SAJAN FF-TUM BIN JIYA JAAYE NA-chp11 updt pg 83,84 - Page 10

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Posted: 15 years ago
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yaaar i am speechles.......................................... u r tooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo good.. i simply oved it.. hope u continue soon....
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omgggggggggggggggg it ws amazingggggggggg dear....
d way u narrated everything... hats off to u yaar..!! 👏 👏 👏 i'm in luvv wid samrat yaar... kya ladka hai..!! he reallyy made me cry in ur dis ud..!! 😭 n once again yaar.. hats off to u... u r a brilliant writer....!!! 👏 👏
i jst luved reading dis part...
n m reading it again...
thnxx for dedicating it to me dear.. 🤗 🤗
luv yaa... 🤗
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meena my lovey dovey friend superb 👏 i have no words to explain this both parts, both r full of emotions with different flavor, in part b sam 's hatred and gun's guiltiness but both 's inside spark of love was unbelievable loved it to the core and second part OMG what a part yar angle friend stole my heart, can't wait for next part update soon , you deserve it yar 👏 you portrayed each and every emotion very well, emotion of love,hate,sadness,and most imp your b part's wonderful love poem loved it to the core kaya kaha hai tune yar so true, really i am falling in love this FF and i really mean it yar thank you so much for sharing it with us love u for this FF 🤗
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Posted: 15 years ago
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seriously awesome chapter.....really loved it.....loved the emotions in it.awesomeeeeeeeeee
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wowo...wow...wow...awesome...!!!!
really hatss off yaar...ur naration...gr888888888' 👏 👏 👏 👏
n loved samrat...!!!
plzzzzzzzzzzzzzz cont soon..
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Great Update
pllzzz continue soon!!!
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awesome update
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it continue soon
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u have surpassed every limit
each n every emotion is portrayed so nicely
i felt as if me visualising some picture.....................
keep it up
n ya keep givin such big big 2 -3 uds at 1 go😉
n ya sorry for late reply
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Chapter 3-Part A


This chapter 3 Part A is dedicated to some of d lovely writers whose work is a joy for lot of readers on this forums including myself

Sana_Sajan….sana ur FF- Mr & Mrs Shergill has been my all time favorite n I am looking forward to u creating d same magic with Kab milenge hum tum😉

Sweetsonal: Sonal I have loved every bit of do dil mil rahe hain, apne, ek prem kahani…they have sheer pleasure to read thru 😃

Cute_monaya_fan: I luv ur intezaar ff so muchn one of the FFs that made track IF forum regualrly 😊

Baby_doll_2305: dreamer I have always loved ur style of writing, ur FFs Togther Forever, Ek Prem Kahani n one shots leave immense feeling of joy in me every time I have read an update 😉

Kweetrockstar: Pooja …I have never been a grt fan of DMG though I watch it here n there….but ur FF has made me like the story so much more dear …I luv ur extensive long updates filled with beautiful narration 😃

If I have missed sum1 I will definitely cover in my forthcoming chapters 😉

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Chapter 3 – Part A

Samrat doesn't knows if its d mother of headaches or d nightmare of prev day that made him wake up way too early for his normal routine n his head is splitting when he wakes up n he finds benji next to him with a cup which must be back tea if he knew his friend correctly….he was holding his head n trying not to look up….he had never felt so awkward around benji before when he had been sloshed out….but this was diff….as if like a flashback he vaguely recollected his blabberings when benji had found him totally drunk in d dhaba

Samrat is mortified thinking bat yest whole night….like a flash back everything comes to his mind…chashmish se takrana….phir mehendi ki shaam…..woh paper game….woh kiss …phir chashmish se who baaten….uske toote dil ka dard aansoon me behna……woh guilt, woh hurt, woh anjaan darr, who dard, who tadap….phir sharab ke nashe me khud ko dubona….phir b hcshamish ka woh aansuon wala face ka use haunt karma….kitni bottles pee chukka magar jaise ki har ghut be baad chashmish ka chera uske dimaag ke screen me aur saaf nazar aa rah tha….na use gham me woh dubne de rahi thin a uski chubti aankhon ke aansoon uska peecha chod rahe the….upar se benji ke saamne😡

Samrat groaning loudly "arrrgghhh"

Benji " Kya hua samrat…tum thek to ho"

Samrat (realizing benji was waiting for him " who benji….woh mai….woh….main theekh theek hoon….tum kya kar rahe ho yahan….kuch …kuch baat thi kya"

