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Posted: 7 years ago
#31
HAe its very very nice...

Please update the next part as soon as possible...

But want more Sameer and Naina Interactions...

Not Naina Accepting Love Easily...
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Thank you everyone, happy you all commented and liked the OS. Will try my best to update soon :)
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Hey guys...I am writing more parts just for those sweet people who enjoyed the story and participated by liking and commenting on this OS. So many are reading it, but just as silent members. Please kindly like or comment on the story to give me motivation to write more. Cheers.

Part 3

It was a Monday morning. School was going to start a bit late today. Naina had made a promise to Swathi to accompany her to the shiva temple today. Both of them decided that they would dress up nicely today and go to Shiva temple together.

Naina was wearing a white net chudidar, matching earings, and left her hair open. While Swathi wore a black dress. It was some special puja that day at the temple. Swathi arrived at Naina's place, both of them bid adieu to chachiji and went to the temple.

Upon arrival at the temple, both of them got puja thal and proceeded to do the prayers. After completing the puja, both took blessings from the panditji, and came to do cow puja. As both were feeding the cow, Swathi kept looking towards the park that was located next to the temple. Naina noticed that, and gave a questioning look to Swathi.

Swathi: Yaar Naina, kya tu mere saath us park mein chalegi?
Naina: kyaa??? tu paagal ho gayi hai Swathi. Is waqt park mein kon jata hai?
Swathi: please na Naina, please yaar chalna. Tujhe yaad hai jab hum chote the, toh aksar is park mein jula julne (swinging) ke liye aaya karte the?
Naina: haan yaad hai Swathi Parrr..
Swathi: Grabbed Naina's arm, and started pleading, please Naina chalna, aaj toh mauka bhi hai, aur abhi school jane mein 2 ghante baki hai...please naa yar please chalna...
Naina (couldn't say no to her best friend): okay okay, theek hai chalte hain...chalo

They reached inside the park. Because it was a Monday morning, there was hardly anyone there in the park as all the adults were at work and all the kids were usually at school during this time.

There were two swings there, a slide and few other things for the kids to play. Swathi ran to the swing and sat on one of the swings. Naina followed her and sat on the other swing.

Swathi: chal Naina, bachpan ki tarah race lagate hain
Naina: okay, is baar bhi mein hi jitungi
Swathi (smiled): dekhenge

Both of them started swinging. Naina was reaching very high, and laughing out loud. Her dupata was flowing in the air like crazy.

Naina: dekh Swathi mein kitna upar ud rahi hoon...bahot maza aaraha hain.
Swathi: haan haan Naina, udle udle, kisi din toh mein hi tujhe jeet kar dikhaungi
Naina just kept swinging higher and higher and just looking towards the sky. While swinging she failed to notice that Swathi had slowed down her swing purposely.

Naina just kept on swinging and swinging. Her dupataa kept on flying with her. She kept on smiling and laughing. Unaware of the fact that there was someone watching her from behind the swing. Dressed in a plane dark blue shirt and white jeans a tall figure was standing right behind her swing. Eyes filled with admiration, just starring at the ethereal beauty dressed in white dress in front him. The person kept on starring at her as never seen before. Completely mesmerized by the beauty in front of the eyes.

Naina's swing was not going as fast anymore. She was slowing down, and that is when that person stood right behind where her swing was reversing back. Naina was still lost. But as she was going back on her swing this time, she felt a push on her swing. As if someone was helping her push her swing forward. She couldn't see the person but she was jolted at the realization that someone else was present in the park other than her and Swathi. She looked towards swathi's swing and noticed that it had stopped. Naina tried to slow down but, someone kept pushing her swing forward.

Naina: Swathi tu ruk kyon gayi. aur yeh kon hai mere piche.
Swathi (winked at the person standing behind Naina), and Naina looked back as her swing was going back, and noticed that the person was none other than Sameer Maheshwari.

