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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: reshmanair356

Res...

Eric in love with Amanda is it?😃
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Unress :

Hey Zoya!!
Hey Reshma🤗
My apologies for the delay. I have learnt this, my discomfort with the res business was for a reason after all, I have a tough time going back to Unress, better stick to my original style of commenting fresh out of the oven.
I would like that😆 I find it quite frustrating to see a res fest, cause the impatient me has to know what is being thought about a piece😳
But don't apologize, I understand ya! No issues!
Maraasim interestingly was read twice, yet missed out on commenting 😃
Twice? Well then, I'm honored ❤️
I loved the ease with which Shravan talked to Amanda, for some weird reason I had always fathomed Shravan being uncomfortable around girls, so his ease , for me depicted his self confidence, that he was comfortable in his new found composure.
I felt so too... But I had addressed the discomfort in the earlier updates, I thought this would gel well in order to bridge the gap betw een the teenage Shravan and the Hot ass lawyer Shravan Malhotra😎
His asking Amanda out for the prom touched a cord. He knew what it meant never to be asked for, he felt the dejection she must have gone through on realising that she really didn't fit into the criteria of a sought after girl, he knew coz he felt, you can only understand people if you feel them in yourself. So like I said, I felt good at this premise, compassion is one of my favourite virtues 😛
I'm glad it struck you. Compassion was one of his many virtues. And It's my favourite too!
He understands what it feels like, as you have stated. And Shravan was much like that, he took cues from his past to live his present, that's another virtue that will be a constant...
Sumo's blow hot, blow cold equation with Mamiji made a good read as well. Mamiji was always grey actually, her being a mother overshadowed her being anything else, a la Kamini. A woman can be good or bad, a mother. ..well she's just that. .a mother.
I agree! A mother is almost always a mother first. Very few possess the righteousness to treat all situations equally, and in no means is keeping your children first something wrong. It becomes wrong when it is detrimental to others.
That brings me to another mother, the one whose justification of abandoning her son never touched a Base with me. You seem to be making her realise her folly thoroughly here, would it be wicked of me if I confess that I am enjoying it thoroughly as well?😉
Oh thank you! It's no secret I didn't like her character. The nonsense we were served will be avenged. She will suffer! And I hope you enjoy that as well😉
Now that my fears for Eric have been allayed courtesy Iztiraar...I can't even comment on that section. Nonetheless, the whole part was written beautifully!!
Thanks hon!
Awesome update Zoya ( Will a sheepish smile suffice when I say that or do I need to look more evidently embarrassed at the delay?)😳
There is nothing to be embarrassed about...
Der aaye durust aaye, we are good😃

@Bold Thank you so much Reshma!
I love your ever so deep comments 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: ZehriliChidiya

Zoya Di🤗
Anu 🤗

Kaise ho aap??
Mai theek... How are you?
As always...Amazingly written...👏👏
Thank you ji😳
Diary entry aachi thi..I liked it👍🏼
I'm glad you did!
Ram-Nimmo convo...
I am a lill' confused about this...
yaha saara blame nimmo pe jaa raha hai...Ramu kaka is right...
As off now she is wrong... She was callous and didn't bother, she came only to slap a divorce notice... I will try and give her version but the redemption will be difficult..
About Ramu, he may seem right in this matter, but he's only human, so wait for it...
Bhai itna kya busy thi woh ke she didn't even call once??!!😲
Let's be honest, she didn't try contacting Shravan, EVER!
Dusre ke bete ko bada karne mey lagi thi..aapne bete ki koi khabar nahi😭
Their convo was nice...I support Ram here...
Me too😛
Eric's family😭😭Well this was unexpected...I thought it would be sumthin else...
But nice sense of urs ha...Now Shravan can relate to Eric😃
Haina! Wait for that too... Everything will eventually fall into place...
ShraMan convo was ❤️
Its mah fav part😳
Yeyyy!!
All in all amazing one..!!!⭐️⭐️
Shukriya!
ANU😳

Thank you so very much Anu 🤗
Take care hon!
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Safire

Exemplary writing Zoya👏

Thank you so much Saf!!! 😛
Ramnath and Nirmala's conversation was really good and it seems Nirmala is the only person to be blamed for the entire mess..
This particular mess, so far, yes... 😉
But you have given your reasoning for that...
And the foot note part about not saying anything when one is angry,I sure agree with you...
It's a great thing everyone has to follow.
I know right! I try my best to follow it... My temper does get the best of me most of the times and I know the regret... I'll keep trying as I hope others do too...

@Bold Thanks Saf🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Nik03

Here I am Zoya with my Ress😛
Cant promise when I'll be able to unress.
Bas exams khatam ho jaaye n I'll be there straight!!



Hey yo Nikka sa Nik😉
Take all the time you need bro!
Exams pehle!
All the best...
I'll see you soon 😃
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: pinky.padda

amazing update
absolutely loved it
continue soon

Thank you so much Pinky!
Will do!
Cheers😛
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: arshuaar

amazing...
beautifully penned...
loved it...

