MG - Christ-mas Gift Completed

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Hi I am Trying to write a Short Story On Maaneet
and me still not learned how to give introduction to my stories ...
its a four scene story
Scene1 : Church Page 1
Scene 2: University Page 1
Scene 3: Hospital Page 2 ,4 ,9
Scene 4: University Page 9

Please Read and Comment
I cant explain how much happiness i am getting while reading them ..more lengthy comments more happiness ..please comment ..please
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Scene 1 : Church

A Wedding decided


10.15 pm , 24th December 2011

He ran and texted Meera on the same time , while taking reverse from Parking he smiled at the 12 foot statue of Jesus stretching hands and smiling kindly Maan said in his Mind .. " Ha Ha oh God . , i will come back soon ... With my bride to Altar ... As i promised ... "" he winked and left .He felt he is the Happiest Man on Earth , ya On wedding day everybody might be feeling like that but , cant be happier than him because just 5 minutes before only he found out his brides name whom he was loving and waiting for past 7 years ...

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Exactly 14 minutes before at Church...

Dr. Dayana got 8th call during the mass , She got really annoyed what to do with this boy ...he is going to be 24 soon , still ...Oh god she looked impatiently at her watch . Well leaving in between will surely will not go unnoticed by Father . He already complained about the negligence our family paying to religious activities after George's death that too in front of all . He is just making excuses ..What else !.. She remembered last Christmas , We had party At home and none of us Attended .

(hey Guys dont get confused with maan siblings and all ,just ignore if u want , just wanted to show How ''big '' our Maanuel George aka Maan is ..ok ...)

This year There was no Party since it has been only 9 months since George left us .And all the kids wanted Dayana to attend party at their places , so in order to avoid complains she choose the evening mass . NayanThara is 8 months pregnant and at her Home , her parents were having Christmas Party and Davis joining Them , as he got duty tomorrow so avoiding drive back home and staying there will get him ample rest . Otherwise Dev will be definitely and patiently waiting and taking me back home .A lightning of fear passed through Dr.Dayana's Spines when she thought about Maans drive back home in his sports car. Jacob and Rosemary got their Party at their New Home , because the kids , without Christmas party they will just go bonkers , she smiled proudly thinking about her naughty Grandchildren .Dr.Reena as usual might be busy with the party , pleasing in laws , and her duty so much busy Dr.Dayana remembered she havent been called her since last week . She is as famous as me now , or even more . Robin and Clara enjoying their Honeymoon, they were dating and staying since their medico days ,Dr.Dayana hoped for the good news when they return , they must be rejoining to duty from January Onwards .They already delayed marriage so much for Maan , its their high time to start their family . Thinking about Manuel , the spoiled kid .. Now his Younger brother too got married a little early , but ..,When This Guy ... She sighed ..

The Prayer ended .. Father was clearing his throat to start preach ...

A girl in 4th row stood up and quickly left , And Dayana without looking anybody also followed she was waiting for a chance to escape .

The girl rushed outside hit Maan , He turned and hold her , before she fell , She was in real hurry .. She rose quickly and adjusted her scarf , without noticing her saviour she rushed out ..to cross the road .. Then she paused after 2 ,3 steps as if she really wish to look back, something to look back but the car horn , brought her back and without turning back she crossed the road ..and vanished ...in the rush

Maan felt his heartbeat stop for a moment .She in his Arms ... Once again after 7 years

Dayana came out ..

Now why are u standing like some Pillar , lets go .. Uff ...

Maan : Mom Your Bahu just hit me and there she goes ..

Dayana :Bahu???? She saw the glimpse of Geet her small white feets taking quick steps , white socks ...

Dayana "" bahu ..Who that Nurse ???""

Maan"Nurse..??" his eyes were sparkling

Dayana " yes ..white skirt and socks ..Yes .she is .."

Maan disappointed he thought his mother will be knowing her but here she guessing .."all girls with white skirt and socks " he shake his head in disappointment then instantly he thought something and took his mobile before he could click pictures , his vision blocked by some track passing by . He got greatly dishearten and angry .. He turned to his mother ..

Dr.Alice who was doing 'prayers ' has seen Dr.Dayana leaving and she saw Maan waiting outside and maan and mom talking , her heart started to jump in joy , Maan .!!