Naina was shocked was an understatement. She tried to stop her swing, but Sameer just kept on pushing it back up, not allowing her to stop. Naina just wanted the swing to stop so she can run away from there as fast as she could but all her efforts to stop the swing were gone in vain.

Swathi finally smiled at Sameer: Good luck, meine apna kaam kar diya. And she started to leave from there. While Sameer was still pushing Naina on the swing.
Naina (seeing swathi leave): Swathi ruk, tuk kahaan jaa rahi hai?
Swathi: Naina meine apna kaam kar diya, ab tum aur sameer dekho joh bhi karna hai.
Naina: Swathi tu ruk, tu mil mujhe, aaj nahin chodungi tujhe.
Swathi (waving her hand good bye): bye bye Naina, dekhlenena, filhall toh Sameer ko dekh.

Sameer smiled towards Swathi, and Swathi left from there.

This was all the plan of Sameer, Muna, Pandit during the classroom conversation. To get Naina alone with the help of Swathi at the park.

Naina felt so nervous as now there were only two people in that park right now. Sameer right behind her pushing the swing, and Her on the swing. As her swing was coming down, this time instead of pushing it, Sameer held the swing chains from behind with both his hands and stopped the swing while it was still in reverse position. He kept the swing up in the reverse position, so that Naina couldn't get off the swing, while he held on to the swing from both sides.

Naina's hands were holding both the chains, and Sameer's hands were right above where her hands were on the chains, holding the swing up high. His face right on the sides of her ear. Naina felt his breath on her ears. She was so nervous, she had no where to escape. Her white dupatta was flowing on his face from her shoulders, and she was held up along with the swing very close to him.

They were like that for quite some time. The wind was blowing, her dupatta on his face, his face so close to her ear, and his and her hair flowing with the wind. Naina looking down all nervous and Sameer's eyes fully on her from behind.

Finally the time unfroze, and Sameer blew air on to her face. She felt ticklish and shy, and she looked to the opposite side and she closed her eyes. His face was just inches away behind her ear.

Sameer (whispered): Naina, aaj tum bahot khoobsurat lag rahi ho, while starring at her face from the side. Naina felt his words so close to her ears, and his breath on her face, she sighed, and closed her eyes even tighter.

Sameer brought the swing forward and again back towards him. Not allowing her to get off while Naina just kept her eyes closed facing towards the side. Everytime, he brought the swing towards him, her face touched his face from the side, and blew air on to her face from the side. This made her body shudder and sent shivers down her spine.

He did that couple of times, and finally brought swing to its normal position, and whispered something in her ear
Sameer (whispered slowly in her ear): I love you .
she gasped so hard, that he even heard her breath.
Sameer (whispered again): Nainaaa (pause), kooch kahogi nahin?

Naina couldn't say a word. She felt so shy, that she felt that "agar dharti fat jati toh, woh apna sharam se bhara chehra leke usi mein sama jati".

Sameer came towards the front of the swing while still holding on the chain of the swing with one hand from one side. Now he was standing in front of her. She was still facing down, all blushed up like a newly wed bride, her eyes closed, sitting on the swing, holding tight on to the swing chains on both sides. Sameer was starring down towards her, while she was still seated on the swing.

Song started playing in the background.
Mere rang mein, rangne wali
pari ho ya ho, pariyo ki rani,
yaaho meri prem kahani,
mere sawalo kaa jawab do...
Donaaa...

music playing in the back ground
Sameer grabbed her shoulders, and made her stand up while still starring down at her. Naina slowly got up from the swing...still all blushed up, eyes closed. Sameer lifts her chin up with his fingers and loooks at her face passionately, but Naina does not open her eyes, and turns completely pinked face.

Kyon hon tum sharmayi hui si,
lagti ho kooch ghabhrayi hui si,
dhalka hua sa aanchal kyon hai,
yeh mere dil mein hal chal kyon hai???

Mere sawalo kaa jawaab do, donaaa...