Benji being d ever understanbding friend tries to act ignorant abt yest knowing samrat is having a tough time facing him after yest, may b becoz he had spoken way out of line abt his hearts feelings for d first time to him even though unconsciously….benji smiles a heart filled smile😊…wat ever had happened yest it was for sure gud….coz it was forcing samrat to come out of his shelll at last….😉

Benji knew this was no easy feat….but he was glad it was becoz of a girl like gunjan. Only her innocence and purity cud b a salvation for samrat's troubled soul😍….he knew he was thinking way ahead but he was praying desperately for this to happen as he knew his gut instinct was right ….they were gud for each other….but he and d gang in which ever way possible had to bring them togther to first become friends n then we can see how things go from there

Benji: "woh sam, mai tere liye black tea laya tha, socha sir dard se thoda aaram mil jaayega

Samrat thinking that's benji , no questions asked, no explanation expected just being d beautiful friend he was as always but he decides that for once benji deserves an explanation. He doesn't know how to begin , what to say, how to explain his act, how to tell him about his remorse, his guilt, d myriad of emotions crowding his brain, he was never good at talking so how to make this start….

Samrat nevertheless was determined to make a start this time coz chashmish didn't deserve what he did….n he had to make amends…to hell with his external persona breaking free, to hell with his vulnerability, for once he didn't care, for once someone else's pain was causing his nightmares n not leaving him in peace, it had to means something , it had to be a signal that his heart for once was ready to battle out his mind come what may, this one wrong had to be made right, he didn't know why or how but he knew he had to, it was like an addicted thot driving him insane, a feeling that wud b assuaged only when he made d amends but how to make benji understand something about which he himself was clueless

Samrat tries to explain " woh benji….kal raaat….woh maine….kal chash(as if finding it tough to even take her name without being pierced by an unknown pain)…party me …chashmish ko….woh maine….woh dance ke….maine use kuch ….use hurt….kyunki….mai

Benji " samrat I can understand….jus chill …don't fret….u don't owe me an explanation, I can understand tere liye yeh kitna mushkil hoga….bas relax kar"

Samrat is humbled by benji's unconditional understanding but for once he wants to be answerable to his friends, he wants to let them know his weaker side, he wants to let them see he is falliable, he wants them to acknowledge n understand his misgivings, most of all he wants d forgiveness for his innumerable instances of having hurt them with his words, but he knows now is not the time to make amends, he will do it at d right time but now he has to focus on chahsmish n for that he needed benji to understand wat happened if not in detail atelast a gist

Samrat (making himself strong) " nahi benji….u have a right to know…woh kal mere aur chahsmish ke beech mere baton ke wajah se misunderstandings ho gayi….woh maine use bahut hurt kar diya….maine kuch zyaada hi bol diya use….magar ba samajah …ab samaj nahi aaa rah…usse kaise …kaise main sorry bolun

Benji (doing n mental "yes" in his mind 😆says I knew it, I knew it but aloud with an innocent face sya) "samrat fikar mat kar sab kuch theekh ho jaayega"😉

Samrat " nahi benji…tu jaisa samajtha hai …yeh utna aasan nahi hai…..baat itni simple nahi hai😭….chashmish inti aasani se nahi maanegi😭😭…infact mujhe toh lagta hai ki woh maanegi hi nahi (with a disheartened look on his face)😔

Benji (thinking wow itna jaddo chala diya gunjna, am impressed )" fikar not samrat…woh nahi maangei to kya….hum bhi haar manne walon mese nahi hai mere dost….after all u r samrat😆….n a samrat cannot accept defeat ever my dost

Samrat (brightening at benji's words sees a ray of hope n dazzles him with a brilliant smile that reaches his eyes) "absolutely yeh toh mai bhool hi gaya….aakhir mai samrat hoon….roote dil ko manana aur udas chere pe smile lana meri speciality hai (with a wink in benji's direction)😉…..but I need ur …I need ur help benji….i can't do it alone….tujhe meri madat karni padegi dost…will you?

Benji " I thot u r never goin got ask😉…after all a firrreend in need is a firrreend indeed (mimicking smarat's drunken pronunciation of d word😛)

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Gunjan also wakes up with a headache but becoz of heavy sobbing n inbaility to sleep the night, whole of d night she kept thinking her Di's words on what had made samrat so harsh "pyar ki bhuk jab nahi mit thi hai insaan ka dil sakt hone pe majboor ho jata hai," she kept crying n thanking god am so lucky to have been bestowed with such lovelye parents, bui n doting sister….v all so easily take our loved ones for granted , its only when we see d misfortune of others we realize d fortune bestowed on us, but life doesnt always give u a second chance to realize this mistake.