(she is a Maan Maniac , like us so no need to explain her halath u can guess with ur own imagination right ?? Hayee me missing maan .. Life OK ..hamey Hamara Maan dedey ...grr ok back to story )

She somehow managed to come out making some excuse to her husband and poked her nose in mother son discussion And she happily offered her help with full of disgust in her voice , "Ya Maan Dr.Dayana is 100 percent right she is Nurse Geet ,and working in My Hospital ,Today she is on Duty and what she is doing here ? ( stupidest exclamation for what people go to church so she amended ) A Hindu girl ? ... if she hit you its on Purpose she is such a dirty ,"

Maan got what he wanted and dont want to spend one more minute in that bitchy women's presence , but she helped him now ..He turned to her and pulled her cheeks , Dr,Alice elated , "Thank You Very Much Alice Aunty

And quickly dashed out there texting something ,

""Maan Maan " Dr.Dayana called him from behind ..

Without turning continue with texting Maan replied .. " Mom Alice Aunty will drop u ..I need to make arrangements for my Marriage "

One Moment before she was enjoying Maan's calling Alice Aunty next moment Dr.Dayana Shocked ..and turned to Alice "what was he saying ??" even though she knew maan well and understood every word he spoke but right then she desperately dont wanted to understand it ..

Alice cribbed half to her and half for Dayana to understand ..."That Geet is such a dirty woman , so desperate , chee chee , She can find her roaming around each and every man , rich , visiting hospital such a mean girl

The girl dont have any manners too "" she added recalling how Geet entered in her cabin without knocking to inform her something urgently and caught her in between her serious ''discussion'' with Dr.Rajan on the examination Table

Dr.Dayana shot an angry glare ,anger at what Alice Spoke or to Maan and his antics ..cant be distinguished

She dialled Dev's number and excused herself .

Edited by -Magicia- - 13 years ago
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Maan loves Geet for last seven years with out knowing her name? interesting...

Alice aunty ...😆 poor lady...

waiting for the remaining story
Edited by abina03 - 13 years ago
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Awesome Update
How much Kids Dr. Dayana has... i was like then i lost count.. actually new names na... difficult to notice...
Maan collide with her dream girl saved her from falling...and recognize her at once...
and tell his mom your Bahu...
he wanted to but came in his way...
Alice tried to prove Geet character less infront of Maan and his mom
good that they dint paid notice to her...
Alice Aunty... name for her...
she deserve this...
but cool is that in midst of all she gavehim the info of Geet's whereabouts...
and Maan rush to make her his wife
where did Maan meet her 7 years ago...
Edited by softly_spoken - 13 years ago
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Scene 2 : University

An accidental Kiss??

10.05 pm ,24 December 2004

Maan who was sleeping in his hostel room , was kidnapped by the seniors at 10 O clock from his room and dragged to auditorium still in his vests and shorts to help the boys gang taking part in quiz competition against some girls gang .seniors was having blast since its their last day , convocation is over and after this farewell party none of them ever need to come to college . They were all fresh . Full of energy and hope , Almost all colleges students were gathered on the CBC (Central Building Complex)

Maan was famous among seniors thanks to the interviews on Media after he secured the first Rank in State Entrance .

He was assigned to help one senior guy on mike , The Anchor was on stage and was asking questions IQ related

Maan heard a sweet voice answering from girls side , the voice was so sos .so cute and beautiful maan was dying to see a glimpse of the person wanted to see the person but he was constantly pushed by the kidnappers to help the participant answer , and he was actually not able to concentrate and answer

So whenever she started to answer he will go numb and search and get restless to see the other person.

Finally Maan saw her , simply beautiful like a dew drop shining on petals in morning . Maan thought

And he was staring at her without even winking . And his mind was completely blank all he could see is her , only her , slowly lifting her hand pushing the curls tickling her cheek behind and cutely pouting when the curls dont listen to her ,saying something to the girl nearby and laughing ' His all vision turned to "slow motion ' he heard the music of love and the enchanting peace of love prevailed his heart beating fast but in bliss

Finally when Rapid fire Round for Boys over, 2 minutes maximum answers , ,and Maan babu so lost in Geet that he still did not getting what's happening around him , the senior who 'kidnapped' Maan really pissed off by Maan's action actually the non -reactive state , by Then the Girl's turn and Geet started to answer ,

Maan was so much enjoying the way she answering , complaining , smiling , pouting getting tensed then doubly replying

She is just Awesomely Damn Animated and the most beautiful Creature he ever seen on earth !

