ShraMan OS - Imperfectly Perfect

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Hola amigos...I am here with an OS on our dear couple ShraMan n am hell nervous about it!!
This is my first ever writing and I want to dedicate it to Sunain.It woulnt have ever been possible without you buddy.Thank you for helping me out with everything.Love you Nainu...🤗

Note: Well the storyline is slightly different from the Show.ShraMan are neighbours and childhood friends.There is only Sumo n her parents as Tiwari family and Shravan, Pushkar n Ramnath-Nirmala in Malhotra family.Both the families are very close to each other and are going to attend a marriage of a close common friend's son.

Do give it a try guys n do let me know how was it.Plz give your honest reviews.Negative as well as positive criticism is most welcome.Acha na lage to pyaar se bol dena ke Nik beta aaj ke baad kabhi mat likhna...😆
Ok enough of my blabbering...here you go!!


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Suman went to MM alone as she was as usual got ready before Priya who was taking her own sweet time.She went to the living room where Ramnath n Nirmala were engaged in a conversation.

"Good Evening Uncle aunty"..Wished Suman in a chirpy voice.

"Are aa gayi tu...Kitni pyaari lag rahi hai meri bacchi. Kisi ki nazar na lage"...Nirmala said lovingly n kissed her forehead.

"Hai na ji?"

"Meri bacchi to hamesha hi achi lagti hai. "Ramnath said putting an arm around Sumo's shoulders.

"Thank you both of you!!... Lekin ye kya aunty aap abhi tak ready nahi hui?"

"Main bhi abhi isse yahi keh raha tha.Jao bhai jaldi kro late ho jaayenge.Fir tumhe tayaar hone mein bhi to bohot waqt lagta hai."..Said Ramnath emphasising on 'bohot'.

'Ha ha jaa rahi hu.No need to tease"
Saying so Nirmala went to her room n Ramnath also got a call so excused himself.

"Pyaas lag rahi hai.Pehle paani pee leti hu fir jaati hu Shravan ke paas dekhne ke Sahebzaade tayaar hue ya nahi.."
Muttering, she went to kitchen . Pushkar who was already present there, dropped glass of water from his hand with jaws dropped wide open on seeing her.

"Who are you???!!.. n what you have done to my Sumo wrestler??".He asked after recovering from initial shock of seeing Sumo in Lehenga forget lehenga or any traditional clothes apart from jeans,shorts,cargos with tee n jackets for that matter for the first time ever.

"Bakwaas band kar.Drama queen kahin ka."

"Bakwaas or main???...Kuch vi ainveyi!!...Acha ye sab chod or ye bata tune ye kya haal banaaya hua hai?...Lehenga , heels n all. Aaj tak to kabhi nahi pehna tune.Tabiyat to theek hai teri???"...Asked Pushkar standing infront of her.

"Kya haal banaaya hua hai ka kya matlab?...Haa maana ke aaj tak nahi pehena but Maa ne emotional blackmail kiya to pehenna pada...Or waise bhi main ye sab nahi pehen sakti??...Ban hai mujhe?" Asked Sumo rather annoyed.

"Sumo FYKI ye kapde, jwellary, heels n all na ladkiyan pehenti hai.Tere kaam ki cheezen nahi hai.".Pushkar replied casually.

"Hawww!!...Matlab kya hai tera haan???...Main ladki nahi hu??"...Asked Sumo irritatingly.

"Harkatein to nahi hai teri ladkiyon jaisi."...Pushkar said Shrugging his Shoulders.

"PUSHKARRR!!!"...Shouted an over annoyed Suman.

"Haa to tu hi bata konsi ladki ko makeup ka M bhi nahi aata, konsi ladki ko shopping se allurgy hoti hai, konsi ladki ko romantic movies se zyaada horror movies achi lagti hai,konsi ladki ko dressup hona acha nahi lagta, konsi ladki ko beautician ke naam se chid hoti hai, konsi ladki bike riding prefer karti hai over going to spa,konsi ladki ko apni figure ki koi parwah nahi hoti???!!...Bata hai koi aisi ladki?"

"Meri Sumo..!!"

Sumo was about to resort but stopped listening to HIS voice n turned around to face him now smiling in awe.

