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Posted: 8 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: crtkelly

AshReeSha you updated so quickly😛...loving you so much for this. That you manage to capture so much in such a compact update has me wondering whats wrong with me😆. I loved everything about this chapter from Mehek bending the master's rules to get done what she needed to...to Shaurya's determination to bother her: the man seems to have no control when it comes to her...and the Animal Planet reference🤣... well Shaurya is a beast after all.

Looking foward to the next chapter.



crtkelly, yes I did. It needed to be written. The words need to keep on flowing or there will be trouble.
I'm worried about my chapter lengths. I usually write 2kish ones , at the least 1k ones.
Mehek knows a few jugaads yes. 😊As for S, he has me brewing such potions.
You'll see more of the beast. I do like my characters savage.😉
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Posted: 8 years ago
#52

Originally posted by: Couch_Potato

You... you... you just left it there?!? HOW COULD YOU! I am sitting the edge of my seat for more. I wanna know what happens and I want to know now!

Also, yes on the chapter that I read. It flows so seamlessly and you're just drawn into their worlds. Its so matter of fact that you won't even realise that this isn't real. And I love this Mehek. She's evolving and becoming stronger and using her wits like we all know she can.

It was such a fun, light read and then boom! The temperatures soared with the ending sentence. You better continue soon okay? (Also, it's weird how comfortable I feel threatening you here, very weird!) 😉


Is that...hold up.
Are you impatient? Upsetish that there aint more?
Multiply that by perhaps 2k. That's how I feel about Sugar Verse.
About the every Darth thing we discuss on watsapp and stop abruptly.

I'm not doing this on purpose. For some reason, the chapters are not letting me go ahead. Like I can't get more than 600ish words for one chapter. Idk why. I think I am broken.

Threaten me all you want. You have that haq.
But I too, will threaten you back. Soon.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#53

Originally posted by: hailly

Read both the chapters.
They are amazing. Loved it.
Continue soon please.



Thanks for reading.
I'll update asap.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#54

Originally posted by: Tanu221

Cliffhanger !!!👏 update soon I am going to check every hour !!


How sweet!
Thanks for taking an interest in this tiny story!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#55

Originally posted by: nicky13

Oh that was a morning treat.. You update it so quick... Thanks... I m waiting Ke what he is upto now .. Why he came in her room...


The updates are tiny.So I am trying my best to be regular. Thanks for reading!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#56

Originally posted by: vimikrao

Wow beautifully penned..

It was like same scene 11th nov epi...
I was laughing when she kept barricades kept infront of door... Here also same scene...

But this is different... In her room there were no another door...
In this there is. .. Loved it...

What shaurya will do now to irritate her more...

Waiting for next part


Hi, a lot of it is same because I am trying very hard for it to be realistic.
But I will fail sometime and you will be like are these the same Mehrya?

I'm glad you are enjoying this.
You'll soon see what S is upto.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#57

Originally posted by: Waida1234

Hi...Ash...! Sorry for late review...was kind of busy...! 😊


Woww...didn't get time to read the 1st Chapter...and you've already updated the second one...! Good going girl...! Amazing start...and awesome story...love it...!👏

Well..read the two parts in one go...! What a brilliant idea to introduce each chapter with those poetic verses...four short phrases, but so meaningful..! They give an indication what to expect from each update...!

What a powerful entry/introduction of Shaurya Khanna...the man, whom one should think twice before trespassing into his land, and invade his Kingdom...! A Kingdom which, he is the King...which he hasn't received in heritage or by magic...but, built/set up with his hard-works, times, determinations, devotions, sacrifices and sweats...!

Until recently...Shaurya was the powerful King who used to control his subjects with his strict rule of law...but, still thirsty and kept on looking for even more power and control...! But...the day, he crossed the path of a girl @ Mehek Sharma..who wasn't even a princess or belong to the aristocrat society...his life changed for the worst...! The very first time, his eyes met hers...he knew, she carry troubles along with her...! Troubles...especially for him, his power and his kingdom...!

