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Scene starts in Bhalla house .Raman has gone to Mumbai for a business meeting.Scene is over Bhalla house.

Mrs Bhalla is tensed she is on a mission.Ishita makes Ruhi ready and after Ruhi leaves to school.

Mrs Bhalla stops Ishita while she is going to clinic.

Ishita "Mummyji aapko kuch chaahiyen?"

Mrs Bhalla "Ishita tum aaj merey saath hospital aa sakthee hon?"

Ishita was tensed and "Mummyji kyaa huan aap theek tho hain.Aapney mujhey bathaaya kyon nahee?"

Toshiji "Ishita mujhey kuch naheen huan.Tum bass bathao merey saath aa sakthee hain yaa naheen?"

Ishita "Main aaongee ?Abhee jaana hain yaa?"

Mrs Bhalla "Appointment dass bhajey hain.Tumm kissey ko kuch naheen bathaana.Raman ko bhee."

Ishita was worried as what would be the fact that Toshiji is hiding from all even Raman.

Ishita assures that she wont tell anyone and they leave to hospital.

Then in car.

Toshiji "Ishita mujhey tumhey poochnaa chahiye thaa lekin mujhey naheen patha kee tumsey kaisey poochu."

Ishita "Mummyji aap aisey kyon bol rahe hain.Mainey kabhee aapka baath tala hain kyaa.Aap jho bhee sochtey hain ussmey hummaree bhalai tho hee hothee hain."

Toshiji "Ishita tum Raman ko kab sey jaanthee hon?"

Ishita was silent at this question.Then she finally spoke.

Ishita "Shaadi sey pehley hee jaanthee thee lekin jho mainey sunaa uss Raman ko jaanthee thee.Lekin Raman ko main shaadi key baad hee pehchaan pain hun."

Toshiji "Ishita .Tum aaj bhee Raman ko naheen jaanthee hon."

Ishita know this as there is always a corner in Raman which is new for her that is what makes him her special as she can never predict him over something.She loves this unknown nature of Raman.

Toshiji "Jho Raman tum aaj dekh rahen hon naa.Who Raman hee naheen hain."

Toshiji asks her to stop car near a park and they go inside it.

Toshiji "Ishita Raman bachpan sey hee sabka khyaal raktha tha.Tum yakeen nahen karogi kee bachpan mey kabhee usskey chehrey par gussa nahee dek sakthee tum aur aansu bhee."

Ishita was listening as it is related to Raman she always wanted to know everything about Raman and Ruhi.

Toshiji "Kabhee kissey baath sey dartha naheen thaa aur koi fikar karthaa apney baaarey mey."

Ishita "Raman aaj bhee aisey hee hain.Who kissey sey naheen darthey hain."

Toshiji gives a small smile.

Toshiji "Issliyen hu ussey HAPPY bulathey they.Hummesha hasthey rehtha thaa."

Ishita was repeating the word HAPPY .

Toshiji "Sab kuch theek tha usskey liyen.Fir meri ek galthee ney usska zindagee badaldee."

Toshiji "Mainey Raman ka shaadi uss Shagun sey karwayee.Sabko dikhaney key liyen kee mere bahoon kyaa hain.Uska pariwaar accha tha.Usski maa meri dossth thee."

Ishita never liked to hear about Shagun.he always has mixed feeling when she hears about Shagun.One as she is trying to get back to Raman's life and other being what she did to Raman.

Toshiji "Jab Adi paidhaa huan thaa.Tho Raman bahuth badal gayaa.Ussko zimmedaaari ka mathlab,darr sab kuch huan.Usska gussa sab kuch Adi sey suru huan."

Toshiji "Sab kuch theek thaa.Fir Ruhi paidaa huen.Raman ussey bahuth pyaar karthaa tha Adi sey jyaada.Kyo kee who Shagun jaisey dikthi thee.Aur usskey baad Raman ko har kaam mey jeeth huan.Ruhi usko bahuth saarey khushiya layee."

Ishita knew how much Raman loves Ruhi even though he never showed it completely.

Toshiji "Fir Shagun kaa dhokha aur Adi door jaana.Shagun ney Adi key dill mey Raman key liyen nafrath paidha kiyaa."

Toshiji "Thoot gaya thaa Raman aur darr gayaa thaa sabko khoney kaa.Ruhi ko khoney kaa.Zindagee sey darr gayaa thaa.Aur Akeley rehanaa aadat bana liyan."

Toshiji "Ussney zindagee mey sab kuch jeetha.Fir bhee Ruhi ko khoney kaa darr."

Toshiji "Ruhi kaa pyar ney fir sab kuch badal diyan.Raman key zindagee mey khushiya waapas ayen.Tum aye Raman key zindagee mey.Iss Ghar mey."