Sameer brings his face close to her face, close, even closer...Naina felt his breath on her face, and she pushed him and tried to run from there. But Sameer was not willing to let her go just yet. He grabbed her flowing dupatta from behind and Naina stopped in her tracks.

Naina in front facing away from him, and Sameer a little far away holding her Dupatta.
Naina holds on to her dupatta by her neck so as to prevent it from completely coming off of her.
Sameer wrapps end of her duppatta around her hand.

Naina still looking away from him.

Naina: please mera Dupatta choddo (still extremely shy, looking down)
Sameer: nahin chodunga
Naina: please koi dekh lega
Sameer wrapped the dupaata around his hand one more time, which made her pull backward towards him
Sameer: nahin koi nahin dekhega, filhaal is park mein tumhare aur mere alava koi nahin hai.
Naina: please jane do
Sameer took few step forward while wrapping her duppata around his hand one more time. It pulled her completely towards him. crashing her on to his chest, while he still held on to her dupatta.

Naina was still holding on to her dupatta tight so that it doesn't come off of her.

Sameer brought his face close to her ear.
Sameer: ek shart pe jane dunga
Naina (whispered, very nervous): kya?
Sameer: woh teen shabd mujhe sunne hain
Naina: sameer please mujhe jane do, school ke liye der ho jayegi...
Sameer (whispered in a husky tone): nahin jane dunga, pehle woh teen shabd bolo...
Naina: please Sameer mujhse nahin hoga
Sameer: sift teen shabd hi toh bolne hain...

Naina: Sameer koi aajayega
Sameer: koi nahin aayega
Naina pointing at the side, woh dekho koi aagaya

and as soon as Sameer turned to look, she pushed him got her Dupatta and ran from there...

Sameer ran behind her but, she was too fast...

Sameer: naina mein tumse bulva kar hi dum lunga...kab tak bachogi mujhse...


To be continued :)

Guys please leave comments, and let me know how you liked it. Writing requires imagination ahhaha and that requires motivation. So please hit those likes and leave me comments :D

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Edited by paagalbandar - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
#34
Awesome loved it oyee hoyeee sameer maheswari,
Naina is just so cute.
Aap toh chaa gayee can't wait for u too update :)
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: worldequalsyou

Awesome loved it oyee hoyeee sameer maheswari,

Naina is just so cute.
Aap toh chaa gayee can't wait for u too update :)



thank you...i have completed the scene after you read it...so do finish reading and let me know what you think hahaah😆

i really wish they play this scene in the drama hahahha..mazza aayega 😆 i am willing to direct it hahahahahahaah😆
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Loved it. Read it in one sitting 😊. Your characters are quite bold, kash serial mein bhi unke paas itni himmat hoti 😆. Koi baat nhi we'll just have to live through your fic. I was imagining the entire scene with Ashi and Randeep playing their roles Great job, keep up the good work. 😃. Update soon!
Edited by mnm1197 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Omg what a cliffhanger please update soon i wont br able to sleep lol
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: mnm1197

Loved it. Read it in one sitting 😊. Your characters are quite bold, kash serial mein bhi unke paas itni himmat hoti 😆. Koi baat nhi we'll just have to live through your fic. I was imagining the entire scene with Ashi and Randeep playing their roles Great job, keep up the good work. 😃. Update soon!



thank you...please see the edited version as i completed the scene lol...my heroes are always shetaan hahahaha...not bad people though lol😆 if you see my madhubala and Reporter stories, you will see how shetaan they are hahahha😆
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Originally posted by: barunlove21

Omg what a cliffhanger please update soon i wont br able to sleep lol




thank you...please read edited version of part 3...no cliffhanger lol
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Passionate one!! 😛


Read all three parts in one go and enjoyed them thoroughly..
Your version of Sameer is such bold and aashiq mijaj!
Swooping the earth below Naina'd feet with his super romantic gestures. Poor Naina.. For how long would she be able to resist?? 😉

Keep it up!! Eagarly waiting for more 😳

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