Alaahida - A ShraMan Drabble - Page 2

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Posted: 7 years ago
#11
Not going to res😉
Because, you know iam not one with lengthy comments!!
This one was truly an emotional one but I liked it very much.
Beautifully written!!
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Posted: 7 years ago
#12

Originally posted by: Safire

Not going to res😉

Because, you know iam not one with lengthy comments!!
This one was truly an emotional one but I liked it very much.
Beautifully written!!

Hahaha!
I know Saf!
And I like heartfelt ek line as much as paragraphs!
🤗
Thank you!
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Posted: 7 years ago
#13
I'm not going to Res,
because I always lose the location of my Res.


So, will comment in a new location. 😆



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Posted: 7 years ago
#14

Originally posted by: devilaonmoon

I'm not going to Res,

because I always lose the location of my Res.


So, will comment in a new location. 😆



LMAO!
I'm used to that now😆
Will do bro!
Even I have so many reses right now IDK when I'll get to it but hopefully I'll remember where they are..
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Posted: 7 years ago
#15
Unresed @ pg 1!
🤗

Oh!
N Am the first one to Unres here too
Edited by Nik03 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
#16
Hi there, my favorite person!
Thanks for mentioning me in the dedication.
I feel like a proud sister, a joyous friend, a happy reader most of all
reading Alaahida.
You write angst like a pro, girl, and every time read your work (any work)
I feel satisfied. I love emotions, and you're one of the best in writing emotions.
Praises to you, congrats, Zoya, hats off to Alaahida.

Image result for big round of applause gif

(Let me inform you that finally I've got the hang of posting gif and images on IF.
That was fast, right? bloody hell... 😆 )

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Keep writing like this, girl, on this forum and in the next... never stop, because if you would it will surely be a shame.

About Alaahida, and the behind tale about the double work you had to do...
Let me just say that (and it's also my moral of life)... when God does something - good or bad - it is always done for the better, for the best. Everything happens for a reason. And we got Alaahida.

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How well you describe Shravan's emotions, his POV so beautifully! It's not just
in Alaahida, but in Alfaaz as well.
Makes me feel like you've done a psycho analysis and had a heart to heart personally with the said character.

So the tormentor was tormented too.

My most favorite part was this. There was something booming thunder-like thing in this specific place.

With hurt and resentment mirroring in both of their eyes. Their eyes locked, hands outstretched as if calling for each other. No words were spoken, but silence became their best form of communication. Wow, girl! The feels here are amazing.

A beautiful piece of work from a beautiful person.

I don't even need to say anything about your Urdu poetry (thanks for the translation too), you already know how I feel about them. 👏

So, now, you need to continue Alaahida. I want to read more of it.

Also, Alfaaz... I'm waiting for that's one's updt as well. 😉

Lots of love.
A very tight hug before I say tada...




Edited by devilaonmoon - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
#17

Originally posted by: Nik03

Unresed @ pg 1!

🤗

Oh!
N Am the first one to Unres here too

Wah!!!
Unres for me also everywhere 😆
Dekhti hoon!
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Posted: 7 years ago
#18

Originally posted by: Nik03

Res

****
Unres

Ok First things first!!
Its not only me who kept you here Zoya, you kept me here too!
I wouldn't have been here if it wasn't for you!
So we both kept each other here!
So thank you Zoya!! ❤️
Hehe.. Okii!
Yeyyy!!!
🤗


Now lets get on with the comment now!
Starting well as usual...

Zealous si Zoya🤗
Nikka Sa Nik ❤️

You dedicated it to me?



This is me...Literally!
Hahaha!
I...Its a great great pleasure buddy!
Pleasure is all mine!
Thank you..Thank you so much!!
Anytime!!!!!



Alaahida...
The title is Love ❤️
It gave me the feels of Alfaaz!!
Yeah.. I wasn't supposed to name it that but then once the piece was ready, this title clung to my brain, and so...
Glad you like it!

Third person POV...it makes it much more beautiful and unique bro!
It provided much needed depth!
Happiness!!!!!
Now what to say..
A loving person, he now believed, was the most cursed...This one ❤️ ❤️
Haina 🥺

The difference in ShraMan's monologue but still the same emotion n hurt!
I wanted to strike balance yet have a contrast, glad it stood out!

Solitude had been his longest standing friend, but it was also his most torturous enemy
Solitude that which once scared her, now gave her peace.

A loving person, he now believed, was the most cursed.
An indebted person, she now believed was the most cursed

Two paths tore him. One that allowed him to dream and the other that tied him down with chains never letting him soar
Two paths tore her. One that allowed her to dream and the other that tied her down with chains never letting her soar

The difference, the similarity ❤️
I know right.. I can't tell you how happy it makes me that you could feel it...
No matter how different they were, but they were similar in depth!
Yeah, soul mates!
Same feelings in same depth ❤️
This is so different!
So Unique!👏
Yeyyy

Aas thi, Umeedon ka daur tha,

Pyaas hai aur ab hai ghutan,

Yaaden thi, Bulandion ka daur tha,

Bikhri hai zindagi aur ab hai chubhan.


Lau thi, Roshni ka daur tha,

Karz hai aur ab hai Shikan,

Mohobbat thi, Khushion ka daur tha,

Bikhri hai zindagi aur ab hai chubhan.


