VirManFF: Abhi Na Jao Chodkar C4,pg19 02/18/2012

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Posted: 13 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: _Aanchal_

Now you're dead!! 🤣
don't curse me for my upcoming comments ("HONEST FEEDBACKS")😆

Oh bring it on😉

I am by now quite used to your 'honest feedbacks'🤣

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#32

Originally posted by: harshabashpam
next update? ah let me see how the story would proceed. I'll definitely try to include it in one of the updates...😳

you better!! 😆 [ W A R N I N G ]

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#33

Originally posted by: _Aanchal_

you better!! 😆 [ W A R N I N G ]

I will, in a part where it would fit nicely... Wouldn't it be better that way rather than squeezing it in?😳

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#34

Originally posted by: harshabashpam

Oh bring it on😉

I am by now quite used to your 'honest feedbacks'🤣

good to know that.. btw stop me before i get on your nerves!! 😛

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#35

Originally posted by: harshabashpam
I will, in a part where it would fit nicely... Wouldn't it be better that way rather than squeezing it in?😳

i'll be waiting 😛

why have you reserved 2 posts [first page]?? 😲

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#36

Feedback Session 😉

Looks like it is going to rain tonight, sighed Maanvi as she stood at the door to the terrace, looking up at the sky above. The sky was overcast and there were very little stars visible. Even the moon was hiding behind the dark clouds, giving an overall dismal feel to the night. She felt depressed, and it felt as if the whole night was in mourning with her, lamenting her loss. The loss that she felt could never be restored-- her Jeevika Di. Her sister, the one faithful companion she had in life was leaving for her new home tonight, and a sense of despair filled her heart as she realised nothing would ever be the same again.

"Maanvi..."

It was him.

Very poor!! 😆 (I want helicopter/aeroplane or UFO in such scenario)😳

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Maanvi closed her eyes with a tremble as she heard Virat's voice from behind calling out to her. Why Bhagwanji, why did it have to be him now? She didn't want to deal with him of all people just then. She had put up with him and his taunts all through the wedding just for Di, but she didn't think she had enough patience in her to bear anymore of it. He had lingered around her all day like an annoying ghost, sometimes taunting her about how Jeevika wasn't just her Di anymore, but also his Bhabhi; and sometimes teasing her how she wasn't doing any work on her own sister's wedding. How was it her fault if Beeji did not allow her to do anything just because she had a little cold last night, she thought irritably. True, he had brought her to the wedding when her promise to Beeji had kept her from it, and she was thankful to him for that, but that didn't make him any less annoying.

This paragraph is good 👏

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Posted: 13 years ago

#38

LOLz I will wait till u r finished😆

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#39

Originally posted by: harshabashpam
LOLz I will wait till u r finished😆

exactly.. don't break my rhythm!! (just like black pussy cat) 🤣

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#40

"What are you doing here?" she spat out bitterly as she heard his footsteps nearing, while quickly wiping the tears off her face and turning around.

He stopped a few steps away from her, as if momentarily taken aback by the sudden resentment in her voice. "Well, I could ask the same to you too, you know. What are you doing here?"

"I could be wherever I choose to, couldn't I? Why do you care anyway?"

"Oh, looks like someone's really upset today. Have you been crying or what?" asked Virat in his usual taunting tone.

"I was not crying, Virat."

I love Maanvi 😍

anyways this part is so obvious but i loved it!! 😆