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meghanakiran

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Posted: 12 years ago

#101

plz tell me how to add or get added in the buddy list and also add me

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Nivriti

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Posted: 12 years ago

#102

Kriti, this is one of the most wonderful and extra-ordinary works I have ever read revolving around this "Kria returning" concept. 😎

SO, I just caught up with it, and man, you haven't updated since AUGUST? 😲

Okay, I won't beat around the bush with useless tantrums and stuff, and get back to my comment + feedback on this marvelous piece of yours.

Hm. So the starting was unusual [in a good way], and magnificently jotted down. The way Rey was trying to convince herself that he is over Kria, and now a changed personality. Kudos to you for that! 👏

The punching bag sequence, the rude comments, the bro-talk and alas, the SwaRon proposal! Awesome-Blossom!

Then the very apt flashback sequence, the infamous Sharon-Kria challenge. You displayed Rey's inhibitions against it flawlessly, even better than the show itself. 😉

Then comes Kria's blasting entry. The way she said she had mastered herself in hiding her emotions, rather staying emotionless, actually made me sympathize with her.

Her friends Ass, and Sam seem to be pretty amazing, and I guess only Asmita knows about her past, ain't it?

But their cute little fights added charm to the update, definitely ! The way Sam said nobody tells her anything, and the other two hi-fied teasingly, that's like the true essence of deep friendship.

The PARTY was another blockbuster! The way Kria recognized Reyansh's taste of decorations and designs, and tried to calm her racing heartbeats, well that was something out of the box.

Then comes Sharon, trying to hook up her heartbroken best friend, with the new chick, only if she knew it was Kria.

Kria in the basketball court, and the again very apt flashback sequence of the Weaklings V/S Dazzling Basketball match was a treat to read. Swayam-Kria share a deep bond, ain't they!

Well, the most shocking part was when Sharon Kria hugged each other. The thing before that was actually expected, meaning the mocking and sarcasm, albeit the hug wasn't something I could think of.

The third chapter. Full of violence and angst.

The way Kria commanded over the girls to fight against like THIRTY Men, was wo-ah! 😆 About the fight sequence, I don't have much to say, but the after-effects, I definitely DO!

Only if Kria wouldn't have been bound by Sharon's promise, I know she would have hugged every breath out of em.

But alas, she had to stage a show. The hurt on Neha's face, seriously dude, hat's off to you! I could actually imagine the scene in front of me.

Swayam-Kria part, okay, I have this gut feeling, Swayam has figured out she did not go without a reason, and if you were to continue this work, please, please, please, make em friends again. I can't really imagine D3 without KriYam, let alone watch it. But then I watch it for the sake of Shantanu.

Okay, coming back to the point, I would actually appreciate a bit of their bonding, but then, you are the master of this work, and it finally depends upon you!

The Great Fire Escape Showdown: I mean seriously, what's up with Rey? Defending Taani is tolerable, but hitting a girl, and that to KRIA? 😡 But then, I guess that's agony and pain bubbling out of him.

Their last bit was amazing. The way Rey imitated every dialogue of Kria, and alas, when he was about to hug her, he was hit-where-it-hurts-the-most! I seriously don't know if you would could have Jr. Reyanshs! 😆

All in all, a fabulous SS, and I seriously, hope, pray, wish you would continue it! I would love, enjoy reading this! 😳

If you ever do continue, PM em to me!

Love.

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Nivriti

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Posted: 12 years ago

#103

^ Okay, so seriously, that was one of my most biggest comments ever, but I could just not stop myself from writing it. Usually, am reserving, given that exams start on Sat. But then, you write so authoratively, couldn't help it! 😆 Continue whenever you find time!

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madhu

@Madhu_ArSha

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Posted: 12 years ago

#104

Kriti . . .just now read the whole ff. . .
Its realy an awsome-dowsome ff. . .
And i m totaly in love with it. . . . . . . . .
Pls. . .pls. . .pls. . .
Continue dis ff. . .
I wanna read more pls. .pls. . . . .

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Asha

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Posted: 12 years ago

#105

u ever, EVER updating this???????????

