Mou...
Before I even start commenting on this excellent piece of writing from you...can I please request all the members to keep this thread active so that it's always on pg 1 and the writers of the team can draw some inspiration for the upcoming navratri sequence in the show which they have not started shooting for as yet...
This os is a perfect balance for how different situations can be played out on samaina
Aah mou...I have to take my words back...
As I always said ...Jo show mein nahi milega...would forever mein milega ...but now it's...Jo show mein nahi milega...wo mou ke writing mein milega āļø
Man...u have a vision ...and I think u should let go off ur dream to be an author...the industry needs writers like u who know how to play different scenarios to enhance the beauty of the scene ... Be it tightening the payal hook with teeth...or tracing that "s" on her nape...u have just nailed it allš
I loved how u started the os... Setting a theme so perfect and natural that there was no question of any loops which were not closed. ...
If ppl had a doubt how the girl gang would stay out till late ...u had it covered with an event organized by the college...if ppl raised an eyebrow on Naina's backless choli... U had it covered by the event being organized on the last day of college before navratri vacations...so that they can get ready in college...and change before going home... This is simple logic used to create the perfect situation for amazing sequences...
Mou...I've always been a fan of ur descriptive starts...the way u painted the picture of festive ahemdabad was amazing...
I loved how oblivious was Sam of the treat he was going to get in the form of Naina...coz no matter how much he imagined Naina in those colourful lehngas he had seen in the shops ... He had no idea about the cholis coz they were not really displayed with the lehngasš... Hats off to ur detailing here...
Sam's excitement was relateable...and I loved how u made him learn the traditional dance forms from Naina...he might be the best dancer in college...but u needed the gujrati blood fed with years of gujrati food running in u to know the raas and Garba...and Sam had his blood contaminated with years of food from the hostels of nainitalš
So samaina have hugged...and Sam can't get enough of it...š
I can so imagine Sam whining behind Naina requesting for a hug...and trust him to suggest secluded places in the college...I'm sure he has his list ready š¤£
Mou...please take a bow for the way u had the built up to the hug ...and how maybe it was in the spur of the moment... The realization did set in...and they both realised the gravity of the initiation of intimacy between them...today itself I read in the interview of an actor...that a hug or a kiss... The moment is not important... It's the moments which lead up to it...and the moments that follow...
I loved how u played the raging emotions of Sam...how this proximity during the rehearsals was creating that urge in him...and how he just acted on it...not really realising wat he was doing...how he just looked out for one thing ...and that was Naina's reaction ...coz that was most important for him...and how the moment he thought that maybe he made a mistake in reading her...he backed off...
The way Naina reciprocated his feelings...and initiated the hug...and how even though it took time for both to realise wat was happening... They both acknowledged the intimacy...
And this is where the CVS lacked depth in the show...Wednesday epi...we got an almost hug between samaina...though they did not realise it at the moment... But there should have been a conversation...on how they both felt at this proximity ...
Sigh
So...Sam commits the cardinal sin by saying he will dance with shoe...and immediately realises it was not a good threatš...
A man who realises his mistake ...and works towards making it right will go very far in life š...I loved how he immediately thought of being punished...
You know mou...wats that one characteristic of your Sam's that I love the most???
Their instinctively protective natureāļø
I loved how the moment Sam was pulled in...his first instinct was to protect Naina from getting hurt...be it by putting his palms behind her head or by him wrapping his arms around her so that she doesn't bear his full weight
And... Mischievous Maheshwari taking advantage of a situation...not leaving a chance to flirt with his gf is my all time favš„³... I simply loved how he caught on the line that Naina doesn't mind any of his antics...and the way he immediately decided to act upon it by kissing her palms š
Aah... I loved the detailing of the whole mehndi thing...the way boys were helping out the girls...but ...I would've loved to see a detailed experience of Sam peeking in Naina's purseš...
I could actually imagine how he would've sat down...fully focussed on how Naina's mehndi was being drawn...and that touch of tucking her strand was just wowww
Aah... Whining Sam again š
Usko mehndi mein naam bhi chahiyeš²...abhi seš¤£
Aah...this os has so many firsts of Sam...
First time hug
First time witnessing her mehndi
First palm kiss
First time peeping into her purse
And first time realisation that his girl is just like a normal girl who takes hours to get ready ...
I loved how he doesn't mind waiting for her as she gets ready...as long as he's party to the processes involved in itš
I can so imagine Sam being that hubby who will happily fix the pleats of his wife's saree... Or help her tuck the pins in her hair...
Mouš¤£
sam sunaina interaction was awesome...the poor girl kept on trying to get some response from Sam...but ...he has eyes only for his girl āļø... The way he used the word nice for all the girls of the gang simply shows how far he has come in this relationship...