To punish her for invading his privacy and creating turbulence in his well-organized life...he imprisoned her in his castle...in a secluded and remote place, far from her family and the outside world...! Although...the girl hated the cruel King, as he was the cause of all her miseries...deep down, she respected him...! He was a hardworking and respectable King who was respected by all his people...!

When one day...Mehek, the girl got the chance to contact her family, to let them know she was fine...using the help of some carrier/homing pigeons @ the media...King Shaurya anger reached another level...! Accusing her of betrayal, trying to be in the spotlight and trying to take control of his Kingdom...by gaining the sympathy of the outside world...he decided to punish her using physical force...forcing himself, into her chamber...!

Mehek...who was a timid, shy girl...was forced to become a warrior...to defend herself from the atrocious behaviors of her captor...! Till now...she has always faced and fight with him on equal grounds...and even won the battle many times...! But...this time, the war seems more difficult...as her opponent isn't a human anymore...but a Beast with an incredible force...!

Well...Ash...! I think I shall have to wait for your next update to know who won the battle this time..."Beauty or the Beast"...?⭐️


Hi Wai!
Thnks for the deliciously long review. It made my day,
I am so happy you like the Poetry bits. Those seem to be my disease.
You've understood the bigger picture behind my tiny update so well.
Bang on !
The Beast King, the Castle and the Damsel who must rescue herself.

I consider you my FairyGod Reviewer!😊

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Posted: 8 years ago
#58

Originally posted by: pinky.padda

amazing update
absolutely loved it
continue soon
superb



Thanks for reading Pink!
Will update asap.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#59

Swords and actions are the same

Behind them there are people to blame.

On skin or the mind they leave a scar

And retaliation is never too far.

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Chapter 3: Broken, Not bent.

The look on her face would have amused him if it weren't for his anger.

There she stood, wide eyed, open mouthed. Her hand on the side table as if her legs were insufficient to keep her from crumbling to the ground.

"T...Tum?"

There was the scared little stutter again.

Yes. There it was, her bag of dirty middle class tricks.

Play the victim. Look harmless. Let them underestimate you so you can kick them to the floor when they least expect it. Let others take the fall for your mistakes.

It was nothing new. This strategy had been used before and left behind its scars.

But Shaurya Khanna was not the same nave idealistic Prince who wanted to build a utopia anymore. He knew now that the world was fire and ice. It would hurt you, and it was stupid to hope otherwise.

Walking into war without any weapons was asking to be butchered and he was no martyr.

But she fancied herself one. With her bland clothes and her unadorned face. Her polite' manner and her respect toward elders nataak.

Pure.

Yes that was what she fashioned herself as, an angel among the animals who only had ghatiya soch'.

She didn't cake on whatever slop his Aunt and that clingy Shruti did, but she still got under his skin in a way none of those conniving ladies' never had.

Those two pointed out his mistakes and he could smell desperation, their craving for his downfall on their breaths, expensive wine and cigarettes.

But Mehek, with her stutter and her less then vain appearance had looked him in the eyes and in a tone shaking with anger had promised him his defeat.

His ploy of using her family's concern to stop her from being a part of the show (thus breaking her ever so dramatic promise) had failed.

And he was not fond of failure.

It tasted bitter.

Her reassurance to her middle class family, in those woeful words was another slap in the face.

He offered them back to her, making sure to sound high pitched and scared.

"Chachi... Competition toh hai, mein Ravan se yudh karne nahi ja rahi. Haan, competition tough hoga, par main bhi toh tough hu. I want to make you as proud of me as I am of you all."

He walked closer to her, never taking his eyes off her, his glare intended to intimidate her.

She took a step back with each step he took toward her.

Her back hit the wall and all he wanted was to see that frantic trapped animal look on her face.

That'd show her she was the same as the rest of the world, not above them.

She was not beyond fear.

Mehek was glaring at him, a vase clutched in her right hand.

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Posted: 8 years ago
#60
Hey this is nice but what happen next !!!😲 I can't wait please update soon n bigger chapter please please😃😆😆

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