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Posted: 16 years ago
omg omg!!dt was THE LAST THING I EXPECTED!!
did not c dis cumin at all kainath....ok..so lemme start..
as usual luvd neev...cud actually c neev watchin his mom applyin make n stuff wid interest n curiosity..very sweet n adorable...sonaliis damn cool ya!!lher sarcastic comments wer great...i reallly lik her equation wid mayank...
cmin 2 rv...he is sucha @#$?&%* i felt lik crushin his balls offwen he was assaultin nupur...bloody dog!(ok i knoe am getttin all workd up here but cant help it)
*calms down*
was on a high wen mayank thrashed him up...rv desrvd it!
nw my fav part...
d argument....d KISS!!!shit!!it blew my away...nd d scenes dt followed...wer 2 hot 2 handle..but i sumhw managed...lol!*fannin myslf* d passion,d intensity... god!!!!luvd d detailed description ya..dey wer D BEST!!*winks*
kainath...hw do u do it man??i mean hw can u cum wid such awesum updates evrytime??hw do manage 2 write so so so well...n express dem evn better!!hats off 2 u dear...u r truly gifted..*hugs*
waitin 4 next update as usual..
take care
-naina
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: lopli

Hi archieeps sorry i haven't left a review for the past 3 chapters i was bussy sorry for that. OMG i just loved this chapter well i sort of had the idea of what was gonna happen but it was quite different...i love your ff its so addicting. Anyways i love Mayank and sonali's talk it was cute........and how could Nupur fell for that jerk's reason to see the library.............it was a really nice part loved it.
I hope you update soon
Thanks for the great ff.😊



Hi dear, that's not a prob at all, I appreciate you reading this one and reviewing it :) You guessed it right? Good 4 u! ;) haha...and yes, Nups was really stupid to allow RV to follow her like that...but look what it lead to! lol....All's well that end's well I guess ;)
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Posted: 16 years ago
kainath....itna early update? i dint even get time to update on ur previous part..well...i have to rush now..so will come back and comment..till then...resserrved~

*Edit*
So sorry for not editing earlier. it's just that, i'm in year 10 now, so just loaded with studies you see. But now i'm finally editing :)

Okay, i think you know how i start off. I LOVE NEEV! lol.. Seriously, never have i been sooo attached to a character before. I'd love to see your neighbor and pull his cheeks since Neev is inspired by him na! Seriously, Neev is the most adorable child ever. And i know totally how young kids are so fascinated by makeup :)...i used to literally put lipstick all over my face when i was little.😆

Coming to the Soiree, I really liked it. But i felt bad for Nupur when she was being forcefully kissed by Rannvijay. Ugh, i hate him so much. But our hero Mayank finally reached on time. i'm thankful for that.

I wouldn't blame Mayank for yelling at Nupur at all. Any sane person would. And especially, since Mayank loves Nupur so much.

And the last part, it was HOT! It was filled with passion. It was amazingly described.

Overall, rocking part Kainath. please do continue soon..
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: falak01

ahaaahaa...so finally.......well starting with neev's cutest talks and his make-up,😳it reminded me my childhood,and i think most of the children r like this only,lip gloss fascinate them,and when they put it on,they feel yucky....😆😆

