Beyond Investigation (Ep. Name : Behrupiya)...(New Story@page 48) - Page 15

Originally posted by: dreamfanatic

Yeh kya planning chal rahi hai mere khilaaf...😡

Originally posted by: aditya_anjaana

Story de...Rony ko bahar nikal😈

Originally posted by: dreamfanatic

bahar nikal ker kuch ker diya toh...😈

afterall abh Madam DIYA ne rony ko mujhe saunp diya hai...😃

Originally posted by: aditya_anjaana

kuch ulta seedha karne ki sochna bhi mat😡

Originally posted by: dreamfanatic

😈

Originally posted by: dreamfanatic

bahar nikal ker kuch ker diya toh...😈

afterall abh Madam DIYA ne rony ko mujhe saunp diya hai...😃

Originally posted by: 23Diya

Kuch bhi ker per bahar to nikal...mtlb...story to likh...😉

Originally posted by: aditya_anjaana

dekh Bunny aur Diya...agr kuch bhi ulta seedha kiya tum dono ko phaasi hi hogi😈

Phir main Rony ka Hologram banayungi😛

Originally posted by: gadhadada

at last after 5 Night Continuous Try with Break...

i read the whole Stuff...

No Doubts, its Sach mein a very Very (heavy Breathing) LOOONNN Story Junior...

khair, Next time when U will Post any of Your Story from FF Forum...

Plz Splits it Baccha...😊😊😊

hmmm... Now about Story...😉😉

As after this, U wrote More Classy so My FB would have Some Critical Views...😈😎

Hope U take it Positively...👍🏼👍🏼

The Plot or say Theme Both are Quite Nice Junior...👏👏

the Start was so Thrilling as it Grabbed the Reader in First Scene...⭐️⭐️⭐️

aaty Sath hee Murder...😆😆

Second Scene also Appealing...⭐️⭐️⭐️

again Murder...😉😉

I Loved the Straight Decisions of Daya Sir without Wasting time...👏👏

Loved the Emotions of Queries U Portrayed in Abhijeet Sir who Posture...⭐️⭐️

then, Team Arrival and reaching Hospital...👍🏼👏

Lovely Presentation of All Team Concern...👏👏👏

Daya Sir Appearance was Good...👍🏼👏

Honestly, after Teasing, This Turns of Emotions by Daya Sir U Portrayed Extremely Well Baccha...⭐️⭐️⭐️

Hats Off to U...⭐️

again Attempt to Murder...😉😉😉

Loved Quick BackUp...👏👏

I Like that ACP Sir started Doubting over Daya Sir after Nurse Statement...👏👏

but Somehow its must be More Strong...🤔🤔

Then Searching of Daya Sir House...👍🏼👏

Nice Idea and got the Blank Chq with Sign which got by Cop easily showing that Daya Sir giving Clues to His Team...😉😉

I Like the Idae of Doubting here and ACP Sir comment to Paste it again on Same place...👏👏

after that Transaction of Money on Daya Sir Account...😲😲

Somehow, I m Not Accepting that TJI on Her Behalf gave that Diary to Abhijeet Sir...

basically it was an Evidence and No Officer should do such thing...😲😲

I dunt like that Idea...👎🏼😳

Its Better that U showed that after Trying to Read Dairy, Cops found nothing, Telling ACP Sir to that who said this to Abhijeet Sir as Usual when Meet Him and He said kay " Sir, agar Wo kisi Kaam ki nahi ya Case sy Related nahi tou kya Mujhy Mil skti hay" then ACP Sir gave it to Him...😳😳

Daya Sir Searching and Arresting was Nice...👏👍🏼

his Cheekh Cheekh kay Kehna... OK...👍🏼👍🏼

backBiting, a bit Good...😆😆

i dunt like to Reveal that CODE part through TJI without Solid background...

Its Better that U showed kay during Reading, Dairy fell on Floor of Hospital, Nurse gave it back to Abhijeet Sir who see that Picture coming out Slightly so Tell Nurse to bring GUM stick and when trying to Paste that Picture, got the Code...😉😉

Wesy ye Code ka Idea, Kahein aur sy Milna tha... matlab Kuch Likha hona tha.. Ye tou Accidental way pr Mila magar jub Aap kisi ko Information dena chahty hain tou ye Zehn mein rakhty hain kay Clue Specific ho aur aisy Areas ya Points ko Cover karay jo Visible hun, ya Habit ka Hissa...😳😳

such Accidental Codes koi nahi deta...🤔🤔

why TJI Hide that Chemical News was again a Big Shock without any Reason...😲😲😲

I Like that U showed that Abhijeet Still Believe on His Frnd...😳👏

The whole Investigation regarding ABC Company was Excellent with Two Doubts...?👏👏😆

jub Company band thi tou Abhijeet Sir Kis kay Office gaye thy...😕😕

kya Old office jo band ho gaya tha...?😕😕

Second that Mouse Track ball Idea...

