IZHAAR-a short new ff on (RN):IMP:NOTE:ON:29.

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Posted: 16 years ago
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IZHAAR

Hii everybody i am priti and this is my first ff on rajveer and naina, the most loved onscreen couple of left right left, i hope u all will enjoy this short ff of mine, and will also give ur valuable comments too. so here goes the first part.
PART 1
Yeh kahani wahan se shuru ho rahi hai, jahan par naina rajveer ko gift deti hai, aur rajveer bhi naina ko apni ghadi deta hai, aur woh dono apne-apne individual missions par ravana ho jaate hain, lekin yahan par raj aur naina dono ke hi missions cancel ho chuke hain, aur sab log including rajveer bhi kma wapas aa chuka gai sahi-salamat.
rajveer apne room mein enter karta hai, aur woh kaafi pareshaan aur tension mein hai woh jaakar sofe par baithta hai, aur apne mann mein sochta hai.
RAJ-(to himself)-aisa kaise ho sakta hai, jagah toh wahi batayi thi, magar wahan par toh koi bhi nahin tha, kahin mujhe koi bhatkaane ki koshish toh nahin kar rah hai.
raj isi soch mein dooba rehta hai, ki tabhie uske door par knock hota hai.
RAJ-come in.
aur naina andar aati hai, raj sofe se uthkar khada ho jaata hai, aur naina ko chaunk kar dekhta hai.
RAJ-cadet singh, tum yahan kya kar rahi ho? tumhe toh abhimanyu aur baaki ke cadets ke saath mission par hona chahyiye tha na.
NAINA-lekin sir, yeh sawaal toh main bhi aapse kar sakti hoon, ki aap yahan par kya kar rahein hain.
RAJ-(seriously)-yeh mere sawaal ka jawaab nahin hua cadet singh.
NAINA-sorry sir.
RAJ-u better be, and anyways tell me the truth.
NAINA-sir if u don't mind toh kya main baithkar bata sakti hoon.
RAJ-yes cadet singh u may sit down.
NAINA-(smile karte hue)-thanky sir.
RAJ-ur welcome, ya tell me now kya hua?
naina rajveer ki taraf ek tak dekhe jaa rahi hai.
RAJ-naina....naina.....
NAINA-haan....aham....yes sir, woh kya hua kiiii.......
RAJ-kiiii........
NAINA-kiii......woh sir thoda sa paani milega plzzz.
RAJ-kiiii.......woh......kya, paani? haan milega.
aur itna kehkar raj paani lene jaata hai, aur naina ek lambi saans chodti hai, aur raj ko hi dekhti rehti hai, tabhie raj paani lekar naina ke paas aata hai.
NAINA-thanky sir.
RAJ-hmmm....
tabhie naina dekhti hai ki raj ek plate sandwich aur ek cup coffee, bhi naina ke saamne table par rakhta hai.
NAINA-sir yeh sab kya hai?
RAJ-well u see cadet singh, this one is called sandwich, and here is one cup of coffee for u.
NAINA-lekin sir iski koi zaroorat nahin hai.
RAJ-atithi devobhava! cadet singh.
NAINA-kya sir?
RAJ-chodo jaane do, ab aap kripa karke apni baat kehne ka kasht karengi.
NAINA-jii sir woh main yeh kehna chahti thi ki, humara mission cancel ho gaya.
RAJ-magar kyun?
NAINA-well sir, woh ton nahin pata.
RAJ-ok, anyways, kuch aur bhi kehna hai tumhe cadet.
NAINA-jii nahin.
RAJ-ok.
NAINA-jii mere kehne ka matlab tha ki kuch poochna hai aapse.
RAJ-so what are u waiting for, poocho.
NAINA-(hichkichate hue)-sir woh........woh aapko meri gift kaisi lagi?
raj jo ki apne liye coffee bana raha hota hai, naina ka sawaal sunkar, uski taraf dekhkar kehta hai.
RAJ-gift? kaunsi gift?
NAINA-(in a slow voice)-aap itni jaldi bhul gaye sir, aaj subah hi toh maine aapko di thi.
raj jo ki tension mein naina ke gift ke baare mein bhul gaya hota hai, achanak se use subah ka inci dent yaad aata hai, aur woh naina se kya kahe use kuch samajh mein nahin aata hai.
NAINA-sir aapne meri baat ka jawaab nahin diya.
RAJ-naina actually woh main...........
NAINA-koi baat nahin sir shayad aapko mera gift pasand nahin aaya, main bhi kitni pagal hoon na sir, bina kuch soche-samjhe aapko.........
RAJ-nahin naina tum............
NAINA-it's ok sir main ab chalti hoon, and i am sorry agar maine aapko disturb kiya ho toh.
aur itna kehkar naina wahan se chali jaati hai.
RAJ-naina wait, listen to me..............naina........ruko naina meri baat toh suno.
naina jo ki corridoor mein bhaagi-bhaagi apni hostel ki taraf jaa rahi hoti hai, achanak beech mein raaste mein aalekh se takraati hai.
AALEKH-naina tu kahan jaa rahi bhaagi-bhaagi?
aur itna kehkar woh naina ka haath pakadkar use rokta hai.
NAINA-plzzzz aalekh mera haath chod de, aur mujhe jaane de.
AALEKH-nahin pehle apun ko bata ki baat kya hai?
NAINA-koi baat nahin hai aalekh bas mujhe jaane de.
