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Posted: 10 years ago
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I really liked the story, Diya. It was well written and narrated aptly, comfortable to understand and follow. 👏 😊 I really liked the characterization of the fantastic four, the duo interactions and especially the hospital scene in the beginning. The suspense was well maintained in regard to the investigative part. You really did justice to Freddy sir and portrayed him aptly, the way we all want to see on screen. And for me the highlight was Vivek sir and all his scenes with the seniors. 👏 👏 Really reminded me of the old days. Miss him a lot.

Thank you for posting this here and giving us all an opportunity to enjoy it. I went through some of your stories on FF, and enjoyed what I read. Keep it up. 😃

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: DemonStar

I really liked the story, Diya. It was well written and narrated aptly, comfortable to understand and follow. 👏 😊 I really liked the characterization of the fantastic four, the duo interactions and especially the hospital scene in the beginning. The suspense was well maintained in regard to the investigative part. You really did justice to Freddy sir and portrayed him aptly, the way we all want to see on screen. And for me the highlight was Vivek sir and all his scenes with the seniors. 👏 👏 Really reminded me of the old days. Miss him a lot.

Thank you for posting this here and giving us all an opportunity to enjoy it. I went through some of your stories on FF, and enjoyed what I read. Keep it up. 😃


Thanks for liking it.😃

Oh u r on FF also..!! What's ur username?

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: 23Diya

Oh u r on FF also..!! What's ur username?

Purvian07. I've not posted anything there, though. Just read a selected few stories. 😆

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Originally posted by: DemonStar

Purvian07. I've not posted anything there, though. Just read a selected few stories. 😆


Even I havn't read many stories there...
Just let people read my stories n get bored...😆
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Originally posted by: 23Diya


Even I havn't read many stories there...
Just let people read my stories n get bored...😆

Getting bored is awesome, in that case. 😉

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: DemonStar

Getting bored is awesome, in that case. 😉


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Don't worry then, you'll be getting bored whenever I'm free for a few days.😉
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Originally posted by: 23Diya

😆😆

Don't worry then, you'll be getting bored whenever I'm free for a few days.😉

Hehe. Looking forward to it! 😆 😊

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi friends...
I'm probably the most infrequent member of this forum, but kya kare, I'v no option except missing IF...😔
But here I got a three days holiday and thus jumped here back for getting relaxed...😛

Being here, I thought to post another story here...I hope you'll like it and give your feedback on it...😃
Oh!! I just discovered that there is a word limit too...so I'll be posting it in two parts...😳

YOU COULD HAVE TRUSTED ME...

"Ye kise le aye...bewakoof...kaha tha Abhijeet ko uthana hai...aur tum ise...(pointing to the man lying unconscious over the ground...) ab iska kya karu mai..."

A scared voice arose, " Sorry bhai...galti se ho gaya...apun to waisa-ich kiya jaisa apun ko Guru ne kaha tha...per pata nahi gadi me uss bade Inspector ki jagah YEH mamu kaise aa gaya..."

" Abey...!! Galti khud kerta hai aur mera naam leta hai...tune theek se dekha hi nahi hoga gadi me kaun hai..." exclaimed Guru...

"Kya bolta hai guru tum...apun pakka dekha tha, gadi me wo bada inspector hi tha..."

"Aur yaha aate aate wo Daya ban gaya...hai na..." a sarcastic voice completed his sentence...to Guru in frustrated tone, "Maine kaha tha, iss Pakya ko mat le apne plan me...koi kaam sahi nahi kerta hai ye...tu mana nahi meri baat...abb ker seva iss pehelwan ki..."

Guru tried but could not control his laugh in between this serious discussion too...he somehow controlled himself and said, "Arre yaar Rony, kyu bacche pe itna charh raha hai...(Rony tried to say something but Guru stopped him by placing a hand over his shoulder and added...) tere ko wo inspector chahiye na...kya naam tha...umm...haan, Abhijeet...mai layega usse tere paas...(Rony looked at him...) arre dekhta kya hai...mai bola na, bas...fikar not...

Rony: Tu phir isko bolega...(pointing to Pakya in chewing tone...) aur ye sare game ki watt laga dega...

Guru: Chinta mat ker...iss baar wo (looking towards Pakya, said in funny tone...) iska BADA INSPECTOR khud ayega humare paas...

Pakya (amazed): Kya!!! Sach...

Rony (not interested): Haan, uska toh dimag phir gaya hai na jo khud chal ke ayega ki bhai Guru, aapne bulaya aur hum chale aye...abb maaro mujhe...

Guru (winked with): Dekh lena agar aisa na hua toh...

Rony still didn't believe him and left from there...

CID Bureau...

Abhijeet was working on his computer but his eyes were moving frequently from the computer screen to his mobile phone kept on the table...but not finding any calls or messeges from his friend, he was getting angry, but at the same time, he was worried for him...

