SongOSthon#2- my note on Pg 22 - Page 10

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Posted: 10 years ago
#91
Awesome!
Very much emotional.😭😭😭
Song you chose was brilliant.👏👏👏
To express how much you love one is very difficult.
In this case ishita proved how much she loved raman.
pls pm me next time you write something.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wow, congrats on thread 2 everyone! I'm excited to catch up with all the stories I have missed. Will read and comment once I post my OS later this week. 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
#93

Originally posted by: smilesforever98

Thank you so much! Glad you can imagine what I wrote!


Seriously if U write any OS/SS just PM me yaar..Its nice 2 read ur stories.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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@..oneOone..
its fab... awsome story.. totally loved it..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Prabh ..very emotional Raman is no more 😭.but you young ...this much depth in your writing 👏👏
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Posted: 10 years ago
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To all the writers on thread #1 & 2,

Pls check if ur OSes are linked to the index correctly. Sometimes a few posts get deleted in btw, and posts tend to move up/move to prev page. So pls check this and let me know in case there is any problem.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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This piece was painfully beautiful!!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I am posting this OS on behalf of umeirah02

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SHAAM E RAHGUZAR

"Zindagi mein baaki aur reh kya gaya hai??"
was all she uttered before storming out shutting out the cries of her mother and words of concern from her father. Life had been cruel; why... was the question...!! What wrong had she ever done...??
She had unwavering faith in God even though he put her under testing times every so often. She kept her belief intact even when she lost her sister to cancer, she didn't lose hope when her best friend committed suicide... she believed it all happened for a sound reason... but...
what justification did God have to offer for today... why had he done THIS...???
she had set off... not knowing where... yet she kept moving... on... the barren streets of Delhi... that's when she collided with... HIS car
Panic over took him and he rushed out of his car to check on HER...
she was lying there... blood oozing out her head; he lifted her up and placed her at the back of his car and drove off...
****
How is she Doc?
Young man had you not brought her in... she could have lost her life... she's better than before but please ensure she doesn't strain herself as she has suffered a head injury but nothing too serious to create an uproar... another 3 days and she'll be fit to be discharged!
That's cool... so can I meet her?
Yeah sure... Doc smiled
Thank you...!!
****
Hi there!
He got no reply...
He repeated ... Hi there
The response was the same...
****
He came nearer her and tried to initiate a conversation
I hope you're well now. I'm so sorry to have done this to you. Actually, you just arrived from nowhere and I became a little perplexed; with all the confusion... I ended up doing this!
Why do you have to apologize. You know what?
What? He quizzed
It would have been better had that accident killed me...!! I don't deserve THIS for a life...!!
Madam are you crazy...?? You should be glad you're alive...!!
Alive...??? For who...?? What purpose does my life serve... I'm nothing but a burden to all around... YOU would have ALSO cursed me had I died due to this accident...!! I hate my mere existence...!!
Please be quite... this is not the place for such conversations... I'd rather we let your family know of your condition...!!
I don't have a family...!!
You are not serious...??
Of course I'm serious...!!
I think you need to sleep now...!!
Who are you to dictate me?? I don't need sleep... I need to get out of here... immediately...!!
Please stop being so stupid... you need to stay in the hospital untill the doctors don't discharge you themselves...!!
I feel suffocated... I want to get out... leave this place forever
See we can figure a way around... I'll just call your Doc
****
Doc this Madam here is feeling alot of discomfort having to stay in hospital so if you don't have a problem I'd like to take her home. I remember what you've said but she's insisting on this so...
I don't have an issue my only concern is that she needs complete bed rest.