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kriti

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Posted: 12 years ago

#106

---------READ THE AUTHOR's NOTE PLEASE! IT'S IMPORTANT!--------------------

Hola! :D long time eh?Okay so it's almost been 7 months since I uploaded. I am very sorry about that! I didn't have the time to write.. :(
I have vacations right now, so I would be updating quite regularly now. So you guys can be happy! :) *happy dance*

I hope my lovelies havent forgotten me, or the storyline, if you have, then..nothing else can be done, you will have to read it all over again! :P I would really appreciate a comment, and a considerably long one too. I know I am rather finicky, but can't be helped! :P

I am really glad that you are reading my story, in spite of me not being able to keep my promise of four months and extending it to 3 more months. I am very happy to know that you have been with me all this while. And I do hope that you all will be there until the very end. :)
So enough of being sentimental...
now go ahead and read..

*too excited* :D

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Chapter 4:

Reyansh's POV:

I increased the speed of the treadmill, and started moving my legs faster. They were aching, but at the same time ,it felt heavenly. I rapidly started blinking as her face came into my view again. Why did she have to come back?! When he was finally moving on, she had to waltz back into his life and create a mess all over again.

I flinched, remembering our last encounter in the fire escape. I had never imagined that I would hurt her, not physically at least. How could I do that? How could I stoop so low? Hitting a girl..the hatred on her face came flashing back in my mind, the disgusted look which was meant for me!

I closed my eyes, and ran faster, trying to forget everything, and make myself believe that what I did was absolutely correct! She deserves every speck of my hatred!

*flashback*
Suddenly the picture changed and there she was in my arms, rain pouring down heavily. Violence everywhere, the basket ball court was filled with people, some were just entertaining themselves and the others were trying to help. But what I was thinking of was, her face, scrunched up in fear, anticipating the impact of the fall. For a moment I almost smiled, I couldn't deny the fact that there was a little part of my heart that ached to see her face again, to feel the warmth of her skin, to hold her tight in my embrace, to catch her whenever she falls!

I broke out of the trance and was slowly removing my hands, to let her fall, to let her realise what she had done, and that I didn't love her anymore. But then, I saw a few tears trickling down her cheeks. How I managed to distinguish then from the water droplets I don't know, but she was crying. I felt like pulling her closer and consoling her, to kiss her senseless but I did quite the opposite.

I withdrew my arms, and let her fall freely. Landing on her rear she let out a small groan but that didn't affect me, and I scurried away as fast as possible.

*flashback over*

I was pushed back rather vigorously by the treadmill, and I almost crashed into the dumbbells. I should stop thinking about her all the time. I will have to do something, to get her out of my mind! Hate. I need to hate her more! Irritate her, push her limits till she begs for mercy. I will have to torture her mentally! Watch out Ms.Kria Ghai, you will have to pay for every bloody thing you have done!

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[next morning]

I entered the campus two hours late. Thanks to the sleepless night. I wasso tired already! I just want to go home and curl up in my bed.

But today is an important day, I have to complete the first step of my hatred mission. I smirked like a fool! By now I had reached the office of VP sir. God knows why he had summoned me..maybe because of the basket ball court fiasco, by now I was used to it, I have turned pretty violent lately, I get angry very easily and I just keep beating up people.

I entered his cabin, to see all my friends standing there. This doesn't look good! Something bad is going to happen..I just know it!

"good morning sir" I wished him
" morning" he replied.
He studied all of us seriously, the suspense was killing me!

" so I suppose you know why you have been called here?" he started

By this time, I was already preparing myself, to argue with him, and to somehow convince him to take back the punishments.

I opened my mouth to say something, but I was cut off by him.

" as you know, the footloose finals are coming up, you have been too busy in organising the charity event, and I reckon you have not been practising properly so the authorities have decided that, you will have a new dance tutor, who will be brushing up your skills to perfection." he smiled brightly.

" what? But sir, we don't need any dance teacher" nilesh reasoned.
" yes sir, I think we are better off without any teacher!" vishakha argued.

" I think, that we should at least check out the new teacher, if we like his style then we can learn, it's for our benefit guys!" Swayam said.

Everyone agreed including VP sir. But I was a little doubtful.

" sir can you tell us more about this teacher?" I asked politely
" sure Rey..your teacher is an amazing dancer obviously, and is well versed with a variety of styles, I personally think, that you are really lucky to have a dance teacher!"

" you will have to leave now, and the tutor will meet you all in the rehearsal hall, in about 5 minutes, and you shall be starting the training from today itself! Your classes for today have been cancelled, so that you can practise more. Just remember one thing, I want the footloose trophy in my cupboard alright?!"

" yes sir!" all of us replied in unison.

