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Posted: 13 years ago
Firstly replies on pg 21.
Its horrible, that am updating so late, but I guess now I have got the flow.
A special thank u to all my readers for encouragement, :) and not lettimng me forget this, SS!
Thank u Srish, Sudha, Poonam for reminding me abt this time and again, especially Srish.
Thank u for giving a new pg Srish. Upd in next post!
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Posted: 13 years ago

Chapter 4

Sharon decided, that it was enough strain for her mind, and she had made the drink for her refreshment afterall, so the purpose should be fulfilled and she really needed a break to think logically. The drink was indeed refreshing, with just the right amount of ice cubes and the typical aroma. She sipped the coffee, and was lost in it, a tinge of bitterness, and coldness of the coffee lingered through her tastebuds. It seemed so perfect, she just remembered the tagline of CCD and laughed, "a lot can happen over coffee". Well maybe it was true, but at that moment, she just wanted to enjoy it as she discovered it was not that bad after all'

Cock a doodle do'cock a doodle do'

Her thoughts were broken by the cock's noise, she wondered is everything gonna be different today or am I seeing it differently? Since when did the cock started giving the morning call in late evenings?

Cock a doodle do..

Then realisation dawned upon her and she kept the coffee mug on the table, and hurriedly went to answer the doorbell. Damn!! It was her mom, who looked tired but still had a smile on her face. She came inside and asked Sharon the reason for being so late, then she saw Sharon's lips which had a curvy border of a bit chocolaty foam, which certainly wasn't chocolate as always, as chocolate is more darker and a bit more viscous. She was surprised, but thought to ask about it at the right moment, certainly parents know when to ask about certain things to get the right information out, as Sharon might have made till then many excuses to tell the reason of coming to answer the bell late. Sharon exclaimed, "Mom actually I was'"

"Sharon you know in the rains, umbrella hardly shields you." Her mom smartly changed the topic changing Sharon's focus. Sharon thanked her stars mentally, that she was spared. That time she actually had a look at her mom, and except her head and some of her upper torso, her mom was completely drenched in water, thanks to the rain. Indeed it was right, the rains in Mumbai are unpredictable, sometimes it will be clear sky, but it would still rain heavily. Though people knew an umbrella hardly shields you, most people carried an umbrella, its convenient and easy to use afterall. Till the time you remove your raincoat and actually put it, the rain might have done its share of making you wet. So an umbrella is fast, in that way, though its kinda useless. She hated the rains, and still didn't understand how people could enjoy the rain and asked her mom why she hadn't waited for the rains to stop.

Her mom just laughed and answered to her, "Sharon, the rains are not that bad as you feel, plus you just can't keep running away from them forever. You have to face them, once. So why not now? Plus I have to reach home on time, the rains are unpredictable. I just can't keep waiting, they start and stop at any second. It's the rainy season, now so whats the fun without rains? Infact water was the origin of life, and rains are really very important for us, in short. I don't want to get too much in depth of Science, you know its importance. Enjoying the rains, and seeing them in a different angle is a must, just as a coin has two sides. You need to see life in different ways, just as you had coffee now."

"What?" , Sharon exclaimed in utter shock. "How did you know, I'I 'was having coffee, mom?"

"Well Sharon, firstly am your mother, parents know things even if you try to hide. We just wait to tell it at the right moment. I know other things too, like'

"Like what now, mom? That Swayam also had told me to enjoy life in a different way, and to try out coffee and the rains?" Sharon bit her tongue hard, she herself revealed her secret, in her flow of words. But it was too late to correct. But as she was Sharon, she tried to make some excuses in thin air, but neither her mind nor heart co-ordinated and all she could say was, "Umm'Umm'that..

Her mom was now really enjoying the way, the conversation was heading. She just smiled and said, "Its too late to hide Sharon. I heard it. Swayam sounds an intresting guy. You should have listened to him, in the first place. Then you wouldn't have argued with me so much today. Now I will just freshen up and come, if you don't mind. By the way, as I said earlier parents know how to get things out. I guessed the coffee thing cos it was evident from your lips, a coffee moustache. But you told me the actual thing. But just think about it Sharon, and besides there was nothing wrong in what he said. Infact enjoying in the rains is a different experience, altogether. Its high time you give it a try, not for us but atleast for yourself. You need to come out of your shell, now and experience reality. Now think over it, till I freshen up."

"Okay", was all Sharon could say as she was again lost in her thoughts.

She just went and sipped the last sips of her coffee. Its rightly said somewhere, she thought "when you try to wipe out something, life just rewinds sometimes, possibly giving a signal to you that you need to change. Life actually gives you a second chance, that's why possibly mom pretty much explained me the same thing, in a different way. She was right afterall, it's the law of nature. Swayam was also right back then, it was crazy on my part, that all I could think was my reputation. That was the shell my mom was referring to, and apt. Its high time I try to break my shell. Sometimes indeed when you actually think about things calmly, they do make sense like now. I guess I should apologise, to Swayam. But before that, let me try the rains."