The way u described Naina thru Sam's eyes...just made me realise why u chose black for her...she being extremely fair...black would only enhance the exposed parts of her body...be it her arms...or her midriff or her back...
I simply loved how you chose a gypsy style kamarband for her ...the dull oxidised against the black...and the clinking sound erupting from it would draw all the attention towards her waist...(not that Sam would've missed it anywaysš)
I loved how both were dressed to kill each other...if Naina had decided to kill him with her sleeveless and backless choli...Sam too had decided to test the levels of his growing intimacy with Naina with his bare chested kurta...
Uff mouāŗļø
That whole payal sequence was totally stupendous...right from the time he bent to touch her...to the point where he asked her to keep her feet on his knee ...that was simply oozing sexy...the way naina pulled up her lehnga...just enough for him to view both her ankle and waxed legsš...or I had not even recovered from imaging how his fingers would've brushed on her ankle as he clasped it...that u had to take it to another level by making him use his teeth...š³...I swear I will personally kill the CVS if they don't use this in the show...it was screaming intimacy...but without doing anything ...and to add to it...though Sam did it instinctively...Naina felt the effect immediately...that's how u bring out the sexual tension between them... And then...as soon as Sam realised the effect it had on Naina...he did wat he had to do...repeat the procedureš
Mou...the reaction to Sam's first meeting with Naina's backless avatar was mind blowing š¤£
And Naina enjoying his condition was icing in the top...The way she acted innocent and ignorant to wat he was trying to imply was very well written...
The way she pointed out towards the Dori that it did exist...
The way thise doris were literally non existent for sam...the way his eyescwere darting out on viewing her back...I loved...no super loved the way Sam realised wat exactly Naina was wearing...and how immediately his possesive side took over him...
...that sab dekhenge...aah...feels u know I loved how Sam confessed he has not seen any other girl...and how happy Naina was on hearing this...but the best part was Naina openly telling him that everything was for his eyes only
And... U are bad mou...
That tease of getting to see her back fully only wen Naina twirled...Sam dancing right behind her So that the view is only for his eyesš...And that almost hug in the middle of the ground...š³
But then I forgive u... Coz u made sunaina fall along with her gang š
This guy...and his imaginations...Naina wants imli...and all he can think of how farq kaise pata chalegaš¤£... Beta Sameer...imli is not the sureshot wayš...there are other ways tooš¤£
Sam loves Naina... But he loves alloo too...and his rationalization...fantastic...somebody give him the student of the year award already š¤£...
How coolly he concluded that by keeping one love of his life happy ... He can always guarantee uniterrupted supply of his other loveš¤£...I mean can u imagine his love For that vegetable...that not even an interrupted view of Naina's Creamy back could stop him from putting one more piece of that vegetableš¤£
Ohhh mou...how i love you for ur protective Sameer descriptions...the way Sameer kept on holding Naina with one hand and searched for the switch with the other as she crashed on to him was superb...āļø... As I had mentioned earlier too...I simply love how u build up the intimacy...the way he instinctively rubbed her back like he always did to soothe her ...not realising it was bare...the way the realisation dawned upon them...the way he could not stop himself from doing wat he was doing coz Naina had told him she did not mind his actions...And then...the unwanted happens...nobody but the watch is to be blamedš...all of Naina's boldness goes down the drain...
I liked how she immediately related this unwanted situation to some rash decisions...the unsurity if Sam liked her wearing such revealing clothes...Which she had worn on the behest of her friends...She obviously had a hint of the possessiveness that Sam held for her...but the way you closed all her inhibitions thru Sam was brilliant... Loved how u brought abt "sirff mujhe dekhna"...
The way u described the first intimacy...that trailing of the
invisible "S"... Liked how he was still not happy with the missing name on her mehndiš...Loved how u did not miss Sam's effort to dress up ...Heiscaim was to enhance their intimacy...and Naina hugging him with her lips on his bare chest did just that...you are an absolute brilliant writer mou...hats offāļø
Mou...that kiss...how do u manage to make each kiss so different???? U have written umpteenth stories ...and weneverasamaina have kissed for the first time...u have managed to create that essence with your words...keeping in mind the equation of the couple In the story...each nuance...each kiss has been so so different...I simply loved how Sam told her to think again...and she replied that she already had...absolutely brilliant...u literally took my breath away with this one...š³
And finally...sam gets rewarded for tying nainas dori...ffr securing that trust that even though her sleeves had loosened...this was definitely not the right time to venture into those aspects...i can so visualise his beaming face on seeing his name in Naina's mehndi...the boy deserves this happiness in the show too...
Mou...I don't think I need to say I loved this os to the core Considering the size of the review...it's an absolutetreatt
Please keep writing more