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Posted: 13 years ago
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beautiful update
loved udays surprise
do try to write long parts
thanks for pm
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thnx! I am surprised I got a response!Nice to see my writting isn't that bad.😉

Originally posted by: salekh1

Nice FF

please contnuue soon😛

Thank you very much😃.I will surely continue.

Originally posted by: AKlover101

Gr8 ff!!! Do continue soon!!:)


Thnx!I did't expect to get a response you know! I can be very pessimistic sometimes but on the other hand I can also be optimistic.Even I don't know if I am an optimist or a pessimist.😆

Originally posted by: alissa345

Continue continue 😃

Thanks you very much for replying and I will surely continue!

Originally posted by: manveerlover


A great start do c0ntinue

Thnks!Will continue.

Originally posted by: dumas

nice start continue soon and pm

Thnks! and BTW love the pic!😉

Originally posted by: sirjee

waooo plzz keep writing...n finally i get to read sum FF on manveer after marriage...gr88 going gal...


Thnx very much! and there are many FF's of manveer after marriage.I will make a list of a few and PM you the list if you want!

Originally posted by: shruti-love

awesome ff

do cont soon
plss pm me


Thnx!Will continue!

P.S - If anyone wants to be PMed then plz tell!




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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: dumas

awesome update that was so cute loved it maanyata and uday sneaking a kiss but was interrupted j again loved how he planned a surprise anniversary party for he loved it that was very beautiful thanks for the pm and the translations

Thnx and Thnx.First one for commenting and second for expressing you view.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: shruti-love