There he was leaning against the door of kitchen looking no less than a prince in his black Sherwani ,arms crossed on his chest with a small smile playing on his lips and eyes only on Sumo.

Shravan walked further in the kitchen n stood besides both of them giving a look to Pushkar.

"Sirf ek ladki hai aisi duniya mein...Meri Sumo."..Said Shravan proudly looking at her.

"Ohoo!!...kya baat hai bhaiya.Khullam khulla pyaar haan?" Teased Pushkar.

"Haa to pyaar kiya to darna kya.Or tu bata kyu tang kar raha hai Sumo ko?"...Asked Shravan now totally turning towards him.

"Are bhai dost hai meri, bhabhi bhi banne wali hai to itna to haq banta hai.kyu Sumo?."...Teased Pushkar looking at her with a wink.

Sumo showed him her toungue.Pushkar laughed at this n wrapped his arm around her shoulder giving her a side hug lovingly.

" Ok!!...no more teasing...Bohot achi lag rahi hai...Sacchi!!"...Said a smiling Pushkar with a voice so soft.

Sumo gave him a smile fondly.He is the best friend anyone can ask for after Shravan ofcourse.

Turning his attention towards Shravan, Pushkar said,.."Waise bhaiya, aapko maa paa se Sumo or apne baare mein bata dena chahiye jald se jald.kahin aisa na ho k aaj Sumo ko actual ladki ke roop mein dekhkar koi Aunty se iska haath maang le or aap dekhte reh jaao...Soch lo...Mera kaam tha aapko warn karna baaki aap samjhdaar ho."

Saying so he excused himself giving the love birds some time alone.

As soon as Pushkar left, Shravan pulled Sumo to himself and wrapped his arms around her pettie waist.Sumo gasped at the sudden move.

"Shravan chodo...Koi dekh lega...Uncle aunty aa gaye to kya sochenge."..Said a scared Sumo looking here and there.

"Relax!!.. koi nhi aayega...Papa is busy on a phone call or maa jaldi se bahar nahi aane waali."

Sumo relaxed in his arms n snaked her arms around his neck.

"Hmm!!...Waise Thank God Shravan tum aa gaye nahi to wo Pushkar mujhe or preshaan karta.".Complained Sumo like a child.

"Waise sahi to keh raha tha bechaara. Aaj to wrestler Sumo princess Sumo lag rahi hai."..Teased Shravan.

Suno whacked him on his arm at this making him laugh out loud.

"Abhi to use daant rahe the or abhi khud ??".Huffed Sumo trying to free herself from his grip but he tightened his hold.

"Haa to Tumhe preshaan karne ka, tang karne ka, chidaane ka, pyaar karne ka,pamper karne kaa haq sirf mera hai...or kisi ka bhi nahi. Samjhi??".Said Shravan with so much love and tenderness in his voice.Sumo smiled at this but wasnt ready to give in just yet.

"Itni possessiveness??...Or agar Pushkar ne jaisa kaha, mera hath kisi ne maang liya to kya kroge?"...Asked Sumo raising her eyebrows at him in question just to tease him.

"Ab pehle koi tumhaara haath maange apne bete ke liye, phir us bechaare ki pitaayi ho or phir main apne pyar ka izhaar karu...na baba na itna risk nahi le sakte na.".Replied Shravan shaking his head.

"Aww...matlab tum mere liye us ladke ki pitaai kroge??"...Awed Sumo.

"Are main kyu maarunga kisi ko?...Am a peace loving person n moreover Lawyer hone ke naate main Kanoon ko haath mein kaise le sakta hu.. Use to meri GG hi tibta degi ."Said Shravan with a glint of mischief in his eyes.

"Ab Ye GG kon hai??"...Asked Sumo in confusion n curiosity.

"Are tumhe GG nahi pata??!!...Kya Sumo!!...GG means meri Gundi Girlfriend.!!"...Said Shravan with a smirk n before she could resort , he continued, "Or tumhe faayda bhi hai.Main hu na tumhaara defence Lawyer agar case hota hai to wo bhi free ka...nahi??!!"
Said a laughing Shravan.

"YOU!!!..."Sumo whacked him again but with a smile now.This is how they were.Best of friends first.

