Adolescence of Love - Chap15/Pg136 (11/29)

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Sunaina

@SunainaTM007

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Posted: 15 years ago

#391

heyyyyyyy nj !!!!!!...

that was one awesome update... and it really soothed my nerves... and ur writing just relaxes me more than anything, maybe even the Wind T also wouldnt have done such a good job at my nerves :)

okay...now coming back...

RM...hmmm...i really like them... rahul the more mature, quiet of the two...muski ranting away her palns and rahul's first initiative during the whole convo...the way he recalled those moments n muski getting consumed in her thoughts... it was really well penned :)

armaan...his thoughts..his questions..his frustration, reactions... everything was realistic and sooo well penned... and could actually feel as if it was happening right before my eyes... "she had come"... whenever he said that line, he was really cute...

nikki and muski... their conversation was a bit different but again amazing...both of them trying to help eachother's and their own confused thoughts...muski being upset thinking that she might never be good enough for him and nikki making the moment light by her comparisons and lines...that girl is something :D

the girls teasing nikki...that is something, which is soo much fun...

AR...well not directly, as riddhima thought she was talking to abhi... her uncertainity abt the voice...his jealousy... and his idea of a prank to know what she feels abt him...and ridz unknowingly giving armaan many details abt her feelings... armaan's mood having a sudden upliftment...and his and abhi's light fight was damn good :)

an extremely well penned part...

awaiting nikki's b'day...

continue soooooooooooooon :D

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Qwerty123rty

@Qwerty123rty

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Posted: 15 years ago

#392

~reserved~
I'll update this i have no idea when coz as of now i have another project to submit and updates to write...will catch up with the prev parts and comment asap..

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Reine

@Reine

Rocker

Posted: 15 years ago

#393

NJ!

I was so waiting for this part!

I dunno what to comment as I am not in a right state of mind right now, but overall, I totally enjoyed the part.

I like RM. Its nice to see Muskaan trying to think about their relationship.

AR were superb, as always. Though it wasnt direct, the convo. was so like them. I wanna see what happens when Riddhima finds out about 'Abhi'.

I just love the bond btwn Riddhima-Muskaan-Nikita and Armaan-Abhimanyu! Their parts always interest me, specially their witty retorts and light hearted banters!

One more thing that I liked was Armaan's take on Riddhima coming to the party. Though at first I too thought he was gonna go bonkers, on second thoughts, I was reminded of your love for creating unique situations. LOL. I have always wondered at the way you make a simple and common situation so different.

So, all in all loved the update. Hope the next one comes sooner, else you'll have to add another to your list of pesterers. not that I dont pester you now, but its just a pm or two. hope you dont wanna get more of those ;P

And yeah, not that I have to say this everytime, but incase you have forgotten, do pm me.

Sakshi

P.S: I hate having to edit these 'nbsp' s!

Thanks for the idea though!

Edited by kash fan4ever - 15 years ago

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@spln

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Posted: 15 years ago

#394

pending replies from part7 (if i missed someone who updated comments and i didn't get back to, im sorry... shall definitely reply with greater decorum now on!)

@ simran : i know cramped time and hours, ask me :S ... glad u enjoy reading the fic nonetheless simi, would be wonderful to hear from u, even if occasionally, but take it easy!

@smriti : glad as much as u and more that u could comment! :) and i did read u saying it was on ur birthday yayyy me! :P aite, about the bits, the nitty gritties, to be honest, im not having to search much on that account, engin, delhi, north indian stuff... if i fail my facts there, i really should quit! still, its always something to look forward to, to have one of u point out li'l things... the AR bit specially the lady bug hit well i suppose, i daresay lady buy was the show stopper :P (that when armaan exists, so much for malik charms!) about ur doubt on ridhima seeing flashes of him... i absolutely place space with ur analysis with how far in her mind things between armaan n her are... it is exactly the way u state it... however, ridhima, as i have attempted is the kind who gets besotted with preoccupying issues, whether it was RM not telling her (wherein she went as far as spying, forgot about armaans invite until nikki mentioned and bla) or whether its this whole deal with armaan now... somewhere i think that trait is personal to me, i get those obsession issues with weird trivial things in life... the fact that she dreams of random stuff that in some way links to armaan, her subconscious has a knack to stay persistent till she resolves what she gets obsessed with... do i make sense??? it was, simply in that liue, yes! nothing of the LOVE spark yet ;) we'll take our time around with that! ... its more of the girl meet boy n get along almost too well for 2 times scenario, where inevitably obstructions have brought both of them in their own spots to think too much... love, is only on late cards! glad u like AA and AN ... n sumit :P lets see! thanks for the detailed analysis hun, looking forward to the next, already!