Toshiji "Tumney Raman ko fir sey jeena sikhaaya aur sab kuch iss ghar key liyen kiyaa."

Toshiji "Ishita tum ney sab kuch kiyan iss ghar key liyen yumhey aur kuch maang bhee nahen sakthee."

Ishita "Mummyji aap kyaa kehrahen hain.Yeh mera ghar hain ."

Toshiji cupping Ishita head with her hand keeping it over.

Toshiji "Ishita Raman kabhee kush nahen hoga.Jab thak ussey Adi ka kami poora nah on.Aur Adi kabhee iss ghar mey naheen aayega uss Shagun neey baap betey key rishtye mey itnaa zahar daldee kee Adi kabhee ussey Papa na kahen."

Toshiji "Ishita main shaadi sey pehkey bhee jaanthee hunk e tum kabhee ma naheen ban paogi.Lekin uss samay Ruhi key liyen hum ney han kiyaa thaa.Who ek hee kam thaa jho humney saheen kiya."

Toshiji "Ishita tum merey liyan ek baar fir apna checkup karwaa saktee hon kyaa."

Ishita was shocked listening this.She remember the dat when she came to know that she can never become a mother and she went to many doctors taking her report but everyone told same.

Noe after these many years Toshiji is asking Ishita to do her checkup again.

Toshiji "Ishita tumhey koi problem ho tho nahee."

Ishita was is confusion.There was never a moment in her life when she dint thought abour her kid.Ruhi came in her life partially filling it but she always wanted to know the feel of a mom.Pain of giving birth every memory carrying a baby.seeing her first cry,feeding them many more .It was never fulfilled.

Toshiji "Mera ek dosth kee beti ko bhee koi problem thaa lekin ussney bhee ek bachey ko janm diya science kee wajaha sey.Main ney soch kee tum bhee .."

Ishita "Mummyji main aaonge aapkey saath.Main bhee maa banna chahthe hun."

Ishita almost broke down saying this.Now she is hoping for a solution by artificial methods.Till now she never thought of that.Befor marriage she needed husband for this procedures but after she never had free time to think about it as her life is filled now.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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For regular reader of my dream track.
Realization would be updated tonight.

Got in a confusion to use ether Adi or Shagun to mislead Ruhi.
It is a comedy track where Ruhi will get jealous of Ishita and trying to gain Raman's attention more.

It is comedy

Then about this story .
It will be shorter one will be completed in 5-8 parts.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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wot a dream yaar...
nice😉...
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Scene starts in hospital.

Ishita and Toshiji meet doctor and doctor adviced for a checkup to find the problem completely and then available solution.

Ishita goes through all the tests and even Toshiji was with her giving her her support.

When checkup is over they knew reports would be coming next day so they leave to their house.

In car.

Toshiji "Ishita ek baath tumhey pehkey bathaadoo.Uss report mey kuch bhee ayen aur doctor kuch bhee kahen.Tum merey bahoon hee rahegee.Raman ka biwi aur Ruhi ki maa.Yeh main kabhee badalney nahee doongi."

Ishita eyes were filled with tears .This is the fear she had in her mind.What if doctor din't finad any solution will she be left alone and separated from family.

These are the words Ishita wanted to listen she neede this support.

Toshiji "Tum iss gahr kee bahun hon.Merey liyen tho mere beti hee hon.Tum bachey dee ya naade paon.Iss ghar mey tumhaara hee raaj hoga.Ek baath bathon tumhaari jaisey bahun mujhey kabhee nahee milegee."

Toshiji "Main hummesha sochtee thee.Agar tum mujhey Shagun sey pehlee miley hothee tho aaj mera poora ghar mey kabhee koi dukh hee nahee aatha.Humey ek pal key liyen bhee afsos nahen hothee."

Ishita was more pleased.She loved her family more than anything.Even though there are problems for them they always faced it with courage and defeated all challenges coming to them.Raman will never let anyone even look at his family with evil eye if possible.

In house she was alone in her room she was eagerly waiting for next day as her reports will tell her of any chances of becoming mother makin Raman a father again.No one in the house knew about it.She never thought these things when Raman was there.Ishita knew that they love each other but it never came to their mouth .So they presume themselves as friends and Ruhi's parents among them selves.

For others in whome society.Raman and Ishita were best couple they could ever see.They know each othe very well and the way they support each other in times of troubles and never fading smiles in their faces and their respect for elders was gaining aspect for elders in society and which attracts their attention.

Then for others was their success in their field of work and their match in all aspects make them winners in everything.No one ever even thought that Ruhi is not Ishita's daughter and they stick together always making fun on Raman and making themselves a happy family.

