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Posted: 13 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: sparksfly

gr8 ud !!! thnk u😊

Ananya care sooo... much abt Veer...aww... 😍.
luv dem !!! ❤️ n u 2 !! luv u 2
Veer got d deal !!
well vo jo bhi karta hai...aapna best hi deta hai...rembrng prc n dv days.he's soo... focusd !!!! 👍🏼
kaash mein bhi uske jaise sincere n hardworkng hoti... haha...don't we al wish so?😉
ab Ananya aapna badla kaise legi ?? 🤔
i didnt get a PM 😭...aww...dnt cry...maine kisiko nahi bheja...i had da same xam as urs
but d story ne mujhe majboor kar diya...yahan aane par...😉 a gr8 complimnt 4 me😃
next part plzz badawala dena ... it is bigger than dis..& also da last
n sparksfly is inspird 4m Taylors Swift's song...jab RT-MC meet sparksfly instantly... coz dey r made 4 each othr...absolutely agree wid u!
btw since u r a yr older dan me...do u want me 2 cal u di?

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Posted: 13 years ago
#52
short but nice part
plz post a larger part next time

:)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#53

Originally posted by: BhartiKhushi909

short but nice part
plz post a larger part next time

:)

Thx di! (Can i call u di?)
Nxt part will b longer...but it will be the last 1
thx for comment! 😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
#54
awesome ud dear...
luved d bonding betw mother-in-law & daughter-in-law...
nd veer got d deal...
it will b very interesting to see veers reaction when he will come to abt anus plan...
waiting for d nxt ud...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#55

Originally posted by: mddmayuri

awesome ud dear...

luved d bonding betw mother-in-law & daughter-in-law...
nd veer got d deal...
it will b very interesting to see veers reaction when he will come to abt anus plan...
waiting for d nxt ud...

thank u 😃
hope u'll like the nxt updt too...i shud post it 2mrw
thx for ur comments 😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
#56

Originally posted by: sweetsanyo


Then she realized. Of course, he was talking of his lunch meeting with the delegates. Not themalone. She also realized that he was a faithful man. Even though it was nothing more than a lunch, he would never do it. He loved his wife dearly. 'I hope someday I can find someone like him'. Ruby took the files and was about to leave when Veer returned. "Sir, aren't we going yet?" "Yes, we are. You go ahead. I'll be down in a few min." "OK Sir, I'll wait at the lobby."
When Ruby was gone and Veer was alone, he took out a photo of both the leading ladies in his life. His mom and Ananya. "Wish me luck" and kissed the photographs without realizing that someone was watching him. He took his coat and bag and walked towards the elevator. Completely forgetting about the special lunch his 'dearest wife' had cooked for him.


so here wrks ma detective brain...

bold parts are italics...hhhmmm...
second italics i focused before, but ignored it...

if we try to connect both parts...

they r not possible to connect🤣

i m not fit for CID .🤣

Hey!
CID ki chinta mat karo...tum bohot smart ho😆
Well I'll clarify 1st italics...I italicised them coz Ruby is thinking dat..notsaying...shayad maine ulta confuse kar diya
U rightly found out the clue...2nd italics ki mystery last part main hi solve hogi..hopefully u'll like it😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
#57
oh shit itni late ho gae main...😲
well the update was good...👏...but chotu chotu tha...
veer got the deal--good
veer is going to surprise anu--very good
nivi left without telling the way out--bad
anu is not able to find any way till now--very bad
update soon...
luv u...😊
Edited by ridzzi - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#58

Originally posted by: glossyglassy

Thank u so much! Glad u liked it!😊

VA scene was not possible'.ab Anu ghar pe plan bana rahi hai'Veer office mein hai'how wil dey meet?

Well you caught on to all the right things I wanted to show in this part😃

About Veer's persona, Anu's smartness & how love changed them both

Glad u liked the character of Nivritti'mujhe dar the ki who zyaada hi frank and playful lagegi'

Wer u disappointd dat I didn't make him eat da lunch?

Thx so much 4 ur luvly comments!

