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By the way I'm not even trying to guess the writers. I'm bad at that. 😆
I liked the use of research to find drug facts. Added to the reality of the story.
The way you showed every minute's update between DCP and Abhijeet was hilarious.
Seeing Devyani was nice. Not many people think of her when they think past cops.
I think there were only supposed to be 5 cops, but that's okay for me.
Confused with the social media integration, but that's okay.
Story 2
Good story. Yes! Some French! I don't understand it completely, but I understood quite a bit of this.
Nice to see Vivek again and nice to see Dr. Niyati as well.
You got the dates wrong though. 4 days becomes Tuesday, not Wednesday. 😆
How did the lady remember the Ganesh Idol?
Story 3
Referring to the duo as bhaisaab was a bit weird to read, but I liked how you included Freddy and Manisha's parts.
I liked the FB clue.
The bonding in the story was splendid. And the clue that Freddy found was great.
Tarika being upset was a bit unconvincing. Additionally a bit hard to read because of grammar.
Story 4
Woah such a long story! But then it was also very detailed so it was nice to read.
The idea of Manisha creating the FB accounts was good.
Leaving animals with patterns was a great move because it made making connections easier.
Err...I'm just a bit confused. How did the change in a picture catch Freddy's eye? Was there something in them?
Why would Muskaan eat candy from a stranger? Wouldn't she suspect something was wrong?
Thank god no YSPT. I would have cut off lots of marks if it was YSPT. 😆
Nice use of facts.
Story 5
Loved the beginning! Been a while since FW actually showed something like that.
Asha's entry seemed forced.
Wow! Using Viren was a great move.
Some rushed investigation.
DCP's attack. You just got bonus marks. 😆
The goodbye was nice.
Story 6
The prologue was really nice.
Yes send T away!
The investigation and murders progressed nicely.
The conversation with T seemed a bit out of place!
I don't really think that Abhijeet would make mocking gestures. At least that's what I feel.
I'm a bit confused with how the culprit got caught. It just seemed too easy.
Otherwise a good story.
Story 7
Rajat and Asha. A nice combination. 👏
I rather enjoyed this story. It flowed well. Was written well and was enjoyable.
The investigation was done well and the subtleness was handled well.
Didn't much like the motive though, but overall an amazing story.
Story 8
Good use of siggies firstly.
A nice story, though I had some trouble understanding some of the words.
Vineet. Nice. It been's a while since anyone used him in any of their stories. And I liked that you included Dr. Alka.
I will be honest. The Hindi was a bit hard to understand at places and I find that the motive was weak as well.
Otherwise well done.
Story 9
SRK fan huh? 😆
The plastic bag with a red rose reminded me of a Criminal Minds episode, but well done nonetheless.
I don't know why, but you didn't concentrate on the plastic bags at all. I'm sure a lot of clues could have been derived from the bags leading the investigation.
I felt there were some loopholes in the questioning at AUK lab. There should have been more questions asked.
Good motive and good investigation overall.
Story 10
I liked the intro with DCP, but the grammar did make the story a bit hard to understand. I had to keep going back to understand each line.
Vivek and Muskaan and Dr. Niyati (not Niddhi) was nice.
Good use of photos to develop the story.
Some scenes seemed to drag for me.
I did have some issues with the way you kept putting in your personal preference for characters in the middle of the story. Please make it objective.
Overall a good story.
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