"Acha...On a serious note, main hamaare baare me maa papa se baat kar chuka hu kal."...Said Shravan now seriously.

This shocked Sumo.Happy Shock!!.

"OMG!!...Kya kaha uncle aunty ne?...Wo log gussa to nahi hue?...Kya soch rahe honge wo ?..Unhe kahin bura to nahi laga na?..Par unhone mujhse to kuch nahi kaha...offo!! Bolo na Shravan, chup kyu khade ho?"..Asked a tensed Sumo.And Shravan was looking at her waiting for her to stop her blabbering so that he can explain.

"Tum bolne dogi tab bolunga na ya Sumo...Kitna bolti ho tum!!.N relax!!...wo log bohot khush hue jaan kar.Or honge bhi kyu nahi,mujh se zyaada pyar jo karte hai tum se."

"Oh thank God!!...Waise pyar to wo karte hai mujhse tumse bhi zyaada."...Replied a now happy Sumo.

"Or wo log jald hi tumhaare maa papa se baat krenge.N I am sure ke unhe bhi koi prob nahi hogi."

"Hmm!...Am soo happy Shravan." Said Sumo with a sweet smile.

"Me too".Shravan replied looking at her intently.

"You are looking really beautiful Sumo."...Shravan was looking at her with all the love he had.
Sumo blushed hard under his heated gaze n dropped her gaze on the floor.

"This is a new side of you that Only I can see...Blushing Sumo"...Whispered Shravan while caressing her cheeks with his thumb ever so lightly.Slowly he started bending towards her.Sumo tried to free herself from him afraid of being caught by someone but his hold on her became more stronger.At last she surrendered.

As he was just a few cm away from her...
"Baccho kaha ho sab?..Aa jao beta late ho rahe hain."
Both sprung apart listening to Ramnath who was calling them from living room with Nirmala n Tiwari's.Sumo chuckled at his pouting face.


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Everyone gathered at the parking lot of MM n were discussing about the routes to the venue.

Suddenly a shrill voice of ringtone caught everyone's attention.All of them started checking their phones failed to see Sumo's pale face.Sumo turned n was about to go inside the home when...

"Sumo tu ander kaha jaa rahi hai.Or phone utha na tera phone baj raha hai...N wait a sec tera phone kaha hai?"..Said a confused Pushkar.

"Haa Sumo...tere haath mein bhi nahi hai or na hi tere paas koi clutch hai..?"...Asked equally perplexed Priya.At this point , everyone was looking at Sumo.

"Wo...ummm..me..mera phone...ahmm.."..Sumo stammered looking everywhere but at them.

"Are kya hua?...saaf saaf bol na, aise kyu hakla rahi hai?"...asked Pushkar confused at her behaviour.Shravan was also looking at her in confusion.

Sumo finally looked at everyone.They all were looking at her with a confused n curious faces. Shravan nodded his head once as if asking"What Happenned?".

She let out long sign of defeat finding no way of escape through the situation.

"All of you ...Dont overreact!!...ok?". Sumo said finding no way out.

Saying so she lifted her lehenga a little .Everyone looked towards it and it took a few seconds for everyone to understand what had actually happened.They looked at Sumo n broke out in a fits of laughter not able to control themselves anymore.

Sumo glared at Pushkar who was rolling on the floor laughing histerically.Shravan was also laughing shaking his head at her sillyness.Everyone had tears in their eyes with cont laughing.

Actually Sumo was wearing jeans under her lehenga n phone was in her jeans pocket which offcourse she forgot to took it out from there.

"Only our Sumo wrestler can do that...Am proud of you Sumo"..Pushkar said with great difficulty n again started laughing.

"Oh God Sumo!!...Kya karu main is ladki ka.Mujhe to lagta hai ke ye apni shaadi mein bhi jeans pehen ke hi jaayegi. Pata nahi kaun shaadi krega is jhalli se?!..".Said Priya sounding a little amused n annoyed at the same time.

Sumo who was standing there embarressed started pouting listening to Priya.Ramnath came forward to her rescue n told everyone to stop annoying her anymore now.Even though Priya said it jokingly but it somehow made Sumo sad n left her with lots of questions in mind.

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After sometime...

