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Posted: 17 years ago
#91

Originally posted by: teju

hi shona hi teju

sorry for late reply its ok hun

wow shona ur ff is too good thankooo hun

superb work...........keep it up

veer vishwa scences r really good & their nok -jhok.............. aawww im glad u liked these scenes

wht abt dharam and sia...........????????? will bring that in too wen i find a gd story for them but as of now im concentrating on VV 😳



thanks u teju for ur comments
they really mean alot to me

Shona
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Posted: 17 years ago
#92
wow shona
👏 👏 👏 plzz cont soon
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Posted: 17 years ago
#93

Originally posted by: ektay11

wow shona
👏 👏 👏 plzz cont soon



thx ekta
yh will do soon 😊
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Posted: 17 years ago
#94
ab kub continue kahrogii.me w8ting for ure next updatee 😃 😆
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Posted: 17 years ago
#95

Vishvaas 2 Part4:



Firstly my sincere apologys to all my readers for bring so late to post an update...i was really busy

nways thank u everyone for reading and commenting

brief recap: veer and vishva have new names( vansh n vinisha) they have new disguise. Vishva throws a tantrum but later apologises. VV figure out that some dakoos are giving information about their kingdom to other rival kingdoms. Both decide to go pashchim and find out more about the dakoos

NOTE: will add pix in a few minutes so do check out!!
heres next:

Veer and Vishva get into yet another get up...this time being that of a rich man and his wife...they wore very expensive clothes and jewellery for this get up

Vishva: vee...mera matlab vansh humme phir bes kyun badhla

Veer: kyunki woh dakoo ne humme dekhliya hai...chalo

both stop in the afternoon and settle dowm with the yatri who have come from all parts of india to visit mata rani's mandir

Veer asks vishva to sit inside and that he will be back shortly
Vishva walks outside a while through the back
she is shocked

Her handsome king of a husband was making chappatiis

Vishva: ye app kya kar rahe hai

Veer: mein woh bas

Vishva: app shayad bhool gaye hai...apki shaadi ho chuki hai...ye mera kaam hai...aur app ek maharaj hai...ye apko shobha nahin deta...app uthiye...mein kar leti hoon

Veer: nahin agar hum maharaj hei toh ap humari maharani hai...humne apse is liye shaadi nahin ki takke hum apko apne saath har makshad par lejaye aur apki jaan khatre mein dalen...aur nahi humne apse isliye shaadi ki take ap humare liye in halaton mein roti banaye...

Vishva: par veer ...humari baat toh suniye

Veer: kya ap baatein he sunaiyengi ya kuch kaam mein haath batayengi

He has a naughty look on his face
Vishva looks outraged and get some flour and

Vishva: lijiye madat kar deten hai...

she n veer share some cute hubby-wife moments as they make food together n later eat

after lunch both go to mata rani's mandir to pray....while walking threw the back veer sees a blocked door...he points this to vishva who joins him and both go to the door and press their ears against it and hear some faint voices

they catch the word "rajgardh" "barbadh" "hum kar denge"

Veer and Vishva get a way to open the door and enter....it was like a dimly lit cave

inside were about 20 men all whom stopped on their tracks at the sight of the 2 visitors

the sardar of the lot gets up

sardar: kaun ho tum

Veer: tumhari maharaj veer aur Rajgardh se kya dushmani hai

sardar: kaun ho tum

Veer: tumhara dushman he samajlo

sardar orders his men to attack VV

VV are too well prepared and blast sardars men in all direction...VV had almost all of the men finished...sardar fled and onli one man was left...VV capture him and demand to know about the plan they are making against Rajgardh

Veer points knife at his neck

Veer: jaan pyari hai toh sab kuch bak do warna is duniya ko alvida keh do

The man stutters and then slowly begins saying everything

Man: humare tabile ke bhil ki rani ko maharaj veer ke dadaji ne mar dala tha aur tabse humare bhil rehte toh rajgardh mein hai...par kaam rajgardh ke dushmaan ke liye karte hai

Veer: rajgardh ke dushmaan he kaun

Man: woh..woh

Vishva: ek dungi na rak ke....

the man is frightens in squeals

man: Ujjain ke raja Pratap Singh

Veer: Ujjain aur Rajgardh ke beech aisi koi dushmani ke bare mein meine toh nahin suna ...

Vishva: lagta hai humme apke dadaji se baat karni hogi...ya phir nivriti maa se

Veer nods

The man looks horrified

Man: app...app maha...maharaj veer ho...sardar...SARDAR!!!

Veer trys to shut him up but he was screaming loudle...Vishva pierces the daggar into his chest

Veer looks at her...taken aback
Vishva: woh...humare liye khatra tha...

on the otherhand in Aryanagar both Parth and Sambha have reached safely

Dharam: arre Parth tum..Veer aur Vishva kahan hai...kya woh tumhare saath nahin aye..aur ye kaun hai

Parth: pranam maharaj Dharam...ye sambha hai...rajgardh ka kaas guptachar...