Tark-e-Aarzoo thi,

Qayamat ka woh daur tha,

Shikvey the, Shikayat bhi,

Barbaadion ka woh daur tha.

Dard...

Kaise likh lete ho itna deep?

This is Love ❤️

Pata nahi.. Bas likh deti hoon, deep apne aap ho jaata hai!

Pur-sukoon hai Rooh ab,

Mohobbat ke noor mai,

Ek woh hai, ek hum hai,

Aur ab Ishq ka fitoor hai.

O my!
You my friend create magic...Always!
Sigh.. *Blushes Profusely*

Kya bolu?
Kuch mat bol...
Ye jo Hope hai na Zoya yaha...Bas yahi to hai!
I agree! Yahi hai bas!

Am at loss of words...
Literally!!
This is sooo deep!!
I love speechless!

Shravan placed his palm on the window trying to reach out to her and Suman raised hers in sync...This is a moment ❤️
I can imagine it all...I can see it all...Such has the power of your words!
Aye haye! Bas kar ja!
Emotions n sharayi...Ye aap ho Zoya!
Nah, yeh bas ek hissa hai mera, I am an enigma. Mai khud bhi khud ko fully samjhti nahi😆 *Smiles narcissistically*.
No Competition here!
One Woman army!
Aww man! Thank you!

Alaahida is really really special!
To me too!
Actually every writeup of yours is special n you know why!
Yeah I know...
I always learn something!
I'm glad you take something back..
Hope is what I take from here, from you!
The fact that its hope, makes me happier!
Thank you for that!
Pleasure..
Respect for you Ma'am!
Shukriya!

Thanks once again for the dedication!
Anytime!!!
Means a lot to me ❤️
I know it does...
As you said, I am too glad the glitch ate your piece coz this is best!
Hahaha yes!

Keep writing Zoya!
I I .. !
N I'll keep reading!
Love you so much🤗

@Bold Thank you so much Nik!
Love ya too!
🤗
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Posted: 7 years ago
#19

Originally posted by: devilaonmoon

Hi there, my favorite person!
Hello there likewise 🤗
Thanks for mentioning me in the dedication.
Of course I would!😳
I feel like a proud sister, a joyous friend, a happy reader most of all
reading Alaahida.
Aww man, come here you ❤️
You write angst like a pro, girl, and every time read your work (any work)
I feel satisfied. I love emotions, and you're one of the best in writing emotions.
Praises to you, congrats, Zoya, hats off to Alaahida.
Oh Ma! Thank you Lara! When anything comes from you, anything, it becomes all the more special for me Thank you!

Image result for big round of applause gif

(Let me inform you that finally I've got the hang of posting gif and images on IF.
That was fast, right? bloody hell... 😆 )
Hahaha! I remember when I learned to do it, I was so elated. It was raining images and GIFs everywhere 😆

Image result for hats off gif

Tom Hiddleston!!!! ☺️
Keep writing like this, girl, on this forum and in the next... never stop, because if you would it will surely be a shame.
Dude! If you talk like this, I'll perpetually resemble a tomato!
I won't stop! Promise...

About Alaahida, and the behind tale about the double work you had to do...
Let me just say that (and it's also my moral of life)... when God does something - good or bad - it is always done for the better, for the best. Everything happens for a reason. And we got Alaahida.
I agree! No matter how terrible it may seem at the point, there always is a silver lining. Always!

Image result for success supernatural gif



How well you describe Shravan's emotions, his POV so beautifully! It's not just
in Alaahida, but in Alfaaz as well.
Makes me feel like you've done a psycho analysis and had a heart to heart personally with the said character.
I don't know ya.. I just always had a connect with Shravan. He was such a well written character, it was hard to not have him at the back of my hand ❤️I'm glad you feel that way

So the tormentor was tormented too.

My most favorite part was this. There was something booming thunder-like thing in this specific place.
Aye haye

With hurt and resentment mirroring in both of their eyes. Their eyes locked, hands outstretched as if calling for each other. No words were spoken, but silence became their best form of communication. Wow, girl! The feels here are amazing.
Aapki feels dekh ke mujhe happy waali feels aa gayi!
🤪

A beautiful piece of work from a beautiful person.
Lara! Take my heart will you!
❤️

I don't even need to say anything about your Urdu poetry (thanks for the translation too), you already know how I feel about them. 👏
Yes I do, glad you loved it so!

So, now, you need to continue Alaahida. I want to read more of it.
Hehe.. IDK if I can write anymore..
Honestly, the conceptualization, the writing, the whole process took a while. And to write angst like this, I had to stay in a mood that facilitated work like this. It was draining an experience. So as much as I would love to write more, the pain was too much. I will write angst again, for sure, cause I love it so, but when life around me is okay

Also, Alfaaz... I'm waiting for that's one's updt as well. 😉
Working on that one.. Soon hopefully!
You wanted fluff, you will get fluff!

Lots of love.
Loads of love back!
A very tight hug before I say tada...
Tight hugs!!!




@Bold Thank you so much Lara!
You just made my day!
Love ya!
🤗
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Posted: 7 years ago
#20

Originally posted by: orion23

Wah!!!
Unres for me also everywhere 😆
Dekhti hoon!

😲
Ab aap mere kar do unres😆

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