New OS : Dhoop Ke Makaan Sa... updated on page 5!

First Previous

Page

Next Last

Frequent Posters

Bhavit Kapoor

@bawaswift

Stunner

Posted: 9 years ago

#51

A fascinating love dream for RaTri... adorable OS Amreen,,, ⭐️👏

You have prettily shown the teasing resulting into a pure closeness that the couple have longed so far... ! Jealousy n need makes them drawing near.. n feelings made their hearts functioning.. ! Loved the way you have penned down the developments in the story taking place n all the hesitations put aside.. !

Awesome narration... cute talks... brilliant theme chosen of talking of the hearts n the journey with a mission of bridging up the gap.. ! 👏

Raghav's almost sensing what Trisha thinks... N Trisha almost relying upon his decisions abt the alliances she is telling him... All suggests abt their closeness from the heart though they are professionally very strict.. !

The care n concern of Trisha reaching on time but securely ... Raghav simplifies us with his favors.. 😳 and she wiping the leftovers from his face.. all are such an examples of their melted hearts for each other... so very fascinating i tell you.. 😉😳

Meeting Neha.. has played one of the cupid here... She assumes Trisha as her GF or fiancee... this has mentally changed her attitude towards her thoughts for him... ! And even Raghav is not spared thinking more of their relationship actually taking a sweet turn from here.. !

The sleeping Trisha on his shoulders.. n his hands clearing her face.. Raghav has sensed it right.. the trip is indeed the exploration of their beautiful relationship.. !

Awesome piece of work... Great theme.. n a wonderful cuteness between the two colleagues who have just realised their feelings... n are gonna have a lovely life after this trip.. !

Loved it, thanks dear.. !!!

Beautiful banner.. !!! ⭐️👏

Quote

Bhavit Kapoor

@bawaswift

Stunner

Posted: 9 years ago

#52

Same request as yours Amreen... Plzz start liking the comments.. 😳😳

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

Swati Kapoor

@Swatishubh

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#53

Hi Amreen ❤️🤗

First of all, awesome banner, where i cud see the hands of RaTri meeting with the time and they are getting smoothly with their love just recognized 👏 I cud not understood the meaning of the Title, whereas the whole OS is a journey of recognition of love and first feelings!

Love is the realization that someone else is more important than yourself! This is what happened with Raghav and Trisha. They have fallen in this sweet, tender feeling without noticing themselves into it. Trisha makes it when she discovered that she can rely on him for her life's best decisions. He can be protected, can be seen as her fiance as well.

Raghav's judgement for the boys in question are okay with her, and she can lighten up inside. They dine together, after waiting for the other. They behave like friends, yet very frankly and are not letting themselves to name it love. He flirts with her, but within limits and always speak like her heart. She in or out of her senses, touch him and cleans his face, the blush makes it clear that the realization has occur.

A long time friend gets them more closer with her excuse. Yes, Trisha's blushes and Raghav's thinking over what they are for each other is a lovely sign that something is there that they have to recognize.

It was a wonderful feeling to see him mercilessly teasing her, but one jerk from an outsider to her makes him jealous head to tow, and maturely behaving changed his seat with hers. The protective shoulders don't stop there, and she rested on them, to feel the support of her life!

Lovely to see both of them happy in this never known feeling coming into existence. Loved to see you writing every part of this OS, to show the heart starting hearing it's own beats to sense the serene beauty of love!

The pious beauty resting on his shoulders and his putting aside her hair to make her more loving, this creates an adorable aura of love and the larger canvass to see the love blossoming. Very suitable ending, when the sweetness grew and both of them finds it sweeter and acceptable and enjoyable!!!👏

Luv ya sweetie for your new venture successfully landing in the hearts of RaTri fans, including me!

🤗

Quote

.khaleesi.

@.khaleesi.

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#54

Originally posted by: manaalkhan
to be honest no🤪coz i don't have that channel on my tv😆😆
& actually i love reading ur stories😳they R much better than any ongoing story or track😊
just love ur writing..

Awww... thank you dear... So I will be continuing to send PMs to u... amd thanks again...
Love u.. 😊

Quote

.khaleesi.

@.khaleesi.

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#55

Originally posted by: babita..
Very nice and lovely OS Amreen, loved it dearie 👏👏

Thanks a lot babita...

Krikk rejected !!! This said all for Trisha and she started find out the real Raghv from the start ! Loved this scene that lead to many unfolded expression later !

Yup... she and he... both have started to find each other n their feelings... thanks a lot dear...

What she is trying to find out makes her blush and telling him that she will from the next time let her mom ask you about the alliance. I loved this frankness and friendship, becos with this scene they moved on in a beautiful feeling that they have never felt before. Awesome !! I wish the " ek aur option " would have come into being and we could witness it 😳😉 Tell me na Amreen, it was him. It was him na 😳
I loved this line :: Anticipating his answer her heart skipped many beats and Raghav passed on an intense look to her that lasted only for a second
Superbly fabulous !😊

Oh... thank you... they have gone in a zone where they have gone son comfortable with each other that even personal issues can be adviced... Obviously it was him... Raghav n only Raghav...😳😳
Thanks a lot for loving this lines...

