MehRya FF: Discovering the Magic Chapter28 pg148 (10/12) - Page 7

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Posted: 8 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: miniapplepie

Wow desr !!!!

Loved every bit of it !

Cobt soonest !

Love the way you write its really beautiful


As do I love yours Mini...waiting anxiously for your update as well😛
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Posted: 8 years ago
#62
Wonderfully written!! It is awesome and absolutely amazing. Please update soon.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#63

Steps to writing a review for the unquotable and amazing Kelly:
1. Read chapter
2. Drown in the hot chocolate like goodness of it.
3. Gulp because you have no words, leave a like
4. Wait for a couple of days
5. Open the fic in cellphone and a reply post on laptop.

I'm sorry for not reviewing earlier. i had a serious writer's block plus a crisis where I doubted the point of me writing fanfiction. Like I said, problems and I couldn't focus on giving you a good review.

I really like the distance you've put between them. Makes all us shippers awarer of the fact that before they are Mehrya, they are Mehak and Shaurya. Two distinct individuals with their own lives and needs. Who had a life before each other. And that they are not simply parts of a pair but complete in themselves with complex relationships outside the one they share with each other.

This is important for me personally, because once I start shipping, the Gestalt perspective overtakes all my individualistic parts.

Allowing S and M to grow, face other challenges while their relationship of mutual trust as KK and MS develops is perhaps the perfect recipe.

As far as your writing style goes, I love the details you put in, letting me, the reader, picture it effectively.

I like S's and Rajiv's relationship and the focus you have put on it. Puts a lot of things into perspective, allowing us to look at him as more than just the arrogant bad boy billionaire love interest. Here is a friend, a co-worker, a professional. A human who gets affected and has genuine emotions. I like the balance you've kept with S's feelings toward Mehak and toward her online persona, giving us more or less a 360 degree angle on him.

As far as Mehak goes, you've written her character in a soft, gentle way that is easy to relate to. Her excitement mixed with slight apprehension, her reaction to having fans of her own.

Cooking for Cartoons bit had me giggling.

I also understand that you've made a slight crossover with a cameo! I've always wanted to do that. But then I'd get glared at and that would not do!

Loved the length of the chapter and the flow. Update soon!

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Posted: 8 years ago
#64

Originally posted by: crtkelly



As do I love yours Mini...waiting anxiously for your update as well😛



Thanks dear

Been stalking this post when were you updating


😃 😳

Have updated the story yestr night 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
#65

Originally posted by: miniapplepie



Thanks dear

Been stalking this post when were you updating


😃 😳

Have updated the story yestr night 😳


Imagine if you can the following...

It's 2:00AM and you are propped up against your headboard happy as you have posted the update u had promised for your OS and think after resting a bit u will tackle the ff. And just then your much abused laptop says enough and emits a death knell before the monitor practically dismembers itself and turns black. 😭You know there is still life as the youtube playlist still continues over your headphones but all you can think of is all of my writing is on this cursed computer! Dare I wake up hubby and ask for help... i tried not to panic because I know my hero will find a solution, but not at 2 in the morning...fast forward and my lappie has gone to greener pastures, but once again I am reminded why I married my hero...he resucitated my lenovo long enough to transfer my files...well at least my writing I really didnt care about anything else so i hadnt checked...to his snazzy new laptop...which I will have to share for the next 3 weeks...so thats it : long story short, computer problem has messed with my posting schedule. Hope to have it finished and posted before the weekend is through...thanks for asking though...

Oh and I saw that you had posted an update and believe I res for my comments. Will be sure to do so today Mini.😊



Edited by crtkelly - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#66

OK sharing a computer is not good. Going to need a little while longer to finish the update, so here is a small preview:

Chapter 2 teaser.

"Well: your explanation, do you wish to share?" Shaurya insisted when Rajiv maintained his silence.

Rajiv shook his head, not so much in denial, but because he knew the venom behind the question still had more to do with Mehek, than not. "Nahi Shaurya, I'd rather not."