Everyone except Shravan , Suman n Pushkar left together telling them to come soon.Shravan n Pushkar were waiting for Sumo near their car.

Sumo came out after sometime but one look at her face n Shravan knew that something was wrong.

"Chalein??"...asked Sumo standing near them.

"Pushkar tu chal, hum abhi aate hain." ...Shravan said in a serious tone. Pushkar understood that his brother wanted to have a word with Sumo n left from there n sat in the car waiting for them.

"What are you doing Shravan??...We are already getting late."...Said Sumo a little agitated.She wasnt ready to talk to anyone at that time.

"Kya hua hai?...Or sach sach bataana Sumo.You know that you cant lie to me so dont even try and we are not going anywhere until you tell me what happened"...Asked Shravan without beating around the bush.Sumo knew he wont let her go until she tell him the truth.

"Wo Shravan..Wo main actually..umm..."...Stammered Sumo looking everywhere but him.

"Look at me Sumo..or bataao kya baat hai?!"...Said Shravan in a soft tone cupping her face lightly.

"Why do you love ME Shravan??!!"...Asked Sumo looking at him with a sad face.

"What??!!!"...Asked a stunned Shravan not expecting it.

"Out of all the things, you wanted to ask me this?!!...Sumo whats wrong with you?"..Asked Shravan confusion written all over his face.

"Shravan you are so handsome, successful n a perfect guy that any girl would want in her life.You can get married to any beautiful girl you want Shravan.A girl who matches up to your personality, who compliments you. And am neither of them, not even anywhere near them...Mujhe to jhalliyon ki tarah rehna aata hai.Tumne dekha na abhi kitni pagal hu main.Am very different Shravan...I.. I dont deserve you Shra..."...Sumo's insecurities got the best of her.

"Shup the hell up Sumo!!..will you?!"...Said a very angry Shravan cutting her off mid-sentence. Sumo looked at him with tear filled eyes.

Shravan left a long sign n cupped her face with both hands n said lovingly,
"Yes you are very different from other girls out there Sumo.You are different in your own way.You beautiful the way you are. You are beautiful inside out Sumo.You are beautiful the way you thought,for that sparkle in your eyes when you talk about something you love, for your ability to make other people smile even when you are sad.You are beautiful deep down to your soul...N that is what makes you different from everyone.I am madly in love with THIS beautiful girl...!!

Sumo my love for you is unconditional. I love you the way you are.I love you heart, mind and soul.You are far more beautiful than you give yourself credit of.Look at you from my eyes and you will see how beautiful you are and how much I love you.
And yes get this thing in your thick skull you stupid girl that nobody n mind my words , nobody can take Sumo's place in Shravan's heart n life ever!!

N not only me, Your parents, my parents, pushkar...everybody loves you Sumo...dearly, the way you are.
Sumo nobody is perfect here baby and even am not an exception.Mujh mein bhi kamiyan hai.Par meri un kamiyon ko sirf or sirf tum pura karti ho.Only you can handle me, only you can understand me without me saying anything n only you can love me the way you do.Sumo Neither you are perfect nor I am but what is perfect is our LOVE!!...Both of us complete each other in every way.We are..."

"IMPERFECTLY PERFECT!!!..."Completed Sumo even before Shravan smiling with tears streaming down her eyes.

Pagal kahin ki.Jhalli!!" Shravan smiled wide n wiped her tears with his thumb pad softly n nodded his head telling her not to cry.

"Promise me Sumo ke tum phir kabhi aise thoughts apne dimaag mein nahi laaogi...never ever you pagal ladki.."

"Pakka promise...n am sorry"...Promised a now smiling Sumo.

"I love you.I Love you soo much"...Confessed Sumo emotionally N hugged him tightly. Shravan dropped a soft kiss on her head.

"Love you too my Jhalli!!.."...Said Shravan making her smile with contentment.

"Chalein ab?!"...asked Shravan parting away a little.Sumo smiled n nodded.Both started going towards their car hand in hand happily.

They are perfect the way they are...they are perfect coz they have each other...they are imperfect individuals who are perfect when together.