and there u go...one more good dialogue of neev,he is handsome not pretty.....😆..i just love him....😳😳
and wowieee...mayank is afraid of his child being converting into a girl...😆
the way mayank was staring at his wife,noticing all her curves,her beauty was sooo elgantly hottt....☺️
and what the hell that boody bas**** ranvijay did...😡😡😡
while reading ,the only thought came into my mind was "oh lord,save her!!!mayank plzzz save her"!!!!😳
and finally mayank came like a hero of hindi films and saved her,and puched him,ahaaa,ranvijay deserved a lot more...😡
but the best thing is dat,mayank showed his care towards his wife,...😳😳
and the next scenes were magical,romantic,passionate....oh lord falling short of words...☺️☺️☺️
for the first time,i blushed...yeah nidhi if u r reading,read it carefully...i blushed....so hard...oh god...☺️
their love and their desires were visible....😳☺️☺️
in short i just lovedddd ittttttttttttttt....☺️☺️☺️
well thanx 4 d detailed scene kainath....it was the hottessttt update ever,and i hope we will get to see many more like this....😳😳😳
yaar when i awoke,i got nidhi's msg,and just ran to read it,yeah now i have to go n take a bath,otherwise my mother will kick me out...😆😆
but we all waited for a romantic update but we got such a magically passionate update....i m speechless..👏👏👏
actually me n nidhi were discussing yesterday that mayan n nupur's thoughts r soo wild,so what will happen in the real scene....and we were like "it will be hawwtttttt"☺️
but its the hawtttteeeesssttt☺️☺️☺️
thanx 4 making my day dear....now i will read it as many times i can.....☺️☺️blushing n enjoying ur update dear.....
U R THE BESTTTTTTT!!!!!!!!👏
but i wonder what will happen next???i mean will they start fighting again or they will accept dat thay love ech other??well i think i shud wait for the next part...😃😃



hey, thanks a ton for the review! haha..and you're soo right - kids love experimenting with make-up and then eventually discarding them :) It's only natural...ahaha....

Mayank would of course check Nups out....she was looking beautiful that day....which then lead to several things, as you knw..haha...And about Ranvijay - my sentiments exactly! He should just be wiped out the face of this earth....but....dunno abt that yet ;)

HAha.....Mayank the filmy hero - now that I look back at it, I totally portrayed him as one! Oh well, what the heck.....haha

And the foreplay - LOL.....I completely understand. Like I said before, I needed to wash my face with cold water twice to regain composure....it was all just a tad bit too vivid...haha, glad you liked it though :) and how many more of these scenes u'll see? Well, frankly I have nooo idea...I havent even thought of what to write in the next chapter! lol... :)
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: myownarea

Lovely update, everything from Neev's makeup to Mayank & Sonali's conversation to Ranvijay to finally M&N together after 5 years. The intensity and passion were understandable because of how much the tension had built up in the 2 months and b4 that in the 5 years! also, they have amazing control and only something this drastic could have brought them together!
I'm looking forward to know what their reactions would be after this? 😊

Divya



Hey Divya! Thanks a ton for the review! Glad you liked the chapter ;) And you're 100% bang on - too much pent up tension between those two coupled with abstinence for soo long - this was bound to happen...haha ;)

