FF: [SG] Dare You To Move- Last Part P.143 - Page 113

Originally posted by: Lipsa_mjht

Hey mimi !! Heya Lipsa!

I'm first !!! *dances* *Takes out my school umbrella and with it dances ,jumping on bed* 😆 😆

LOL *joins you* HAHAHAHAHHI cant believe it.You updated 😲.Just when I was sure you wouldn't😲.

See, I'm full of surprises na? 😃😆

Ok.I tell you this update was (and still is) the most awesome+lovely+greatest+mind-blowing+superb+fantastic+fantabulous+Breathtaking+sentimental+marvellous+wizard+Well worth the wait+bestest+excellent+wonderful+smashing+incredible+first-clss+grand+super+outstanding+peerless+aced+unsurpassed=crams the dictionary for more words 😆 + falls dead on spot.

AWEEHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!! Sweetheart that means so much to me *cries* that's like.... one of the sweetest most friendly word equations I have ever seen! ASTHUUUU-dekh! lol we're not alone! 😲😆This FF was a dear to all of us too.And we'll miss it too.I had asked if there will be a sequel.But now I guess not.

Aweeh yaar, don't get me all emotional now na... this FF was closest to my heart and it will always stay that way. I don't think a sequel will ever match up to an original you know? It won't be te same... some things just can't be recreated.

this si really the most prized update till now.the emotional scenes.the confession scenes and the relationship scenes were describled awesomely.

thank you so much babes! :)

Now for the update in detail 😆 hahaha

'Never in these nineteen years have the Units attended any of my school functions. Not on the first day of preschool, not during the parent-teacher conferences, and not even on graduation day. So what's so special about a damn play?'

Firstly I loved the comparision of parents to units. it was thoughtful. This line is Great.It carries many emotions.That fact brought tears. Aweeehh! *hugs*

'See, the thing with the Units is that they're words are always written on stone, meaning that what they say goes. There's a certain command in their tone whenever they speak, one of those 'chill down spine,' ones.'

This is right ! Parents always do that.that moment.it's just too great to describe. I agree.

Those parental lines and that conversation was heart-touching.You went deep down the feelings of a lovedeprived 19 year old boy and described them very beautifully.The words ,The pain..All was very well described and wetted my eyes.Kudos for that.

AWWWWWWWWWW!! I'm so glad you thought so. It was probably one of the hardest parts about writing this fic. To show someone being deprived of parental love... esp. when you're not used to it you know? I tried to make it as real as it could get, but there's only so mcuh I could do since I don't live that way.It really is suffocating if parents dont remember birthdays.It is them who gave birth and arrgh. 😆 LOL I know yaar.

'She touches my face, and for that one millisecond, I forget all those years that I've craved for that reassuring touch. I forget all those years I looked out the window, hoping that they'd make it home in time for dinner. All I can feel now is the warmth of a loved one. The warmth of... my mother.'

These lines melted me. These are awesome lines and very very touching. Mother's Warmth *sighs* It wasnt too cheesy na? lol

And the lines describing Gunjan are awesome too.They depicted So great.Lovely. Thanks!

And I loved the way you introduced this FF's title and that made him realize.too cute <33

hahaha it came to me like... suddenly! 😆

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Gunjan-Those Gun-nup-papa scenes are awesome.her papa seemed to haveknown something about her.I love that line.Cause parents do often know whats happening before we realize it ourselves. *nods head*

And that Nups giving that bracelet was real touching.It portrayed a perfect symbol. 😊 Thank youu!

'Di puts her hand to my cheek. "You can't even imagine how proud I am of you. And don't think it's just because of this play, no- I've always been proud of you. You're my ray of sunshine Gunjan, and the way you hold yourself together through everything... even I couldn't do that. You're the strongest and bravest person I know, and I know that whatever decision you take in life... it'll take you to greater highs. But, I am your big sister, so I want you to always think twice before whatever you do... but most importantly, follow your heart. Your heart is never wrong Gunjan, never." '

The touching-est line in the part.It was awesome and immediately remindied me of my couin sister.She's just like nupur and guides me whenever she comes home.This line was great ! That's a big sister for you =)

and those Gunjan imagining samrat lines were good too.

