My reviews:
Story 1: You kept using "v" for "bh". I loved the suspense and the way you tried to use imagery to describe the scenes so we could see what was happening. The distribution of the officers was good as well. The action and investigation was very good. The twists and turns were amazing. At times I thought it was Birju who would be related to the terrorists, but it wasn't. Overall, amazing story and I would love to read more.
Story 2: I liked the suspense a lot, but the story was a bit confusing at points. I liked the way you included flashback to build the suspense a bit. You distributed the team well throughout the story, but there wasn't much concentration on Daya sir only. The detection was very good and the worry you had Abhijeet sir show for Daya sir was just wow! You really expressed their friendship well. You cleared the confusion with your flashback, so there was no more confusion later. The way the trio made connections along the way was great. There were a few holes in your story. For example, at the beginning you write a few days later for when Daya sir and ACP sir are talking in the bureau, but then you write that Daya sir got a call from Amit yesterday. I was confused as to how CID found the bag containing the glass. I felt the ending was rushed.
Story 3: The introduction was very good, but why would Daya sir write a report in a local police station when they are CID? The investigation was really good. You distributed the team well. There was some good scenes with Dr. Salunkhe like when he asks Daya sir to explain how he would commit suicide. I didn't really get the connection between the sniper and all the important people at the beginning, but it made sense later. I liked the camaraderie between Abhijeet sir and Daya sir. Overall really good. The ending seemed a bit rushed.
Story 4: The story was really good. I loved the suspense. I liked the concern Abhijeet kept showing for Daya. Daya leaves Sun Hotel and next morning they find out that there is a murder there, with Daya really tense?!! WOW!!! The suspense was really killing me. The way Daya was carrying out his own investigation as well was really good. I didn't know whether to like the fact that Abhijeet was showing concern for Daya or not like the fact that he was suspecting Daya. I got a bit confused in the bit as to how many bags there were and which bags had whose fingerprints on them, but overall great story. The ending seemed a bit rushed.
Story 5: I loved the suspense, but there were spelling mistakes, which made me keep having to go back and reread the story. The ending seemed a bit fast-paced. The only part I didn't understand was how you had two people acting as both Anti-Corruption officers and Intelligence officers. Wouldn't ACP sir have made them out even if they were in disguise? The officer distribution was good and so was the investigation.
Story 6: Your story was really good, and I really liked the motivational speech you had at the end. The fact that you had the person actually commit suicide was quite interesting. I liked the flow of the story. Apart from that, not much to say except good work.
Story 8: Your story seemed quite filmy. I don't know why, but it just seemed like I've seen this before, or this has happened before. The story had a lot of good action and twists and turns. I loved the duo scenes. Thank you for those. I miss those in the CID episodes nowadays. The story was really fast-paced and the suspense was really good as well. I loved the kids' story most probably. Good team distribution and very well Daya centred. Great job.
Story 9: A very different story from the previous with the drugs. It was really good. You really showed teamwork well, especially the way the team was working together to save Daya. It shows the real humane side of the team and I clap with enthusiasm for that. Quite an interesting method used to kill Peter. The story was quite good, but it seemed to lose out in the middle and at different points. The investigation was really good and so was the team distribution. Overall, great job.
Story 10: Another very different story from the rest. I couldn't really understand why the man committed suicide even though you tried to explain. The end was quite unexpected. My biggest problem was that it seemed the investigation was too easy. I felt that the team was finding the clues too easily. Usually they have to work a bit harder. The introduction was really good.
Story 11: The story was a bit long and there were many parts which you could have cut short, in my opinion. There was too much happening in the story and I think it would have been much better had it been two separate stories. I liked how you had Daya doing what the terrorists wanted so he could save Abhijeet from the bomb. I did enjoy reading the story nonetheless. The investigation and team distribution was really good. It seemed like I was watching a two-hour special of CID.
Story 12: Another very lengthy story, which could have been cut much shorter. I felt you were showing Daya as being very ignorant. There were so many clues for him to guess that he was being trapped, but you kept having Daya ignore them. The dialogues and culprit was quite predictable. It seemed like you didn't have enough suspense or investigation. You did have a lot of suspense when it came towards Abhijeet. The team celebration of Daya's birthday was very sweet.
Edited by khota_sikka_sri - 13 years ago
Udne Ki Aasha
Hollywood
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