Dharam: sainik Sambha ko undar le jaye...araam ke liye

Sambha goes with the sainik

Dharam: bolo Parth veer kahan hai

Parth: woh apke paas ah rahe the par (parth recalls the whole story to Dharam)

Dharam: veer ko aise nahin jana tha...kuch sainik ko toh apne saath le kar jata

Parth: app toh jante hai unhe...woh talwarbazi mein kudh ke ilawa maharani vishva, apke aur mere siva kisi pe bharosa nahin karte....

Dharam: woh dono(vv) khabhi nahin badlenge

on the otherhand Nivi is coming inside the palace from the gardens when she has that akward feeling if being followed

suddendly she catches sight of a figure...Nivi chases the figure and finally catches the figure...the face is revealed to be Vrinda

Nivi remebers taht Vrinda was her nurse at around the time veer was born but suddenly she left a few days after Veer was born

Nivi: toh tum ho jo mera peecha kar rahi thi...itne dino se...kyun

Vinda doesnt reply

Nivi:BATAO!!

Vrinda: yahan nahin...kisi khufiya jage

Nivi brings her to a chamber where nobody ever came...

Nivi:kyun leh ayi ho mujhe yahan

Vrinda: rani maa apse kuch kehna tha...ek sach jise mein aur chupa na nahin chahte...

Nivi:kaunsa sach...kaisa sach

Vrinda: rani maa...17 saal pehle...woh tofani raat....meine apke haath mein ek bacha diya tha...ye bolke woh apka hai...

Nivi:haan woh mera bacha veer he toh hai

Vrinda: nahin woh apka beta nahin...apka bacha janam lete he marchuka tha...app ye janke zinda nahin reh pati...uss waqt ek shramik widhwa ko bhi beta hua tha...meine uska beta apke haathon mein deh diya tha

Nivi: kya!

colour from nivi's face fades away...everything seemed hard to take in....

Nivi: ye nahin ho sakta...jhooth hai ye

Vrinda: yehi toh Sach hai!!!

Nivi: mujhe abhi kyun baata rahi ho....tum jhooth bol rahi ho

Vrinda: rani maa...mere paas kuch waqt bacha hai jeene ka...mujhe bohat badi bemari hai aur bachna namumkin...mein is raaz ke saath chain se nahin maar paati ye jante hue ke ek shramik Rajgardh ke singasen pe behta hai

nivi: VRINDA....veer mera beta hai...

Vrinda: rani maa sach ka samna kijiye

Nivi: tum ye baat kisi ko nahin batao gi....ye raaz kisiko pata lagna nahin chahiye.....sumji

Vrinda: ap jaisa chahe

nivi lets vrinda go

She thinks about their conversation...nivi falls to the ground unable to come to terms with the fact Veer isnt her biological son

she wipes her tears slowly

Nivi: veer mera beta hai....koi sach...koi insaan...koi bhagwan ye nahin baadal sakta...Veer mera beta hai...sirf mera!!!


enjoy

Shona

NOTE: next update will be some tim in mid august!!
Edited by **Shona** - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
#96
👏 fabalous!
nivi now knows the truth...i wonder wat will she do next...and i will keep wondering till mid august! 😕 😆 no probz 😆
vv sweet husband-wife moment! aaaw!! 😳 👏 👏
i loved it 👏 👏 👏
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Posted: 17 years ago
#97
Thanks for the update ....hmmm VV cooking together 😳 No Probs will wait for the next part in mid aug 😃 But Haan as usual great job Shona 👏 👏 Keep u the good work 😃
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Posted: 17 years ago
#98

Originally posted by: Girl_2007

👏 fabalous! thanx archana!!
nivi now knows the truth...i wonder wat will she do next...and i will keep wondering till mid august! 😕 😆 no probz 😆 lol yh u'll keep wondering til then
vv sweet husband-wife moment! aaaw!! 😳 👏 👏
i loved it 👏 👏 👏 i wanted to write this in moe detail but then i was in a rush to get this part posted so kinda didnt go into much detail



thank u so much Archana for ur comments...im such an idioti still havenet managed to comment on last 3 parts of ur FF which i have read

I'll just say this your a fantastic writer and ur FF rocks!! keep it up!!!
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: meghaparti

Thanks for the update ....hmmm VV cooking together 😳yup cooking n eating togther n enjoying as well No Probs will wait for the next part in mid aug 😃 lol yup abt a month n a bit But Haan as usual great job Shona 👏 👏 thank u megha for ur comments 😊 Keep u the good work 😃 will try to do so 😳

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Posted: 17 years ago
WOOW GREAT JOB I JSUT LVE URE FANFIC 👏 👏
NO PROBLEM WILL W8 TILL MID AUGUST 😳

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