Luv u' 😊


well a little bit...agar veer khana khata to maza aata...
atleast use apni anu ke baare main pata toh chalta ki use ulajhna achi baat nahi...
but that's ok
poor veer ko itna pareshan karna achi baat bhi nahi hai...😆
waise hum sab jaante hai ki coming updates main anu veer ko aise bahut se sabak sikhane wali hai...dono ka behaviour hi aisa hai that they both can't resist themselfs from annoying each other...😆
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Posted: 13 years ago
#59
beautiful update!!
so veer saved this time from ananya's payback!! as he forgot abt lunch given by his beloved wife
He got deal n promotion too!! wow his lucky charm worked!!
so veer going to home to give anu surprise, but poor anu tense so much tht not even concentrate on her notes!!
will veer get to know abt lunch or ananya will smartly get benefit of this?


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Posted: 13 years ago
#60

Hi guys!

Thanks to all those who pressed the like button and/or commented

So this is the last part of the story! It's got a little bit of Hindi in it, if anyone has problems, plz ask...I'll be happy to help!

To avoid confusion with dialogues...I've colored them
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Last part
Ananya heard the doorbell and went to open the door. She was surprised to see Veer come home so early. But before she could say anything Veer picked her up and spun her which made Anu shriek in shock. He then landed her on her feet and kissed her. By this time Anu was also smiling on seeing his happiness and asked, "What happened? You're so happy?" "I made it, Anu! I made the deal" He then told her about his lunch meeting and assured promotion. Anu exclaimed her happiness and hugged him saying, "Congratulations!"

Anu stepped back and saw that he was half wet and told him to bathe quickly and dry up to avoid catching cold. Veer shed his office clothes and went for a bath while Anu went to the kitchen to make some hot coffee. After some time she heard Veer calling her from the bathroom. Ananya went and asked, "What happened? Why are you shouting?" "Why is there no water in the shower? I'm all soaped up." Ananya realized her mistake and told him, "I'm sorry. I forgot to tell you that we are having some water supply problems in the society today." He opened the door a bit and looked at her angrily, "You forgot?" Anu laughed on seeing his state and said, "I'll call the Security to start the pump if he can." And then suddenly an idea clicked in her mind. So with a naughty glint in her eyes and mischief in her mind she told him "And ya, before I forget, the water heater's also not working today." And then silently giggling to herself, she went off to make the call. Veer's eyes widened in shock and soap entered his eyes. When he tried to clear his eyes with his hands more soap got in them as his hands were also soapy. He was helpless'somehow he cleaned his eyes with the towel. And then he waited'with stinging eyes, soapy body and shivering in the cold as he was wet from the rain. He made silent pleas to Water god to rain through the bathroom shower, singing various bhajans and replacing the respective god's name with water god. And this is how poor Veer waited for the water to come soon.

Anu made the call and couldn't help but laugh at the situation. Bathroom ka badla bathroom se! Veer was trapped in bathroom with no water and he couldn't do anything to Anu. How blissful! She realized that she had done the right thing in leaving things to fate. But what kept her wondering was that if Veer had a lunch meeting then what had happened to the lunch that she had cooked for him.

After half an hour, the water supply returned, Veer thanked the water god and finally bathed. After changing into a t-shirt and tracks he went to the living room with a towel. "Anuuu" He called out. Anu hearing his shout came out of the kitchen and asked, "What happened? Why are you shouting?" He showed her the towel. She understood and shook her head saying, "You wait, and I'm coming." She finished off her work in a few minutes, washed her hands and went to Veer who was already sitting on the carpet in front of the sofa. Anu went and sat on the sofa taking the towel and dried his hair.

"God! Yeh pani ke supply ne to tang kar diya." Veer complained. Anu giggled remembering his soapy face and whispered to herself, "Chalo lunch nahi to shower hi sahi" But Veer heard her and asked confused, "Matlab?" Anu fumbled, "Umm'who kuch nahi. By the way Veer where is your lunch box?" Veer gasped suddenly remembering that Anu had cooked lunch for him that day. He turned and took her hands in his, "Sorry! I totally forgot. I had that lunch meeting with the delegates and I hadn't informed you about it. And then I came directly from the hotel so the lunch box is still in the office. I'm so sorry." He said apologetically. Anu couldn't help herself and started laughing, "I'm so happy you didn't eat that food." "Happy? Why?" Veer asked totally perplexed with his wife's reaction. Anu mumbled to herself deciding that it would be best to tell him the truth. "Woh Veer actually I need to tell you something." Then she proceeded to tell him all about what she done to make his lunch extra special and Veer's eyes widened with each word unable to believe that she would do such a thing.

