Samaina OS - Lets Breath Again

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@SixteenAgain

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 7 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: Prizi
beautifully written dear

Thanks so much dear! 😊

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May

@SixteenAgain

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 7 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: suhaaniladki
Thank you soo much May u wrote down this is os my request am very grateful for that... Coming to the os it was wonderful dear . I was expecting naina to empty the colddrink bottle on sameer's head 😆 atleast it would have knocked some sense in him but still floor par phekne se bhi kaam bn hi gya 😉 ..It was all so natural sameer ki frustration naina's helplessness but thankfully naina ne apne bare mei socha m happy about that ... And am glad she chose aloo ka parantha over that baigan ka bharta .. That guy seriously needs a dose from swagger maheshwari for upsetting his girl ... Once again thank you for this one

Hi Suman, You are most welcome dear 😊 I was my pleasure writing something with a feel good factor at the end.

And I am so happy that while I was still writing this one you put your OS out too! I loved the one you wrote.

In the war of Aloo Paratha vs Baingan Bartha - Aloo Parathas will emerge the winner any day! 😆

Me too waiting to see Sameer completely vanquishing Sharad and any other guy to dares to lay any claim on Naina. And I want Naina showing the same fighting spirit!

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May

@SixteenAgain

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 7 years ago

#33

Originally posted by: Booklover94
It's going to be just fine from now on😃
Thank you so much may.
I loved loved how well you portrayed their conflicting emotions...
Sameer at this point both loves and hates her,and you showed it so beautifully!😛
I don't know who he's trying to fool,he could never ever be happy or worse, indifferent to nainas suffering...
Shoe should just realise already that she's nothing more than a rebound,and not get in between samaina,the longer this goes,her heartbreak is going to increase.girls usually have a very good sense for this sort of thing,looks like shoe did not get the ''womens intuition" gene at all😕
Uggh,Sharad the champu...he's awful!naina has to give it to him properly!!our hidden tigress has to come to the forefront and blast him in front of all and sundry...
Loved the story❤️

Thanks dear! So pleased you liked it 😊

I am so glad I was able to portray their conflicting emotions. They are both going through a lot at this time. And both are making the mistake of focusing only on their pain and either acting out or trying to bury it deep.

On some level I sympathise with Shoe-naina a little too. She was obviously attracted to him from the very beginning of the college and is now trying to make the most of the situation and secure his affection.

I so hope Sharad gets to see our tigress!!

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Azraa

@Azraa01

Voyager

Posted: 7 years ago

#34

Excellwnt portrayal of emotions.

A heartwarming OS

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TereLiyeMINU

@TereLiyeMINU

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 7 years ago

#35

A powerpacked emotional roller coaster..The thrill and anticipations to know what happens finally...

Does Naina give in or Sameer gives up?

Well,The title is a spoiler..Would have loved the title with a question mark at end.

Well I loved the cat description..And I remember the writer who always amazes me with his parallelism.Hemingway says cats have an absolute emotional honesty.Human beings can hide their feelings,but a cat does not.

Going by this,I don't mind Naina not being a tigress but a mewling cat.😳

Well Sharad is a nasty swine..Oops!Did I just say swine! Swines even have intelligence and understanding.But this Sharad creature is one hell of species with absolutely no understanding cortex in his pea-sized brain.Animals without brains do not deserve cats...😉

At one point,I even thought why a girl like Naina deserved this Sharad's rishta? I mean even Karma went down drain here.Treated as a door mat by that no-brain-species Sharad ,Naina has really fallen from an epic fight.My god..I could feel the suffocation..And yes!who loves baingan ka bharta?🥱

I must say the flow of scene is beautifully done here.It shows your evolution.I loved the detailings of Sameer's expressions. 👏👏

And that crash..The whole conversation is done with master stroke.Each line had its impact.Breathe..yes its the moment to just breathe ..to seize,to feel and to love.

The aloo parathas..They are absolute love.Let the baingan fall flat before aloos..let the bharta feel shy of parathas..and let these two ailing aching souls find respite from battles of emotions and situations.

Sheer brilliance in writing.👍🏼

Thanks for the PM and keep coming with your best.

With love-

Minu

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shabreen

@shabreen

Beginner

Posted: 7 years ago

#36

Gud one really liked it.. I hope there is part 2

Thanks for PM

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Shreya

@PehliDafaHai

Rocker

Posted: 7 years ago

#37

This OS was a beauty, May! The anguish Naina felt melted my heart and had me in the verge of tears but as soon as I read Sam's frustration, I feel the same towards Naina. Such contradicting feelings if you look from a different perspective but you have brought both of their point of views so well. 👏

Sharad holding her hand within knowing her for a few days and enforcing his likes on her showed how much of a gentleman he was. I like how you didn't show the comparison instead the slow realisation that no one can take Sameer's place in her heart and no one has the effect on her the way he has.

She didn't compare both of them instead she compared her feelings when she was with both of them.

She was meant to be a tigress, the breaking of the cola bottle proved it! I love this bold Naina.

The fire returned in her eyes as soon as prioritising favourites came into picture, whatever she did was for her Sameer, from her heart! The aloo paratha banter was the loveliest part of the OS!

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Aayushi

@A.Green

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#38

I guess I am too late 😆

I loved the OS! 😳 The fact that Sameer and Naina sorted their differences in such a simle yet right way makes me so happy. The show just threw away our expectations and stomped over them but you gave the right amount of justice to each aspect! 👏

Naina's realization to Sameer's anger, Naina's punishment to Sameer's jealousy 😳 I love these small parts.

The way she threw the cold drink and the confrontation that followed was my best part! 👏 How he was angry on her and taunted her but as soon as she talked about going away, he was scared, fear gripped him and he couldn't imagine his life without her 😃

Naina saying she would rather die than cook aloo paranthas for Sharad awww , that's the Naina we missed in the track and Sameer stopped her asking to make Aloo Parantha for him! 😛 The OS should be titled Aloo Parantha 😆

Loved it May! And so sorry for being so late. 😳

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May

@SixteenAgain

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 7 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: Shippu92
Reading such stories are relief to the ongoing track moving on TV. .We really have good writers on forum.. Fine write up absolutely. . Love every bit of it.

Thanks dear 😊 so glad you enjoyed it!