~Tere pyar ke nashe me~ Rajeev ff p-15 23/6 pg-54

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vvdn

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Posted: 15 years ago

#111

Beutifuly writen part.....excellent work Sur👏👏👏
Sur knew that Raj luvs her😲but wat was her past that stoping her...Raj's emotions r beutifuly shown.waiting for next part

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Priya

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Posted: 15 years ago

#112

pata hai main sach me ro rahi hun😭 😭 😭...baht ro rahi hun😭 😭 😭...par tum se gussa nahi hun...mujhe bass Raj aur Sur ka dard aisa laga jaise mujhe khud voh feel ho raha hai...😭 😭 😭!!! main baht royi😭 😭 😭...kahin na kahin aisa laga ki zindagi me jab kuch khaash kho jata hai...tab zindagi k mayne bhi kitne badal jate hain...!!! 😭 😭 😭

mujhe ehsaas hua Raj k dard ka...!!! jab sari khushiyan aap k behad kareeb ho...aur achanak se sab kuch cheen jaye...toh baht dard hota hai...!!! ek pal me hi zindagi badal jati hai...!!!😭 😭😭

dono hi ek dushre k liye dukhi hai...!!! sur ki past lyf me jarur aisa kuch hua hoga...jis ki wajah se voh aise hai...!!! par mujhe is part me Raj k liye rona aaya...!!! sayad aisi hi hoti hai zindagi...'ek pal me sab kuch hai...aur dushre hi pal me kuch bhi nahi'...!!!😭 😭 😭

pata hai yeh writer k hath me hota hai ki voh apne readers ko hassaye ya phir rulaye...!!! aur tum ne mujhe sach me rula diya...par main tum se naraz nahi hun...balke samne hoti toh main tumhe jarur hug karti...for dis beautiful ud...!!!🤗 🤗 🤗

yeh ek jhatka toh tha ki sur raj k feelings k bare me janti hai...par yeh mushkil tha...ki sur khud raj ko pasand karti hai...par apne past lyf se bahar nahi aa pa rahi hai...!!! voh raj ko miss kar rahi hai...phir bhi apne feelings se bhaag rahi hai...!!!😕

raj ka pain...us k emotions...us k feelings...apne ander sab kuch dabane ki puri koshish ki thi us ne...!!! par tumhari writing style ne mujhe us k sare dard mehsus ho gaye...aur main rone lagi...!!! vaise main baht kam roti hun...par kabhi kabhi rona achha bhi hota hai...!!!😭

par Raj toh India chala gaya na...aur Sur toh vohin rah gayi...!!! phir dono kaise milenge...???😕

mere fav scene tha last airport ka scene...!!! aur jab raj ne apne tears chupaye...aur sur se voh vaada bhi le liya...!!!👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

yeh jo bhi batain maine likhi hai na...voh ehsaas mere dil me tab aaya jab maine yeh Ud padha...!!! yeh ud baht touchy tha...aur sach me mere dil ko choo gaya...!!!

gr88888888888 job Sur...!!!👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

cont soon...plzzzz jaldi ud karna😃 😃 😃 😃 😃 😃

Edited by Lion_Priya - 15 years ago

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KrishnaSourav

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Posted: 15 years ago

#113

Superb part dear.U showed the emotions of raj very well.Continue soon dear.Thanks for the pm.

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Nisha

@dazzling_glory

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Posted: 15 years ago

#114

The update was very emotional but perfect.

You have potrayed both Sur and Raj's feelings so beautifully that i felt like crying....feeling the pain that both of them wer going through.

On hearing that Sur is married...raj feels as if his entire world has come crashin down. all of these days he had waited to ask Sur about marrying him so that they could spend the rest of their lives together. He was afraid that she might rrefuse but not once had he thought that faith had closed this possibility long ago.

He tries to be strong and restains himself from showing his true emotions. He knows that if Sur were to find out about his true feelings than he would lose her as a friend.

Sur is afraid about how raj would react but she is very happy to see that he still that same friend that he was before. She is touched when raj tells her that he wants Sur to promise him that she will always share her problems with him....after all that is what friends are for.

