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Posted: 14 years ago
Hey Muskaan,

Update was very lovely!

Geet is so innocent,
how she tries to convince Maan to say sorry to his Daadi,
Cute!

Update soon,

Love
lakshmi
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Posted: 14 years ago
👏👏👏👏 this ovation have been due for sometime now.
love the baby talk in ur updates
maneet together is always a killer
ur writeups always touches the heart
unusal start regardin PMS but u made it as the foundation of ur story and instead of it to seem like a sin ,it feels like ibadat
not many can write it the way ur write to make us to repond 2 ur ffs in such a positive manner
again but i cant help it 👏👏👏👏
Edited by sapnaajay - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago

~madhoshi~
part 9

next day maan actually went to meet daadi...kyun chala gaya..use bhi nahi pata tha shayad
daadi - maan aap yanha? raat ka nasha uthra nahi..she smiled
maan - kya?(confused)
daadi - kuch nahi!! aap ko kuch kaam tha hum se?
maan - nahi..I just came to see u..how have u been with ur health?
daadi - hum teehk hain..bus pulpetation..
maan rolls his eyes
daadi smiled (us ladhki se ab to milna hi patega)
he hugs her & says bye & leaves to office...
daadi mumers sorry nahi bolo to kya..milne to aagaye..sahubzaade

maan calls geet into his cabin..for dictation
she looks down & comes in..uske kamre main aathe hi..mano khushi ka
allam sa cha jata..nasha tha jaise koi...dono muskarne lagthe man hi man
ankhoo main chamak hoti lekin laboon main narazghi..us chamak ki narazghi
yah phir jo samjh nahi pate us ehsaas ki narazghi
maan gives the dictation...
geet keeps looking at him...khabhi uske aankhee..khabhi uske hont..
khabhi uske haath ..khabhi use...bus deehk thi rahe...har ek pal khud ko
kotha pathi...jaise use dehk phir se madhsoh hona chathi hoo..
Kuch likhna shayad woh bhi chahathi thi.. sochti rahthi kya likhoon ?
unki ki woh mehakti khushboo ..barish ka woh bhega dehaktha Pani
aur hawa mein thi jo rawani kya uss mousam ka khumaar likhoon ?
maan - GGGEEET!!!
she broke out of her thoughts...ji
maan - type it & bring
geet - ji..
maan - NOW..
geet - jaa rahe hoon chilla kyun rahe hoo?
she goes back to the room...
baby tunhe kuch suna..tumhare papa ko dehk kar main.. koo hi jaathi hoon
mujhe kuch aur yaad hi nahi rah tha...aab kya type karoon...
mujhe to teehk se typing bhi nahi aathi...baby totally shocked..😲.
I am going tell every thing clearly to ur papa ...baby happy 😃
tera bare main nahi ..mera bare main..baby makes baby face

geet walks into his cabin...sunyia..
maan - geet aacha huwa tum aagayee..ek aur dictation hain..
I need it now..it is very urgent...
geet - nahi aap meri baat to sunyie na..
maan starts dictating...she tries to scrible something...finally gives up & sits down...
again admiring him..likhoon to kya likhoon
thi chehrey par unkey teez..aankhoon mein thi thori Shararat
aur baatoon mein woh hosla.. kya unka rangeen mizaaj likhoon?
koo jaa thi thi maan main...kuch aur to samjh hi nahi pathi!!
maan looks at her & looks at the pad...yeh kya hain..
geet - aap phelee meri baat sunyia..to..
maan gets very angry.. turns her hand in anger & tum meri softness ka fayada utha rahe ho..
main tumhe kuch nahi kahtha..iska matlab yeh nahi ki tum job main dayan nahi dooghe


itna naraz kyun tha maan...uske aankhoo main joo dekhkaa aapne liya ..use sambal nahi
paya yah!!kuch aur bhaat thi....
geet eyes starts watering...maan pushes her away & leaves the room
she sits in the couch & starts crying...
yeh sab tere karan ho raha hain..na tu hota..na mujhe yeh job karna padtha
na use dhust dhanva se me dobar milthi...mujhe nahi karni yeh job...
baby feeling bad papa ko dhust dhanva bola...
mujhe ghar jana hain..she takes her bag & tells pinky
geet - mujhe yeh job nahi karnee
pinky - lekin
geet - main ghar jaa rahee hoon..bus..abhi..
pinky - aacha .. yeh lee ghar ke spair keys..abhi ghar main koi nahi hoga..
yaar main DD ko kya kahoonghi?
geet - kehdena mujhe job nahi karnee..
pinky - lekin kyun
geet - woo unhe pata hain


