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Frosty_Moon

@Frosty_Moon

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#351

zoyi...awesome update like always..
title fabulous...in fact loved it..
Eric ah that guy is really cute and understanding...
pushkar baby and his Sherlock homes brain..lovely..
finally shraman back to friends and happy..
diary note that was so good..
love it...
thnx for pm dear..

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bworm

@bworm

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#352

Beautiful. ...their relationship is so beautiful.

Indeed a blessing.

Thank you for the awesome chapter and pm

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Faith28

@Faith28

Navigator

Posted: 8 years ago

#353

Super update zoya... Loved their cute phone convo😊 And eric has become my fav pal😳

Good shravan decides to stay back...he has lot more to achieve 👍🏼

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Sidhi

@ArtThouTheBest

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Posted: 8 years ago

#354

Beautiful Zoya

Wonderful writing

Thanks for pm

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Lara / Clara

@devilaonmoon

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#355

Originally posted by: devilaonmoon
Res

*And I bookmarked. 😃 So won't forget this time where I ressed. 😆

Unres

Hey! I'm sooo late in commenting! Sorry, dear. 😭 So here I'm giving my reviews for both the chapters.

First of all, I love the titles of your chapters. And also the fact that you're translating the meanings of them in English, I'm learning more beautiful but complex hindi words. ☺️

And now to the best part - the emotions.

My evil mind leaps in happiness whenever one or the both of ShraMan go into

depression mode. 😈 So, yes, I admit I enjoyed reading Suman missed Shravu. And also, how Shravu had all negative mental calculations about Suman's mental status regarding him. All the pent up pain, regret, yearning and every bit of tears truly made the long wait for that damned password recovery process utterly worthwhile. 👏👏👏

That moment when they finally talked, 😭 their sobs 😃 and the angst- everything about the reunion was epic. 👍🏼

The words with which you ended the chapter left me maha excited to know about that destiny you were talking about. The apt way to end the chap. ⭐️

Now, the next chapter starts with my fav side character in this story - Eric bhai. 😃

"Blinding grin", damn I love Eric! 😆

Finally, everything is right between the Shraman. I'm now hoping for a long distance relationship - of some sort? So eager to know what happens now.

A little request, or something that in my opinion would flourish your writing more - that is... more actions and expressions tagged with the dialogues. So that, I can see their faces (and sometimes surroundings) when I'm reading. Like a lift of brow when he is amused or her twitching of lips when she's fighting a smile or biting lip - you see... more of these stuff. I know it's double the work, but that's a desire of mine to read more from you. 😳 While the dialogues are already apt, I'm moreover wanting to see their expressions as they speak. I want to see Shraman how you imagine them while they talk in your mind.

I guess I'm irritating you being so demanding! 😭😕 But can't help it, you see. Your potential makes me want to demand from you more.😃

Pheww..., that's it for now.

Lots of love and hugs,

Lara.

Edited by devilaonmoon - 8 years ago

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reshmanair356

@reshmanair356

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#356

Awesome update as usual Zoya!!...I am definitely gonna go down saying that some day!!...same dialogue, with no alteration😃

From Shravan's blinding grin to Sumo's garden sit in, everything shrieked of pure bliss. From the appeasement at being asked for forgiveness from your wrong doer to the abatement at being forgiven for your misdeed, relief was the feel around this chapter.

Eric as usual being equally concerned of Shravan's smiles as he was connected to his gloom, made me feel very complacent. His presence was now as soothing as his purpose.

Pushkar the Poirot smelt that what others couldn't, the early blooming of a very strong ardour between the two very important people in his life. He's been a favourite of mine always.

Nanu and his not so nano nazar, in youth we learn, in age we understand.

The Dear diary entry marked the exit of Shravan's restlessness.

What I absolutely loved was Shravan's decision of staying back in London. He had found himself there, he needed to make a fine discovery out of it. He owed that to himself, to the years that he spent in the misery of a low self esteem.

Now that they had found each other again, it was only a matter of time before they would find their dreams.

'Tum mil gaye ho toh ab aaina bhi dekhenge.

Abhi Abhi toh nigahon mein roshni hui hai'

Edited by reshmanair356 - 8 years ago

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Suruchi

@sheeluneelu

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#357

Amazing!! hamesha ki tarah I loved it so much

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deltadawn

@deltadawn

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#358

Jahanpanah !! 😊

Pehle to sorry I was out and I was still reading bit n parts but finally aaj shaanti se I read the entire update so my comment is here a the tail end.

You have maintained the cuteness level of these two so so well.

Its endearing to read the conversation and although the mind tries to find hints of love in there it is made to realize these are 16/17 year old, so there is this longing but its more in finding the comfort back in their friendship which they got back.

And its the beauty of friendship , the easiest relation to not have knots even after it is reinforced.

The happiness in both their days is shows so simplistically.

Pushkar the lawyer !! awesome.

Will wait for the next one.