Shraman ff: HUM TUM part 27(updated on page 144 - Page 61

Really Piya. ... What an amazing piece... I have read so many in this forum 18+ so for me this is not embaressing to read... Ya but while writing it may be difficult... Reading is different & writing is different... But well done it was really good written...

Originally posted by: Sunain

dekho kon ayee...😳

wil surely unres rite now..

Res

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Unres

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" color="#330066">Firstly i'm terribly sorry for not being able to comment on ur previous upii...coz these days m hell busy bs yakeen mano abhi do pal saans lenay ko mili hai tu got online just to RELAX MYSELF...n thankfully u r here with dazzling upii...love u for this🤗</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" color="#330066">literally ur update was like tension reliever to me...finally got back my senses...i knw rite now m sounding alll insane sorry for tht but trust me this whole week made me one...n u my jaan thank u shooo much for this lovely update...u made my day..love yaa❤️</font>

<font color="#330066">Read both parts in one go n WOHOOO..</font>❤️yah sab ho raha hai😳

<font color="#333333">"Yeh lo ab main jau to kahan jau????
Hey bgavan.. Samne tv pe chudail naach raha hai.. Side mein romance chal raha hai..

Aur peeche cham cham wala background music ke saath suhag raat wala trailer chal raha hai.."...Said pushkar</font>

<font color="#330066"><font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">God this whole parrt got me like into fits srsly🤣</font>🤣🤣🤣<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">...Pushkie is such a tease...movie samnay chal rhi thi magar janab ki nagahein kahein aur hi thi😆...naughty naughty😆</font></font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" color="#330066">woah...wel let me clear one thing i read your update before u editted it n i got to know about the mature content while i was reading it n throughout i was😲☺️..i felt like he was forcing himself on her which didn't seemed rite to me..wel m not expericenced so don't even want to comment on that hope u wont mind.But one thing i liked the most was tht she had 200% trust on him which elated me.bilkul egoproof...larkiyon ko aisa hi hona chahiay but itna shrmana tu i'll also say isn't rite.😛</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" color="#330066">Ohh that family drama...how naive she is🤣...damn embarassing😛...Shravan ki class😆..sumo ka pitara khul hi gaya kuch nhi chora..bilkul meri tarha jo moh mein ata hai bina soochay smjhay shuru ho jaati hon🤪</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" color="#330066">OMG!!!!..6.4 KA KIDA🤣🤣</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" color="#330066">to be very honest mature content was hell brilliantly penned but was too much for me to handle...me myself never xpected such a thing to come from you..u didn't let us down in any senses...m so glad to hav such an incrediable writter...love u soo much Piya🤗</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" color="#330066">Did a fantabulous job..as always😳</font>

<font color="#330066" face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">love yaa..❤️</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" color="#330066">Take Care!</font>

[DIV]<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" color="#330066">Suu.</font>

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Suuu
To phir finally exam khatam????
How was it???
Chalo ab big wala thank uuu itna achha comment ke liye
Actually sumo hain hi itni irresistable ke shravan kya kare
Ya he forced a little but she gave her permission.. And she was also njoying till shravan lost his control
Its their first experience
So both ar inexperience
Ab halti to hone hi
thi
Ab london ka munda
Shaadi ke baad bhi biwi ko haath nahin lagaye ga..??
Yeh to sirf humare show ke shravan ki kar sakta hain..
Bhai u won't beleive likhte time how embarrassed i was..
But finally finished it
And yeeepiii u liked it

Originally posted by: ArpitaSingh1806

Chalo see se hi sahi I'm back😉

Tina accha kaise likh leti hai yaar😭

Pehle shopping, aise sharma rahi thi sumo kaise in kapdi main use rmp walk karne ko bol diya hi, lekin phir bhi it was new for her so justified.

Sagai ke saath saath shaadi bhi, aur bhi badhiyan. bohot sage jayega shravan, speedy shaadi😲

That was a shock to me😲, lekin impressive waala👏

Sumo calling shravan 'aap', made me dreamy.

