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Posted: 12 years ago
#51
andy this ff is just amazing 👏👏, loved it, read the prologue and both the chapters together 😊. What a thrilling concept 👍🏼

Chapter 1:

Part 1: Manveer with a coat of Sugar: Fabulous work Andy, I loved the way how you have already shown initial attraction between them though, there is lot to explore and they still need to fall in love as deep as an ocean, but loved the way you started manveer relationship. I was getting bored of the player UV, and this humble UV is quite a change😳

Part2: All that glitters is not gold:Now when I read the first para where u introduced the family i somewhere got a doubt that all is not crystal clear. I have a feeling it is Brijraj, but still will wait for the story to unfold 😳

Part 3: The masked killer-Mr Shark: Again I have a feeling this Mr shark is someone who knows Manyata. IF I let my imagination go wild(read at your own risk😆), I can see UV as the killer, who kills, gets money puts on business , his real identity is UV but his hidden identity is being Mr Shark. Lol I know, this is so utter rubbish, but then I warned you I'm letting my imagination go wild 😆. Or an alternative I can see is Uday rescuing M and for the first time bringing Mr shark out of his shadows😉

Chapter 2:

Part 1: The cryptic Rohan:I have a feeling andy that Rohan is behind Mr sharma's desapperance just to get the deal. I mean instead of brijraj it can be rohan who is paying to kill M, but then I dont see how he will get the throne after M<,so it has to be someone from her family. But still Rohan is not in my good books as for now😆

Part 2: Killer is a skilled player: I must say Andy the precision and depth with which u have described the killer and his preparation to kill M is just amazing 👏👏. I mean for example, my friends dad works at BSNL, I'm surprised u know about this telephone company in Mumbai. you do ur homework before writing 😳. And now what the heck does he mean by
you will be mine before you leave this world oh it would be so exiting
gosh this guy does seem to be creepy, he is lusting over M 🤢😡 and now by teh explanation you have given here, I can say it might not be UV, so Mr Shark being Uv that possibility is meager now 😆

Part 3: Bubble of romance bursts: Lol I loved how Manyata went on till her honeymoon trip 😳😆, gosh she is so much head over heels in love with UV😳😳. And UV just flatly breaks her bubble of dreams by bringing the business deal😆. I have a feeling that this business deal is UV's way of staying close to M😳😳.

Loved both the chapter andy, continue soon. And di I tell you how interesting your title "Second shadow" is . Actually this title makes me think that probably UV might be the killer!

Please update soon 😊
Edited by chitra_rao - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#52

Originally posted by: ...navina...

Great update Andy👍🏼. Mr Shark is a master of disguise ... hmmm - very interesting. But didn't u promise me a murder in this update. Is Mr Sharma , the UNLUCKY guy??? I love the way Manyata's thoughts often wander towards Uday. Shame man - all her dreams shattered🥺. But I think Uday is taking her there , maybe for a romantic surprise ... and he is just pretending that it is work related😳. Loved the chapter Andy❤️, thanks for the PM😊 ... & DON'T U DARE THINK OF STOPPING THIS SS😡!!!

PS : Sorry for the late reply...
... I was STILL busy CRYING over MY UPDATE😭!!!

thank you dear knew that you were busy over there
yes mr sharma is that unlucky guy
the third update will satisfy all your doubts😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
#53

Originally posted by: Sanarasheedroxx

The prologue is awesome Rest i'll read tom and cmnt after dat

thanks dear take your time
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Posted: 12 years ago
#54

Originally posted by: chitra_rao

andy this ff is just amazing 👏👏, loved it, read the prologue and both the chapters together 😊. What a thrilling concept 👍🏼


Chapter 1:

Part 1: Manveer with a coat of Sugar: Fabulous work Andy, I loved the way how you have already shown initial attraction between them though, there is lot to explore and they still need to fall in love as deep as an ocean, but loved the way you started manveer relationship. I was getting bored of the player UV, and this humble UV is quite a change😳

Part2: All that glitters is not gold:Now when I read the first para where u introduced the family i somewhere got a doubt that all is not crystal clear. I have a feeling it is Brijraj, but still will wait for the story to unfold 😳

Part 3: The masked killer-Mr Shark: Again I have a feeling this Mr shark is someone who knows Manyata. IF I let my imagination go wild(read at your own risk😆), I can see UV as the killer, who kills, gets money puts on business , his real identity is UV but his hidden identity is being Mr Shark. Lol I know, this is so utter rubbish, but then I warned you I'm letting my imagination go wild 😆. Or an alternative I can see is Uday rescuing M and for the first time bringing Mr shark out of his shadows😉