By the time Anu ended her story Veer was standing and looking at Anu dumbfounded. He finally found his voice and uttered, "You messed with my food this bad? You sent me such horrible lunch?" With every word he bent a little towards her and Anu kept bending backwards on the sofa in reflex. "But you didn't eat it, na?" She tried to console him. "Thank god for that but you deserve a punishment for that horribly bitter coffee." By this time Anu was completely lying on the sofa with Veer bending over her. "Uh-uh Punishment?" "Yes, punishment" Veer said lying over her now and deliberately trapping her with his arms. Anu started to babble and explain herself. But Veer would have none of it and kissed her hard. Anu was shocked at first but then reacted with the same fervor as his. When they broke apart for breath, Anu wrapped her arms around his neck and said smiling "I liked the punishment" "Me too." Veer said and pecked her lips. Anu then asked coyly, "Don't you think we should do something?" Veer jerked his head upwards and asked, "Really? I mean what do you want to do?" "I was thinking along the lines of'"Anu said in a husky voice. "Of?" "Of eating." She finished with a grin. "What yaar Anu! Way to kill the mood!" He whined. "Sorry for that. But you're pretty heavy. So please get off me now." Veer made a face at her but then got off the sofa.

They had their dinner and saw some TV cuddling on the sofa. Finally switching it off Veer got up "Chalo Anu. It's late. Let's go to sleep." "Hmm'"Anu murmured sleepily, "I don't feel like walking" And stretched her arms towards him. He smiled at her antics and swiftly picked her up in his arms. Anu kept her head on his shoulder and closed her eyes, arms wound around his neck. On their way to the bedroom he asked her, "How are you sure I won't drop you into the bathtub this time?" Anu opened an eye and then shut it, "No water supply, remember?" Veer rolled his eyes and muttered, "Yeah, right."

He laid her on the bed and then went to switch off all the lights. He slid in bed next to her and kissed her goodnight. Anu smiled and slept with her head on his chest.

The happy couple slept cuddling with each other and with peace on their faces. They were truly made for each other...but then they still love annoying the hell outta each other!

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Somewhere else...

The room is dark. Beside a wooden table lay a Tiffin box. Two rats came scurrying towards it.

Rat1: Jerry, I smell food in there

Rat 2: Yes, Mickey, me too. Let's check it out.

Both the rats managed to open the box and opened the lids to see the food.

Rat 2: Mickey, I think something's wrong. The food doesn't smell right.

Rat 1: It must be because the man's wife cooked it in the morning and he forgot to have it.

Rat 2: How do you know?

Rat 1: I saw the man while leaving for lunch. He kissed a photo with two women. One of them must be his wife.

Rat 2: So why didn't you tell me then? We could have eaten his food then only.

Rat 1: I had planned so. But just then the sweeper came and I also had to meet my girlfriend Minnie.

Jerry shook his head in exasperation.

Rat 2: Ok, let's not waste any more time and gorge upon the food.

Both the rats stuffed themselves with Ananya's special lunch and ran back into their holes.

Epilogue

Inside a dilapidated building, lie two dead bodies shrouded with slices of cheese and everyone around them is crying with grief.

"Why did he have to die?" wailed Minnie.

"I'll miss him." said Tom the cat.

The sad demise of the two rats, Mickey and Jerry was mourned by their entire clan. They had been suffering from severe food indigestion for quite a few days and finally succumbed today early morning. Even Jerry's biggest enemy Tom came to pay his last respect. The funeral of the duo was visited by Remy, the famous rat-chef in Ratatouille. After that, the rat clan abandoned Veer's office as a food spot in fear of more deaths.

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Moral of the story: Don't irk your wife or face the fate the rats did.

Apni biwi se panga mat lena warna chuhe ki maut maroge!😆

***********************THE END***************************
So that was the end of my story!

Do tell me whether you liked it or not. Suggestions/criticism of all kinds are welcome

And please don't take the end seriously...stale food doesn't kill you...the idea just struck me one day and I found it hilarious..so I added it...& dat was the mystery...do tell me if you liked it or not

If you have any queries, confusion plz ask!

Thanks a ton for reading!

Edited by glossyglassy - 13 years ago

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