After a long time, she was calm. She wondered why, but it was simple, as her mom had knocked sense in her, the dil and mind accepted it and were co-ordinating now, hand in hand as it was truth, to see life in a different way. Afterall, they also had life and were not robotic.The dil and mind were both happy, and were discussing strategies on how and where the new experience will lead to. But both were confident, it will be different and good, and they were ready for the challenge.

Somewhere both agreed, that as it was high time for Sharon to break her shell, it was time for her to apologise to Swayam.

Feedback pls. Comments and criticism is welcome. Hope it was practical.

Next part will be by this weekend, as I have penned it down. The reason for delay was I was making grammatical mistakes, so I had decided to quit. Tried to improve, hope its ok.

PS I know, this part was not apt to the title as the war is not on, but I have tried to analyse a part and get peace. Hope its ok.

I believe this SS can end in this part or max 2 chapters more!

Madhura.

Edited by Madhura.. - 13 years ago
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After a whole lot of death threats, finally you're updating. Good for you. :)

Awesome update. Yeah, parents are cheeky that way. She got Sharon to spill the beans without any trouble at all. Smart Woman.! And you finally get a chance to put in your philosophy into this SS through the mother's dialogue. 😆

But she is right, you just have to let go sometimes. You shouldn't always be bothered about things like reputation. Sometimes you just have let go of everything else and live. Just LIVE.! And its moments like those that make your life worth living and memories worth looking back on. :)

Sharon doesn't like the rains?! People really need to understand that Rains aren't just about getting wet. You need to feel it. And i'm sure that once she tries it out, she'll barge on head first the next time it rains. :)

So yeah, once again awesome update. And you're planning to end to this? Well, i can't complain, even though I desperately want to, after all it is an SS.

Even though I reached before your PM and scrap, thanks for both. :)

P.S Sharon should watch "Zindagi Na Milegi Dobara". 😆

Edited by Srishti_SwaRon - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Madhura u updated 🤗
Read it, loved it
Will leave my detailed comment before, end of the day 😳
Loved the update, to me it felt like both Dil and Mind may be happy but the silent battle still continue on, I am so happy that She thinks of giving life a chance, to live freely enjoying life to the fullest breaking in the outer shell, is what actually living is all about. Loved the mom and daughter touch u gave, its so true that they know us so well and every moves of us doesn't go unnoticed by them.


plus you just can't keep running away from them forever. You have to face them, once. So why not now?

these lines above, so true..Her mom, in her usual talks gave her another important life lesson..
To think of it..parents never stop with their preaching 😳
And how Sharon spilled the beans about Swayam, and how her mom said she should have listened to him, in the first place was nice.
Looking forward to the next update..on how and what Sharon has to say to Swayam.

Edited by Sudha-SK - 13 years ago
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Whoa, b4 I send pms 2 posts reserved..
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Okay soo m gonna start frm the very first chapter coz i missed out everything!
The war that you showed between the mind and dil was superrbb!! 👍🏼
loveedd it how sharon shouted--impossible!! 😆
lol...she's actually realizing it! 😊
And loved wen she spitted sum things wen she was expected to keep quite..lol...soo lyk sharon! 😳
and sharey are always a treat to read..! 😃
sharon is actually losing it..she drank the cold coffee unknowingly or knowingly who knows! 😉
and she spilled swayam's name in front of her mom..that was cute! ☺️

You write brilliantly madz..absolutely amazing story writing talent you have..sucha flawless writing! 👏

can't wait to read the next! 😊
Edited by surbhimathur - 13 years ago
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^^ Surbhi 3rd is good yaar!! Waiting for your feedback.
Srish and Sudha, always race to my SS to res a spot, and threaten me to upd, :).
Edited by Madhura.. - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Sudha-SK

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Madhura u updated 🤗
Read it, loved it
Will leave my detailed comment before, end of the day 😳

Hugs Sudha!!
Am happy u loved it, after reading all ur fab upds, I also got inspired, and honestly as I said, I wasn't updating cos of Grammatical stuff and flow. But I will fix and try to upd, :)
Sure dear, will wait for your feedback. Sorry for the delay, weekend jyada hua!
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Posted: 13 years ago
Teacherji...🤗...
It was a good chapter...
Not depiction of the conflict but the understanding that has come to Sharon after careful thinking...
It also shows how we can't really fool our parents...
10-20 saal se humein jaanthe hain woh log, aise thodi na ullu bana sakthe hain...
Sharon mohtharma , baarish bekaar ki cheez nahin hothi...
Usmein ek aisi khubsoorthi hain jo aankhon se lekar rooh thak ko choothi hain..
Aazman ke dekh lon...
Once again, good job sweets...
Love
Nidha
PS - What's life without a change huh? (Username ke liye)
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Posted: 13 years ago
Finally, you updated and i'm glad to see that the war between Sharon's Dil and Mind seem to have found a truce !!! Sharon's mom is one smart lady and I loved how Sharon just revealed everything including the Swayam bit accidentally !! Looking forward to next chapter !!

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