He waited for another five minutes but now he was getting extremely impatient, so just picked the mobile up and called him again...

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Abhijeet (angrily): Damn it...(He cut the call without listening the voice completely...)

He little pressed his forehead to ease his tension, then looked up and found that he had gained the attention of a few eyes...sighing, he stood up and started moving out when Freddy's voice stopped him...

Freddy (in concern): Sir aap theek hai na...?? Tab se kuch pareshan lag rahe hai??

Abhijeet: Haan Freddy mai theek hu...aur pareshan nahi bas ek case ko lekar thora...(but he stopped in middle as his cell started ringing in his hand...)

He looked at the caller and was relieved...He hurriedly picked up the call before it got cut...

Abhijeet: Yaar Daya tum...

Voice: Ji...mai Daya nahi hu...

Abhijeet didn't get what was happening...his cell showed that Daya was calling and now he hears some unknown person talking from his mobile...his mind ran fast enough to create images of all possible happenings that might have lead to this before he spoke his next sentence...some of them were not good to think of, though...they made him afraid, internally...

Abhijeet (tensed but firm voice): Kaun hai aap...?? Daya kaha hai?? Aur uska mobile apke paas kaise...??

He heard the person replying and at the same time, he heard the ACP's cabin door opening...he looked at that direction and found him coming out towards him...he had probably read the tension from his face...seeing ACP sir coming, all others too stood up and came nearer...

ACP sir asked Abhijeet by eyes what had happened and he just mouthed Daya' to let him understand that the matter was related to Daya...ACP sighed and waited for him to end the call...

Abhijeet (still on call): Iss waqt exactly aap kaha pe hai?? (waited for reply and then said...)Theek hai...aap wahi rukiye, hum abhi pahuchte hai...(and he cut the call...)

ACP: Kya hua Abhijeet...?? Koi pareshani??

Abhijeet (worried): Pareshani toh hai sir...Daya gayab hai...

ACP: Kyaa...!! Kaise...??

All others were tensed as well but they kept quiet as the two seniors spoke...

Abhijeet: Sir, mai aapko sab raaste me batata hu...abhi aap chaliye sir...

ACP: Theek hai...Freddy, Vivek... hum dono ja rahe hai...tum dono tab tak kaam sambhal lena...

Freddy: Sir...Daya sir theek to hai na...

Abhijeet: Don't worry Freddy...use kuch nahi hoga...

The two left the bureau and went towards the place from where the call came...

In the car...

As Abhijeet was driving, ACP sir asked him...

ACP: Abb batao Abhijeet...kya hua?? Aur tumne ishaare se baki sabko laane se mana kyu ker diya...

Abhijeet: Sir hum dono minister Pradhan ke murder per kaam ker rahe the aur isi beech Daya gayab hua...ho sakta hai ki Daya ka gayab hona usi case se related ho...aur agar aisa hai to pura case team ke samne aa jayega...

ACP: Hmm...ye sahi kiya tumne Abhijeet...ye case bahut nazuk hai...sabko pata nahi chalna chahiye iske baare me...(after a pause...) per ye Daya gayab hua kaise??

Abhijeet: Sir abhi mujhe jo call aya tha wo Daya ke mobile se aya tha...koi ladka hai jise ye mobile petrol pump ke paas pada hau mila to usne utha liya aur waha ke security guard ko de diya...aur usi se usne mujhe call kiya...(his voice faded as he completed the sentence...)

ACP looked at him and found him in deep thoughts...

ACP: Kya baat hai Abhijeet...kya soch rahe ho...??

Abhijeet: Sir, Daya ke mobile se unhone call kiya kaise...uske mobile me to password laga hua hai...

Both were confused...but they gave a break to their thoughts as they had reached the petrol pump from where the caller had called...

The car stopped at a corner at the petrol pump and both came out of it...they searched for the guard and found him standing at some distance...they walked towards him and patted him from the back...he turned and asked...

Guard: Haan saab, kya chahiye??

ACP: Mobile...

Guard (confused): Mera saab??

Abhijeet (made it clear): Hum CID se hai...tumhi ne call kiya tha...

Guard (suspicious): Aap CID se hai...!?

Abhijeet sighed and took out his badge and showed him...when the guard looked satisfied, he asked again...

Abhijeet: Abb bolo...mobile kaha hai wo??

Guard: Mere cabin me hai saab...ayiye mai deta hu apko...(he led them to a small guard's cabin and handed the mobile to ACP sir...)

ACP pressed the unlock button but it demanded password...he simply passed it over to Abhijeet with a teasing, "Lo bhai tumhara kaam..." that bought a momentary smile on his face...he put the password and check the mobile...

Abhijeet: Sir, akhri call mujhe hi kiya tha, jo isne (pointing to guard...) kiya tha aur usse pehle uske khabri ko call kiya tha per usse to mere samne hi baat hui thi...

