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Autumn_Hue

@Autumn_Hue

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Posted: 11 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: swathi_swaron
Yesterday i was stalking the AT and came across this story building... Even though i was annoyed with my net problem i just be there to read ur story only... Its so awesome..
You two are two awesome writers... and the combo really worked great... hope to read more works from yours...

Thank you soo much dii your appreciation matters a lot..😃

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Autumn_Hue

@Autumn_Hue

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Posted: 11 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: pooja123456
Beautiful os

Thank you..😊

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pratik vyas

@pratik54000

Rocker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#13

Hey Kash and Mihi amazing job guys... i just loved this masterpiece you all have created.. I was hoping for a brilliant one shot from you guys because of simple reason that last work of Kash was totally awesome and Mihi ofcourse is all time marvel in writing on SwaRon... You two are easily the marvels of writing on SwaRon and i guess you guys are one best writers who write on SwaRon exclusively...(Ab bahot hui tum logo ki tarif because your work gets praised more than you and i love you both majorly because of your works as you two create something out of the box when ever you write)

Now going back to the story, this was perfect start where you guys showed Swayam in his old self walking remembering about the hug he shared with Sharon in the party.. and i just loved this side of Swayam i was missing to read something like this though it was short but i enjoyed reading the Majnu mode Swayam... But the story kicked off when Sharon emerged and suddenly Swayam changed and a point where Swayam really made Sharon believe that the couldn't be together was totally rocking part.. but one the best expressions came when Swayam actually realized how stubborn he was to not realize the efforts his girl made to win him back. I loved that realization point because it changed the story from Sharon's guilt and trying to win back her love to Swayam's guilt and frustration on loosing out on efforts of his girl...

And the point where you showed Swayam realized but Sharon did left him behind and then Sharon took a day off for herself to stay alone was the part of the story which made it perfect. You showed perfect vulnerable Swayam and his efforts to search Sharon and confront her. I just totally loved this part because this really set up the story from wonderful to marvelous.

Then came the part where Swayam really found Sharon and decided to talk to her letting of all the reservations he had about her. Up to that you guys smartly convinced us that it was Swayam's character according to whom the story moved but suddenly at this point the realization came to us readers that you guys have got it all wrong because story has moved according to Sharon's character and she is the driving force.

I just loved the narration here of Sharon because she was the girl who was madly in love with somebody and that person actually failed to realize her love for himself and she was not going to tolerate that anybody could question her love and she will not allow anybody even the person she loved to question the purity of emotions she felt for him.

But then again she was in love and the guys was also in love head above heels with the girl so the point where they both will justify their actions came and boy o boy you guys nailed it in describing how Sharon's rejections to listen to Swayam and Swayam's efforts to convince Sharon that he still loved her lead to an epic confrontation. I just loved that part. You can say actually this was my most favorite part of this one shot. I have read many confrontation these days but this surely is one of the best because it did justify feelings of both of them and it showed pov of both and yet it was just perfect in that moment. You guys rock big time for creating something like this.

I am in love with this os totally and may be i end up reading this many a times in future because this is going in to my book mark list, and thank you for sharing this with me, all the best for your future works and keep coming up with such amazing works...

Pratik

Edited by pratik54000 - 11 years ago

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Sanskriti

@SanskritiS

Rocker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#14

Amazing OS 😊

Well penned

Loved the confession

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Autumn_Hue

@Autumn_Hue

Sparkler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: SanskritiS
Amazing OS😊
Well penned
Loved the confession

Thank you so much for your comment kri glad you liked it..😊

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Autumn_Hue

@Autumn_Hue

Sparkler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: swaron2121
so cute😳

Thank you..😊

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rosy kohli

@rosyrkohli

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#17

res

wat a partnership guys

kash n mihi a lil tym n energy in form of this os

was enuf to put a smile on my face 😊

it was emotional n bohot faru tha yaro

swayam puri raat sharon ke bare meih sooch tha raha

n then the swaron convo was beautifully penned

i read the os before but seeing it in one piece

made me realise tat you guys are genius

thr were sum lines tat i always wanted swayam to say to sharon

these lines stayed wit me till the end

Jab tum roti ho, tab even I get hurt, when you

fall, I get hurt, when you say something rude to
me, every inch of my body suffers badly Sharon..
Just stop it.. And now you say that I don't realize
how much I've hurt you? Yes i do! Because I love
you. I love you way too much..!!"

these lines were beautiful 😃

kitana acha heart-touching confession tha

do write more 🤗

Edited by rosyrkohli - 11 years ago

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-TanHaVruShan-

@-TanHaVruShan-

Sparkler

Posted: 11 years ago

#18

Cash bataya bhi Nahi after posting😡
Such a beautiful os guys. .
I was d one lucky person who read d whole os Wen it was actuall written. .
It was just amazing reading each part n d way u both took it forward..
Main thing is dat it was written on d spot without having a discussion with each other about d os. .
I totally totally enjoyed reading it. .
It was one amazing experience. .
U both r amazing guys. .
Keep playing like dis n keep writing more n i ll enjoy reading 😆

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Autumn_Hue

@Autumn_Hue

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: Shilpa_SwaRon
Cash bataya bhi Nahi after posting😡
Such a beautiful os guys. .
I was d one lucky person who read d whole os Wen it was actuall written. .
It was just amazing reading each part n d way u both took it forward..
Main thing is dat it was written on d spot without having a discussion with each other about d os. .
I totally totally enjoyed reading it. .
It was one amazing experience. .
U both r amazing guys. .
Keep playing like dis n keep writing more n i ll enjoy reading 😆

Holy shit you din get my scrap mentioning this shilpu??😲. I would'nt say sorry warna you'll get even more mad at me for breach of contract remember..😆.
Hehehe yesss we'll keep playing such games and keep posting don't you worry provided mihi mile mujhe same time online..😉.
I'm glad you liked this os soo much shilpu really happy..