Story-KISSA ULJHE SWALO KA(UPDATED-6th Aug Pg-27)

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Bhavanab

@Bhavanab

Stunner

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#41

taking inspiration from all of you maine bhi ek poem shuru kiya and then beech raaste mein i got so confused aur topic se hatke na jaane kya banaa diya,so yeh poem writing tum hi karo bhinder hum log stories likhne mein hi khush hai 😆

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Bhinder

@bhinder.thind

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#42

Originally posted by: didobhav
taking inspiration from all of you maine bhi ek poem shuru kiya and then beech raaste mein i got so confused aur topic se hatke na jaane kya banaa diya,so yeh poem writing tum hi karo bhinder hum log stories likhne mein hi khush hai 😆

areey nahi yar ..u PM me what you have written...we will construct that well 😉

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Bhavanab

@Bhavanab

Stunner

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Posted: 15 years ago

#43

Right now busy with my fiirst story without a pre-decided plot will try again after that

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Bhinder

@bhinder.thind

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: didobhav
Right now busy with my fiirst story without a pre-decided plot will try again after that

yoooooo will wait for that 😉

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Jeet Banerjee

@jeet.

Inactive

Posted: 15 years ago

#45

dis iz juz awesome..........
gr88 workk!!!

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sneh.

@sneh.

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#46

Hi bhinder I really like it, your story pace your rhythms all is awesome. but some words are either not clear or I couldn't understand coz dey t in punjabi. otherwise it is really speechless yaar believe me dil se bol rahi hoon Waiting for many more to come. tc and keep rockin dude

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Bhinder

@bhinder.thind

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#47

Originally posted by: sneha_fighter
Hi bhinder I really like it, your story pace your rhythms all is awesome. but some words are either not clear or I couldn't understand coz dey t in punjabi. otherwise it is really speechless yaar believe me dil se bol rahi hoon Waiting for many more to come. tc and keep rockin dude

yeahh in Daya rocker some words were in punjabi...coz that's a rap so obviously had to add some punjabi masala 😉 if you would tell me those words dii i would explain to you...and yeah i am coming up with a new one tonight 😛 😉

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Bhinder

@bhinder.thind

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#48

Here is my latest CREATION....

It describes the present scenario of the CID team and has the basic plea to B.P.Singh sir : " GET BACK ABHI-DAYA"

Hope you like it😉

4. GET BACK ABHI-DAYA

Story main chahe na ho koi secret
Hume tab tak koi na regret
Tab tak khush hain sabhi
As long as we can see Daya alongwith Abhi😉

Story bhi nahi achi
Jokes pe na aye koyi hassi
Voh dono to ACP ke hain 2 hath
Fer bhi Daya-Abhi kyo nahi sath sath??
😭

Shuru huya hai yeh panga

aaya hai c.i.d mein Sachin naam ka banda😡
C.I.D ko samajh raha hain
Kumb ka mela
Agar Daya ka hath chuda ton
Guwaach jayega akela. 😉

Singh saab hum pe thora reham khayiye
Please iss Sachin ko in dono ke Beech main se hatayiye!
Mana ke naye bando ko sath rakhne ke liye chhaiye ability
To fir de do na Freddy ko yeh responsibility...😕
Uss se Yeh kya comedy circus dekha rahe ho
Hamare joke chura kar Humi ko hasa rahe ho?😉

Kya baat hain singh saab

Wafadari kya hain zamane ko samjha rahe ho
Apna show chodkar
Sony ke doosro ko hit kara rahe ho?😆

Forensic ban gayi hain disaster 🤢
Yaha akar har koi ban jata hain Flirting ka master
Abhijeet tarika pe lattoo hota jaa raha hain
"waah tarika jii waah tarika jii" farma hi jaa raha hain!
Tarika bhi rang dikha rahi hain
Baki sabko Sir aur Abhijeet ko Naam se bula rahi hain...😡
Salunke apne naye janme baal kheench raha hain
Bina kisi kaaran ke hi cheek raha hain
Apni bato se ek doosre ko sab jala rahe hain
Deadbody ki aarh main yeh dil mila rahe hain.😲

Hum hi jante hain ke hum yeh sab Kaise jhel rahe hain
3 doctor 1 dead body ke sath post-mortem(2) khel rahe hain.😆

Vivek bhi "dil mil gye"
Ki taal main sur mila raha hain
Akele akele hi tasha ko ice cream khila raha hain
Tasha bhi dilo dil vivek pe mar rahi hai
Uske sath akele janeki zidd kar rahi hain😲

ACP ko thora shant karvao
Ajkal lodh se jyada he dahaar rahe hain
Taras aata hain un logo pe
Jo inko sahar(sehen) rahe hain
Samne vala admi kho sakta hain apne hosh
Agar koi halke dil ka ho, Boss, koi shak nahi ho jayega behosh😕

Bureau main 13 log 1-1 krke aa rahe hain houli houli
c.i.d se jyada yeh lag rahi hainkoi natak touli.😭
Humse nahi ho raha yeh sehan
Agar aisa he raha na sach mano Ek din bhag jayega c.i.d ka cameraman.😉

Pehle bande kam the jo aur la rahe ho
Hume lagta hain thrill ki jagah aaj kal logo ko comdy circus ka promo dekha rahe ho.
Story main age kya hoga
Pehle hi mil jata hain hint.

Kya samay agaya hain 5-5log le rahe hain
1 admi ke finger print.😆

Kuch bad ho ya good
We will be quite touchwood...
We will not say anything even on stupid joking
As long as we can see Our Abhi-Daya together rocking.
Meri iss farayd pe khushi ke phool chada do
Kuch bhi karo but Daya-Abhi ko sath-sath la do.😃

😛

Edited by bhinder.kamboj - 15 years ago

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SAGNIKA

@Shagnika

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#49

Hey i am back a being the first one to comment on ur CREATION..I must say The variety in your creations are just SUPERB!!!! Really AWESOME work👏...

it has almost every point that we CIDiand have in mind. Some parts are very funny!😆😆

that post-mortem-post mortem khel rahe hain part...ohh God, Hilarious!!!!😆😆...I am still laughing!!!😆

Cant wait for ur next...complete it fast!!!😃

Edited by Shagnika - 15 years ago

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@totallynotme101

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#50

now this one was superb
not superb but it was like real cid story great work.............
i like it very very very very infinite times very much.......................
great work.........................