ACP: Hmm...(to guard...) acha wo ladka kaha gaya jise ye mobile mila tha?? Rukne ke liye kaha than a use bhi...

Guard: Sir wo to ruka tha per uska chacha aya aur use thappar maar ke apne sath le gaya...per sir, mujhe pata hai usse wo mobile kaha mila tha...

Abhijeet: Kaha??

Guard: Wo...uss jagah pe...(he said pointing to a place...)

ACP: Acha theek hai...zaroorat pade to phir se ayenge...(they moved back to the bureau...on the way, their conversation went on...)

In the car...

ACP: Abhijeet, tumne jab mujhe subah call kiya tha tab tumne kaha tha ki tum dono sath hi aa rahe ho...phir achanak wo baad me kyu aane laga...??

Abhijeet: Sir actually hum dono raat ko mere ghar par hi ruk gaye the case discuss kerne ke liye...mai aur Daya do directions me kaam ker rahe the taaki kaam jaldi ho aur deadline se pehle hum khooni ko pakad sake...hume kafi saboot mile the per unhe assemble kerna tha...kafi hadd tak to hum ye ker chuke par phir bhi kuch links missing the...

Daya and Abhijeet were looking at the laptop screen keenly...

Daya: Boss, abhi bhi kuch chize missing hai...inke bina hum khooni tak nahi pahuch payenge...

Abhijeet(thinking): Hmm...(then added casually standing from the sofa...)chalo, kal dekhte hai...abhi to humare paas iske siway aur kuch hai bhi nahi...kal bureau jaane se pehle ek baar apne khabri se baat ker lena...mai bhi ek baar apne khabri se baat ker leta hu...kal subah tak kuch na kuch to pata chal hi jana chahiye...

Daya: Mai bhi abhi Ranjan ko call ker deta hu...

Abhijeet looked at Daya: Ranjan...!! (trying to remember...)ye wahi hai na...tumhara purana khabri...

Daya: Haan yaar...wahi hai...

Abhijeet (moving towards kitchen with the empty mugs...): Ye kaha se aa gaya...chala gaya tha na Mumbai se...

Daya: Haan...abhi kuch din pehle hi wapas aaya hai...keh raha tha ki naukri chali gayi waha toh yaha wapas aana pada...jab tak yaha koi kaam nahi milta tab tak mere sath kaam kerna chahta tha...maine bhi haan ker di...banda tha to kaam ka...

Abhijeet came back and sat relaxly over sofa: Haan...kafi cases me madad ki thi pehle bhi...

Daya: Hmm...

Both called to their respective informers and then went to sleep after wishing good night to each other...

Next Morning...

Abhijeet's House...

Duo sat on the dining table still discussing the case...Abhijeet was checking something on the laptop alongside having his breakfast...

Abhijeet: Daya maine wo information check ker li hai jo mujhe mere sources se mili thi...raaste me ek baari tum bhi check ker lena jo info tumhe tumhare sources se mili thi...

Daya: Ok...!! Mai dekhta hu...(smilingly...)boss, driving tumhe kerni paregi...

Abhijeet: Adhe raaste ki baat hai...phir tumhi sambhalna apni car...(Daya laughed...)

After completing their breakfast; they took the needful and went out...

In the car...

Daya was checking the details when the car stopped...Daya closed the laptop and went out as he had to meet one of his informer...Abhijeet waited inside the car only while fidgeting with his mobile...

After around 15 minutes, Daya returned and Abhijeet signalled him towards the Driver's seat...

Daya was driving while Abhijeet was busy with the case details that they had arranged the night before...Suddenly Abhijeet exclaimed...

Abhijeet: Oh no...!!

Daya looked at his frustrated face and asked: Kya hua...??

Abhijeet: Yaar isme Trisha (minister's daughter...) ki nany ka statement to hai hi nahi...ye kaise choot gaya...

Daya (confused): Nahi hai...!! Ye to itna important tha iss case me...mujhe yaad hai maine baki records ke sath hi rakha tha apne locker me...

Abhijeet: Shayad wahi reh gaya hoga galti se...(Daya nodded, tensed if it gets misplaced...)chinta mat karo mai dekhta hu jaake...tab tak tum Ranjan se mil lo...

Daya: Theek hai...Par record milte hi ek baar mujhe call ker dena please...

Abhijeet: Haan mai ker dunga...tum bhi koi bhi khabar milte hi mujhe call kerna...

Daya: Ok...!! Ranjan se milne ke baad call kerta hu...mujhe bhi jyada time nahi lagega, yaha paas me hi bulaya hai...

Abhijeet : OK...!! (opened the car's door)bye...

Daya: Bye...

