Mil Jaate Hai Jo Bane, Ek Duje Ke Vaaste- Alternate ending - Completed - Page 23

Originally posted by: pearl.white

Man, this was magical!! JK Rowling se magic udhaar leke love mei transform kar diya!! 😳
Baap re! Really!
So beautifully you portrayed the missing love amidst all the pain and bitterness. This was something I aas craving to watch onscreen after marriage. This awkwardness, this brimming love and that angst.Sigh!!
Glad you liked it...
Nevertheless I relished the written words, taking in each and savouring them.
Yey!!
[Hey CVs, you lurking around here, then olease hire this awesome author for a season 2 with Nimik ⭐️ ]
Pagal! Itni bhi acchi nahi hoon yaar...
Suman was distraught by her broken dreams which pierce her time and again. Shravan's guilt was so poignant. Woh dost ab bhi zinda hai kahi. And the silent apology and forgivevess scene was sheer brilliance. What a visual treat. Khamoshiyaan pyaar se jeet na saki balki pyaar ban gayi.
What a line dude! Aap bhi kuch kam nahi hai!!
And both realising that every obstacle is worth it. Indeed, the togetherness would be so fulfiling after this.
Indeed...
What followed was absolutely hilarious and intense at the same time. The innate care in Shravan oozing out along with his whacky sense of humour plus Sumo's hormonal disbalance.
👏 👏 Aur kya chahiye!!
#Aur jeene ko kya chahiye, Namik of course 😆
Awiee that 'Motu bit was cho cute. 😳 Them reminiscing together... 😃

Ramu's realisation was so powerful. Even the subsequent jolt that all needs to be in open.
Haina!
Loved Suman thinking to make the moong daal ka halwa. I was actually expecting her to make it in the show after that fight but she had to make that godforsaken daal!!
🤢
Daal kab jan chodegi...
Sumo ke side ka pyaar bhi umad-umad ke dikha!! 😃

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And there goes the power-packed, skyrocketing, Dhoni ka world-cup wala Sixer!! ⭐️
This scene was a masterpiece!

You know, just a few minutes before I had ranted against Shravan on 'Connecting the dots' thread about him being a misogynist and a gadhe ki aulaad.

The feminist in me had started breathing after being deprived of Shravan all this week.
But bam! She simply wept and drowned herself in Shravan's pain. Hereafter officially, she is never gonna raise her head whenever Shravan is concerned. 😆

All these bloody people especially Ramu and Nirmala do not deserve Shravan. Even Sumo has been portrayed so heartless at times that I dont know what should I feel about this ' love story'.
I shall make them all suffer in part 3😉
He showed the festering lessions of his wounds and everybody was left charred. What about hwho bears it day after day after day? And yet rises again to face it anew!!
He's a phoenix.. You'll see soon enough!
Nirmala comes across as the most worthless in this saga. Woman, you still care about Chomu!! 🤢 She should be officially renamed KAANDLA.
Nirmala, oh how I love to show her the mirror😆
Shravan slayed. What sass, what pain. Each dialogue was a gem! Namik would have nailed it!! 😭
Agreed he would have!
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Sumo sees the mask, now she sees it!! His facade of happiness!! Sigh!
And Shravan's pain... this wonderful man does not deserve it! Itna dard... freaking hell!!
The pain has made him so numb that he has to trigger it with his alcohol to feel something, anything!! 😭

Sumo weeps for her Chashmish, her love. I adored the way she handled him, trying to erase his pain.

And the moment he said 'Godi mei sar rakh ke so jau' - my heart broke!! 💔
There is a lot more breaking remaining...

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Originally posted by: Hriju321

Zoya tussi kamaal kar diye ho !

Such an awesome chapter...roya oar dil khush ho gaya. ...

Aise gems likhte rehena...you are a very good writer😊

Originally posted by: Sana_Jannat

🤗 Excellent zoya 👏 difficult to select single part which i love most bcz i loved whole. whether its Shravan-Suman/Sumo or ShraMan-Ramnath or Shravan-Nirmala. 🤗 for PM

Originally posted by: trayee

another dhamaka...full package...wow...!!!
thora romance..thora comedy..& bohit sara emotional scenes...jst lovet it zoya..u made shravan malhotra alive again...even i could feel every bit of pain of shravan..thanks a lot yaar... 👏

Originally posted by: nith125

Zoya , first, nazar na lag jay tuje . Seriously ! I loved it, it is brilliant and I think you did a great job of keeping it short because there was too much to be written actually. I am impressed girl ! Take a bow 👏

Thank you so much Nith!!!!!

Also "Tum mujhpe gire aur lagi bhi tumko?" - Story of their lives, is it not ? I loved that dialogue. This is exactly what happens to them, in doing anything to hurt the other person, they both hurt each other always.

What insight my love!

I could never digest the fact that Shravan actually forgave Nirmala in the real ending. I have two issues with that, one - she never reached out to him at all during the AdiMan wedding prep and second what happens to Adithya now ? Does she abandon him just like she did with Shravan ? Even if Shravan did forgive Nirmala I hate it that Ramnath-Nirmala reconciled, whatever ! But you have addressed the point so well that it is actually believable and relatable unlike Nirmala popping out of a hat in the last episode.

You'll see what happens of Aditya😃 And the rest...

I'll probably come back and comment more later 😆

I'll be waiting😉

Originally posted by: pinky.padda

wow

that was amazing

absolutely brilliant

the emotions of shravan were mind blowing

true brilliance

Originally posted by: lazyshambhavi

Zo,

you left me in tears😭

Heartbreaking dialogues you write.

Thumbs up for that⭐️

Shukriya!!!

The chapter was long!!!

Was it???

Didn't felt like that.

,your fault😈🤣

Hahaha!

In the starting you have written a line,

silent apology and forgiveness wali line

in very rare case it happens,silence is understood by very few😳

Awsome one👏

Thank you!

The chapter was emotional one.

But,l like this kind of writings

saddistic me *not really*😛

Me too...

Loved everything from starting to end,

from the motu-moti argument😆 to shravan sleeping in the lap😳

You did total justice to the chapter

Brilliant

Glad!

Originally posted by: san2471

Touching. I liked the way they relate to each other, the way they know what their hearts want, what the other person feels and yet they want to hear from the lips.

There was so much potential in the story. Your writing is making up for all that we lost.

Originally posted by: -Wandstruck.

RES.

TU MUJHE PM BHEJNA CONTINUE RAKH.

I AM STILL NOT WELL.

WILL READ AND GIVE OT A FULLY DETAILED COMMENT.

Originally posted by: jassie_17

Gurlll OMG OMG OMG!!!!!!!!

Such intensity in a chapter of Sumo's and Shravan's lives is something I had always craved for...The passion,the cuteness,I luved it babe...I mean how can you say there was no cuteness in him calling her motu and she hitting him and Ramnath being so happy for his son and being proved wrong despite his so called tajurba...

The angst so clearly defined by the conversation btw a mother and son..Kya galti thi meri...speaks of a son who had weeped silently over the years,seeking justice from his own mom who had once loved him so dearly and held him close to his heart.. He wanted to know his mistake,what he had done to deserve this agony over the years and I can't imagine any son going through this as much as Shravan who must have cried himself to sleep every single day of his lyf...

And Sumo...she had promised him never to leave him ever and she will never leave him ever...his insecurities and fear of his future relationships speak so much like a clingy baby who wants attention all the time...Awww I juz luv this guy and his soulmate way too much...Shravan and Sumo rocked!!!!

Cheers,

Jassie