MY First story

Hi Jiya di, firstly thanx for writing a story...glad that IF got another writer !!!!😃

Thanks for your commets shagnika..

Another writer. Congrats for first story. Emotional drama was more in intial part then slowly slowly followed with grip. It was Different and nice.

"News channel to es bhahati gaga mein haath dho rhaein..kabhi exper ki opinion le rahein hein to kahi sms poll..to kahi janata ki ray..sab jagah yahi khabar chhayi hein"

I think you fed up with News Channel the way they cover. Nicely written.


About story it was good but at some point I feel I was watching some film I don't know may be it happened with me only. I was lost in reading and when came back I felt like I watched some movie.


Keep writing. Looking for next story.

@jiya1: Great story jiya, keep it up.

I wanted to say one thing, you have not put the customary [MEMBERS ONLY] and [NO COPY] tags in your post. This will allow others from other sites to copy your story.

So, please put [NO COPY] without spaces and [MEMBERS ONLY] without spaces in your post.

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very nice story..different one 😉 but i did not like kajol getting so much importance...tasha could get the parts kajol did... 😕 moreover i face difficulty in reading a bit ...some spelling problem and language problem... 😕 and one question for jiya dii as Daya and vivek statred working for that gunda ..for sure it took sometime for him to believe them so for this period were they absence from C.I.D?? moreover everyone out of c.i.d was on 1 mission tarika lab main kya karegi 😕 usse moka milgya chatting krne ka 😆 😆 if you clear all this i would be glad otherwise awesome thinking 👏 👏 👏

Originally posted by: bhinder.kamboj

very nice story..different one 😉 but i did not like kajol getting so much importance...tasha could get the parts kajol did... 😕 moreover i face difficulty in reading a bit ...some spelling problem and language problem... 😕 and one question for jiya dii as Daya and vivek statred working for that gunda ..for sure it took sometime for him to believe them so for this period were they absence from C.I.D?? moreover everyone out of c.i.d was on 1 mission tarika lab main kya karegi 😕 usse moka milgya chatting krne ka 😆 😆 if you clear all this i would be glad otherwise awesome thinking 👏 👏 👏

Yes ...Meine Timepass ke liye ye story likhi thi.mera chasma tut gaya hein so muze typing karnemein dikkat ho rahi thi..kuch saaf nahi dikh raha tha..tumhe esame problem aayega kyoki language Marathi..kyoko ye maharastra ke yaha ki hein esliye(likn mein bracket mein meaning diye hein) kajal ke baare mein Kajal schin jaisi nahi hein..abhi muskil se abhi-daya eaksaath deikhate hein..aur jab dikhate hein to ye sachin daya aur abhi ke bich mein hi khada rahata hein.I really hate him..ha ye 2 hours episode samjhe.. sory log hein

hi i am new to this forum at least for all of u .
i have read ur story it was very good 👏 at some point of time i also felt like i m watching a movie
overall it was good but at some point it felt like stretching a bit
i have a suggestion if u want to connect anyone with abhijeet it should be tarika
it doesnt mean that i like her but i think we r now accustomed to see abhijeet falling for her
and for abhijeet and kajal 😕 😕 🥱 i cant even imagine them together
well overall great effort will wait for ur tasha centric story

Originally posted by: shivanirajput

hi i am new to this forum at least for all of u .
i have read ur story it was very good 👏 at some point of time i also felt like i m watching a movie
overall it was good but at some point it felt like stretching a bit
i have a suggestion if u want to connect anyone with abhijeet it should be tarika
it doesnt mean that i like her but i think we r now accustomed to see abhijeet falling for her
and for abhijeet and kajal 😕 😕 🥱 i cant even imagine them together
well overall great effort will wait for ur tasha centric story

Thank you for reading my story...I know it's too long..but It was just for fun...may say time pass...I have already mention why I have made Kajal as Abhijeet's wife...even I also Can't imagine to watch them together ...but I don't like Tarika( no offense)
Thank you once again