He is glad that Sur leaves the room to cook because he needs time to compose himself.He feels suffocated by his own pain and so he tells Sur that he will just go out and get somethings that he needs for the flight. He buys the perfect farewell gift for her...roses...he cannot help himself from adding a red rose in the center of all the yellow roses that he has bought for her,

They both enjoy the last few moments of his stay while they eat their food and are once again surprised to find how much their choices meet. And finally when he see tears in Sur's eyes when he days goodbye to her at the airport...he can no longer control himself.

once on the plane he finally breaks down feeling completely lost. Sur hates coming back to the empty appartment. She feels bad that she had husrt raj's feelings...because she knew that he has fallen in love with her. But has she done this? What is it that she has not told him?

Waiting to know what happens next. please don't keep them apart for too long. I hope that raj will not give up and will try and find out the whole truth. please do update soon...because it is very hard to wait.

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sania_58

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Posted: 15 years ago

#115

nice update

too good

very emotional

loved the update

great going

plz continue soon

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-serenity-

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Posted: 15 years ago

#116

Awesome part……..u described raj n surs feelings… their pain so beautifully…..n I felt like crying reading this part

Kitna khush tha raj pehle aur achanak sab kuch badalgaya…..Jab raj ne suna ki sur was married …….he felt shattered……..he don't want to show his true emotions to sur…..because he don't want to loose her friendship….

N sur is also not in a good state….she knows that raj loves her…n she felt bad for hurting rajs feelings…….eager to know what really happened in surs past

Good work sur

Plz update soon

Edited by Sanskruthi - 15 years ago

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Dhara Singh

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Posted: 15 years ago

#117

Hi Sur,
I just read this fic....I got to know about it coz galti se tumne mujhe PM bhej diya tha...But I love this fic...Its very nice....Pls update soon...!!!

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Sumi_162710

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Posted: 15 years ago

#118

Main kya batau ki mujhe kitna rona aa raha hai!!! My cutu Raj!!!!😭😭😭 The way u described his pain, my heart was aching....all the while I was just feeling I wish this wud end soon.....but alas....that was not supposed to be.

Waise why he called himself 'side hero'.....sirf iss kahani ka nahi....wo to har kahani me sirf hero banne k kabil hai....pata nahi hai kya usse?? And he was cyanide??? How cand he think of it??? Mera kya hoga??? In fact hum sab ka kya hoga???

And Sur had heard him??? And she intentionally hurt him....to keep him away from her....wanting to knw wat has happened to her....par chahe kuch bhi ho....mera Raj kitnaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa dukhi tha n usse dekh kar main bhi kitnaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa dukhi hu.😭😭😭

Pls Sur darling....jaldi se continue kar do.....waise part long to tha....lekin mujhe phirse 'happy days' wapas chahiye....isiliye pls try to continue soon.😃

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Vertika Srivastava

@Vartika07

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Posted: 15 years ago

#119

Nice start, mujhe humesha ki tarah late se mila topic.

Accha kiya ki is ko RA fic nahi banaya varna hum padh nahi paate aur heroine aap hi ban gayi finally (it's ok too).

Raj ka bro hai elder jis ki shaadi ho rahi hai that's nice.

Kya shaandaar kaam kiya hai na us ne aur aise maukon par bahi behan ye sab kaam hi karte hain to is me itna pareshaan hone waali koi baat nahi hai i think.

Apni hone waali wife k sang flirt to kar hi sakta hai na itna. Naina hi mile hogi na Raj ko i am sure.

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Vertika Srivastava

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Posted: 15 years ago

#120

Part 2 was also nice. 👏 👏 👏

Raj to flirty number one hai na n i got it right that the gal was Sur n she didn't tell him her name, but Raj ko bhi naam nikalwaana acche se aata hai na to Truth or Dare me hi nikalwa liya na janaab ne. Vishaal kitna impatient ho raha tha na engagement k liye isiliye us ne acche taunt maare the pandit jee ko. Nandini hi kya koi bhi vahan hota to us ko vahan. Raj ko naam pata chal hi gaya but all thanx to Nandini.

Par Sur k saath aisa kya ho gaya hai ki vo itne udaas rehti hai.............

Raj ne accha kaha tha.

Edited by Mahak Sinha - 15 years ago