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aswathy

@sreevijayan

Rocker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#151

nice work dear..loved it..u portrayed their emotions and feelings well...

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anju011

@anju011

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#152

That was such a beautiful os neela. Wonderfully written.
Happy to read ur os after such a long time.
Happy Christmas.

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Aysha

@aysha1989

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#153

Hi Neela, Hope you are doing fine 😊

First of all about the OS... Oh God I was so happy, so happy that I didn't know what I would actually tell you.. I am reading something written on Mayur after months and trust me when I say that this small yet lovely OS brought in that connection instantly with the same intensity... now I remembered why I was in love with Mayur and your writing so much 😃 Thank you so much for that!

True that I love how you use Urdu, but as I have told you earlier I would read anything and everything you write, be it in English or Urdu 😃 And I am sure that I would love it the same too... maybe even more.

And then comes your reply to my comment... I was... no I am still over the moon 😳 You were one of those people who inspired me to write and you appreciating my work is a reward... Thank you so much for mentioning it... I am really overwhelmed 😳

Will be waiting to read more of your amazing writings.

Take care ❤️

Edited by aysha1989 - 11 years ago

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maria

@Maria.

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 11 years ago

#154

I hope i'm not dreaming.😲.Let me pinch me to see its real.:D

so finally on 24th of December. you are finally back...yayyy.:D

Accha toh...Sab se pehle apka bohat bohat Shukriya itni khoobsurat tehreer likhne ka..Bohat dino baad Neela ka likha parhney ko mila..Dil bagh bagh ho gaya.

Ye apke Mayank/Nupur bhi na bohat complicated mohabbat kerte hain--na kehte hain aur na chupate hai..beech ka rasta ikhtiyaar kerte hain.Per hamain bohat ache lagte hain..

unki ye choti si guftagu bohat dilchusp this..khas ker ke hamari Nupur..itni bold,friendly but still innocent..you know i love her.

Likhte rahiye janab hum apka PMs ka intezaar karain ge...

Maria.

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Faria Ferdousi

@Faria.

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#155

Welcome back neela

Thank u so much for writing Mayur OS

Its so sweet of u

Thanx GOD u wrote a Mayur OS instead of FF

Karon FF likhle tou otar sad or tragic ending hoto . r amar ota porai hoto na

Tai jokhon dekhlam tumi OS likheso tokhon tou ami moha khushi ki tragic queen ebar ekta bhalo kaj korlo. Hehehehehehe

This OS was short but superb

They care for each other even they noticed very small small thing abt each other and I really loved the way they express it...very beautifully written.

Waiting for part 2- I hope ki u don't apart mayur here as u promised w'll alwz write happy OS..

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Faria Ferdousi

@Faria.

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#156

Originally posted by: Maria.
I hope i'm not dreaming.😲.Let me pinch me to see its real.:D
so finally on 24th of December. you are finally back...yayyy.:D

Accha toh...Sab se pehle apka bohat bohat Shukriya itni khoobsurat tehreer likhne ka..Bohat dino baad Neela ka likha parhney ko mila..Dil bagh bagh ho gaya.
Ye apke Mayank/Nupur bhi na bohat complicated mohabbat kerte hain--na kehte hain aur na chupate hai..beech ka rasta ikhtiyaar kerte hain.Per hamain bohat ache lagte hain..
unki ye choti si guftagu bohat dilchusp this..khas ker ke hamari Nupur..itni bold,friendly but still innocent..you know i love her.
Likhte rahiye janab hum apka PMs ka intezaar karain ge...
Maria.

@bold- hehehehehehe- bilkul thik kaha tune Mari
pata nehi8 kyun humari neel akbhi sidhe tarah se mayur ki biz pyaar ki izahar nehi karwate. By GOD neela ki har FF main tou Mayur shayeri ka boss hai . aur isliye ye dono iski har ff se alag hai. neela i really want to see something different from u. i mean not a complicate but a pure and simple love story of mayur. ab soch k dekhna ki ye possible hai ya nehi..

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Angle.

@Angle.

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#157

Welcome back neela
hope now we will get some beautiful mayur FF and OS from you
this OS was superb
plz update next part soon

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Pia-

@Pia-

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#158

Fantastic update
Waiting for next part

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-SharNeela-

@-SharNeela-

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#159

Originally posted by: Humayra
You are back :D
Missed you..

