SamAina OS: The Oath - Page 8

Originally posted by: Azraa01

You have the gift of writing! To come up with this while being sleepy is an art. A wonderful narration of such intense emotions. You have portrayed the emotions and intensity of love and pain so magically!
Well done on another excellent OS

Lotsa Love

Originally posted by: shravyarao

This was beautiful, you captured the pain and the solid indifference in naina. It was alot emotional yaar.
Sameer gradually coming aware of how it was affecting her and what he did to her by keeping an oath on him, wow yaar it was a diff thought and can totally relate to as it was something sameer would do.

Nice one mou, sleep deprived but still giving us such amazing one. Hatts off to you.

Keep coming with more dear, can't wait to read.

Originally posted by: TereLiyeMINU

Beautiful detailing of the manifestation of pain and hurt.👏 Though its not one of your masterpieces but certainly a good one to be in bucket

Loved the handkerchief scene.Brilliantly thought and worded that scene was.👏

And the confrontation that started with kiss and ended with kiss perfectly elucidates how it is an oath taken a little closer, a promise more exact. 😳

Sorry for the shortest reply I think.

Keep coming with your best and thanks for the PM.

With love-

Minu

Originally posted by: Radhika03

I'm speechless...what a wonderful OS...From the Title to the end of story everything was extra-ordinary ...Loved Naina's outraged ...it was penned down so so beautifully...I literally felt actual scene getting enacted in front of me...Loved it to the core ⭐️ Keep writing 😳

Originally posted by: Tajon

Briliant writing Mou from start to end. You protrayed their pain and suffering so well. This is a beautifully penned story.. loved it.

👏

Originally posted by: Ishaqzaade

Lovely piece of writing. 👏 Enjoyed reading it.

-Dhwani

Originally posted by: suhaaniladki

Aisa kon krta hai bhai sleepy sleepy mode mei bhi itna brilliant write up 😆 ... But kya comment karu yaar u are alawys so brilliant in each n every story u come up ... Ab toh tareef k liye words bhi kam pad gye 😳 ...

Detailing m little weak but i just love reading stuff alot

Originally posted by: Mayashika

Aesthetically written😳

It hit the right chords, it brought tears to my eyes especially how you wrote Naina's state of mind, her numbness..it actually felt scary, to be in that zone of mind where no one can understand except the person who has hurt you or maybe she just wanted him to understand...The sudden change in her emotions really made me emotional and how Sameer reacted to it, his mind and heart in a constant battle.

Her staying away from everything that reminded her of his memories...that was so real for her to do that but still heart rending to read.

The bloody handkerchief was so disturbing, it all felt too real. Sam's breakdown, again a thumbs up. I especially liked how you have made Sam realise on his own of his folly to stay away from his life, Naina. I am in love with your take on this jinxed puzzle that Sameer was not allowing to solve.

Sameer trying everything in his hands to make Naina come out of this zone was a beautiful parallel you have added.

Her tearing the pages of the book where she had confessed her undying love for him pierced my heart too...

The breakdown again was not OTT but subtle for me. Just how you would react after a heartbreak...even in my melancholic mood that I have created, I couldn't help but laugh when she threw the duster.

The end brought a smile on my face, them confessing their love for each other again and making a promise to never leave each other. The beginning and the end of the argument was with a oath.

Loved it dear!

Originally posted by: pixie_dust

Wow...that was incredible

Totally awestruck

Originally posted by: Samainadeewani

This is what you write when you are feeling extremely sleepy then I would suggest you to be sleepy every time you plan to write anything ..

This update was literally an emotional ride for me

Every aspect starting from Sameer's fear to Naina loosing hope and herself also was described beautifully

I could feel every emotion you mentioned

Sameer's rigid decision on not getting close to Naina made my heart ache ..that's the impact of your stories

When Sameer realised what he did was completely wrong and asked Preeti for help and in return received the " expression "

That was bang on ..I imitated Preeti while reading

The way you described Naina going completely emotion less

And specially that " thank you " it made me feel terrible for the poor girl ..she was behaving like a stranger with him

The turning point was literally a turning point ..and my favorite part of the story also

The hall scene has my heart ..my words will be able to do justice with your writing

I could only say that it was breathtaking

Specially Sameer saying " break the oath " and that kiss

I was holding my breath and waiting for Naina yo respond and she did and let it all out

Throwing things at him and then finally Sameer pacifying his girl was beautiful

Naina saying " how could you " she didn't need to give him a lecture just a small question would explain her situation

Loved the way you subtly handled the situation

And the last kiss on demand by Naina was purely bilss

The last dialogue has my heart about how and form when he started believing in superstition ..it was lovely

How do you come up with such ideas and words

I'm in aww of it

Extremely sorry for the late update ..don't be mad at me ..I might be the last one to comment but what to do this exam monster ..

Waiting for your updates as always

Love

Laalchi reader