Gunjan takes a vow to show her family whenever possible how much she cares for them but still it has not helped her to stop imagining d plight of a boy who's so drowned by hate n so scared by love n stays aways from it even when d cost he's paying for that is his own happiness. How suffocating it must be live in constant dual with ur mind n heart to ensure that heart is always subjugated n mind wins d external appearances

After washing her face, she realizes it's a lil late for her jogging but nevertheless she does not want to miss her morning routine of jogging upto d lake n practicing her yoga aasanas

Gunjan jogs to her favorite sport which was a few miles from her house but she always found utmost serenity, calmness n peace in this lush green part of d morena, away disconnected from d actual city but still connected through its healing n refreshing surroundings, adjoining a beautiful lake.

This was her secret spot. No problem had ever managed to occupy her worrying mind when she was in this place. N she was not going to make an exception to that by brooding over yest' nightmare. She puts down d blanket which she was carrying in her small backpack and starts her medidation. As d usual mantra goes she starts instructing her mind to clear away all d thots n thing about being free from everything, she literally starts erasing every significant n insignificant happening of d prev day from her mind but one thot does not seem to be leaving her in a hurry

for Gunjan -Its as if her mind is rewinding n instead of erasing it keeps on replaying, samrat's beautiful face, that keeps going back n keeps coming forward and always at d juncture of kiss she tries to shake away d thot n tries to start afresh." After struggling for 15 minutes she gives up all hope n decides irriatedly to head back home n before that as usual she usual goes up to the lake to wash her face

Gunjan after splashing d water notices a leaf floating in her direction….as it comes closer she notices "gehnde ka phool" arranged in the letter of "I" aur jab tak use uthathi ek aur patta behte hue uski taraf aaya jisme letters "A M" sunflower ko leke arrange kiya tha, aur jab usne woh uthaya toh ek aur bada patta uske saamne aa pahuncha jisme "s o r r y" flowers ko leke arrange kiya tha

Gunjan thinks there is something more on the 3rd leaf….she cud see flowers arranged in two circles, being connected by a line, n two adjacent lines next to d circles (my geometry may be weak😆)…wait a minute…iska kya matlab hai….oh god its spectacles…..n then another flash someone who addresses her as chashmish, immediately she looks up here and there and after making a full sweep her eyes come to notice samrat standing a lil away from her but utna bhi dur nahi uski aakhon me pachtave ka ehsaas nazar na aaye.

Gunjan's heart imme melts for a second to think what it must have cost him to accept n apologise for his mistake which she knew was a first for him. But imme she remembers her struggle 15min back to concentrate n all thanks to samrat n his kiss…."hey bhagwan meri saari baat is kiss pe hi aake kyun….phir se….gunjan tu kabhi nahi sudregi…bas kar yaad hai kal raat ko tune decide kiya tha ki tu uske bare me nahi sochegi….haan di se maine kaha tha ki mai use jurt nahi karungi par yeh nahi kaha tha ki mai use baat karungi….gunjan tu usse dur rah….bas tere liye yehi acha hoga" She gives one final look to samrat neither communicating nor denying anything n packs her bag n leaves from there"

Pure din gunjan uski rrah takthi rahti hai… ghar se leke school tak, school se leke college tak aur college se leke bazaar tak., magar samrat wapas kahi nazar nahi aaya. "tu kyun use dhoondhi jaa rahi rahi….yeh toh achi baat hai ki use tera msg loud n clear mil gaya phir kyun uske bare me sochi ja rahi hai n gives herself a mental beating as she is entering her house n is dumb struck on seeing a beautiful rangoli of a flower. On d four major petals of the flower she notices I, AM, SORRY, n spectacles drawing

She doesn't have to look out far to see Samrat standing with one hand in his front jeans pocket n one leg thats resting on d wall next to d gate now coming down n straightening when she looks up. His dress has changed but the remorse in his eyes is as intense as morning, infact a lil more. It was as if he was finding it difficult to say it in wrds but his eyes were begging for forgiveness openly beyond d level of decency, she's almost convinced to forgive but just then the kiss haunts her n she's forced to look away n leave but not without giving him a second n third look back, she was acting as if someone had forcible dragged her from d place when all she wanted to do was stand n gaze at those beautiful eyes which knew courage immensely not to shy away while asking for forgiveness

