SamAina OS: The Oath - Page 9

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: doublecross

Wow! Mou take a bow! I just dont know what to say. Am speechless. The anguish, the pain, the helplessness all was so perfectly done. Naina's attempts were met with ride thwarts since the man was not ready to come to terms with his foolishness. The oath, the very idea of it seemed stupendous. The blackmail that paid off but ultimately left both souls bruised. Sameer in his quest to stay away took undue advantage of naina's innocence and her beliefs in such things. He meandered her on the path that he wanted her to traverse upon. But little did he know that he was taking soul in exchange and would be turning her into a living dead. She would have ample of oxygen to breathe, good food to eat, clothes to wear but her soul would be devoid of any happiness, it would be all hollow from within. The smile would be gone, so would the twinkle, all would be lost in the turmoil of his stupid battle between lucky and unlucky.

The pain that sameer goes seeing naina is something which wrenched my heart. This was something which I had lined for on our show too. I so wanted sameer to feel something on similar lines where he could see naina go in a downward spiral, ache in her pain yet feel helpless. It was all so superbly portrayed. Especially the part where he tries to mend ways, after he realises his fault, how foolish he had been to lap up all of his step grandmother's unlucky nonsense. He was letting naina go from his life for it. He was actually not only torturing her but also putting himself through immense pain for no solid rhyme or reason. I loved the way he asks her to break the oath. Those blank states and hollowness tormented his soul and even the mist of superstition was lifted.the way he tries to coddle her and seeks her forgiveness touched my heart. The kiss was not only to bring her out of her sorry reverie but also to express the anguish and pain that he was going through..it was also the unquenchable thirst that he felt for her love. Naina's reaction and her demand at the end was completely justified. After all the hell that she was made to experience, it was like life had been breather in a jiffy. She was overwhelmed by it all but the trauma was undeniable for her and she wanted a compensation for all her torment.

Loved it!
If your sleepless nights make you come up with such wonderful creations then I must say bless those sleepless nights. But on a serious note since you have just tecuperayed from flu, I want you take as much rest as possible. Health comes first. Wish you a very happy a d restful weekend.


Thank you so much Pooja... 😃

Yes, Sameer resisted his heart and allowed the meaningless thoughts of his brain rule him... and when he found himself weakening he resorted to something he knew Naina would never disobey, a swear on his life... What he didn't realize was how this action of his would affect her...

For this story, I wanted Sameer to come out of his unlucky rant by himself... and for that he needed to understand that by staying away from her, by breaking their relationship, he was not keeping her happy and safe, instead he was destroying her life... He had to see her in pain and know that it wasn't his bad luck that caused it but his own deliberate actions...

I am so glad you loved the story dear... And please don't worry, I am taking care of my health... It was just this idea of story that wasn't allowing me to sleep till I wrote it down... I still have no clue how it came to me because this isn't my usual style of writing...

Love,
Mou
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Anmol333

Res mou 😉

Unres 😃

Wow mou what an os 👏👏
Simply amazing!
Her blank face was haunting her like any thing.
He was guilty because of his actions. Poor naina did all things she can do. But this brainless guy was not in his sense.
He give her his swear which make her lifeless.
The pain within her was beautifully stated 👏
The pain Sameer had given to her nothing is big than that pain.

Finally Sameer got his brain back, and determine to get her back.
Now his turn to taste his own medicine, the way he had reacted to her attempt, same reaction he got.
Then to last part is Damn sweet.
Finally they are back together.

Thanks for pm!


Thank you so much Anmol...!! 😃

Yes, for this story I wanted Sam to come out of his manhoos jaap by himself.. witnessing her lifeless state made him realize that it wasn't his bad luck that caused it but his own deliberate actions... And we all know that he is a determined lover.. so once he was clear that he had made a mistake he did everything he could to rectify it...

I am so glad you loved the story dear...! 😳

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