Lapsus Linguae: Ch 7: Pg30: Rejoice (Mayur)

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aishwarya

@aish_punk

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Posted: 15 years ago

#21

Hey Sookie..nice FF..just read it..n i love ur way of writing!

So they both are poets..intresting..!

I wonder y Gunjan is always under the shadow of her sis?!..n i hope dey both manage to find comfort in this unknown place..atleast Uday is being nice 2 them..!

Those lines were really good..whatever both wrote..both were intimidated by each oda's words..n thats y wrote a comment..

Was Mayank flirting?!..wow..1st time..! ..but i like that..!..

thnx 4 d PM

update soon

-Aish

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#22

Hi Sookie,

I dont know why u choose Mayur FF but its so good to know that. For me who regularly watches MJHT .. i have felt cheated DMG and cant enjoy the visual appeal when i read the smilar names of the charcters... so a bit hesistant to reading a AR or RM story btu here i can visualise the MAyur .. Also I have in my own story telling style many many occasion used poetic lines.. and somehow i enjoy it... reading in ur story the poetic lines made me smile and i loved the poems.. soo cute..especially the Nupur one on her blog about dreams.. in few words beautifully written..

The story is wonderfully dealt uptil now I love the concept of blog and strangers gettign insight and its a sensitive ebauty of heart whcih is felt and u feel like replyign commenting.. its so connected to all of us as well here.. so we can relate t the Mayur here for sure...

I think the detialing in both the charcters are nicely sketched.. and it does sound interesting too how the blog will help them to known more about each other...

great work till now .. will enjoy reading the next am sure...:)

Bhoomi

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Sookie

@-Sookie-

Voyager

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Posted: 15 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: Prasanthi
reserved :D!

will try to get back soon

edit:

Well well well someone is so serious about it? 😲. Yah I know that you are Mayank's fan but never imagined a fic from you on them.. nah rather... on him😃. Yes, thoda hatke from the routine Mayur. So, its an IT interaction here as well. Okay. Absolutely loved the verses.. simple yet have indepth meaning.

Excited to know further Sookie. Continue soon :-).

Hey!
No, I wasn't that serious when we last spoke but I had spent rest of the Saturday watching Mayank's scenes and writing this series was decided then. Really, how cannot I not like this calm and composed and rational guy? I wanted to write this series once I finished Grimm using AR again, but I could not stop myself using these two characters. They are fresh and somehow suited to the storyline I had in my mind more than AR.

And thanks for commenting! I have made some real close friends since I started blogging way back in 2004. Now they have become an integral part of my life so lets say that this series is kind of an ode to those relationships too. :-)

Will continue in couple of days!
Sookie

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Sookie

@-Sookie-

Voyager

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Posted: 15 years ago

#24

Originally posted by: aish_punk
Hey Sookie..nice FF..just read it..n i love ur way of writing!

So they both are poets..intresting..!

I wonder y Gunjan is always under the shadow of her sis?!..n i hope dey both manage to find comfort in this unknown place..atleast Uday is being nice 2 them..!

Those lines were really good..whatever both wrote..both were intimidated by each oda's words..n thats y wrote a comment..

Was Mayank flirting?!..wow..1st time..! ..but i like that..!..

thnx 4 d PM

update soon

-Aish

Hello Aish,

I think people get bolder and more honest behind a veil of secrecy. I am just exploring that aspect of people which includes Mayank and Nupur. In they end, they succumb to anonymity behind lame user names and raw poetry.
Glad you liked them!

Sookie

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ShwePoo

@ShwePoo

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#25

interesting concept.....do pm wen u update pls.....!!

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zoya

@tingtingteeding

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#26

hey awesome start

plzzzzzz add me to your pm list

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Bronze.

@Bronze.

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#27

hey just read the intro an part 1, i like the way its going... plz pm me when you update.

and unlike most of the replies,

I am a huge mayur fan.. In fact MJHT the only show i watch, and i watch it for mayur.. I find them very realistic and refreshing. am glad you are making an ff on them..

Thanks

Edited by Bronze. - 15 years ago

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simran1285

@simran1285

Inactive

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Posted: 15 years ago

#28

Originally posted by: Sookie*

Simran Simran Simran

Sajan? Really? I have skipped any scene which doesn't involve Mayank :-)
I find them boring with repetitive dialogues. The characters are shown to be very superficial at this point.
Besides, did I mention I like Mayank?

:-)

You're kidding I do the skipping with Mayur, Nupur is too obnoxious for me and Mayank is the ditto copy of my younger cousin everytime I see him I can't help but think of my brother😕

I will be reading this story solely on the basis of Emily Dickinson and plus I could always go back and change Mayur to AR...things that a "find/replace" tool can do!😉

P.S- will be back with my review once I am done reading

Edited by simran1285 - 15 years ago

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Posted: 15 years ago

#29

Sounds interesting!! Very different from all other FF's I've read so far and of course I myself haven't written anything like such. Too good, add me to your PM list. 😊

Love,
Kanky 🤗

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pickytg

@pickytg

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#30

Leaving my place of birth

to be in city of dreams.

Will this be my rebirth

or my awakening?

Ebb and tide

rise and fall

My chest on motion

and so is ocean

Hands in hair with sand "to-go"

Sands abandoned of human touch

we wait for darkness to devour

Shoulder to shoulder

I meet his height

Tear for tear

I meet his defeat

throat clamps

eyes well up

I am strong! I tell him.

he shakes his head,

hugs me close

that's when I know

in his mind

I am but a child.

heya!

Read yur pm yesterday but was kinda caught up with stuff so couldn't reply earlier...!! Honestly, i am not much of a "poet" ..i just do random versing...now and then..and hence i can't review !! i don't read poetry...never have..doubt i ever will..its a missing interest! :P

Wanted to know?...this writing....its your thing or u are just using it?

I am taking it to be yours...! It seems like your'e trying to rhyme it with a sketch scene in mind...but to me the paragraphs don't flow...:S

The first bit...leaving home to be in a new world..cant just be put down as re-birth..not directly atleast....and awakening? of what and how? I get the connection but its like ....lose ends...u know!

Even the rest of the stuff...like i said a scene u've placed..with a connection but its not clear...i couldnt construct one form it :S

If you've read my work you must have noticed....i usually write the most random things...just casually put together....mostly never a set structure or theme...but somehow it ends up to fit..and thats cause i dont intend to work on a known something...i have an idea in mind...and it just develops..and this one kinda seems like uve put a lot of thought to..and almost just thrown words together that might fit better if done in well formed sentences...u know where am getting at this...!

i have no intentions of discouraging you from this but like i said...i can't review...and i dunno if any of that stuff i said made much sense....but i get you're trying to get a grip on it..and its considerably nice :) ..

good try! u'll get a hang of it...and progess as you go along..

- nijaL

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