About whether they'll be together, per say? Well, you'll just have to wait for the next chapter! :D
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Posted: 16 years ago
Oh gosh kainath, i am soo damn serious i needed to drink three huge glasses of water to breathe properly and comment man.
I am noticing my comments are getting way too lenghty hai na kainth. I don't know i just can't resist but give a longggg review man.
Coming to the update. Kainath maestro i bow down to your writing abilities, man man man, i deem myself to be totally and blindly in love with your writing skills and power like mad and never before. I have literally felt each and every emotion of each and every character, like neev, sonali, mayank and nupur soooo vividly, because of which i am still panting man.
Kainath i first of all loveddddddddddd neev's always inquisite mind thinking about makeup and it was soo adorable when neev asked and nupz even put up the pink makeup man. out of all the colours nupz had to put on pink makeup oh no hehe. I now how mayank must have felt and nupz idea in relation to neev's fascination for makeup to call him neela was sooo damn witty and hilarious man, totally totally loveddddddddddd it man.
I was soooo sure that nupz would be looking sooo hot man. I loveddddddddd the brief interaction between mum and mayur, that was soo sweet. Wow sonali is coming over and her being a member of a book club is the cherry on the top. Sonali is a very talkative girl and this would give her the extra element which is sure to even entertain the king or queen of boredom hehe.
I lovedddddddd the way mayank was admiring nupz for her wiittiness and for ahem ahen, well i agree mayank you sure have a very hot wife. The best part being that sonali caught mayank checking out on nupz.
I lovedddddddd the way mayank and sonali talked about nupz, old aunts and about erotic and romantic fiction hehe. I loved how mayank told him about their guys and why mayank couldn't get along with them.
I can't even tell you how glad i am to see that sonali turned down that ba****** Ranvijay Rathore. I just want to go and literally kill him, mayank should have hit him hard really hard, though i am sure he did man, but i am still so furious at Ranvijay, how dare he even touch or think of doing this to nupzzzz man.
The Ranvijay and Nupz interaction before the horrendous tour to the library was very well narrated and even later, nupz was thinking fine early on about something being wrong and mayank never introduced him. Ranvijay loser called mayank a roguee.
As soon as they entered the library, my heart started beating fast and when he trapped her and kissed her, i was sooo upset, i was jumping up and down with horror, disgust and anger man. How dare dare dare Ranvijay do that.
Thankgoodness mayank came man.i can't even tell you how mad i was for mayank leaving nupz alone and for nupz going alone with that sucker Ranvijay.
I lovedddddd the way nupz reacted after the terrible incident, sonali is a gem and mayank's anger was greatly well justified, but as usual he was really harsh, thankfully he accepted that man that also on his own.
i loveddddd the way you expressed mayur's emotions, mayank being of fear, anger, concern even loads of love and care which has always been there deep within his heart.
I lovedddddd nupz's mixed emotions as well man. I lovedddddddd how you showed that amidst the argument and fight, mayank kissed her and kissed her hard emanating deep love and uncontrollable passion and nupur reciprocated it.
i loveddddddd how you said that they both knew he was going to take her and take her hard man. I lovedddddddddd how you narrated their feelings and thoughts throughout man. I lovedddddd how she kept saying mayank and this was the music of the paradise for him man.
I have gotten carried away kainath, yet again. I loveddddddd the update, i am more than ever eager to read what happens next. So nupz is not ready to forgive him, i know man but its not only her, even he has suffered alot. I am sooo eagerly waiting for the next part. oh and neev would be back, what would they do.
One more thing i loveddddddd the part mayank bumped thrice while he was carrying nupz like that i, before finding the bedroom. The way they slept in eachother's arms in the end was alll sooo damn beautifully portrayed. Amaxing work kainath, please please please update soon man.
Edited by Senny - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: Bronze.

Wow...wow wow.... what a part...as i ve said before, it just keeps getting better and better...

Neev's facination with make up was so funny.. and mayank's reaction was funnier. neev becoming neela... 😆

sonali is great.. she just lighten up the mood whenever she is around.. she is one hell of a women.

You should be really proud of neev and solanli, as both of them are purely your creations (as in not in mjht) and are so strong as characters. they are two of the most entertaining characters. just love them.👍🏼

Ahh.. Ranvijay.. he is such a rat, a complete jerk, disgusting creep... sorry i just hate him so much.

loved mayank when he said "....touching MY wife" 😍

And coming to the final and best part.. oh god it was sizzling hot.
After 2 months of fight with themselves with after-shower thoughts and the so called forced public kisses....this was so passionate...
loved Mayank's " i really dont care" part. 😳

I somehow ve a feeling they are going to start distancing themselves from each other again.. feeling all embarrassed and confused.

Waiting for the next one.. you ve no idea how badly...






Hi! Thanks a ton for the review! :D The make-up bit was very fun to write - I was literally laughing my head off imagining Mayu's expression...haha....
And thanks a ton about the Neev and Sonali comment - those two would just lighten up any dull, bleak atmosphere! Complete opposite of RV of course, totally concur with you on that

BUT, this chapter is ALL about Mayur ;) Glad you like those....umm...scenes ;) I was soo flustered while writing it, I felt like Rashmi Walia who'd just walked in on them! LOL....and Mayank's I don't care part was actually my fav part out of the whole thing ;) shows how desperate he is for Nups ;) haha.....