*5 minutes later in the rehearsal hall*

We walked in like we owned the place, which we actually did but still..
I was eager to see who the new teacher was, but when I saw her stamding there instead of the teacher , my eagerness was crushed under a truck!

There she stood, clad in black denim booty shorts and a flimsy black off shoulder poncho, which barely reached her midriff. She looked incredibly se- ss..stupid! She looked incredibly stupid. She has has seriously taken a liking to short shorts...I mentally slapped myself for thinking about her. And focused on the situation.

what was she doing here? This is our rehearsal hall, not hers!

" what are you doing here? You are not allowed!" I said coldly.
She gave me a simple blank look, and raising one eyebrow she said "Mr. Singhania, if I would've been in your position right now, I definitely wouldn't have argued."

" who the hell gave you the frickin right to talk to Rey like that?" vicky spoke up
She looked at him pointedly and simply ignored him.
" Let me clear this out, whenever you step into this rehearsal hall from today onwards, no one and I mean NO ONE will disrespect me!" She said calmly.

"oh really! Remind me again, when did we become your pets? And this is OUR rehearsal hall, not yours so you better move your ass outa here!" Nilesh spat venomously

" quite interested in my ass aren't we?" she said sarcastically
" I guess you haven't been told as yet, I am your new dance teacher." she finished with a wicked smile.

" what?!" the majority of us exclaimed.

" what the hell are you talking about?! This can't be true, you..you are a student!" I shouted

" language Mr.Singhania! And because of this very reason, I want you to do 50 pushups, and oh yes, you shall be my assistant for today." she said with an absolutely straight face.

" what?!" I asked in disbelief. ' Hell' wasn't even considered a slang! How old is she, 5?!

" assistant for two days!" she ordered
" but-" I reasoned
" one week! Mr. Singhania, do you want to be my assistant for the entire semester?" she glared at me.

I ground me teeth and bit my lip to refrain from answering back. " yes ma'am" I muttered. " what are you waiting for? Start off! " she ordered me once again.

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"49" I breathed.
I was sweating profusely, and my arms were throbbing like they had been smashed by 100 hammers simultaneously. My knees were almost trembling, I never liked doing push ups and even if I did, I had never done more than 30. This woman was just pushing my limits!

"50" and I fell to the ground face front, and lay there for about a minute when her highness spoke again!
" Mr. Singhania, you better get up and join your friends. You still have an entire day left for practising" even though I couldn't see her, a smirk was evident in her tone.

I got up, and stood near nilesh, who was hopping up and down. I rolled my eyes and waited for her instructions. She adjusted her hair into a messy bun and turned around to look at us.

" okay, so how many of you know about contemporary?" she asked.
I looked around, searching for swayam, he did know a little bit of contemporary didn't he? But even he didn't step forward.
" thought as much..dancing is not just about hip hop and popping and crumping and all that. Sometimes you need a certain flow in your dance, like a river, like a fairytale. And contemporary is such one dance form." she said.

"oh to ab tum Hame dance sikhaogi? Ms.Wannabe?!" simmi piped in.
"kyu, koi problem? After all i am being paid for it!" she smiled

Oh god! Please don't smile, please don't smile! I chanted over and over again, if she did, I would drift off to some other dimension. she was saying something but I could only concentrate on her moving lips, oh those lips...I was drowning, when I suddenly felt a sting on my arm. She had pinched me. She had the bloody audacity to pinch me?!

" Mr.Singhania! Are you in class? This is the fifth time I am calling your name!"she scolded. She sure knew how to teach, and well..she was a pretty strict teacher.

"yes ma'am..umm..what were you saying?" i stammered.
"I want you to hold this remote and switch on the music when I want you to." great! Now I was her slave! I looked at her, but she glared at me with authority.

Only if she wasn't my teacher! I took the remote and tried paying attention to what she was saying.

" okay so since none of yo know about the dance form, I will start from scratch. First you need to learn to brush your feet. And keep the jazz hands."

"won't we do the pirouettes and all?" Taani asked. Shit! Why is she even opening her mouth? She has- to put it as politely as possible, zero knowledge of dance. And in front of Kria..., god please tell me this is not happening.

" pirouettes? Oh I see, you do know a lot about contemporary Taani...so why dont you show us a pirouette?" she fake smiled.

I groaned. Please Taani! Don't go.. I looked at her trying to communicate with her, but in vain. She had already eagerly jumped in front and was stretching like she was about to fight someone. I shook my head. This is going to be bad..