Thank you so much!
I'm glad you did!
😊
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: reshmanair356

What do you do when you feel that you have read and analysed almost all angles of a Ramnath Nimmo confrontation and a then you are snowballed into an absolutely refreshing take like this on it?...You just realise that stalwarts like you are called stalwarts for a reason ..What an absolute gem is this piece Zoya👏

Would you look at that!
You know exactly how to pay a compliment, don't you!
I'm blushing like a fool! Stalwart haan? Never did I see myself in that light...
Thank you so much Reshma 🤗

You know when he asked her about the Delhi part, how would she reach the venue without an address, I whistled. If words could slap, Nimmo would have been on the floor writhing I swear.
That was the idea, a barbed word slap for the callous bi**h.. Pardon my language, but if a mother does not bother contacting her only child for years, she deserves the hate...

The couplet was love Zoya!!
Yey! Shukriyaa!!!!

Now I come to the point where you have so beautifully shown that a human being might have a magnanimous heart to forgive those who hurt him, but the merciless brain is scientific enough to record each such instance and then audaciously replay them verbatim when another instance of equal similitude hits him.
I know right. No matter how hard one tries, forgiveness will come but forgetfulness will not. At times that it is least expected, it will hit you like a bullet train and the wounds you felt were healed are open again... Such is the predicament of the Mind and Heart...

The dear diary took my heart Zoya..I swear again😃
Mine too😳

Eric's pain was tangentially different from what I assumed, but painful nonetheless. If only he knew that the mountain that he is carrying, he was only supposed to climb it. I so want him to bounce with fervour for I love his presence around Shravan.
Well, I won't keep him in that zone too long... I would hate to see him that way...

Shravan is oblivious to the storm that's going to hit his life, while he moves ahead uncalculating to face the unknown fate. .this premise leaves me worried, more heartbreak round the corner it seems😕
I won't divulge the details, but as off, there is one hurricane and a storm waiting... Both of which will teach a bit and impart strength 😛

Till then. .I applaud this beauty that you have served!! Fantastic it is Zoya!!
Thank you oh so much!!

@Bold Thank you Hon🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Zenab78

Zoya Apii 🤗

Chotu 🤗
This update is just outstanding
Thanks hon!!
Diary entry it's awesome no doubt
Shukriya!
I love the way you write it's truely amazing
It's really sweet of you to say 😳
So coming on update
Diary entry part Shravan was unknowingly thinking about Sumo and relating it
When someone very close to our heart hurt us it remains in our heart for long or maybe forever
I totally agree with you on this one!
Ram-Nirmala they both are at fault less or more and again they are ruining sharvan with divorce thing
Poor Shravan he isn't aware about it
He will be eventually...
I liked friendship bond Shravan and Eric share I think they will support each other in future .
They for sure will!!!
I am happy that shraman realtions is getting better
Me too!!
Overall it is Fab 👏
Thanks!
Loved it ❤️
I'm glad you did😃
Lots of Love *jhappis*
Zainab

@Bold Thank you so much Zainab!
Love and hugs right back at you ❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: deltadawn

Its human nature to keep finding solace in relations. To find relations worthy of that trust is an individual's luck. Shravan got Eric when he needed someone like that. But Shravan is a survivor he created an inhuman confidante as well. He is as friendly with her as he is currently with Sumo though. Loved the diary part. That one stroke in this story of yours made me start calling you Jahanpanah.😊 why wouldnt he write.

Deepti 🤗
Thank you so very much! I can't tell you how much I appreciate your words! Know that it means a lot to me 😳 And I agree with you whole heatedly!
Can he forget what she did - he got his friend back, he got her apology. Was it his closure? Is anyone ever able to get a closure without returning the jibe, without lashing back? Such people are either saintly or indifferent. Shravan is neither. Maybe Sumo will have to pull a new one which will make him forget.
Shravan has a huge heart, but neither is he a saint nor is he indifferent. Lashing out may not always be necessary, he did cry with Sumo, that should have sufficed to let it go. He did forgive but forgetting is a completely different ball game! It will resurface, soon...
Ramnath Nimmo 👏 we all hate her and I love your perspective. And Ramnath is a lawyer par excellence for the use of zoya's words. 😃
Thank you so so much hon, for hating Nimmo as I do...
Now I intend to take the uphill task of making everyone including me, hate her less...😉

The parallel drawn with Erics situation... Will Shravan learn from it though? I am waiting to read.
I'm waiting for it too...

This is Shravans story. And I love it.
It's ShraMan's story, wait for it and you will love it more 😳

@Bold Thank you so much Deepti 😛
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Faith28

Beautifully penned...loved the diary entries... And your shayari 👏👏 Ram nimmo showdown was superb.

Thank you so much for your appreciation 😳😳
Lets see what storm is in store of shravan.
Oh yes! Let's!!!!
Pls write soon😊
I will!!

@Bold Thank you so much hon!

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