And you've got a very interesting theory going on there :D well, you'll just have to see what happens next chapter! :)))
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Posted: 16 years ago
@Ranbir_Lekha and cool.sindhya

Thanks a ton for catching up on this FF! Really appreciate it :D I've already added you, so please read and review the next update! :)
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: naina_mayur

omg omg!!dt was THE LAST THING I EXPECTED!!

did not c dis cumin at all kainath....ok..so lemme start..
as usual luvd neev...cud actually c neev watchin his mom applyin make n stuff wid interest n curiosity..very sweet n adorable...sonaliis damn cool ya!!lher sarcastic comments wer great...i reallly lik her equation wid mayank...
cmin 2 rv...he is sucha @#$?&%* i felt lik crushin his balls offwen he was assaultin nupur...bloody dog!(ok i knoe am getttin all workd up here but cant help it)
*calms down*
was on a high wen mayank thrashed him up...rv desrvd it!
nw my fav part...
d argument....d KISS!!!shit!!it blew my away...nd d scenes dt followed...wer 2 hot 2 handle..but i sumhw managed...lol!*fannin myslf* d passion,d intensity... god!!!!luvd d detailed description ya..dey wer D BEST!!*winks*
kainath...hw do u do it man??i mean hw can u cum wid such awesum updates evrytime??hw do manage 2 write so so so well...n express dem evn better!!hats off 2 u dear...u r truly gifted..*hugs*
waitin 4 next update as usual..
take care
-naina



Hi Naina! Thank you soo much for reviewing! :D Lol...last thing you expected indeed! ;)

Neev is Neev - the cutest kid ever ;) and applying make-up is actually a natural tendency for kids! I know lots of lil boys too who've experimented with it! but of course, they'll only admit it over their dead body...haha...

And RV - crushing his balls is exactly what Mayank should have done...lol....I completely agree ;)

And the kiss and the aftermath of the kiss - glad you liked it! It was pretty hot wasnt it? lol...ive been telling everyone here, I had to go wash my face with freezing cold water twice to calm down...haha..I can hardly imagine your plight ;)

And thanks a lot for the last comment! Aww..I just try my best to entertain all of you amazing ppl :) good to know I'm suceeding! ;)
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Posted: 16 years ago
I think im hyperventilating... or im going to die in shock.
I asked for a fantasy and you gave much much much more...
Start was adorably cute... Neev wanted some lip-gloss and eye-shaddow.. haha.. i can imagine him prancing around in a pink saree, make-up.. and neela
hahaa... becahra mayank, i think he'd die of a heart-attack..
Who knew this spring soiree would play such a big part in the FF.. Sonali's interraction with mayank was sweet, it's kind of like a growing friendship. i can't imagine Sonali' as my childs teacher.. but i can imagine her as a friend.. i want my own sonali, i can just imagine the conversations that come up..
Ranvijay is a.. bas***d. I knew when he came up to Nupur something was fishy but then i was like who knows, Stupid for Nupur to fall into his trap. As they went upstairs at least a bit of sense came to him... the whole way you described this scene made me want to cringe.. not coz it was bad, just at how realistic it was and the fact it wanted me to punch him in the friggin face.
Mayank's entry very filmy style.. loved that little scene in the library with them, the possessiveness and mayank's feelings towards her really stood out.
The Apartment.. i LOVED it! Thank the heavens seriously.. it may not have happened at the time i imagined but the sexual tension finally took over. *i do a happy dance*
I could just imagine Mayank's passion, and Nupurs wall that she had built just break in front of her... the end was great.. the whole kiss on the mole.. ROMANTIC! i am melting.. it was steamy and hot and wonderful!!
Amazing writing once again Kainath, you get better with every single part. I LOVE THIS FF!
I am a big FF.. and .. please do cont soon..
i thought i was gripped to it b4.. now im entangled/stuck just like super glue to it..
Thanks for the PM
xxSonia

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