The hungry tummies scene is very cute and full of observations. Where Raghav observed Trisha getting more frank, Trisha noticed him eating like a kid. The more they are talking and not talking, the more they are spreading their own feelings to each other !

Yeah... they have been frank and comfortable... and feeling are spreading to each other... only acknowledgement is needed...thanx

Hugging Neha, and making Trisha not only jealous, but also to think of what their relation stands for. An arm brushing her shoulder makes Raghav a bit sensitive to it and he changed the seat with her. The protection and belonging has stated taking a place in their lives.

Jealousy always leads to confront owns feelings... tho not completely but RaTri have started to accept that they like each other... and protecting for her was an involuntary action put of his Concern for her...

Trisha, landing on his shoulder to sleep, and Raghav removing her hair from her face -- The first touch ever, the first feeling ever, the first sweetness has embraced them, with a life ahead to solve many a cases, and telling the world that someone special is found by both of them !

First touch... Full if care and love... sweet feelings gripping the hearts and melting the lovers... Obviously they will solve many cases together... both professionally and personally... 😉

Amreen, thanks a tonne dearie for this sweet and a cute story. Though it's only one part, i loved it as an initial stage of RaTri and their coming closer to each other. Loves ❤️
As u have asked, me 22 of age, and I love to see U applying " Loves❤️ " like me, that gives a lovely feeling, thanx dearie 🤗 Will wait for more stories from U.

Thanks a million babita...and u r most welcome too... I am really happy that my writing brings a smile on ur faces...

And yeah I love ur loves... ❤️

So loves ❤️

Amreen

Quote

sweetarnav

@sweetarnav

Beginner

Posted: 9 years ago

#56

Hello Ammy i m here to say a big wala Thank You for u.Your both OS are too gud n yes d name of this OS is very nice.u chose gud title n wat to say about ur story my Little storyteller.it was simple bt sweet n romantic story n loved dat trisha's sleeping part. Our raghav is handsome yaar n trisha was jealous wid his frnd. Hmm not bad my tiny gal. Overall this one was a beautiful OS n ur previous one was too gud dear. I hope u will keep entertaining us wid ur OS writing skill. Well done Ammy. Claps for ur beautiful work

Edited by sweetarnav - 9 years ago

Quote

menaka

@ariyadasa

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#57

You made my day Amreen🤗 . Watched only 2 epi of the serial as i don't have the channel here in sri lanka. Really disappointing , can't spend much time in you tube due to my busy schedule but hope to see all in the December vacation . But after reading the OS i feel you fill that empty gap of missing the serial 🤗
Love the writting style , simple but attractive . Never except that any body will try to write an OS specially for a crime serial hats off to you dear .
Love lot of scenes specially the way you show the independent Trisha and fun loving Ragahav . Feel you are going to change my feelings towards Dr Ashuthosh to Agent Ragahv 😉
Awaiting for the next , feel it will be more interested 😉

Quote

menaka

@ariyadasa

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#58

This is for you Amreen

Edited by ariyadasa - 9 years ago

Quote

ishita

@IshitaRocks015

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#59

Amreen... I have fallen in love with you n your OS😳

I have no words to tell you how well you write..

The small nok jhoks... The frank behaviour.. The comfort.. Were pleasure to read

I loved every bit of it.. Right from raghav giving his review about the guys in the pics..

Then Neha stirring some jealousy into Trisha😆

Their unspoken thoughts...

The cute flight scene... Raghav getting possessive about his 'boss' and asking to switch seats😳

And then the girl sleeping... Miss sleeping beauty being adorned😳

Loved every single bit... Thanks a ton girl..

Keep writing😳

Quote

Annu

@Chulbuli_Annu

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#60

sorry for being so much late...

mera pc kharab ho gya tha jab thik hua to socha pehle stories update kr du

so padhne me aur comment krne me itna time lga dia

first of all loved the title of the story...and banner too...

story ka title kadpe me malmal wali feeling deta hai ekdum soft soft si...

mujhe iss tarah is stories kafi psnd hai...

Trisha raghav se apne liye ladka select karwa rhi hai...ya kahu k achche bahane puch rhi hai maa ko mana krne k...😆😆😆 raghav ne ek se ek solid bahana dia hai...loved k tumhe original scene ka kitna sahi use kia hai...

Raghav babu tum bhi experience karo ladki k intzaar ka mazaa...

waise bhi boss hai thoda intzaar to kr hi skte ho...

ye raghav kab sudhrega...bekar me trisha ko taunt mar rha hai k use time lga

arre traffic k liye bhi trisha ko blame karoge kya

pizza scene is cute... sukr hai trisha ka phone baj gya...

ho gyi trisha ki sautan ki entry 😆

thoda jealous hona to banta hai...but raghav se direct sach bta kr achcha nhi kia thodi derr aur jealous feel krne deta

but neha ne kya sahi feka tha...trisha ko sidhe raghav ki gf bta dia 😆😆😆

bechare dono hi ek bar ko shocked ho gye

flight scene is also cute...switch seats... arre thoda to rakho bharosa apni boss pr

zarrurat padne pr wo tumhari bhi haddiya tod skti hai

fir bhi seat switch kr li...kuch to hai raghav trisha k darmiyaan...