The younger man rolled his eyes, frustrated over the fact that whenever the subject turned to his precious protege, that Bhai's attitude turned curt, and that interfered in their successive dealings with each other. Reaching for his mobile, Shaurya shook his head in disgust. "Whatever. Well before you go, perhaps we should go over tomorrow's schedule just to make sure our appointment suit your comings and..."

Her message. How could he have forgotten?

It had slipped his mind that he had left the app open, so in swiping his finger across his cell's screen, Shaurya had immediately accessed the message that had been sent, instead of the scheduler he had intended on checking. The photo taken out of the jumbo jet's window had been captioned.

KK, I'm on my way soon: Is it crazy to be missing home and everyone even before I've even left the ground? These last few days chatting have meant so much...I couldn't bear if you disappeared again ... so let's make a deal that we won't let life get in the way of our friendship again. Just don't forget me, okay

Forget her: was she crazy, Shaurya thought, as he found himself reading her words for a second time. Nahi, not crazy, just anxious it seemed, judging by semi-rambling text. He couldn't stop himself from responding: a practical missive, uncaring that it would be at least fourteen hours before she would be able to access it. He had promised to support her, and he had meant to, and so he kept typing ignoring the fact that he had left his conversation with Rajiv hanging in the air.

Rajiv understood straight away that something had happened. Nothing bad, but something that deeply affected his friend. The expression Shaurya now wore, as he focused on responding to some message, one that plainly he believed more important than tomorrow's schedule was akin to the one reserved for his mother and yet not. On numerous occasions, Rajiv had been thankful for Aunty's calming presence that managed kept Shaurya on an even keel. Until today, as far as he was aware, only Shaurya's mother had the ability to cut through, and bring forth the gentleness that lay deep beneath the abrasive veneer that her son wore like armor. However, some instinct told Rajiv that it wasn't his mother's communication this time around. And for that he felt encouraged. To know there was another capable of doing the same- well that was wonderful. Often, Rajiv had contemplated the completely heartless being Shaurya would dissolve into without Karuna Khanna's influence. His calmness; the peace brought on by merely interacting with her was incredible, and always gave Rajiv hope that one day Shaurya would perhaps work through his demons.

And now, judging by his changed demeanour so it seemed that someone else had come along who could, if not take up the mantle, then possibly supplement the love he received from his mother.

"Send Aunty my regards, while you are at it." Rajiv uttered, just to note Shaurya's reaction.

Not even bothering to stop what he was doing, Shaurya answered "Nahi, it's not Mom, it's..." He stopped typing and, his attention brought back to present company, he self-consciously looked to his friend. "It's..."

Rajiv cocked his head to the side, "Aacha... Someone special perhaps?" Rajiv finished for Shaurya.

Shaurya let out a deep breath and nodded. "Haan; she is very special," he confessed.
Edited by crtkelly - 8 years ago


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Posted: 8 years ago
#67
What a teaser... leaving us hanging on "yes she's very special" . Pls update soon as possible when u get ur laptop.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#68
This teaser is awesome that I can't wait for the full update... Please do it fast ... Can't wait Shaurya's confession to Rajiv ... She is special.. Hmm waiting-2
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Posted: 8 years ago
#69
Hey...Kelly...!


Awesome update...!

I thought that only Shaurya had a sharp-witted mind...but, here Rajiv Sir...outsmarted him (the effect of Shaurya companionship)...! How cunningly and cleverly...he made the mouse come out from the cat mouth...!

So..MS @ Mehek has began her journey and forwarded her first step towards, and into the cold, dry, desert heartland of Shaurya's...and made the impossible possible...! Her first step...into the volcanic heart of Shaurya...and started to plant flowers of love in this hostile and infertile land...which will all bloom and transform it into an oasis of tranquility and peace...! ⭐️
Edited by Waida1234 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#70

Originally posted by: _Namita_

Wonderfully written!! It is awesome and absolutely amazing. Please update soon.

Thank you Namita, had some computer issues, but up and running again. Updating before very soon😊

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