UPDATED My first OS - jealousy-FINAL part page 9

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Hey guys i have never written an OS before very nervous. Please be kind. Excuse and grammer mistakes and also i am not fluent in hindi so please excuse any mistakes! Hope u like it




Noor and arshad's wedding preparations were in full swing. Antara was handling everything with raghu, aji and mach mach helping. Since Antara was still taking care of aji most of the arrangements were happening at ajis house. Antara had called the mehendi lady today to look at designs.
It was about midday. Antara and aji were sitting in the living room as the mehendi lady strutted in to the Naik house. She was more dressed up than Rasika with her open blouse and scandalously worn saree. Both Antara and Aji looked at her with shock as she pranced her way over to them.
mehendi lady: hi im puja
Antara: ummm hi. Kya designs layii ho?
Just as she was showing them some designs Raghu appeared to check up on the plans. Puja's face lit up as she saw him. Rugged good looks, hair playfully bouncing about and smouldering eyes Raghu certainly was a head turner. Puja captivated was ignoring Antara who was asking her a question about a design.
Puja: to herself- wow kitna handsome hai! To raghu- tum duhla ho?
Antara: nahi vo duhla nahi raghu hai.. Acha to bata yeh design...
Puja: raghu? Tumbhi aa na. Baheto aur batao tum hain kaun sa pasand hai?
Raghu: main.. Vo.. Muhje yeh sab
Puja grabbed raghus arm and sat him down next to her on the couch.
Antara: to aji- Aji yeh designs humko dikhane ayi hain ya flirt karne
Antara was squeezing the design booklet in her hand. Her jealously evident to aji and Raghu.
Aji: ay ladki idhaar aa muhje vo vala dihka.
Antara: nahi aji rahene de muhje inki koi design nahi pasand.
With that puja was sent on her way leaving aji smiling and raghu with a devilish smirk on his face.

Aji knew something was brewing so she decided to give it a little nudge.
Aji: Antar kya tum upar store room mein ja sakti ho? Maine waha kuch designs rahke the. Without even replying Antara got up and left to the storeroom, leaving behind a very loud grunt which made her feelings clear.
Aji began counting in her head waiting for raghu to follow antara
Aji: 1...2...3
And he was off.

The storeroom was dark but Antara didnt seem to care. She was lost in her thoughts. How dare she, she thought. Koi tameez nahi hai aaj kal ki ladki ko. Aisa bhi koi karta hai kya. Kitna chipuk rahi thi vo raghu ko!

Raghu: to kya hua agar vo mujse chipuk rahi to?
Antara jumped as she heard raghu! Oh my god she thought. Did he hear everything.

Antara: vo.. Vo main.. Vo aji
Raghu: aji? Aji ko koi problem nahi tha
He began advancing towards he and she taking nervous steps backwards. antaras heart was racing more and more with each advancing step. She had done this tango before with him but this time it felt different. His proximity was making her breath hitch, his gaze was making her heart race.
Raghu: bolo miss kaul, kya problem hai teri
Antara finally catching he breath: m muhje koi problem nahi hai
She hit the back wall
Antara: muhje kyun problem ho Gi? Main yiha designs dhundne ayi hoon
Raghu had a gorgeous smirk on his face as he saw her struggling to make excuses. She began glancing around the room for the designs when she spotted something in the corner. She started to move when Raghu's left arm pinned her, she tried the other side but his right arm stopped her. She was pinned to the wall with Raghu still searching her eyes for an answer to her jealously
Raghu: tu itna jaal kyun rahi thi usse
Antara: main kyun jalo use makeup ki dhukan se
Raghu: tuhje jalan nahi hua?
Antara: bilkul nahi
Raghu: haan vo main soch raha tha usse ek date par le ke jaon. Vo aji kehti rehti hain shaadi ka umar ho gaya ha issliye
Antara: haan to jao na, muhje kya? Choro muhje jaane do bahut kaam karni hai.
Raghu: to main date par jaon?
Antara: haan jao
Raghu: to main uske kareeb jao, jaise iss waqt tumare kareeb hoon?
Antara looked into his eyes
Antara: haan
Raghu: kya uske bhi dil itni hi zoor se dhadhke gi jaise iss waqt teri kar rahi hai
Antara: h haan
Raghu: kya vo bhi itni zoor se saanse lehgi
Antara: h h haan
Raghu closed in on her further
Raghu: agar main usse choohoon to tume koi faraq nahi parega? And with that he began running his finger from the strands of hair that decorated her forehead right down to the nape of her neck.
At this point Antara could only make out a low mumble
Antara: mmm
Raghu: agar main usko baho main loon to tume koi faraq nahi parega? With that he slid his arms around her waist and pulled her petite form onto his.
Antara could not think at this point she couldn't understand what was happening to her. She has been in his arms before but this was the first time she was melting in them. She didnt know if she was breathing or hyperventilating. She was lost, scared and nervous but at the same time excited wandering what his next question will be.
Raghu: agar main usko kiss karoon to kya tume koi faraq parega
Antara felt her whole body go numb. She didn reply but her eyes gave raghu permission. he slowly lowered his lips onto her and pinned her further against the wall.

After a long and very passionate kiss they reluctantly parted ways. Antara leaned against the wall with her eyes closed gasping for air. Raghu wiped his lips and gazed at her with a satisfied grin.

Aji from downstairs: Antara beta! Vo mila ki nahi?
Antara suddenly rose from her trance and bolted towards the door.
Raghu: ay miss kaul
She came to a holt before reaching the door.
Raghu: jaldi aana.. Muhje aur sawaal puchni hai tumse
Antara blushed as she ran downstairs, with the biggest grin in her face.


Part 2- Pg 3
Part 3- Pg6
Final part- Pg 9
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Posted: 11 years ago
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wow yaar u rocked it pls continue it soon and make it even longer
i loved it
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Wow first OS such an awesome one👏...Totally loved it...Do continue it..
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That was sweet...do update soon!! 👏
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loved how Raghu was questioning her
making her jealous and saying to tume koi faraq nahi parega?
naughty Raghu😆
beautifully written
I loved it!
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just wow kash ye scene mujhe dekhneko mile...nice OS pls.continue😉
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cntinue continue continue ...i want the 2nd part ...it was a "maar dala " OS wonderful ...update soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Aww u guys r really sweet i wasnt going to write a part 2 but if u all insist
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Posted: 11 years ago
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ahh man, what an os... kamaal kar diya...
i like the whole os.. the questions he was asking.. i was blushing...
and the way u wrote he wiped his lips ... made me red...

i am still smiling like an idiot
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: tintin0602

ahh man, what an os... kamaal kar diya...

i like the whole os.. the questions he was asking.. i was blushing...
and the way u wrote he wiped his lips ... made me red...

i am still smiling like an idiot



Lol thanks i was blushing when writing that cause raghu is always wiping his face with his bandana so it seems like a very raghu thing to do :)

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