She lifted her right leg up, bent it and stretch it in front. In front?! For the love of god you need to stretch it sideways! Anyway..she continued, and awkwardly hopped on her left heel, and obviously ended up falling. I ran forward to catch her, but she was already holding on to Kria for her dear life!

Kria let go of her, as she stood There holding her knee in agony. Swayam swiftly went up to her to hold her, but Kria held out her finger to stop him.

" Being a good old brother is very nice, but not in my class! You act smart, you will fall. And you need to pull yourself up, alone. No one helps you in real life." she said coldly. Swayam looked at her in confusion. And my thoughts were same, why has she suddenly become so philosophical?

Taani limped to the side, as tears were streaming down her face, my heart went out to her. She wasn't a dancer after all.. I saw Kria going to her, and gving her a pain relieving spray. She bent down to her level, and patted her head gently, but not before shooting a glare at her. What is she doing?! Weird.. Seriously weird.

She showed us the brushing step, which she did with ease. And she instructed us to try it out. "5 6 7 8 and one brush, two back, three side. Left leg! One brush, two brush, three side brush" she said while showing us at the same time.

I looked into the mirror, observing everyone. Swayam, Sharon, Neha and amar were doing it perfectly while the others including myself were struggling.
" I want your feet to be pointed!" her voice boomed, and it was directed to vishakha who silently followed whatever she said.

"jazz hands Nilesh. Keep your thumbs inside" she took his hands and positioned them into the correct place. A pang of anger shot through me as he looked at her, clearly checking her out!

Then suddenly she turns to look at me, shaking her head with a disgusted look on her face. " Mr. Singhania, you need a lot of help" she sighed.
She came and stood in front of me showing me her pointed feet.
" I know how a pointed toe looks like!" I blurted. Shit!
" oh really? Then, why don't I see you with one?" she smiled sarcastically.

I looked down in embarrassment, this is dance Reyansh! your passion, you can do it.
I tried harder, to point my toes, but it hurt so much they would contract on their own! I looked up at her, trying to tell her that I needed help. She just rolled her eyes.

Wasn't she supposed to teach me? I was beyond agitated now. Just screw contemporary! I was about to keep my foot down, when a hand gripped it firmly bringing it back up again. I followed the hand, all the way to the owner. It had to be the devil herself!

" don't you dare stop trying" she hissed.
I could feel the warmth of her hand even under the pair of tracks that I was wearing. She slowly lifted my foot higher, twisting my foot in a very painful way.

" what the fu.." I couldn't even complete the sentence when she cut in the middle. Typical baat cutter!
" I don't want to hear any profanities in my class, and you will now point your feet!" she emphasised on the latter. She was still holding my leg, and by now everyone had stopped and were focusing on us.

I was trying so hard to point my foot, but it just wouldn't budge! I kept twisting it, and finally I think I achieved it, but upside down! I was falling, with great speed and was taking down someone else with me as well.

Fate, just doesn't like me..does it?!

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So for a change, I decided that I would introduce you to Rey's POV ( point of view) as well. What he thinks etc. Hope you liked the update.

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madhu

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Posted: 12 years ago

#107

Res. . .
M so happy. .
Thanks kriti. .
----unres----. . . .
Yupiee me 1st. . . .
Yupieee. . . . . .
Finaly,
finaly,
whch look like ages,
we got an update. . .
Yupieee. . . . . .
So,cuming 2 d update,
d update was mindblowing. . . . . . . . . . .
I so so so loved it. . . . . .
U knw,i was just going 2 ask u 4 rey's pov. . .
And see,b4 i cud say anythng u updated it totaly in his pov. . . . .
U knw kriti,i liked rey's pov more than kriya. . .
Kriya lousins dance teacher. . . .
Dats gr8. . . . .
Wowww. . . . . . .
And she is already taking class of our lousins. . . . . . .
Hehehe:-D:-D. . . . .
Rey wud be kriya's assistant for 1 week. . .awsome. . . . . . .
Loved dat taani waala part. . . . . .
So,kriya is being a strict teacher. .awsome. . . .
Loved the whole update. . . . . .
Kriti,i loved d whole update,
bt,in nxt update pls add sum exclusive KR scenes,like in last update,wen our KR were in F.E. . .i wanna see such secens of kr,in whch dey show love,hate,hurt ,flirt wit each-othr. .etc. .etc. . .
Pls update some awsome kr scens. . .
Update d nxt part super-soon. .

Edited by Madhukumari - 12 years ago