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Nice prologue and character sketch.
Naina is completely broken after Raj's death..you have shown her emotions and pain very appropriately.
Please continue soon. Sorry for replying so late
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thanks a ton dear!😊Originally posted by: Mahak Sinha
Hey awesome start dear,👏 👏 👏
Loved the way u portrayed Naina's grief n pain when she lost Rajveer n her feelings.😊 😊 😊 Everything is shattered and she has lost herself too in this.😭 😭 😭 She couldn't react as she was in a g8 shock n only Abhi knew how to bring her out from that dreadful shock.😭 😭 😭
Update soon dear.
Originally posted by: varshita
Hey good that u updated the fic.😊
Nice first part n i know it will take a sweet turn after that.😛
I really liked the concept that u shown Naveen's dead body fully burnt so may be he is still alive.😉
continue asap.
Hey nice start...!!! thanks dhara...
I like the fact that Naveen 's dead face was severely damaged...!!!! I see hope...!!!! arey...umeed pe duniya kayam hai 😉
Oh I felt bad for Abhi, having to say those words...!!!! yeah....parr usne jo galati ki Raj pe bharosa na karke😡....uski saza toh usko kaatni hai naa...
Cant wait for the next update...!!! well dear ur wait is over!😃
Pls PM me...!!!! yeah i'll pm u....and 4 dat ,plz add me to ur buddylist as multiple PM is available wid buddylist only and so that i'll pm u widout fail...i tried addin u but was havn some error...
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Originally posted by: dazzling_glory
Nice prologue and character sketch.
Naina is completely broken after Raj's death..you have shown her emotions and pain very appropriately.Please continue soon. Sorry for replying so late
Wahase unhe sidha bheja gaya maut ke muhme.....
Parr.... wahase bhi woh kamyab hokar laut rahe hai.....!
Woh Sameera ko bachane mein kamyab hogaye!!
.Ab woh sab laut rahe apne ghar.....
Haan..... apne doosre ghar,KMA!
who himself is weary and resting his head on the back of the seat while supporting pooja with his hand around her shoulders and her head resting on his shoulder.
He, though tired and injured himself, is right now comforting Sameera who is shaken by the whole incidence.....
Though ,while doing so, he is constantly glancing towards Naina ....his Phoolan.....every now and then .........
who is asleep ,but not FAST ASLEEP....and is assuring at regular intervals that every thing is well in the van following their Jeep....
who is injured too. and is sitting now between Yudi and Naina.
Alekh is lost in his thoughts.....
The pain of injury is nothing in front of pain he undergoing seeing his Sister,his only family in such a condition.
His Grief of losing Rajveer sir is nothing in front of Naina's.
Alekh is patting her head affectionately......He always used to do it while consoling her.....
Now-a-days he does it more often.......but,these days,even his eyes flowed while he tried to soothen her....
Like Ali said, " Alekh baba ko sab pata hota hai!"
He was always like this.....talks less and observes more.
An expression that pierced Abhi's heart.....
That lost expression in her eyes is tearing him apart.
He has now understood,that somewhere he is responsible for her state.....
That somewhere........
His guilt is tearing him apart.......
He knows that he can't find complete solace......
Not complete solace ......As Raj has went on a journey from where there is no return.......
But now...... ....he is not sure whether....whether he can find some relief atleast ....
As it depends on Naina forgiving him.......
As it depends on His, or rather Raj's cadets forgiving him....
Which he knows is difficult in case of other cadets.....
But..... impossible in case of Naina.
He knows ....that Naina hates him......
Naina.....She was the only person Abhi had befriended after Naveen and Raj.
Their friendship had begun coz she was Naveen's sister ,but later
Abhi started respecting and admiring Naina as a person.
And now....he has lost his only friend.....He has lost Naina, cause he knew she will never forgive one responsible for Raj's plight....
How could he do that to Raj?
To His best friend?
How couldn't he sense that the history was being repeated?
That whatever happened with Naveen was happening with Raj?
Why did he took false pride in going by duty and did not believe in him?
'Jealousy.....yes it wasn't Envy....',thought Abhi, 'It was jealousy!'
Naah..I rejoiced in his success!
Aren't I?' , he himself wasn't sure.....He began pondering over the possible reasons for his folly....
becauseRaj was the second best pass out and not him?
because Raj was more close to Naveen and not him?
becauseRaj was the love of whom he loved?
because Raj was the one whom Naveen found worthy of taking his life and not him?
because Raj progressed much ahead in Naveen's case and not him?
because Raj was closer to Naina , also in hatred, than him?
because Raj was the Favourite of the cadets and held special place for them and not him?
because Raj was closest to Naina once the misunderstanding cleared........
may be.... Naina loved Raj......
Naina LOVED Raj???
The last thought increased his guilt beyond limits.....
He had always seen some unexplained emotion for Naina in Raj's eyes.....
And now when he felt Raj's feelings being reciprocated by Naina.......
He was guilty of one more thing now..... separating two lovers....
He was disgusted with himself.....
He always felt Raj exaggerated his trust in Cadets , but now he understood that these six are worthy of it.
Because.....because, their trust in him remained undeterred even in worst of circumstances....
with that one word zillions of memories came flashing to him.....
Some good....some bad....
Abhi's lips bore smile at the thought of Raj and his eyes had tears because of his own guilt....
Too good!!!!!Awesome!!!!!!
The cadets are now returning to their second home KMA!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊
The jungle and the night was very well described!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏 👏
Pooja is resting her head on Ali's shoulder!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳
Sahi kaha that Ali understood her the most and handled her temperment very well!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊
Yeh Huda Sameera ko comfort karte huye bhi Naina ko dekh raha hai!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒 😒
Ab toh sudhar jaaye yeh abhi bhi Naina ke peeche pada hai!!!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡
Yudi is worried for Aalekh and Huda as they are injured but is now calm as they are alright!!!!!
Naina is still lost and only Aalekh can understand her and give her all the support!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊
He knew that his grief of losing Rajveer Sir is nothing in front of Naina's!!!!!!
Aalekh is patting Naina's head affectionately!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊
But he knew that nothing in the world is going to soothe her except Raj who is the reason of Naina's grief!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭
Aalekh knows just as he always knew everything!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊
Abhimanyu is observing Naina and understood that somewhere he is responsible for her state!!!!!
I loved the way you portrayed Abhimanyu's mind and his feelings!!!!!👏 👏 👏 👏 👏
Abhimanyu knew that Naina hates him and will never forgive him!!!!!!
The main reason for his behaviour with Raj was jealousy!!!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒 😒 😒 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡
I knew from the start that he was jealous of Raj as he was so popular with the cadets and not Abhimanyu!!!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡
Abhimanyu hi Raj ke tabahi ka zimmedar hai!!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡Uske so-called principles ki wajah se yeh sab kuch huya!!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡
Finally Abhimanyu is realizing the reasons for his jealousy!!!!!! 😔 😔 😔 😔
He is right that Raj was closer to Naina even in hatred than him!!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊
He finally realized that Naina loved Raj and he felt guilty of separating two lovers!!!!!
I can never forgive Abhimanyu kyunki sirf uski wajah se Raj is not in Naina's world anymore!!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭
But I am sure soon Raj will be back for his Naina and love her more and more!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳
Author's Note: Based on the Prompt by @heavenlybliss in Submit Writing Prompt Thread who requested for writing: Person A's gets alliance of...
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