Can write a novel praising this one, lekin that's anju ka kaam😉

But meri utter favourite line to thi " sumo agar bhayia ko shaadi ke baad bhi tujhse dur rehta padha to, voh pakka sanyaas le lenge" whistles for Pushkar

And also vandy ko bada wala thanks for motivating sumo

BTW she is really bold, and love that dialogue thodi boldness sumo ko bhi de do, Sachi sumo bohot shatmati hai

Amazing chapter

Love

Arpita

Hey thank u arpita for the lovely comment
Par i gues u r taking about the part 16.

If u r 18+ then read the nxt one
N thank uu tht u liked that sumo is calling shravan aap
Some of the reader ddnt liked it bit as i have mentioned that he is 5 yrs oldsr than her...
They were not frndz n its an arranged cum love marriage gor her so aap bolna to is like banta hai

Originally posted by: Itssanjh

<font color="#0000ff" face="Times New Roman, Times, serif">Just got a suspicious look from my maa.😆Was smiling through out!😳It was beautiful! And yes... Writing intimate scenes without being vulgar is no easy.. So more power to you.👏.. loved the embarrassing part of Nirmala kamini and sumo.. Laughed hard when kamini ne lalaji and Ramnath ko chup karwaya.😆.. loved the whole chapter! Already waiting for the next part... Update jaldi jaldi.. Till then... Lots love and...</font>🤗

Thank uu saanjh
Tu to ab mumma se pitegi..
Hey u r 18+ rite???
U have no idea writing a mature content with subtleties is such a tough job
Sumo to hain hii naive bechara shravan kyaa kare..
Hot irresistable biwi but bewakoof

Originally posted by: reshmanair356

I smiled through the entire chapter...and also blushed like anything . ..Loooved it Piya...too good . .it was comic and romantic...you are awesome Piya!!

Thank uu reshma...
A big hug for your appriciation

Originally posted by: athira.sundaran

di i m running out of words now... and for next few days i m good 4 nothing.. at d end of d day, u made my weekend.. i love u for this.. everything was beautifully penned.. and the best part was their was no vulgarity at all... everything was a bliss... love u di

Thank uu dear
Seriously its very hard to write mature content re...
Aur woh bhi subtle ness maintain karte huye...
Thank uu for ur kind words

Originally posted by: anukulgr8

Loved it... Unexpected One...😆

Yaar Sumo bohot he sharmati hai yaar...

Not vulgar at all Piya... Bas Sumo ko thoda bold kardo Vandy ki tarah...

Update soonish.

Love,

ANU😊

Haha thank uu yaaar...
Are bhai shravan is too bold and daring...
Ab sumo bhi bold ho jaye to problem ho jayegi aur sab update 18+ hoga
Actually sumo doesn't have parents and she was brought up by not even her extended famille
By her mom's best frnd
N she respct them ..
Shen never ever get any sexual exposure..
Because of the love and affection of the family members she ddint have any close female frnd..
Her frnd is pushkar..
So all this sudden things r new to her..
May be she will open up later

Originally posted by: Harshi_ta

It's good di sorry I didn't read some parts but all over its good especially pushkar part😆baap re kitni Mar khayega and that part jb kamini or nirmala ko hickey dekhti h and baki males😆infection

I enjoy remaining part (bcz some part I escape)

Thank u dear for maintaining the decorum

Originally posted by: trayee

OMG!!!!!
Yeh kya tha yaar...18+???that too wid sooo much details...naughty piyali i must say...but it was damn hot...trailer of suhagraat...asli suhagraat to abhi bki hai...
we want much more hotness in our shraman's suhagraat aftr all rituals...
actually i really felt bad fr sumo...poor biwi of hot shravan...waise shrvan ka vi galti nhi...shy sumo hai hi itni irresistble...
loved it...update soon wid more naughtyness 😉 👏

Thank u for appriciating my naughtiness
Exactly yeh to sirf trailer tha...

Originally posted by: CarpeDiem_

Loved the song!

Soon Shravan will be singing O meri Sharmili ...😳anyhow her hesitation seems so real!

The contrast is amazing...bold n determined and shy n sensitive !

You managed well... it was nowhere distasteful !

Thank uu
Thank uu so so much