Kitne dino ke baad apne MayUr ka OS likha hain!!!
Nice OS..
Dono ander hi ander ek dusre ke kuch feel karte hain par Bol nahi paye ya phir shayad khud realize hi nahi kar paye..
Jo bhi ho, Nupur to Morena wapas chali gayi.. Kya yahi ending hain? Please iska second part likhiye, ek happy ending dijiye.. I know life mein hamesha happy endings nahi hote hain but kuch log to lucky hote hain.. Kya MayUr ek baar k liye bhi wo lucky couple nahi ho sakte?

Missed you too Humayra and Congrats on being RED 😉 I think I left you goldie a year ago...and I am really glad to see you back here too 😃

Yeah, you got it right! They felt it but never could express it to each other. And now, by chance everything came out but perhaps it was a bit too late. I guess what this short story was trying to say is if you love someone, tell them before its too late. You never know, saamnewala bhi shayed waisa hi feel kerta ho per bataa nahi paaraha. Glad you caught the main theme of the story.

About 2nd part, well its an OS sweety! OS matlab One Shot and I don't know what the theoretical meaning of this is but usually my OSs' are just a snapshot of a moment or an event..bas! inki na koi sahi aaghaz hota hai na hi ikhtitaam. Its just a snapshot but doesn't necessarily mean its sad ending or the fact that nothing happened after that. Its just that the scope of this shot did not cover their history or their future outcome! But I believe its a happy ending because the ending has been shown in the lines themselves! khud hi dhoond lo 😉

Thanks again Humayra. Sooo good to see you here.

Neela

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-SharNeela-

@-SharNeela-

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#160

Originally posted by: Nirvrithi
Tum bhi na neela. Ek saal kya kitna bhi break le lo, tum nahi badlogi. Mayur ko aise beech sadak pe chodke jaati ho. Aur tumhare mayank tho phone number ya address bhi nahi poochta, just in case he needs later? Atleast for our sake-kamse kam happy ending hum imagine kar sakti thi?
You portrayed their feelings very well thru this short and meaningful convo.Baaki comments second part ke baad. Marriage tak nahi chahiye, minimum ye tho sure ho jaye ki they will keep in touch and will give their feelings a chance?
Im so happy you are back.

Nivi ki bacchi...ek saal kya 10 saal ka break leke bhi aaoon aur tumhare sarr ke saare baal bhi pakk jaaye toh bhi logical hat nahi utrega sarr se..nahi?? Anyways, again its good to see you too 😊 Hope everything is well settled now and you have bit more spare time in hand for IF and meri ghaltiyan nikaalne k liye 😡 😆😆

By the way, maine MaYur ko beech sadak pe nahi chhora, woh dono mile hi beech siriyon per hai 😆 so unn se jaake poocho k itne saal itna sab kuch notice kiya toh himmat nahi bani k ek doosre se baat kar le!! Aur yeh kya address phone number 😲 abbay situation ko samjho...achanak siriyon per mil jaate hai dono aur baaton baaton pe nikal aata hai k dono ek doosre ko pasand karte rahe per kabhi baat nahi ki ek doosre se. Ab achanak pehli mulaqat pe baat hona phir ek doosre ki dil ka haal pata chalna ...aisi situation per apna Mayank address maangega ya apni Nupur kitaab phaar k number likkhegi!

Ok..on a serious note (dil ki bharaas nikal gayi 😛) actually there is a happy ending! Remember what Mayank said in the end...I quote

M: haan per shayed Mumbai ki logon ko chote sheher k log raas aajaye. Who knows? He tries to gauge her reaction by looking directly into her eyes.

isska matlab yehi hua na k he will come to her to Morena and he was trying to see her reaction for this comment. But they got disrupted by the workers. Then again Nupur's very last line definitely showed how much she loves him..that's a 'Yes' na? So yes, its a happy ending. Itne saalon se meri writings parh rahi ho, inn sab baaton ka pata hona chahiye na ab! That I am so uncomfortable in writing happy shappy wala stuff that even after a year I do this in an encrypted and encoded message. Decipher and enjoy ...that's my slogan! 😆

I missed you Nivi...comment parhne k baad pata chala how much. Thank you...

-Neela