And samrat missing.I thought only he must have been somewhere like To make a dashing entry =)) lol awwww

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The confession was great ! i wanted it to happen like this in the show too.me too! The actual confession was a total let downbenji is a great friend.LOL I only added him in for IQ's sake 😆 we got our fake BenJan moments😳😆The confession ! haila mein mar jawan.This was great and the feelings we greatly described !Perfect.I want you to be the creative of MJHT *wails* AWWWW! LOL I'd be kicked outta the country if I ever directed a show😆

It was seriously a lovely confession When he 'I love you Gunjan' ,I could imagine Gunjan's perplexion and her turning.Everything was great.I litterally shouted YES !! 😆 😆

HAHAHAH AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW

' Gunjan means going back to being the old Samrat. No Gunjan means no more complications. No more hiding, no more lying. No Gunjan means everything going back to normal.No Gunjan means no more being myself. No more happiness...no more genuine smiles. No more cooking meals to impress her, no more using the "car" excuse to walk her home, no more watching her expressions when she's nervous, no more bike rides...No Gunjan means going back to before. I don't want that. '

This line is very romantic :).I wish samrat had said this to gunjan in hindi ,a little alteration here and there. I tried yaar, but me+Hindi=scarred for life 😆 For my first fic, I had a personal translator, but she's busy these days 😆

And that teethy smile I rolfed.🤣.And that teasing.I really rolfed. HAHA Im glad it made you laugh 😛

And the play audience is toooo cute for words. Imagine seeing a live confession.and I love taam maam too. HAHAHA I know yaar!

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Spring dance---

Uday and taam-So sid is their son 😆 😆 😆 .I always wanted that.They make such a cuteee Couple.I always wanted uday to be a little sensible too :) *sighs I know

And mayank and Nupur .glad you atleast told their Story :).It was sweet I wish I could've added more MN moments... but oh well. Next story will be all theirs 😃

And benji-sheena.I would dread that in real.But it's cute in your ff knowing that sheena is good :) LOL yaar it was SO painful 😆 I didnt even want Sheena in the fic..dont ask why I added her in

And samrat-Gunjan i rest my case. hahah

I loved the teasing and that mention of the beutiful girlfriend made me go awww. AWWW!

That dia-Rv thing was cute too.I loved The way Gunji was cioncerned for her.Rv was royal and phunny 🤣 🤣 LOL I actually loved the RD bit 😆 I could so imagine Dia trying to act all strong.. but RV coming to her rescue *dreamy face*

And the dance.i want one for SG I demand one....I loved the way you described it !but was taam maam seeing them??😕😆 LOL when I was writing the fic, I wanted it to be told through Tam's perspective, but then she wouldn't know what really went on. So I guess it's kinda creepy how she knows all these details..but play along 😆

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It was a great.I'll miss ur ff *gets emotional* But I say You have done a pretty great job.I love it.And I cant tell you haw I love this FF AWWWW LIPSA *cries* Im gonna miss all of you readers! I was so attached to this fic and to all of you... it's gonna be hard saying goodbye. Thank you so much for sticking around and making this FF so successful!

Ps.I think I HAVE written a LONG comment.So you better reply to it 🤣 🤣 🤣

I have..a month later, but YAY?

~Lipsa

Originally posted by: Anhdara13

*reserved*

Well worth the wait! I shall, again, be back to edit this. It's not like there's another update after this to worry about. 😆

*edited*

You know, truthfully, in the beginning, when I started reading this (sometime when you were on your seventh or eight part I think), I wasn't so sure about how I'd take to this. The mixture of first point of view, switching points of view, and script style of writing and narrative style really threw me for a bit. But taking your story into account, taking the emotions and the style and everything, it worked. And how it worked.