I'll handle that Doc; there's nothing to fret as long as I'm along with her...
She gave him a deadly stare as an indication of her disappointment but he thought this was most convenient at this point in time...
Brilliant!
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LATER THAT DAY
Dekho I know you are uncomfortable yun iss tarah bin mujhe jaane mere saath ghar chalne ke liye but trust me!
"Bin Pooche Mera Naam Aur Pata; Rasmon Ko Rakh ke Parein; Char Kadam Bas Chaar Kadam Chaldo naa Saath Mere"
(without knowing each others names'... putting apart all rituals... four steps... just four steps... walk along with me)
Mujh pe itna bara ehsaan kyun?
Kyun ki jis taqleef se tum aaj ghuzar rahi ho bahut saal pehle mein bhi guzar chuka hoon. Shuru mein dard seene se nikalne ka naam hi nahi leta magar jab koi Humdard saath ho toh dard ka ehsaas kam hojata hai!
Thinking she wouldn't budge; he quipped
Don't worry yaar situation ka advantage nahi uthaon ga!
Well mere paas aur koi option bhi toh nahi hai! Par agar tumne aisi waisi koi harkat karne ki koshish bhi ki; I swear I'm not gonna spare you. Black belt hoon, by God band baja dungi!
Bharosa karo mujh par
"Bin Kuch Kahe; Bin Kuch Sune; Haathon Mein Haath Liye; Chaar Kadam bas Chaar Kadam Chaldo naa Saath Mere
(Without uttering a word... without saying anything... hand in hand... four steps... only four steps... just walk along)
He extended his hand towards hers and she reciprocated it by slipping her hand in his. She believed that he was the one who would support her. Her faith in God restored and she believed all this had happened for the right reason; be it whatever!
They spoke not a word; they just walked side by side believing that the Almighty had his ways of setting things straight.
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Chalo andar aao and please feel at ease. I know it's not the safest option for two strangers to be under one roof but considering your health; I believe you should just stay over. Jab maan chahe... chali jaana!
Thank you...!!
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What would you like... I guess kuch halka phulka hojaaye... more like soup?
I'm sorry to put you through this trouble. I promise to leave in a few days!
Be at ease par I was thinking you should tell someone in your family.
He noticed her glaring at him
Haan jaanta hoon tumne kaha tha ke you don't have a family but you look visibly disturbed so gusse mein hi kaha hoga?
You're right aapne haalaaton se pareshaan hoon main...!! Jo zindagi ka sabse khushnuma din tha.. woh mehaz ek maatam banke rehgaya. Aur bajahye iske ke mere parents mujhe support karein; unhe apne reputation ki padhi hui thi. Beti ki taqleef ko bhool ke unhe logon ke taanon ka darr tha. Aisi family ko kya main apna keh sakti hoon?
Shaayad tum mujhe naa batana chaho magar taqleef baatne se kam hi hoti hai. Apni problem se bhaagne ke bajahye agar tum uska saamna karo gi toh usse bhoolaane mein tumhe aasaani hogi! Apne khud ke experience se hi bata rahoon hoon, boss!
Acha chalo tum freshen up ho jao (signalling to the washroom) I'll prepare your soup!
****
After having eaten lunch, he asked her to take a nap for sometime...
Haan haan jao sleep for sometime... you need all the rest possible... please make yourself feel comfortable. Woh sabse zyaada zaroori hai!
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He knocked the door seeing she was not sleeping. He thought this was the right time for him to initiate a conversation.
Hey can I come in, please?
Haan sure you can! Tumhaara hi toh ghar hai!
Well maine socha kahin tumhe disturb toh nahi kar raha!
Don't worry main theek hoon.
Anyways, mujhe tumse kuch poochna tha; can I?
Kya?
Yahi ke tum bhaag ke jaa kahaan rahi thi ke meri gaadi se aa takri? Aur tum lag bhi toh itni koy hui si thi... if there's anything troubling you mujhe bejijak bata sakti ho. I promise kisi aur insaan ko pata nahi chale gaa. It's always going to be between the two of us...
... I know ke tum mere ghar tak bhi nahi aana chahti thi par tumhaari haalat dekh ke aur baatein sun ke tumhe akela bhi toh nahi chodh sakta tha! Iss waqt tumhe sabse zyaada zaroorat kisi aise insaan ki hai jo tumhaare saath tumhaari taqleefein baant sakhe! Yakeen karo mera!
You know bahut apsous ki baat hai ke apno ne paraya kar diya aur paraye ne apna! Magar main aaisi zindagi nahi jeena chaahti jahaan kissi ko meri zaroorat hi naa ho!
Arre batao toh yaar aakhir baat hai kya?
Yeh koi choti si baat nahi hai jisse share karke mann halka ho jaaye aur main aage bhar paon. Uss aadmi ne mujhse rishta todhdiya sirf isiliye kyun ki main kabhi usse... woh... (a tear paved it's way down her cheek) ... she burst out in a cry!