People thinks that a soulmate is your perfect fit ,
and thats what everyone wants;
but a true soulmate is a mirror;
the person who shows you everything that is holding you back;
A soulmate's purpose is to shake you up, tear apart your ego a little bit, show you your obstacles and addictions,break your heart open so new light can get in;

And Sumo had found her soulmate in Shravan years ago who will not let her fall or fail in life ever.He is her strength ,her support system for life...!!

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Uff!...It was a long one.!!
So thats it guys...Plz guys give your valuable comments n do let me know
how you found it. Sorry if I have dissapointed you or wasted your time...Sincere apologies!!
Love n hugs.

Nik
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Res
sorry😭😭😭

Nxt time pakka first aaon gi😉
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Meri Tinker Bell ka phela phela OS🥳🥳🥳
Aur mjhy dedicated
Ttthhhaannnkkk Yyyoouu!!!!
It means hell A lot!😳😳😳


I so badly want to drag you out of this screen n give you a tiiight Huggie🤗🤗🤗
Love you sooo much...🤗

wasted my time han...lagta hai meri dant bhol gae ho😡


Chalo with out any further ados coming to ur post...😃..m so excited...tum say bhi zayada tumhein pata hai kiss tarha mein ny apnay ap ko roka us waqat koi comment karnay say...itna mushkil tha😕...ab tu jee bhar k bolon gi😳😛


Phele tu hats off to you..tumhara first attemp aur itna Mindblowing..👏👏...i was astonished reading it...throughout my reading i was grinning like an idiot😆😆..there was no point i felt bored or thanda...every part was a fun and a refreshing one⭐️😉

No dout larkiyan tyar honay mein time lagati hain..par hum aur tum us category mein lie nhi karti😆😆..kyun😉🤪😆

OMG!!!😆😆...Pshkar's tease i tell was an amazing one...banday nay koi kasar nhi chori Sumo ki legpulling karnay mein😆...cutest member i must say😳...along with tht Nautanki no.1😛

"Sumo FYKI ye kapde, jwellary, heels n all na ladkiyan pehenti hai.Tere kaam ki cheezen nahi hai."...uskay baad tu i cudnt hold my laughter...Outstanding Bro👏👏

"Haa to tu hi bata konsi ladki ko makeup ka M bhi nahi aata, konsi ladki ko shopping se allurgy hoti hai, konsi ladki ko romantic movies se zyaada horror movies achi lagti hai,konsi ladki ko dressup hona acha nahi lagta, konsi ladki ko beautician ke naam se chid hoti hai, konsi ladki bike riding prefer karti hai over going to spa,konsi ladki ko apni figure ki koi parwah nahi hoti???!!...Bata hai koi aisi ladki?"

Fantablous one👏👏...i was all speechless reading this one...Pushkar nay kiya description dea🤣

Aauurr us kay baad literally the heart stoling moment and the bestest one...the one dialogue comprising of merely two words was my most Favorite..the one which blew me away was...

"Meri Sumo..!!"

The way Shravan called her Meri Sumo and defended her was lovely...hell beautiful!❤️
Haq jamana n all suits Shravan😳

Ohh their moment was a lovely one...but got ruined han😆😆

"Haa to Tumhe preshaan karne ka, tang karne ka, chidaane ka, pyaar karne ka,pamper karne kaa haq sirf mera hai...or kisi ka bhi nahi. Samjhi??"...❤️❤️❤️

Shravan's possessiveness as always a breath taking one...
GG...🤣...Gundi Girlfriend...now this was an amazing one👍🏼😆
Dono nay phlay hi planning larli...Sumo pitai karay gi aur Shravan uska defence lawyer banay ga...yahan bhi dono sath sath...Partners in crime han😉

So Shravan nay phlay hi Nimmo aur Ramu say baat kar li...quite eager or shud i say impaitent are we😆

I was literally going to ask u to add ur tadka too n see meray khnay say phlay hi u did aur kya twist and turn dea usnay tumhari story ko...waz Mindblasting one...Meri tu is bar bhi hasi nhi ruki🤣
I was still imagining u in tht situation..standing all emabrssed...awwh u must had had looked damn cute😆

"...Pata nahi kaun shaadi krega is jhalli se?!.."...Whn priya said thoz words i was like..plz Sumo dil par maat lena n wahi hoa😕

I was also gone mad like Shravan...said Suman Shut up wil you😆😆...Kuch bhi bakwas kiaay jaa rhi hai awain😆

Thn the way Shravan protested...haaa😃...dil lout lea❤️...😆

So true...Thy both indeed are Imperfectly Perfect!...for eachother in every senses and in evey means😳

The ending was a cutoo dutoo one😳...loved it!
Specially this line...@bold..❤️

And Sumo had found her soulmate in Shravan years ago who will not let her fall or fail in life ever.He is her strength ,her support system for life...!!