Samrat happy at having got a reaction smiles n says "koi baat nahi chashmish aaj nahi toh ka sahi"

To be conitnued

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Posted: 15 years ago

Chapter Part 3 –Part B

This Chap 3 Part B is dedicated to some lovely readers whom comments make it worth writing all these updates late in d night

Aarthi.Ramani: Loads of thanks aarthi for patiently reading thur my story n appreciating d same

Charmee_samy: thanks a lot charmee dear….ur comments always a bring a smile to my face

Kris97: thanks kris97 for being d first to almost read n appreciate my FF updates

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Next day gunjan had to go d mall to pick up a dress she had given for alteration for d sangeet function. The moment she steps into the main lobby she notices three big thick satin curtains hanging from the ceiling all d way till 6 feet above the ground n in central curtains she notices some letters and a small image. She didn't have to look keenly to know d letters n d alphabets neither did she have to look far to spot an even more remorseful face pleading her for forgiveness which she had d heart to, but no will/ power to grant if she wanted her own sanity. With great difficult she tears her eyes away from samrat n leaves

Just as Gunjan steps out of d building back to her home, a set of college girls crowd her in a circle n each one comes towards her one by one with a bunch of flowers, a chocolate box, one with card,one with a book, n one teddy

One by d one they give her d gifts n start rapping out without ne pattern

Hey chashmish, please forgive him

He wants u to once hear him

He's really ashamed and feeling very sorry,

pls don't give him any more reasons to worry

He knows he's hurt u

n wants to make it upto you

So maafi kar do grant

aur badalo friendship ka hand 😆😆

N slowly at d last line everyone, all d girls who had crowded her in a circle move away n give way for a guy holding a cute pink heart balloon with "I am Sorry chashmish" written on it

N slowly he removes the balloon away from his face to reveal d charm n equally greater remorse filled n breaks his silence by sweetly luking upto her "chashmish I am sorry pls mujhe maaf kar do na"

For gunjan "it was like a beautiful chord being played after those harsh words of day before yesterday". She wondered how can his voice hold even more regret than d beautiful face that was laced with shame n afraid to meet her eyes but yet cudnt shy awsy from facing n owning up to their mistake. Gunjan finally deicdes to ditch her brain for once, after all she cud not control her heart which was paining looking at d anxious helplessness of samrat, she takes pity on him, he after all deserved some explanation

Gunjan shyly thanks d girls who leave after seeing she has accepted samrat's getsure n she looks back to samrat's face with great difficulty n says "Dekho samrat tumhe yeh sab kuch karne ki zaroorat nahi hai, maine tumhe maaf kar diya"

Samrat's face lights up like a 100watts bulb "sach chashmish"

Gunjan dil pe patthar rakh ke kehti hai "haan samrat, magar mai tumse request karti hun aage se hum dono na mile toh theek rahega"

Samrat's shocked 😲 n his happiness is crushed by her words "magar kyun chashmish tumne hi toh abhi kaha hi tumne mujhe maaf kar diya to to phir to hum friends hue na"

Gunjan sad about wat she's doing "nahi samrat maine sirf tumhe maaf kiya hai aur behethar humhare liey yehi hoga hum is baat aur ek doosre ko yahi bhool jaye,pls samrat (when he's about to argue), meri itni si baat maan jao, it is for our own good, pls no hard feelings, hum dono bahut diff hai aur hum kabhi friends ban nahi sakte, pls mujhe samajhne ki koshish karo, mera irada tumhe hurt karne ka nahi hai, but please try to understand my POV, hope u will, ab mujhe chalna hai, u take care"

Samrat is heart broken at this outcome n thinks hard what went wrong when she had forgiven him, why cud not they be friends….then he remembers her guilty face n he thinks "kuch toh gadbad hai, agar chashmish mujse doti nahi karna chahti thi woh use kyun bura lag rah tha, nahi usne abhi mujhe puri taraf se maaf nahi kiya bas mere kkhatir kiya hai agar apne khatir maaf karti to meri dosti ke liye inkaar nahi karti, (brightening at that thot as there's still hope) "Koi baat nahi chashmish aaj maafi mil gayi kal dosti bhi ho jaayegi after all Samrat itni aasani se haar nahi manta hai"

Next day gunjan is jogging back to her house when uday wearing samrat's face mask steps in front of her giving her a scare n starts singing

(hey baby song) I wanna make it up to you, pretty baby Make it up to you.I wanna see you smile I wanna see you smile I wanna make it up to you.

