every writer has her own temperament and way of thinking.

thnks dear..

i agree with u..but i can only say tht ... present u cant relate untill u get the story of past... if i suddenly strt to unfold all in present.. u will not be even react at tht... as u donot know wht actually this was all abt... i mean mein nupur ki shadi hi nhi dekho gi tu us ki divorce kasay hogi... so to take the stroy til tht point i have to take the past more initally... and than later it will be more present and eventually only present...

hay comon i was telling this to Maria even tht day why u people say sorry on ur coments... its nothing to get hurt on this how we learn n connect with our readers...

i so aprreciate ur thoughts..n sumhow i do have a slower temperamnet whn its cums to emotions i like them to sink in first...

Originally posted by: -SupriyaluvsMN-

nyc update fiza!
acc to me...the pace is a bit slow!

thnks alot dear...
okay i make sure to update it quicker to make it feel faster..

Originally posted by: -Gunners-

amazing part..keep it up...

thnsk alot dear

Originally posted by: --WHATEVER--

nice part

thnku

Originally posted by: mayuloveu

wow amazing. present is painful. mayank is almost dead seeing nupur. past is so cute

thnks alot dear..
im so gald u can feel the pain...

Originally posted by: crazymayurian

Bhai hum kahani enjoy kr rhe he cment shment ni dend hota:p

ahhh... i will kill u... 😆..itni sharat achi nhi hoti... kamiyaza bohgatna paray ga is k..soch loo :P
wasy mjhy bulkil bora nhi lagay ga agar tum yuhi khoi rahoo 😊

Originally posted by: Bhawna_arti

Nice part.

thnkuu

Originally posted by: kheya-mayur

m liking the present ...but wanna know thei past story too .
ye sajan ko thora kam space do na !!!!

lovely update .
nupur resembled me in dis part .m too this much scard of snake .
mayur k pyar-shadi-divorce kyun hua????


ummm

pace is ok but past n present ko equaly dikhana chahie .before this update u used to put very short of present n past to full of sajan hai 😕

thnks alot dear...
hmm sajan if u notice are actually building MN story ..as they are cuming close sumone from the outer side is viewing them diffrently...and thts wht sajan are for here...
me too ..kheya yeah kya hai..hum dono itna miltay kyun hai bhii...
yeah mein 20 chapter tak nhi bataoo gi :P


muskil hai.. as story will progress past kam kam aur khatam hojay ga...

awesome updt fiza
for me its ok with pace of the story ... but curiosity to know what happened in the past is the reason to want a little bit fast forward the past...eagerly waiting for the next updt...cont soon
thanks for the pm

Amazing update...loved it
thnx 4 d pm

beautiful update...