beautiful update

loved udays surprise
do try to write long parts
thanks for pm


Thnk you very much for commenting and I will surely try writting longer updates!Plus my exams are about to end(today I somehow got some time!) so I can try!
Edited by navyan07 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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waooo plss keep on continuing...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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That was sooo cute!!!! AMAZING UPDATE!!! Do continue soon!!!;)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thank you very much for the lovely comments guys and gals.Here's chapter 3:
Chapter 3
Last chapter : Uday planned a special surprise for Manyata and handed her a gift.
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Manyata opened the gift to find two precious gifts inside.Precious,not because of the cost but because of the one who gave them to her.One a beautiful necklace with their(Uday and Manyata's) names carved on it and the other, an album.She tried to open the album but it was locked.
Manyata : Uday, yeh necklace aur diary bahut pyaare hai par yeh diary mujhse khul nahi raha hai.(Uday, this necklace and this diary are very pretty but I can't seem to open this diary.)
Uday : Iski ek chabi hai princess par woh toh apko khud dhoondne padegi.(There is a key to it princess but you will have to find it yourself.)
Manyata : At least give me a hint.
Uday didn't say anything,he just pointed to his heart.Manyata was confused,very confused.
Manyata : Yeh kaisa clue hai?(What type of a clue is this?)
Uday : Aapko clue chahiye tha,woh aapko mil gaya, ab iska matlab aapko khud nikalna padega.(You wanted a clue and I gave it to you, now its up to you to crack the clue.)
Manyata : Theek hai! theek hai! Main aako chabi dhoond kar dekhaungi.(Ok! Ok! I will show you what I can do!)
Uday : Toh dekhaiye!(Then show!)
Manyata : Thoda time to do.(Give me some time.)
Uday : Ok! par abhi ke liye*gets on his knees(again)* kya aap humare saath dance karengi?(Ok!But for now*Get on his knees(again)*will you dance with me?)
Manyata : *teasingly*Do I have a choice?
Uday : *Teasingly*Filhaal to nahi!(For now you don't)
The couple make their way to the dance floor and start to dance.Everyone were amazed at the couple's love for each other.
Manyata : Waise Uday sach bataiye, kya aapko yaad tha ki aaj humari anniversary hai?(tell the truth Uday,did you remember today it was our anniversary?)
Uday broke into a laughter.Also, by now many more couples have joined the dance floor.
Uday : *in between laughs* Hum sach kaha rahe hai princess , hume yaad tha.(I am telling the truth princess, I remembered.)
Manyata : Kya pata, aapko koi yaad bhi toh dila skta hai.(Who knows if someone reminded you.)
Uday : Come on princess, hum par itna toh bharosa kijiye!(Come on princess, at least trust me a bit!)
Till now the music had stopped and everyone were staring at them.They were too lost in each other to notice.So, J and Jaggat decided to snap them out of their trance.
J : Hello!Anybody home!
Manyata and Uday turned to notice Everyone staring at them.They were very embarassed.
Jaggat :*teasingly* J, I think they are too busy to hear us.
Manyata : *blush* J!Jaggat! Its nothing like that.
Uday : *blush* Yes!We were only talking.
Jaggat : talking about...
Manyata and Uday didn't know what to say.Nothing came to their minds but they had to say something so finally they managed to get something out.
Manyata : We were discussing about tommorow's function.
Vijay Bhai who was also present there made them blush even more by saying:
Vijay Bhai : Yeah,right!Discussing ways of sharing an eyelock without letting anyone know.
Uday :Please Vijay Banna!We are telling the truth.
Vijay Bhai : So when did I say you aren't.
Dadi Sahab took pity on Uday and Manyata and decided to save them.
Dadi Sahab : All right J,Jaggat and Vijay.Enough teasing them.Let them have some time alone. Manyata,Uday you are excused for a while but come back soon.
Uday managed to get something out of his mouth.
Uday : Th..Thanks Dadi S..Sahab.
Saying this the couple excused themselves and went to Uday's room in the hotel where he sometimes stayed due to many reasons.
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Manyata : Dekho aapne kya kiya Uday.(Now look what you did Uday)
Uday : Excuse me princess par aap itne baate kar rahi thi ya hum?(Excuse me princess but who was talking so much?)
Manyata : *in between giggles*Let me think...You!
Uday : Wrong answer princess.
Manyata : No, right answer and where's my prize for the correct answer?
Uday : Well, argue karne ka toh koi faida nahi toh hum aapko aapka prize hi de dete hai.(Well,no point in arguing so I guess I might as well give the prize.)
Saying that he brought his lips close to hers but as luck(real bad luck for them😆) would have it,someone knocked on the door before their lips could touch.
Manyata : I'll open the door.
Maid : *bowing*Rajkumari sa, rajmata apko aur yuvraj ko niche bula rahi hain.(Rajkumari sa, rajmata is calling the yuvraj and you downstairs.)
Manyata : Usne kahiye hum aarahe hain.(Tell her we'll be right down)
Maid : Ji!(Yes)
Manyata closed the door again.
Manyata : Daadi Sahab humein niche bula rahi hain.(Dadisa is calling us down)
Uday : 😒Chalte hain.(lets go)
Manyata : Hain, chalte hain.(Yes, lets go)
They start making their way to the restro - bar.
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While walking:
Manyata : Waise kya aapne Unnati ko dekha hai?(BTW did you see Unnati)
Uday : Nahi, kya aapne dekha?(No, did you)
Manyata : Agar dekha hota toh poochti kyun.(If I did, why would I ask you)
Uday : Hum unhe call kar kar pooche hai,OK?(I will call and ask her,OK?)
Manyata : Okay!
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Uday tried to call Unnati many times but Unnati did'nt pick up and finally after what seemed like a 100 tries she picked up the phone.
Uday : Finally aapne phone uthaya Unnati, waise aap ho kaha.(Finally Unnati!Anyways where are you?)
Unnati : *voice sounding serious* Dada kya ye aap bol rahe hain?(Dada, is that you?)
Uday : Ha hum hain par huya kya?(Yes,its me but what happened?)
Unnati : *very tensed*Dada, your life is in danger, plz come home fast and bring Manyata too!
To be continued...
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Guys, I know its short(again) but I promise that from tomorrow I will post longer ones and plus my exams just ended today(got the independence😆) so I will have more time.
Coments,criticisms,jootas,chappals,likes,dislikes etc etc are welcome.
P.S - The 'key' to the diary has a story(or at least I made one behind it) which I will show in my later posts.
Till then,
Navya



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Posted: 13 years ago
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awww...such a cute update ❤️ and i totally luv your idea of telling their story through flashbacks...update soon 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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very nice ff navya
but you haven't pm me 😭 anways keep writting and pm me
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Posted: 13 years ago
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cute update
liked it
waiting to see the twist

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