@shivani: yayyy! ur here! hugs! its always awesome to hear back from readers i knew from perfect imperfection :D engin isn't a link hard to relate to if ur anywhere in the league doesnt matter where and what! abhi wanted to see LSR badly, cause of just the guy thing to watch the hip girls' college perform... LSR is huge for any delhi IITian, u have to agree! it just so happens they are armaan n abhi in the fics, in general, i'd never advice u dating iit guys :P (ps: no offense anyone, i have thick buddies from the same place, this is a GENERAL caution notice!) sumit, is going to unravel in his time... on the whole, glad ur enjoying shall look forward to more comments from u shivani!

@desire, @urvi @sanju_veni thanks for the comments! hope u enjoy reading on!

@ prerna: thanks for the comments hun, dont bother with delays! as far as guessing the future parts, im always at it myself :P

@sakshi: thanks for reading, n yes i had posted that one in time... actually keeping nijal's word i posted 8 too yayy! n i saw u commented there... glad ur enjoying the flow as it comes so far... shall update, sooner, hopefully!

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desire_20

@desire_20

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Posted: 15 years ago

#395

gr8 update... loved d whole AR convo.... update soon n thnx for d pm

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fnaDMG

@fnaDMG

Beginner

Posted: 15 years ago

#396

Love love love LOVE the RM chemistry. Armaan, as usual, is one hell of a charmer, even as someone else! Can't wait for the party! I'm hoping to feel the sparks fly off the screen! Great part! :)

p.s. I didn't expect Nikki to be this perceptive! Her character seemed way less mature to me. But then, people rarely behave like you expect them to...

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@-Aria-

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Posted: 15 years ago

#397

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"Yup! She got her maid to clear up the place... "

"Shakuntala... "

this felt so natural..you know how we react sometimes..

Later when Ridhima moved in with us in Mumbai the family stayed on to look after the house

"I am in my room," Muskaan clarified, puzzled, then blew at the mug held close to her lips again. And realized. "Uh!... Oh!" she uttered in self comprehension replacing the cup carefully on her desk,

"More coffee?" he muttered with a teasing disdain, yes why do people hate coffee so much!

and you were saying something about not being too descriptive? parts of the ff, i was literally visualising...the armaan walk in the tunnel springs to mind at that observation. Not to get away from what i wanted to tell you, this is the longest bit i have ever read of rm anywhere and thats huge for me. its a compliment :D to you, i actually enjoyed their bit in the end now that i think of it. i've pasted some lines that stuck our for me..for different reasons..i wont get into them at this point. but it still re-affirms my belief that rm are boring, no offence to rm fans.😛

my favorite part- was the CHICKEN part.😆that was classic and at that point i wanted to get into your ff and ask armaan if he could think of something similar for riddhima. but our dude's still figuring out so much in his head..and you were saying you are not being descriptive, jeej the only thing you left undescribed is the sound you make when you step on fallen leaves when you walk on them- and as armaan was walking way past midnight, the sound would be amplified multiple times. 😆so what if my examples here are a lil'crazy?😆you were doing an amazing job with his thoughts in there, i was like, nj are you actually inside his head at this point..and you know what came to my thoughts when i was reading the ff again a while back, imagine jumping off a bridge- the fall vs the perpetual fall, slow and you spread your wings as you fall which one is this? 😆i wanted to use other words to descrbie my pov here but your credentials scared me. from using engg terminology..😆getting back to armaan- anyways. i felt it was the latter for him and i wanted to jump in and shake him up inside the tunnel and scream at him- yes she came!! may be i picture armaan dribbling a bb and trying to sort his thoughts...all this walking in the tunnel...was def different...dont get me wrong, i didnt think he would jump up in joy once he bolted the doors but this side to him was new in many respects ..and after all that thinking and rationalising, but its funny how we all do that at times leave things inconclusive in the end, armaan seems a goner already and yet you wrote somewhere love will follow late.. their last bit was cute- and i am looking forward to see how ridz reacts when she gets to know of the little fun armaan had at her expense, it will be worth to see...all in all, this part was sooo worth all the pestering.😃

and before i stop, this post which seems to be getting long, you won't believe when i say i've had to fight multiple battles to get here and finally comment. and even now..there is something else pending. least i stayed away from reserving 😉

cheers,

aria

Edited by olive_green - 15 years ago

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topsyturvy23

@topsyturvy23

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Posted: 15 years ago

#398

hey great update loved it thanks for pm

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Ankita.S.Mansharamani

@moda.vintage

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#399

Okay now I am so really sorry about not commenting!I got my exams running!Btw I read all the parts,and I juz didn't wantd to reserve the post knwng that I wont b able to comment.My sincere apologies,but my exams get over by 10th and then u'll be loaded by comments on all the chaps i missed on commenting!Oh and a li'l stn-AWESOME UPDATES!
Toodles,
Anki:)ta