I fell in love with this Samrat and Gunjan you wrote sometime in the fourth part I think. Not at first, at first, I was clutching my head in agony over the colour changes. 😆 I jest, but really, you wove magic with this story Mimi, completely and utterly ensnaring me to a style I had never thought I'd like, but it just goes to show that some writers can make you fall in love with something you'd never think to try otherwise.

Radz...I honestly don't know what to say to that. I know that the POV thing caused a lot of turmoil for a lot of you- it confused me up until the fifth part too and I was writing it. But what you just said is getting me all teary eyed. I'm just so glad that you stuck to this FF....regardless of how crappy it was. You being a writer... really yaar, I don't know what to say...and how to express myself. I'm so happy that you-being a MN fan- actually liked and read an FF based on the "other" couple. Thank you Radz, really, it means the world to me. *cries*

And then you made me wait three months, three long and agonising months for an update. Not just an update, but the last update, the finale, the wrapping up of this little masterpiece. I was ready to kill you. Just so you know, the fact that I stalked you should prove that. I only do that for a certain number of people.

I'm SORRY! I've said that about 92489025908508908 times. lol ab toh forgive me na yaar 😆 and I dont think I can ever forget the stalking 😳 that shall be etched into my mind for years to come. haha

It was worth the wait though. This ending was nothing short of perfect. Oh hush, it wasn't even close to perfect.Taking too many words, analysing to death the scenes you've written would spoil the afterglow of coming to the end of such an enthralling piece. I'm pulling out the big words, it should show you how much I love this. AWWW! I'm going to go get a dictionary right now 😳 haha joking. But RADZ! Stop it now...seriously! I'm so glad you liked it!

I knew it was Tamanna telling the story! Since the beginning, I knew it! Didn't I mention that on the maibn page 😲And I knew she and Uday would work out in this story. Personally, I'm more of a CJ-Uday fan, but this was cute. OMG I LOVE CJ AND UDAY *cries* I miss them! The reason behind Tammy's character was because before her entry in MJHT, there were articles about a 'play' and a new 'drama teacher.' As soon as I read that, I started to get this little vision in my mind. When I saw Uday and her scene, I knew that I had the 2 perfect characters.And you brought Dia-RV together here. Why am I not surprised? 😆 But I like the RV you've penned down, so I'll let it slide.

LOL *blushes* I still believe that one fine day, RD will unite. 😃

Can I just mention that I love the sisterly moment between Nupur and Gunjan? Im so glad that you did😳And the confession, on stage? I loved that he said her name. If he'd just said 'I love you', it would never have clicked that he meant Gunjan and not Khushi. And no one really cared that at the conclusion of the play, everything changed no? 😆 It became the love story of two people, not two characters. But it was so romantic. *sigh* The things he said, all straight from the heart. And then a rain dance! *squeal*

Okay I want to give you a standing ovation for that bolded/blue line.... DAMN IT! If I had thought of that one liner when writing the fic, it'd be so amazing. *sighs Oh well. But that's exactly it! In the end, it didn't matter what they thought everyone would think of them. Samrat let go of that image and did what his heart knew was write- and that was accepting that he was in love with someone who he had never imagined he'd fall for.

You're writing a new FF anytime soon? When you do, PM ME! Uhmm... no, I don't plan on it😆 but if I do, I will most definately send you a PM😃

It was a wonderful story Mimi, a wonderful piece of work. Keep writing. 😉

Thank you Radz! Thank you for sticking with this FF... and I'm so sorry for the late reply- see I wasn't avoiding you, I wanted to surprise you with this! 😃😆 and I'm almost done reading ur fic and Im writing my comment on word so that I can post it all in one go😃 I HAVENT FORGOTTEN!

Love,
Radz

Originally posted by: jenny1000

FINALLY.. The most awaited FF has an ending and what an ending....

The end was beautiful. I had tears in my eyes. WHY couldn't the confession be like this.. I love you Gunjan, my heart melted..

Brillant work yaar! Hoping for the next FF soon!!