Koi Tumsa Nahin--FF! Updated! pg 15!

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Ruchika

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Posted: 18 years ago

#21

gr8 job gaurie! 👏
tusshar's dad does sound kind of mean
but im sure he's positive. like son, like father 😆 lol. anyway, continue soon!!!

-Ruchika

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soni595

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Posted: 18 years ago

#22

Gaurie that was a wonderful part! 😛 The dialogues are so well described! 👏 do continue soon when you have time!

Keep smiling...
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Soni

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Gaurie

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Posted: 18 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: stargirl345
gr8 job gaurie! 👏
tusshar's dad does sound kind of mean
but im sure he's positive. like son, like father 😆 lol. anyway, continue soon!!!

-Ruchika

Hehe! yeah he is pretty mean. He's actually just stressed out and has a short temper but he's really good otherwise.😃

Thanks to everybody who's commenting! I might not be able to post something up today since I'm doing out with the family but I'll try!!!😆

Gaurie

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ADITI

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Posted: 18 years ago

#24

Ahh just read 4 parts 2gether nd must say dey r awesome...i mean rocking parts yaar... 👏 plz do cont soon...

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Gaurie

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Posted: 18 years ago

#25

Part 5!

Part 5

Ab mein kya karu? Tushar thought to himself. Dad bhi naa… His dad was always short-tempered though. And after his mom passed away, it had gotten worse. He would work even longer and come home even later. They barely had any quality time together. But Tushar knew that deep down he was trying to do the right thing, he just didn't know how to express his feelings.

Vidya walked in with a small smile, interrupting hi thoughts. Tushar looked at her and his feelings poured out.

"Vidya! Vidya mein kya karu?"

"Tushar, hume nahin pata par shyad tumhe jaana chayien…" Tushar's look of shock interrupted her. "Humari baat to suno. Hum kehre hain ki aap unke saath jao kalko unko kush karne kiliye phir baat karlo. Abhi aap dono bahuti naraaz ho."

After a long pause, Tushar agreed.

A couple hours later…

"Hello? Mahi?" Tushar said.

"Hello? Oh my god tum theeke to ho naa?" she sounded worried. "Stupid! Terko patanahin mein kitna shintak thi!" (A/n I'm not exactly sure that's right grammer but she means I was so worried)

"I'm so sorry yaar, par kya kahun mein-" But Mahi stopped him.

"Kuch mat kaho. I don't want to talk to you!" she said, trying to sound angry.

"Mahi? Oh Mahi." Tushar laughed. She wasn't a good actor.

"Kya hai?"

"I have to tell you something…"

"Bolo."

"Naa. Mein yeh tereko aamne-saamne kahoga. I have to say this to your face."

"To hum nahin mil sakte abhi. Bahut late ho chukka." She was obviously not upset, but excited.

"Kal, Seaside resteraunt mein, saat baghe okay? Okay byeee," He was about to hang up.

"Arre rukho to ek second. Hum ek doosre ko kaise pechanenge?"

"Kyun? Tum Mahi ho, aur koi tumsa nahin. I'm sure I'll be able to recognize the prettiest one in the room."

"Oh yeah? Well then I can just as easily recognize the fattest one, Gollu!" she teased.

"Hey. I was being nice!" Tushar grinned.

"I know, sorry. Theeke, umm… Wear a umm… laal shirt with black pant okay?"

"Tum mereko joker banane chahate ho kya? Theeke theeke, phir tum laal dress pehno okay?"

"Okay! Ek Joker Raja with his Joker Rani! Bye Gollu!" Mahi hung up the phone.

Ek Raja aur ek Rani

*A/N What did you guys think! I wanted to use the title somewhere in the story so badly… and I finally did! You know the drill, comment/review please!😃

Edited by Gaurie - 18 years ago

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Ruchika

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Posted: 18 years ago

#26

gr8 job gaurie! 👏 👏 👏
i liked how u put the title in there too. i feel sorry for Tusshar, poor guy, his mom died nd his dad is an angry man. 😭 😭 😭
post the next part soon, im anxious to know if mahi nd tusshar will recognize each other. 😛

-Ruchika

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ADITI

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Posted: 18 years ago

#27

gr8 part 👏 waiting to know abt da meeting of both laal para nd laal pari...

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Meera

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Posted: 18 years ago

#28

Awww awesome 5th part Gaurie....I can't wait to see what will happen when they first meet face to face!!! 😆

Please continue soon!!!

Luv ya loads,

Meera 😳 😳

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Gaurie

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Posted: 18 years ago

#29

hey guys! I have an imortant question to ask. I know that some of you guys have been asking for a pic of mahi and the only person i could think of was aashka goradia. better known as kumud from kkusum or arpita from sinndoor... I'll post some pics if you guys like then comment. if you have someone else in mind then please please tell me!