maan comes back from the meeting..
maan looks for geet ..tells pinky to send geet in with chopra project file...
pinky - sir..she is gone home
maan - wat?
pinky - she left the job
maan closed his eye in disgust...he should'nt have hurt her...
uske di se aah nikal gayee...main bhi gussa main kya kya kardetha hoon..
maan immediatly went to pinky's house...
geet opened the door...maan saw her eyes was sallowen & red..
uska tu dil hi doob gaya tha shayad..uska yeh haal dehk ke...
she did'nt say anything..
maan - I am sorry..mujhe tumhe aise gussa nahi karna chahiya tha..
geet - teehk hain bye...
maan - meri baath to suno..she turns & goes to her room
geet - mujhe aap ki aur koi baath nahi suni..
maan - tum job kyun chod rahi ho...
geet - mujhe aap ke saath job nahi karne.. aap dhust ho.. aur dhanav bhi..aur aap mujhe marthe ho
maan - GEET..I just held ur hand...
geet - itna joor se ..she showed her hand..it was already red turning blue..
uske haat me nila rang dekha to maan ka dil roo pada...jaise sare kayanath
ka gum umad pada hoo..pata nahi uski todhi se bhi taqleef bardhash kyun nahi
kar pata tha...
he caresed her hand...she almost was lost in that touch..use ke paas athe hi..
uska gussa mano kanhi ko jatha tha...
but pulled back & said nahi...mujhe aap bhut gussa bhi karthe hoo...
maan - aab se nahi karoonga..
geet - phir bhi mujhe job nahi karni..& turns away..
maan hugs her from behind..please mujhe aise chod ke mat javoo..
pura sama jaise tham sa gaya tha us ek pal main...woh kuch aise kah
gaya ..jo na kahna tha..jo shayad dono nibha na pathe..ke..shayad aanjane
main nibha rahe the...uske bhahoon me sama si gayee...
maan - mera matlab hain..job aise mat chod kar jaavoo...
she turns into his embrace looking down & says..mujhe dictation nahi aathi..
mujhe typing bhi nahi aathi..mujhe kuch bhi nahi aatha...
maan keeps his finger on her lips..chup ek dum chup..
main phir bhi tumhe job na chotne ko kahnoo to...
she looks at him in disbelive...blinks her eyes ..wow samjh nahi pathi..
uske choone ke ehsaas ko mahsoos karthi yah uske baatoo ko...dono hi
use pagal kardethe...kuch bhi nahi samjh aaya..darthe huye..sharmathe huye..boli
phir main kya karoonghe..maan was so lost in her ..almost said..tum bus yunhi
humesha mera nazroo ke saamne rahna
..

[YOUTUBE]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aciaLiYsN48&hd=1[/YOUTUBE]
sharma gayee...she rubbed her cheek slowly
against his chest... the fine weave of his shirt was silky soft, but his flesh beneath
seemed to burn..she could sense the pounding of his heart and each breath brought the
warm and musky scent that was his alone...which she could recognize...any time...
fiza jhoom uthi hoo jaise...kuch nahi tha..bus dono ek dosre ke bahoon
main the..ajeeb se baath thi...dono ek doosre se kuch umeed nahi
rakhthe the...bhaut hi pyara sa bandan tha..nazook bhi...yeh jo saath ka pal..hain
use khoona nahi chathe the...dar the the..kuch kah diya aur yeh pal
koh jaya to....kyun dartha tha dil ise lamhe ko kohne se....
dil se sirf ek aah thi aakhir tu phir kahin kho jaye na tujhe rooh mein apni utaar doon..

precap
geet again geeting angry at maan...

don't ask me for any logic in this FF ..it is ~madhoshi~...ok geet is 18yrs...so idealy final year college...not knowing dictation is fine...because for taking down dictation..secerteries learn short hand...typing..normal speed is fine...but thats not wat they need here..😉
she is really been pampered daughter of the house so does'nt do any work..so does'nt know any thing ...like cooking. or making coffee hota hain....😆😆😆 thanxs alot lot for all ur appriciation....please please do comment
thanxs kashluver88 VM
love
muskan
Edited by muskanp - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
Hi Muskan😊
Read the update before your PM😊


Awesome update👏
Awww, Maan went to meet Dadi. That was so sweet!!!😊 But he didn't say sorry, ab apni aadat se majboor hai, I guess😆😆

Every time there's a Maaneet scene, you bring in a lot of passion!!! Whether its their first meeting, office, outhouse, Pinky's place; there's an exponential increase in the passion!!!😊

Maan is soo sweet, so is Geet and so is their baby!
And so are you, Muskan😊 😊
Edited by shivangi783 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
yes, it brings smile😊 on my face and each and every line of their feeling was lovely and big hug 🤗for u. and every thing u made in both FF are superb. nxt soonn
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Posted: 14 years ago
Yaar thats Fabulous......👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏👍🏼👏...................... Loved it soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo much❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
The Pic is Superb....👍🏼.........
The VM is too Good...👍🏼......
Poor Geet she is unable to concentrate on the work when she is with Maan..😆😆😆....
Maan should understand his effect on her................
Loved these lines sooooooooooooooooooooooo much
mujhe to teehk se typing bhi nahi aathi...baby totally shocked..😲.
I am going tell every thing clearly to ur papa ...baby happy 😃
tera bare main nahi ..mera bare main..baby makes baby face
baby feeling bad papa ko dhust dhanva bola...
mujhe aap ke saath job nahi karne.. aap dhust ho.. aur dhanav bhi..aur aap mujhe marthe ho
please mujhe aise chod ke mat javoo.😔.
phir main kya karoonghe😕
tum bus yunhi humesha mera nazroo ke saamne rahna😲😲😲..
Yaar I feel so delighted to see ur Updates always but especially during weekends...........
Loved every single line and every single word...........
waiting for the next part😍😍😍😍😍
Edited by .sireesha. - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
Hi Muskaan,
I really love your narration to this fic :D.Specially the hindi parts,they bring in a lot of passion to your writing,its like a 'madhosh' environment is created.I cant exactly point out what it is about your fic but somewhere there is an element of magic...maybe its your writing,maybe its your words or maybe its you....
Keep writing and continue soon.I love it absolutely!
Thanks
cR
Edited by crazilycrazy - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
wow muski lovely update
so sweet thanks for the pm
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Posted: 14 years ago
omg...what an unusual theme ur ff has, but how brilliantly u carry it forward!
Hats off!
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Posted: 14 years ago
Haiiiiiiii luv ur ff!!!!! nw why is Geet angry again nd i luv her baby conversations .........bechara luvs his dad so much!!!!!!whn will maan realize h eha s a kid ??????????

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