aalekh naina ko apni taraf turn karta hai aur dekhta hai, ki naina ki aankhon mein aansoon bhare hain.
AALEKH-naina tu ro rahi hai, kya baat hai? kisi ne tere se kuch kaha kya? naam bata bas tu uska, apun uski watt laga dega.
NAINA-nahiiin, kisi ne mujhse kuch bhi nahin kaha hai.
AALEKH-kahin us muchchad ne toh kuch nahin kaha.
NAINA-tujhe ek baar mein baat samajh mein nahin aati hai kya, meri aankhon mein kuch chala gaya hai, bas isiliye.........
AALEKH-isiliye tere dono aankhon se mote-mote aansoon beh rahein hain.
NAINA-tujhe jo samajhna hai samajh, ab main jaa rahi hoon.
AALEKH-thik hai, phir apun rajveer sir ke paas jaata hai, aur unko toh pata hoga hi, ki unki naina ko kya hua hai?
NAINA-nahiiin.
AALEKH-kyun? ab tu toh mujhe kuch batane waali hai nahin, bache rajveer sir, toh apun toh unhi se hi poochega na.
NAINA-nahin ruk main batati hoon.
AALEKH-ab aayi na tu line par, jai ho rajveer sir ki.
NAINA-lekin yahan nahin, canteen mein chal wahan batati hoon.
cut to rajveer's room, jahan par naina ka diya hua gift dhoondne mein laga hua hai, magar laakh koshishon ke baad bhi, use woh gift kahin par bhi nahin milta hai, aur woh thak- haar kar bed par late jaata hai, bed par padte hi maan, use apni peeth par kuch choobhta hai, aur woh uthkar dekhta hai ki uske piche uska jacket pada hua hai, jo usne subah pehna hua tha, mission par jaate waqt, raj us jacket ko uthakar, uske pockets check karta hai, ki tabhie use jacket ki ek pocket mein kuch milta hai, woh fauran us cheez ko bahar nikalta hai, aur dekhta hai ki, yeh wahi gift rehta hai, jo ki, naina ne use subah diya rehta hai.
RAJ-(relieved & happy)-thank God mil gaya.
raj us gift ko dekhta hai, toh use upar kuch likha hua dikhayi deta hai, raj use padhta hai.
RAJ-to rajveer sir from cadet naina ah singh.
yeh padhkar raj apne mann mein halke se muskuraata hai.
RAJ-(to himself)-yeh naina bhi na..........dekhe bhai ki humari cadet ne humein kya gift kiya hai?
aur itna sochkar raj us gift ko dheere-dheere kholta hai, aur dekhta hai ki uske andar...............
END PART 1. PLZZZ DO COMMENT GUYS, AGAR AAP SAB KO ACHCHA LAGA HO TOH HI MAIN ISI AAGE CONT. KARUNGI.
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hey it's really nice, please continue soon 😊
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plz plz continue its v.nice👏
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its awesomeeeeeee too good very nice waitinggggggg for next asap.
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hey plz continue it and plz be regular with it and ur other fics too
plzzzzzzz and plz continue this one
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hiiiii preeti!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!first of all i want to tell u that ur fic is not gud.
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.it's mindblowing yaar.......i m really happy that u r writing one.....and that to with a fresh feeling to it......keep it up..and ud soon
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Too good!!!!Awesome!!!!
Raj ka mission cancel ho gaya aur usse woh mila nahi jo woh chahta tha!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 😔Thats bad!!!!
Naina usse bolna chahti thi kuch par bol hi nahi payi!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛Kitni nervous thi woh!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊
Raj ko Naina ka diya huya girf yaad hi nahi raha!!!😲 😲 😲 😲 😲Thats very bad of him!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒 😒
Aalekh ne bhi samaj gaya koi baat toh hai!!!! Haa Aalekh toh sab samaj hi jata hai!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😊 😊 😊 😊
Raj ko finally Naina ka diya huya gift mil hi gaya!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊
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This story is very different n really a treat to read..Pls do continue it..Itne acche ideas milte kahan se hai....
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Hey Priti,
fic is super cool.plzzzzzz continue soon.
i like when Alekh said " Jai Ho Rajveer Sir ki"😆 it's so funny
waiting to see what Naina Gifted to Raj.so plzzzzzzz u know what isn't it!!!
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THANKY THANKS A LOT GUYS FOR ALL UR WONDERFUL COMMENTS, HERE IS THE NEXT PART FOR U. WITH LOTS OF LOVE, PRITI.

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