Abhijeet got out of the car and closed it...then tilted to look inside and said consolingly: Don't worry, mai dekhta hu...(he smiled to Daya and Daya too replied with a smile and moved on...Abhijeet waited for a cab and he too went off after getting one...)

Abhijeet: Sir, usne kaha tha call karega par uska call nahi aya...aur abb ayi to ye khabar...

ACP: Chalo, bureau chalke dekhte hai...

CID Bureau...

Freddy was checking Daya's mobile and he found something...

Freddy: Sir...(Abhijeet and ACP came to him...) sir ye dekhiye...battery ke neeche ye chip chupa ke rakhi thi...

ACP: Daya ne to nahi rakhi...Vivek, laga ke dekho zara...

Vivek connected it to the computer and found a single file there; a video clip...ACP asked him to play it...

As the video started, everybody was shocked...It showed Daya lying in a haphazard manner on the floor, unconscious...his hands were tied on his back and he had several bruises on his face and arms...a masked man entered from somewhere and dragged Daya out of the room and with this the video ended...

Everyone was still in shock when Abhijeet ordered...

Abhijeet: Vivek, background check karo...dekho kuch milta hai kya iss clip se...

He too was concerned about his friend's well being and tension was clearly written on his face...but the first thing he had to do was to find him out and take him out safe and sound...and for this, he had to be strong, keeping aside all his emotions...

Vivek paused at a certain frame and enlarged it...he checked it minutely...

Vivek: Sir, iss video me se kuch bhi nahi mila...peeche siway deewaro ke kuch bhi clear nahi hai...ek choti si window thi...uspe zoom kerke dekha toh use blur kiya hua tha taaki bahar ka kuch bhi na dikhe...

ACP: Bahut chalaak hai yeh...video ko mute ker diya aur background bhi blur ker diya taaki hum uss tak pahuch na sake...

Abhijeet: Per sir, hume kisi tarah se to use dhundna hi parega na...(ACP nodded thinking over something...)

ACP: Abhijeet wo recording mili jo bureau me reh gayi thi...??

Abhijeet: Haan sir wo thi mil gayi...Daya ke locker me hi thi...

ACP: Aur baki sari details kiske paas hai??

Abhijeet: Humne divide ker ke rakhe hue hai alag alag jagah...

ACP: Phir akele use kidnap ker ke to koi information nahi milegi...(thinking something...) kahi uska maqsad kuch aur to nahi...shayad iss case se related kuch ho hi na...

Freddy: Sir...kaun sa case??

ACP: Ek case hai Freddy jo ye dono handle ker rahe the sath me...

No other question rose on that, as they understood that it must be confidential...

They were thinking of some way to reach Daya when the bureau's phone rang...Vivek picked it up...

Vivek: Hello...CID bureau...

Caller: Hello Namaste to hum tumhare Abhijeet sir se hi karenge...(Vivek understood it is not a simple call, so turned the speaker on...) zara baat to karwao unse...

Abhijeet (stiff voice): Bolo kya baat kerni hai mujhse...

Caller: Namaskaar Abhijeet sahab...

Abhijeet: Kaam ki baat bolo...

Caller: Aise thori sabke samne bolenge hum...pehle zara speaker to off kariye...

Abhijeet looked at ACP who nodded, so he put the speaker off and picked the receiver...

Abhijeet: Abb bolo...

Understanding that the guy didn't have a good motive, ACP signalled Vivek to tap and trace the call...

Caller: Bolta hu...pehle ACP sahab ko kaho ki call trace kerna band kare...

Abhijeet was shocked by this but he managed his stiff voice...

Abhijeet (in anger): Tumhe kuch bolna hai to bolo warna mere paas tumhari faltu bakwas ke liye waqt nahi hai...

Caller: Nahi kerni baat...theek hai, mat karo...phir agar tumhare dost ka naam shaheedo ki list me aa gaya to mujhe mat bolna...

This was yet another shock for him...he understood that the criminal might have managed to fit a camera due to which he had an eye over their moves...plus he had the advantage of having Daya as his hostage but he too could not show himself defeated in front of the caller...

Abhijeet (in anger): Kaha hai Daya...??

All others heard it and looked at each other...

Caller: Mere paas...(in anger now...) aur agar use sahi salamat dekhna chahte ho to meri baatein tumhe manni hongi...sabse pehle to Vivek ko bolo ki call na tap kare na hi number ko trace kare...

Abhijeet sighs to control his anger and then ordered: Vivek...call tracing se hatao...(Vivek looked at ACP but Abhijeet said louder ignoring ACP's looks...) foran...

Vivek: Yes sir...(he did as said...)

Abhijeet: Abb asli baat bolo...Daya ko kyu kidnap kiya?? Kya chahiye tumhe...??

Caller: Tum...

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Nice story 👏
Excited to read further.
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No problem...hope u liked it...😳
may i know ur user name there??😊

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