Chapter 2:

Part 1: The cryptic Rohan:I have a feeling andy that Rohan is behind Mr sharma's desapperance just to get the deal. I mean instead of brijraj it can be rohan who is paying to kill M, but then I dont see how he will get the throne after M<,so it has to be someone from her family. But still Rohan is not in my good books as for now😆

Part 2: Killer is a skilled player: I must say Andy the precision and depth with which u have described the killer and his preparation to kill M is just amazing 👏👏. I mean for example, my friends dad works at BSNL, I'm surprised u know about this telephone company in Mumbai. you do ur homework before writing 😳. And now what the heck does he mean by
you will be mine before you leave this world oh it would be so exiting
gosh this guy does seem to be creepy, he is lusting over M 🤢😡 and now by teh explanation you have given here, I can say it might not be UV, so Mr Shark being Uv that possibility is meager now 😆

Part 3: Bubble of romance bursts: Lol I loved how Manyata went on till her honeymoon trip 😳😆, gosh she is so much head over heels in love with UV😳😳. And UV just flatly breaks her bubble of dreams by bringing the business deal😆. I have a feeling that this business deal is UV's way of staying close to M😳😳.

Loved both the chapter andy, continue soon. And di I tell you how interesting your title "Second shadow" is . Actually this title makes me think that probably UV might be the killer!

Please update soon 😊

thanks chitra for this wonderfull analysis
yes mr shark lust her
but uv loves her
i never thought uv will be the killer
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Posted: 12 years ago
#55

CHAPTER 3

Manyata say besides uday in his car. Though uday was rich beyond words he never flaunted his wealth in front of others .he drove a tata innova unlike other business tycoons who drove bmw's and other costly brand

Manyata checked her phone message to make sure that he had indeed sent her that message in the morning . it was still there but she must have misunderstood its meaning. Uday was busy speaking about the deal and manyata was replying in a totally business manner. They stoped by a huge towering complex

U: come we have reached the place

M: here? I thought we were going to see an iron ore site

U: yes , since the place is of hundreds of acres I decided to give you its arial view first before seeing the actual site. Finished your questions? Shall we see the place now.

M:ok uday🥱

They entered the lift and uday pressed the button. As the lift opened uday led the way soon they reached an outdoor restaurant on the 50 th floor of the building. The manager approached them and told that uday's reservation for a table of two was ready. Manyata looked confused

U: surprised princess. There is no business deal or anything , I just wanted to see this surprised look on your face.my 1 you should have seen your face first excitement followed by disappointment and now happiness

M: uday😳

U: so did you like my present?😉

M: uday you actually scared me with your behavior today. Yes I love this surprise😛

U: don't worry the site is still under geologists investigation, any whiff of a potential strike you will the first to know

Both of them order and enjoy their talks . uday excuses himself to use the washroom.

As manyata looks around the blue sky above , the ancient grandfather clock whose hands read12 30 pm, the beautiful furniture, the peole enjoying their meal and some in an animated talk with others . the waiter served their food

Unaware to her was a pair of eyes that was fixed on her. The moment he heard that she was leaving her office ,he had followed her. Such a beautiful piece of natures work ,that milky complexion, that lips, that curves – oh it was driving him crazy. A simple push down, the poor thing would be down , broken and dead .but not now he wanted her , to kiss those lips ,feel her breasts with his hands, love her maybe even try using whips and chains on her- oh he was getting high. His thoughts were interrupted when he saw her companion(uday) approach the table

U: so how did you like the restaurant😊

M: its lovely and so romantic place to be alone ,you will be able to think clearly from there

U: no I disagree, its not romantic when your alone . its becomes romantic when you have someone special with you

M: and now do you think its romantic

U: (looking straight into her eyes)yes😉

Manyata blushed 😳hearing that comment.she puts her head down able to look into that mesmerizing eyes

U: tell me don't you think you are being exploited by your family .they are not even your own, I mean your stepdad and stepsister

M: uday😲 please don't bring in the word step over here. They are my own dad and sis they love me more than themselves. No body is exploiting me. how could it be exploitation when you do it out of your own will, I love my family so I spoil them