TinkerBell you litearlly did a Stupendous Job!👏👏...It was hell beautifully penned!⭐️..no dout!
I just loved it and as i said before i was grinning throughout my reading and still have tht grin plasttered on my face..all becoz of ur Outstanding Piece😉

You shud try and rite more stuff...u rock it⭐️

It was all ur hardwork dear you did it all by urself...meina bas tumhari ruki gari ko dhaka lagaya😛😉😆

Love you too rey😆...lots of hugs and kisses for my Nicky Pie🤗🤗🤗

Will be waiting for more of ur amazing writeups😉
Till thn...



Take Care!
Nainu❤️




P.S.Check ur PM box!

Edited by Sunain - 8 years ago
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An OS?? 😃
Edited by theGoldenGirl - 8 years ago
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Oops do-do post ho gaya😕
Koi nhi I'll use it for commenting
Res😉
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Unress
Ah finally!
Sorry for keeping you waiting
First OS! Kahan thi tu itne din. So write so Well!
But love you for dialogues

Pushkar-Sumo banter mast tha
Sumo wrestler became sumo princess
"Meri Sumo" Hayye! Why does this havta have so much asar on my stomach. Butterflies!
Itni possessiveness!
GG🤣
Why do you love me? Question that has uncountable answers or no answer!

Loved it so so much!!!!
😳
Keep writing
Love,
Swaru

Edited by theGoldenGirl - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Wah !!wah !!kya likha hai
👏
Mindblowing os
Awesome and different concept
Sumo wearing jeans under lenhga is tooo funny
And how shravan explain her qualities that why he loves her is fantastic
You should write such pieces
Love
Tina
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Not bad Niki first time written...

Kitni huq se bola Shravan she is his Sumo.. khullam khulla pyaar yeh toh besharam Shravan hi kar sakta hai. she is not confident with her dress so she wore jeans inside what big deal I have seen ppl wearing pants inside the saree instead of skirt... chal tha hai dear Sumo... Shravan is a true lover he has shown her how special she is to him...

Keep writing girl...

Vinu
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awesome
absolutely loved it
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Nik😊
why do you need us to validate whether you should write anything further or not? If you don't write how will it become a practice for you? And how will we get to read more of such fun and sweet pieces from you?

I loved the OS. Put a smile on my face.

First thing I liked - the concept. Soulmates are not perfect fits. They need to chisel themselves to fit with each other and it takes time and patience, it takes acceptance, respect and a lot of unconditional love for the other.

Secondly - Your description of Sumo - she represented at least 90% girls in this world. Maybe that's why we loved Sumo in EDKV and I loved her here too. She is real !! So real that when she dresses up you know its different today! 😊 Why can't girls be like that? who focus on stuff other than themselves. Their family, career, hobby anything apart from their looks. Does that make them less lovable. NO

He loves her and that all he knows to do. that's Shravan. hotness apart, he is a guy who knows how to love and see what needs to be seen.

I love you for capturing both of them and Pushkar perfectly. 🤗

You wrote very well. Grammar was good. Descriptions of emotions, setup were perfect. 👏

Please write more ⭐️ and soon!



Edited by deltadawn - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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This is so cute ...first OS and did great job 👏
jhalli sumo 😆 lahange ke niche jeans sach me sumo hi kar sakati hai😳

very well written new concept and please do write more 😊

i realized one quote perfectly in your OS
"We come to love not by finding a perfect person, but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly"

sorry for late comment 😳

Till then ❤️
Priti
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This is a wonderful OS...
Love GG (Gundi girl friend)...
Phone wala scene was really funny...
Love ShraMan's last conversation, it was beautiful..
Keep writing like this

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