O meri jaan na lele ke meri jaan (2) Teri ada (2) Jaan jala na tujhe pe deewana (2) Mein hoon fida (2) (benji wearing samrat's mask runs to her other side n hits her to get her attention n sings)

Samrat is smiling n walking at a slow pace diagonally opposite to her bewildered self

Gusstaki maaf karde Abb tho insaaf karde (uday sings these two lines)
Apna dil saaf karde Kehna tho maan le (benji sings these two lines)
Jaane bhi de jo bhi hua jaane bhi de (two old men who r walking back to their house sing this😆

Gunjan somehow manages to dodge them n rush back home n gets ready for school all d while d secret grin at samrat's continued attempt to pacify her pleasures her beyond belief

As soon as she steps out in front of her house, benji with another mask of samrat's face jumps in front of her n sings😉

Dosti Jo Pyaar Bane Hairat Nahin Kyonki Zindagi Muhabbat Hai Nafarat Nahin (benji)
Dhadake Jo To Dil Ko Dhadakane Do Bhadake To Ye Shola Bhadakane Do (uday sings)
Raahon Mein Do Baahein Baahon Mein O Baby Aao Na Saath Chalo Na Na Na (uday)
Ham Se Tum Dosti Kar Lo Yeh haseen galti kar lo(benji)

All the while samrat is having that mischief filled smile n is not singing but has a guitar slung across his chest. Its as if he's just waiting for her reaction. This time Gunjan cud not help herself but responds back pointing fingers at benji n uday but stealing pointed glances at samrat

Hamko Aisi Baaton Ka Yaqin Kaise Ho Kaise Ham Maan Lein Tum Itane Achchhe Ho
Itane Achchhe Ho Tum Itane Achchhe Ho Logon Ne Hamein Ye Bataaya Hai
Pyaar To Bas Ik Pal Ki Chhaaya Hai Jaao Na Hamein Bahakaao Na
O Baaba Jaao Na Jaane Bhi Do Na Na Na
Tum Se Kyon Dosti Kar Lein Ham Ye Kyon Galati Kar Lein …

Gunjan "waving her hand n giving a sweet smile to those three stupefied faces on d road, she boards d auto n leaves laughingly but not before having seen a happy grin on samrat's face on finally having got a reaction out of chashmish"

Gunjan has just finished her school paper correction which she had stayed back for alone n d whole school is silent n d calmness all of a sudden disturbs her. She hears a shrill sound of a student shouting teacher coming out somewhere from d balcony, she runs forward as no one was around in d school n she knew someone was calling her

She reaches d balcony after running from d staff room puff panting n peeps out from baclcony n d sight makes her lose her breathe

A group of 60 to 80 students r standing arranged in the form of letters " I AM SORRY" and few kids have been arranged to make d shape of spectacles

Samrat is standing in d centre with a yellow rose tucked in his jeans n starts strumming d guitar strings singing

Maana Humse Ho Gayee Ek Choti Si Khataa Hans Do Na Tum Zaraa Do Na Humko Tum SazaaTum Jo Hans Pade To Abh Hum Bhi Muskurayein Aao Mil Ke Saath GaayeinDil Se Dil Bhi MilayeinHey Hey, Musu Musu Hasi, Deu Malai Lai Musu Musu Hasi DeuZara Muskura De, Mukura De Zara Muskura De, Aye Chasmish

N Samrat kneels down by the end n holds his ears very sweetly n says " I AM SORRY CHASHMISH, agar tumne mujhe sach much maaf kar diya toh tum meri dosti bhi accept karlo, pls, warna yeh saaf zaahir hai ki tumne mujhe abhi tak maaf nahi kiya...pls pls chashmish ek chance"

Gunjan unable to prolong the inevitable further gives into her heart in d final battle n decides to let control fly in d air. Her heart cannot agree to disappoint samrat ne more even if he ends up again breaking her heart. She's rather ready to take that risk than breaking his hope filled heart eagerly awaiting her answer n yet not trying to show d tension etched in his body language fearing another rejection

Gunjan comes slowly towards him n samrat all of sudden gives a sheepish smile n looks here n there, as if not so bold any more

Gunjan "woh rose doge bhi yah apni jeans pocket me hi lagaye rakhoge" much to samrat's delightful liking expressed by his heartfelt grin while benji n uday do a glee filled hi-fi standing behind d tree near near d gate

n thus starts d bond of new friendship for samrat to a girl to whom he's attracted n something much more specail for Gunjan

To be continued

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