Someone smacked hard on Maan's head and gritted teeth and whispered to Him Saley ..Goorna Bandh kar ..jakey kiss kar ke hee saalee Ko chup karao ..we dont want to lose this game .to girls on our last day .ja .. Majnu kahee ka .. Such a waste ..'And pushed Maan ahead..Maan tripped .. But Managed and almost landed upon her but he hold her with his hands on her shoulders to balance himself and also save her from falling 'and looked in to her eyes .. The hazel eyes beautiful ,scared but there was a twinkle a deep spark, of knowing ,as if she met someone she was waiting all these years .. And she shivered realising she is in his Arms an d his breath fell on her face , she wetted her lips and peered his eyes ..yearning with unknown desire '

What made him do that still he dont know , and he dont want to .. ! .he just did what he felt when his gaze shifted to pink moistened lips shivering . He just bent little and kissed her deep .. Neither of them was never been kissed , none knew nothing about the physiology of kissing

But '.still '. Their lips and tongue moved guiding each other patiently ,as if silently accepting or impacting their existence in each others heart. She winked twice in surprise when he pushed tongue inside deep and caressed her back flesh feeling its heavy roundness ..and she reciprocated blushing crimson red on his audacity

SAALAH ..JUNIOR '. SENIOR KO KISS KARTHA HI ..SENIORS KE PARTY MEY GUSKAR ''..

NANGA KAMEENA .;..; someone shouted , the owner of the voice was teh same person who pushed maan even maan dont know , he was in .the fairyland he never imagined in the wildest dream of his in most hysterical state ,exploring the new heights of ecstasy '

SOMEBODY PUSHED maan down he laid there with twinkling eyes , he saw her perplexed eyes vanishing among innumerable faces surrounding him some hit his stomach , legs .al the seniors pounced on him attacking , the potential defeat in the competition really made some of them really violent and they attacked him as if some arch enemy intruded their mother land and '' Maan still in the dreamland flying in the divine pleasure that his mind did not registered any pain but body does and it fainted

He Opened his eyes after 2 months in Hospital and rejoined college after one month ,

He tried to Find her all possible ways .. But ..He did not got any news , He was just a boy of 18 what he can do ! All he got that he kissed a senior who already left college without filing any complaint ,

He went to girls hostel too ' Some girls identified him and shooed him away

Oyee Senior Kisser Ab Yaha kisey kiss karney ke liye Aya hi ???

Pinky saw him roaming around girls hostel each and everyday , so when she got the call from her X roommate on her last day at hostel . .

"Dee thank god .. u called , so u got my letter, I am vacating today , i will write to you my new address .and..dee i want to tell you something , Dee that psycho Boy Junior who kissed you is roaming here , he was asking about You .."

The person at the other end chuckled excited ! but her maturity beautifully covered her all excitement ..

""So he want know who am i ?? What's his name ..? she could hear her own heart beats 'and it seem Pinky Too ..

Pinky Surprised "DEEE" she scolded ..

By then somebody whacked Geet ,and said "Geet Emergency at Labour Ward , Please Take Patient 11's ..CTG ''''."

Geet : ""Bye Pinky Duty calls "" She disconnected abruptly.


Edited by -Magicia- - 13 years ago
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loving it this short ss continue soon dont stop in between like continuing tom k love sis
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Originally posted by: zohafarheen

loving it this short ss continue soon dont stop in between like continuing tom k love sis


sorry .. for making u wait for torture .. once this Mystery girl ends me will dedicate all my time to Torture
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Oh to they met in University...

Awesome Update
Maan the topper... i like this...
been kidnapped to help senior answer in quiz competition
but someones
and voice was not letting him concentrate...
and when he saw her... he forget to blink... his heart started thumping...
pissed of senior pushed him to her and ask him to shut her up by kiss...
and when he held her he just lost in her...and ...
and ...
and then got beaten up by those too who pushed her...
and woke up after 2 months in hospital... bechara...
but Geet was his senior ...? hmm...
he tried to trace her...
or find any ...
and pinky saw her and Geet...
Geet was excited that he was asking about her but duty call left everything...
Continue Soon
Edited by softly_spoken - 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Magicia-


sorry .. for making u wait for torture .. once this Mystery girl ends me will dedicate all my time to Torture



ohh hello my love sis give finish this full ss i knew u can do it plz think its as our Christmaz gift
plzzz i love sisi plz update na whole scene

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