awww, Munna Pallot, I m still using Track ball wala Mouse...😆😆

khair again accidental Revealing...🥱🥱

i like if Track ball Struck and when Abhijeet Sir trying to See that Track ball, feel a Small paper kinda Stuff and then Open it and taking out the password...😳😉😉

U now fast the pace of Story...👏👏

BTW, Abhijeet sir Doubt on Sherya was Awesome...⭐️

i Loved His Thoughts in front of TJI with Valid One...👏

although I m Not Convinced that ACP Sir went with Sherya (such a Junior) to Daya Sir Cell...🤔😳

The Doubts on ACP Sir was Coompletely Baseless...👎🏼👎🏼

Tumharay 4/6 aisay points denay thay jahan Un pr Doubt karnay kay Ilawa Chara nahi hota...

there U Loose a Big gap...😭😭😭

Like the Morphed Video idea...👍🏼👍🏼

but dunt know, Why Daya Sir was So Scared...😡😡

The Informers Idea was Brilliant...⭐️

even that Whole part was Awesome and Classy...⭐️

u really handled it Awesomely...⭐️

Abhijeet Sir back in his Sharp Shine avtar was Excellent...⭐️⭐️

the Meeting with Daya Sir was Good...👏👏

Freddie Sir Support was Nice...😳👏👏

Nice Discussion about Helping Undercover Agent Idea...👏👏

Call Details...👏👏

PCO use...👏👏

Auto Driver...👏👏

But if Autodriver said that Route was so Narrow so he cant able to Move His Auto... then Goons moved to ACP Sir aside and talk to Him... tou wo Bike mein tou jayein gy na.. Phir Us nay Auto kesy Nikal liya, Usi Narrow Route sy...😉

End was marvelous...⭐️⭐️⭐️

that whole Fight...⭐️⭐️⭐️

Planning...⭐️

including Police...⭐️

Rajat sir Role...⭐️⭐️⭐️

WOW... WOW...WOW...⭐️

The Motive was Good...👏👏

i Like why Jagga wanted to Kill Abhijeet Sir in that way...👏👏

That Flashback was Stunning and Classy...⭐️

Nice Finishing...👏😃👏

Somehow, the Story Lost its Charm in middle Portion...🥱🥱🥱

U really spoiled some Brilliant Scene with Messing up them included TJI and Abhijeet Sir UNNEEDED Romance...🤢🤢🤢

I knew, it was Limited but I dunt Like it as it showed Unseriousness in Both Behaviour...🤢

Try to show Every Emotion in Balanced way especially when U are writing INVESTIGATIVE...😃😃

U completely Messed Up Abhijeet Sir Character in Most of Scene showing Him Crying and Crying...🤢

it was looking Completely Odd...

if U saw, FW never showed Him Weak and such easy Tear Breaker...

Except Behropiya One Scene, U always found Him Composed either its Sr. Inspector Abhijeet, Daya ka Dewali Dhamaka, Khatre mein Daya etc...😃😃😃

but in Daya Sir case, U found He was easily started crying although its Satara wala Epi... Injured Witness, Missing Bullet, Abhijeet Ka Inteqaam etc...😃😃😃

u showed Unneeded Crying, Scaring of Daya Sir in Cell after First Meeting, Salunkhy Sir even Sherya too...🤢

Yes, Ur Sentences really Remarkable...⭐️

that Murghy wala...⭐️

Sachin ki Daant wala...⭐️

Rajat Sir ko...⭐️

Freddie Sir ko...⭐️

its Completely Wonderful Track...⭐️

Always Move Fast in Investigative cz it Gripped the Reader...😳👏👏

dunt Drag Scenes either make it Crisp...😳👍🏼

dunt add so many Characters...😉👍🏼

Be Precised etc...😃👏

I m Really Sorry but I knew that U take it in Positive...😃👍🏼

khair as Ur First Investigative Stuff...😃😃

it was Brilliant...⭐️⭐️⭐️

baaqi ab tou mashaALLAH Junior Buht Shandaar Likhta hay...😳⭐️⭐️

tou koi Ghum Nahi...😉😉

a Big Thank You so much Baccha... 😳