Her heart ached; why had God done this? Was it her fault?... Was she a bad person?... Was the Almighty punishing her?... What harm had she done to anyone????
Hey sssh... chup ho jao! Main tumhaari naa kahi hui baat bhi samajh gaya! Dekho har kisi ki khamiyaan aur khoobhiyaan hoti hain!
Magar woh khoobhiyaan kis kaam ki jab woh aurat ek... kabhi... ek... Maa... hi... naa..
Poori baat toh suno yaar! Har kisi ki khamiyaan aur khoobiyaan hoti hain, iss baat ko tum bhi maanti ho magar har kisi kaa apna nazariya bhi toh hota hai. Burai yaa achaai insaan mein nahi insaan ko dekhne waale mein hoti hai!
Lagta hai tumhe khoob experience hai??
Experience se hi toh bata raha hoon! Tum mere ghar mein ho; I'm sure tum soch rahi hogi ke ghar itna khaali kyun hai? Well sachaai toh yeh hai ke main bhi jaise ke tum ab ho, bilkul akela hi hoon... bahut saalon se!
Aisa kyun?
Kyun ki main ek divorcee hoon! Meri shaadi mehaz koi cheh saal pehle tooti thi! Tumhaari tarha uss din main bhi khud ko aise hi tanha mehsoos kar raha tha.. teen saalon tak toh kisi se baat hi karni chodh di thi. Phir ek din maine socha ke main khud ko kis cheez ki sazaa de raha hoon? Main kyun ek - ek din mar mar ke kaat raha hoon; I've got an entire lifetime ahead of myself jo main kisi khud garz aurat ki wajah se barbaad karne pe thulla hua hoon. That's when self discovery began; I brought myself out of that mess and aaj main ek confident; self assured person hoon! I don't need anyone in my life kyun maine khud ko itna mazboot bana diya hai! I don't give a damn what people say; my life thus my choices! Agar tum bhi khud ke liye jeeo gi toh khush raho gi. Keep no expectations; no demands from anyone in life! Family pressure toh harkisi ko jheelna padhta hai but you need to learn to take it in your stride and live for yourself kyun ki anth mein chahe koi kuch bhi kahe yeh life hai toh tumhaari hi toh fehsle lene ka haq bhi toh tumhaara hi hona chaiye, hai naa?
Oh ho dekho toh itna lamba lecture de dala Mister ne! Waise kahaan se chaant ke nikala tumne!
In all honesty, life ne bahut kuch sikhaya hai mujhe! Jab meri wife jo ki ab ex wife hai mujhe chodh ke chaali gayi thi I though ke meri hi galati hai par der se hi sahi yeh realise kar hi diya ke uss aurat ki aukat hi itni giri hui thi! Aaj tumhaara rishta toota toh tumhe aise laga ke jism se rooh hi chin gaya. You know what, actually, main tumhaare liye bahut khush hoon. Waqt rehte tum bach gayi. Waise low class mentality wale logon ke saath rehne se toh better hai ke tum life afresh start karo; with someone who cares enough. Arre woh pyaar hi kya jo tumhe itna dard de! Aur jis condition ki tum baat kar rahi thi uske toh kahi zyaada treatments hain... kin gawaaron se paala padha tha tumhaara???
She left out a giggle
"Chaaye Udaasi; Lateefe Sunaake Tujheko hasaa dein ge hum... Haaste Haasaate yun hi gun gunaate Chalde gein Chaar Kadam"
(When sadness befalls; by cracking jokes... I shall make you laugh... in this manner we will walk the four steps of life)
Thank you...!!
Thank you toh itne keh diye magar humme ek doosre ka naam tak nahi maalom!!
Oh I'm sorry... main Ishita... aur aap?
Main hoon Raman... toh chalein phir aapko aapke ghar chodh aaon; I'm sure aapko ab koi gila shikwa nahi hoga apni family se!
Aapne itna kuch jo samjhaya uska kuch to asar zaroor hua hai mujhpe! Chaliye...
"Tumsa Mile jo koi Rehguzzar Duniya se koun Darre; Chaar Kadam Kya Saari Umar Chaldoon gi Saath tere"
(if I find a Rehguzzar like you why would I fear the world... not only four steps; I shall be ready to walk the journey of life with you)
In that short span of time this stranger by the name of Raman had taught Ishita so much! Yes... it was true life had not been fair to her but not losing hope and moving on by choosing happiness over pain was all that mattered, after all! Especially, when she had found a Humdard!
Don't feel that it's the end of the world when your dreams fall apart... you never know... what God has planned... for you!
THE END
Edited by peace.. - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#99
Hello all,

I hv just posted the OS written by umeirah02 for 20 may in the above post.

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Posted: 10 years ago
@dipa...
Lovely os.. m so so sorry for commenting so late...the tension, the worry, self doubt which raman faces is so so natural... n true... wat r those words..action speaks louder than words at times...

i love his conversation witht the old wise man... nice premise dips...

ishita is in a teasing mode..i love ishita in her teasing mode...

beautiful yaar

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