'Intikhaab' A MaYur FF -Completed (Epilogue pg103)

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Posted: 14 years ago

#41

kisiki shikayet thi ki hum unke thread pe nazar nahi dalten😉
to lijiye ji hum agayen aur is bar to sabse pehle hi agayen😆

coming back to the update
it was mindblowing as usual
and today i understood the wrong side of modern science😆
the school scene was too cute😳
and that jealousy was just awesome
on the whole
the update was superb😃

and those last lines
oh god that was so nice
how can you write so well????????????👍🏼👏

lovely update
update next part soooooooooooooooooooooon

lots of love
tashu

Edited by tasfia123 - 14 years ago

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samira

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Posted: 14 years ago

#42

Hi Neela sorry i didn't coment b4
as my net was so bad

but now i readed all

the concept was lovely

both parts were amazing

n wonderfuly written

thanks alott hjun for the pm

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.SilentPrincess

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Posted: 14 years ago

#43

Reserved... Iss bar jaldi edit karon ghi... 😳

Unreseved - Edited...

I'm fulfilling my promise... Im editing my comment early this time...

Back to the update... I love little Mayu he's so adorable and ofcourse Nupur cute pie... 😳 I adore their bond it's so sweet so special and very diffrent... 😳
and their nok-jhoks aw just... Aww... xx 😳 And Mayu's so protective over her... And the way he kissed her cheek 😳 and didn't let his friend do it... 😲😳

And the crayon scene... Mayu's becoming rude as he grow up... lekin Nupur bhi piche nahi hai...
aise behave kar rahi hai jaise ameer baap ki bigghri hui ulaad...woh itni ameer nahi hai par sab ke pyaar se bigarrh rahi hai... But still she shoo cute ke usske agaye kuch dikhai nahi deta... 😛😊

I usually find ur updates awesome... but this time...

It was really really really cute... and very very very cute... and the bond MayUr share is just A-dorable... 😳 👏

Laiba 😳

Edited by princez_94 - 14 years ago

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Rumki

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Posted: 14 years ago

#44

res
edited
i couldnt comment before as i had exam
I read all the part and liked it
part one so cute.like mayank baby
then part 2
their friendship as well as their childhood fight
really enjoying it

p.s-hey add me to ur pm list

Edited by .rumki. - 14 years ago

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zarfishanzahid

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Posted: 14 years ago

#45

wow Neela amazing update ab plz jldi se mayur ko bada kar do

thx alot for the pm

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AWonderfulChaos

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Posted: 14 years ago

#46

awwwwwwwwww wat a cute update!

chota mayu n nupz r really very cute!!loved them!

thnx for the pm!!

do cont soon!

lovin ur story!

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kirti123

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Posted: 14 years ago

#47

cute part

loved the way u described thier childhood

😊

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Escapist

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Posted: 14 years ago

#48

Sorry can't comment this time...dunno why kuch samhaj nahi aaraha .....
but then I loved the way your taking the story forward...loving the pace..slow yet fast...
aur woh shaieyri bhi mujhe kafi pasand aaye....kahin aur hi transport kar diya usne mujhe ....

Sorry

-Fatima

Edited by -shabnoor- - 14 years ago

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fiza ahmed

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Posted: 14 years ago

#49

hey i loved the way the bond is growing......care..affection....ownership...gr8 update..

uffooo...asa na kahy k ap ki yeah kahani humari wajha se shooro hoi....hum ny tu woh kaha tha jo sach tha....hr writer k apna andaz hota hai..aur us andanz ke wajha se hi woh alag hota hai...ap ko pata hai humain ap ke kahani k end khabhi bhi sad nhi laga..realistic laga...

looking fwd to ur story