U: ok princess no more of this conversation

They continued their conversation with other talks

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Mr shark checked his watch, it was 8 am

As he entered the steel factory he felt a very elated, killing made him feel like god

He looked and saw his prey mr Sharma naked tied up in a huge steel vessel filled with water

The water was filled with worms, that was happily eating him alive

He could hear the moaning of his prey, it excited him

Mr shark had received a call from a person who wanted mr Sharma killed immediately. A price of 1.75 crore was fixed. The advance of 1 crore was given. Mr shark also hated Sharma , a ruthless tycoon, he too wanted him dead, but didn't do anything.now that he was getting paid for it he decided to take out his hatred for that man in his own style. That evening shark kidnapped Sharma , chloroformed him and brought him to this steel factory ,tied him up and put him in the vessel of water with worms

Mr shark: hallo mr Sharma glad to meet you over here

Sharma: you bast**d, how dare you kidnap me,once iam out I wont leave you alive

M s: only if your alive , so no problem. Lets face the fact someone paid me to finish you, so here iam doing my work.

S: ill pay you double or even more name your price let me free

M s: I would have done it but I too have personnel accout to finnish with you, so you cant buy me out

S:please, don't hurt me who are you what you want

Ms: removing his mask, now you know the reason, I think the water is polluted lets warm it up

Sharma looked with fear into the eyes of his killer, the water started to be hot, soon he started to boil, he shouted for his life his skin was blistering, he just wanted to die,he was being cooked live

Ms: ok time empty the water, do you know this is a steel producing factory, so what's fun without having steel in this killing? After all you are a steel baron no?

S: please, please

Ms: ( as the water was being emptied)sharma, just look up

As Sharma looked up he say hot molten reddish steel being brought, he knew what was coming, he closed his eyes

Mr shark pressed the switch and the molten ,red hot steel fell into the steel vessel, sharmas screams was heard and then a silence🤢

Mr shark, was pleased with his work and headed home to listen to manyatas conversations though the bugging devices he had fitted

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They left the restaurant and headed towards udays car parked on the opposite side of the road as manyata was crossing the road a speeding car headed towards her. Manyata was dumbstruck she didn't know what to do .uday pulled her away from the path of the speeding car in a nick of a second. the car passed them the distance between them and the car about 10 cm

U: (shaking manyata) princess are you ok?please princess say something please

M; (manyata was still in shock) iam ok uday ,lets go😕

U: are you sure princess?

M: yes, can we leave this place, please

U: sure you dontwant to visit the hospital

M: no uday I am ok

She held udays hand as they crossed the road and uday started the car

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Mr shark was angry, very very angry as he drove his car away

who is that guy trying to spoil his plans

he was trying hard to finish this assignment soon and here comes a guy trying to spoil his whole plan

he will pay for his mistake😡

he had noted the car's number

he will pay dearly

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that brings you to the end of chapter 3

thank you for reading it

hope you enjoyed it

do hit the like comment and pls do comment

even one word is enough

ignore grammer mistakes and other errors

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Posted: 12 years ago
#56
aawsssmmm andy babyyy 👏👏👏
Edited by huma12. - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#57
O My God this Mr. shark is literally after manyata i hate him Kutta Kamina. Bechari manyata ko marnay lga tha lekin Thank God Uday nay bacha liya.
I knew i knew Uday was planning something good for manyata. Aww i loved their date.
Update Soon.
ThanX 4 pm.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#58
AWESOME Andy
this SS is very good
so much suspense
well written dear
do cont soon
thanks 4 de PM
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Posted: 12 years ago
#59
I think m in a full reader mood today...😉 jus read all three parts together, it's really a mysterious FF..n I love mysteries.😳
Beautifully written n great characterization..👏 👏 👏
😲Somebody paid to Mr. Shark to kill Manyata OMG...
I think that person was Manyata's step dad, I've a feeling or may be Rohan...😳
Uday n Manyata's convo was nice.😳 J is really cute in this FF, thanks for making her a positive character here but I don't like this Rohan..🤢
Mr. Shark a brutal Killer.. who wants to kill Manyata ...
n now wants to harm Uday also..
Great updates Andy,👏 mysterious but very well written..👍🏼
Thanks for the wonderful updates.😊
Do update ASAP.😛
Good work.🤗

Edited by Vasishtha - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#60
Awesome update dear.
Like the cute date uday had planned
This mr shark is evil personified.
Thanks 4 pm. nice thriller you have going on.

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