Originally posted by: peace..
@ana,
I am so glad u put this kind of an OS here dear. Firstly let me tell you, you are a brilliant story-teller!👏Story-telling is an art..and i feel very few r able to master it. And u r a master story teller👏
The flow of d story was brilliant, the story was very gripping.
I loved bari ma's character😊
n i loved dese lines:
But when she went into the bathroom and the strong smell of his cologne hit her, she knew he was here and left without even talking to her. Even without the morning kiss, they used to share. He never missed it right after from the wedding day. Even when they have an argument, he liked to shut her up and kiss, making her feel how he much he loves her.
"Love is just like this na Raman...Peaked in your heart through the holes you ignored to fill while building a wall around it. But love surly do have a way...like they say...Love will find a way" Raman deeply inhaled the sand smell that was filled in the air before he turned at look at his friend.
He tried to avoid it but with Ishita, it seemed that love was knocked at his heart from all the sides without giving him a chance to completely protect one.👏
and wat was dis dialogue!:"Only If You Know..Right now, Ignoring her is the only option I have...atleast...she is there, infront of my eyes when I go back home..." Raman thought helplessly. - i mean how well did u fit in dis one!👏
(conveying smthing to mihika, n meaning somthing else to him)
well done yaar!
Now coming to d romance.. omg..i m dead😳😉😆haye!
aah..but then it was a dream!😭
He was incorrigible that night. His kisses were so deep, loved filled, his sighs, his groans, his touch, everything had made his body feel alive.😉
Seriously some portions in d story were so heart touching..😭👏like wen he makes her sleep correctly, den d bday note.. n den the reply to d note actually hurt me personally too! 😭(u see i connected to d story dat much!)
Did he doubt that she will not? And just that thought would make him feel suffocated.
What would be his life without her? (witty writing!👏)
Last night, in anger and emotions, he had wrote all that but deep inside his heart, he wished she would spoke up, she would fight with him, try to explain him but nothing happened. All through the day, how many times he checked on his mobile, only he knew.
Aah i loved d climax!👏
I have been sleeping on the stupid couch...Did you once dare put me to bed?...No, because Mr Raman Kumar Bhalla needed all the space to himself"
- awee👏😃
"And I will kick your butt and ask you to leave the house" She winked through her tears filled eyes as he smile.😆👏
"And as for the punishment" The cheery tone was back "You will have to let me sleep over you on this couch for the whole night" She put her chin on his chest while looking up at him. ❤️
There r so many brilliant writers i hv discovered on d thread, that i now feel like a fool for even attempting to write here.😆Hats off to u guys!👏( u know some of u guys r writing so brilliantly tht it is scaring others to participate here, including me!😆😉)
And yes..dis is my fav story tht i hv read on the forum so far. yes.😃👏
CID
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