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Gaurie

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Posted: 18 years ago

#31

There are so many views... but no commenters 😭

I want to write the next part, but I don't know how mahi should look like (Thanks Meera Di for your input, btw 😃 ) and i need comments! 😭 Yes, I'm throwing a cyber-tantrum 😳

So please comment!

Please?
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Ruchika

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Posted: 18 years ago

#32

hey gaurie! i think aashka is pretty good, but barkha could be more suitable. for some reason, i thought of her when u put the dialogues of mahi in there! 😆

-Ruchika

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CherryPrincess

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Posted: 18 years ago

#33

amazing. just amazing. ur sense of humor is really cool!!!!!!!!! u make me smile stupidly ! 😛

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Gaurie

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Posted: 18 years ago

#34

😆 I liked aashka too cuz I thought of mahi as a seedi sadi punjabi girl and i don't really know about barkha but when i saw pics of her, she didn't really fit that shy hindustani type you know?? no offence to barkha fans of course! 😳

I'll see if i can find some nice pics of barkha...

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Isha

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Posted: 18 years ago

#35

wow jus read like all parts of ur ff u got an awesome one goin plz do contiue soon hahaha gollu! love that name lolz 😆

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Nishtha

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Posted: 18 years ago

#36

gaurie..i hate my exams..as i canr read your fanfic regularly.. loved the girl.. 👏 but..even barkha wud have looked good 😉

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ADITI

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Posted: 18 years ago

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GAURIE hav no prob with aaksha as mahi but would be more happy if tushar is being paired with barka[as mahi]...to get barkas pics u can check picture gallary of pkdn...

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Gaurie

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Posted: 18 years ago

#38

I finally Updated! Thenkoo (vidya-ishtyle 😉)to all who commented and to all who didn't, please comment now! varna...!

Part 6

Sagar walked in his room to find Tushar going through his stuff.

"Hey man! What are you doing?"

"You know what, mere paas ek bhi dhang ki red shirt nahin hai. Can I borrow this one?" Tushar pointed to the one he was trying.

"Well, since you asked so nicely" Sagar replied, sarcastically. "Jaldi tayar ho jao, humme voh ladki ki ghar jaane hai."

"Haan aur usske baad!" Tushar grinned widely.

"Uske baad?" Sagar nudged him. It seemed that Tushar was lost in his own world.

"Uske baad, I'm going to meet Mahi!"

Later at the girls house...

"Aur yeh meri beti, Madhuri." Said her mother. A timid girl walked in. She was wearing a simple white salwar with minimal jewelery and makeup. She looked a bit annoyed, but the look went away when her mum shot her a look.

"Namastey ji. Chai lijiye." She smiled sweetly.

Tushar glanced up at her, he had to admit, she was very pretty. Too bad he was taken. He smiled to himself.

"Aap, chai?" she asked him.

"Sorry, mein chai nahin leta." He declined. She smiled at him and returned to the kitchen. What kind of Indian doesn't drink chai? She thought to herself.

A little later...

Madhuri, (aka Mahi, if you didn't get it yet 😉) lay on her bed, holding the phone in her hands. She was supposed to be in the kitchen, preparing the food, but Asha, the maid was covering for her.

"Ja Mahi Didi, apni premi se baat karo." She had said, sweetly.

She was supposed to meet him tonight, as soon as these people would leave. She had strictly told her parents, no arranged marrige, but had they listened? Of course not! But no worries! She would meet him, tell him how she felt, and they would get married and... She snapped out of her fantasy because the phone started to ring.

"Hello?" she answered excitedly.

"Don't be too excited, bas teen ghante aur hai."

"Tum?" she grinned to herself, she was hoping he would call. "Tum kyun phone kareho? Teen ghante hai na?"

"Arre mein tumko kya batao? I just can't wait to see you Mahi!" Tushar had sneaked away from the adults to make a secret call. He winked at Sagar while leaving. Mahi blushed in spite of herself. How was it that he could make her blush, over the phone?

"Baatein mat kar. I know, jab tum mereko dekhoge, to tum behosh ho jayega."

"Tumari koobhsurat se?" Tushar walked towards a door, the same one in which Mahi was now sitting in, talking to him!

"Nahi, meri batsoorat se!" Mahi joked, unaware of who was now approaching her door.

"Oh yeah? Yeh kabhi nahin ho sakta!" he grabbed the doorhandle, "Ek second,"

*A/N What's gonna happen next? Will Tushar finally find out who his Mahi really is? I decided to use Ruchika's tactic of 5 replies before I update (I hope you don't mind!) So comment please!

Edited by Gaurie - 18 years ago

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CherryPrincess

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Posted: 18 years ago

#39

hey gaurie! that was really gr8! ye ye ye i m the first one to comment! four more now. btw there is sth wrong in characters. i guess, u were trying to use smilies and these characters are appearing. btw, it was a cool one !!!!!!!!!

well, i think u r going to use ekta's strategy and will make us wait and wait till they meet, right? but plz let them meet soon 😛

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Gaurie

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Posted: 18 years ago

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Originally posted by: CherryPrincess
hey gaurie! that was really gr8! ye ye ye i m the first one to comment! four more now. btw there is sth wrong in characters. i guess, u were trying to use smilies and these characters are appearing. btw, it was a cool one !!!!!!!!!

well, i think u r going to use ekta's strategy and will make us wait and wait till they meet, right? but plz let them meet soon 😛

hehe.. I never thought of it that way... I guess so, but it will only last another episode, not 5 yrs😆

I wonder what's wrong with them? I'll see if I can fix it, tmr. right now I have company over and my bro wants to go on😛

Thanks for commenting! 4 more pplz!😳

Gaurie

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