Next day early morning Raman came and he was tired verymuch he had a option to come next day but he can neither stay a day without seeing Ishita and Ruhi for even a day.But he will never accept it before Ishita ,They have kept a barrier themselves by not accepting their feeling for others.

Raman got ready and was waiting for Ishita's coffee but Ishita was in other world and she forgot about it .Raman understood something is troubling Ishita .

Raman "Ishita kyaa huan tumhey aaj .Tum theek tho hon?"

Ishita "Main theek hun.Aap rukhiye main abhee aapkey liyen coffee lathe hun."

Then after breakfast everyone leave for their jobs Toshiji and Ishita slowly goes to hospital after waiting for few minutes.

Ishita was taking her old reports along with her just for safety and satisfying herself.

In hospital Ishita was more tensed before meeting doctor.It is her worst fear.All thse years she has convinced herself over the fact she cant become a mother but from day before she raised herself a hope and she is ready to go through anything to get herself a child .Child of her and Raman.

Then they were called inside. Ishita is more tensed knowing her result over the hope is coming .

Then what happened inside was a miracle for her.

Toshiji "Doctorji aapney reports dekha,koi treatment hain yaa koi raastha."

Ishita wanted to shout and ask but she controlled her emotions which Toshiji will never do being a punjaabi expressing their emotions and heart to recquired was a inbuilt future.They speak with heart more than brain.Ishita closed her eyes.

Doctor "Mainey aapkey saarey reports dekha.Lekin mujhey confirmation key liyen aapkey husband ka checkup karnaa padega."

Ishita was shocked listening this.She never thought Raman's name will come out in this mess until she mention.

Ishita "Raman ka kyon?"

Toshiji "Raman kaa checkup kyon?"

Doctor "Ishita jee key reports mey sab kuch theek hain,who perfectly healthy hain aur koi problem nahee hain ussmey."

Doctor "Fir bhee aap maa nahe ban rahen hain tho mujhey Mr Bhalla ka checkup karwaana hoga.Shaayad usmey koi defect hon."

Ishita and Toshiji knew their wont be any defect in Raman as he was already a father of two kids.Ishita very well knew that they never conceived so no chance of Raman being in problem.

Toshiji "Koi problem naheen hain Ishita mey tho.Uss doctor ney aisaa kyon kahan.."

Ishita then with little courage gave her old report to doctor.

Ishita "Doctor yeh meraa puraana report hain,Aap issey ek baar check keejiyen."

Doctor checks it for few minutes.Then rechecks it with new one and after a deep breath.

Doctor "Yeh aapka report ho hee nahen saktha.Yeh kissey aur ka report hain.But issmey jho ladkee hain who kabhee nahee ban sakthee."

Ishita was shocked and it would be her biggest in this life.

Ishita "Yeh mera report nahee hain?Aap yakeen sey kaisey keh saktey hain?"

Then doctors shows Ishita few things in old report and all those details are not of Ishita.

Except name and few details no other detail is matching with new report.

Doctor "Kissey ney althee dey report badla hoga.But I can guarantee you yeh galthee hummarey hospital mey naheen hotha.Aapmey koi problem naheen hain."

Ishita was shocked with happiness as the blame she was taking all these years belonged to some other woman but not her.She was perfectly normal.She was first time scolding herself in mind for not daring for another checkup.Which could have sorted this issue years back.

Ishita and Toshiji leave hospital and Ishita was very happy to say beyond happy now.She don't have any word to say.Toshiji was silent as she was worried how to make Raman agree for checkup.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Yaar some on give reply.If you dont give your opinion how can I continue and how can I know whether you liked this concept or not.
If you dint like it also you can comment to stop posting.




I know I am not that good os writer but I can improve my chance.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Loved it please update soon..!!
Want to know Raman's expression
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awesome dear...continue without any delay...😉..
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Awnnn that was really good
Oh god such a goof up by the hospital
Well problem raman mein nahin hai
Its in ishra lolll
Continue soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Amazing wow OS
Love it
So hospital goofed up the reports
Now they want to see if Raman has any problem
But I think ishu should refuse to make Raman to do the test as hes already a father of two kids
and ishu should better know that as they haven't have any physical relationship with each other yet

Let's see how you forward this story
Please continue soon
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part 3

Scene starts in Bhalla house Ishita rushed to her room and closed the door and bolted it down.She was very happy .It was like her missing world coming back.What her world never missed but it was just delayed.

She was checking her new reports which are saying everything is normal.She is perfectly all right and she can become a mother.It is her long lost dream.

She is now imagining her new baby in Raman's hands and she was beside him.Now she can go to any extent to make that vision true,She can fight with anyone to make it true even whole world.

She had only one thing in her mind Raman .She want to share this news with Raman .

She then hears door knocking.Toshiji has called all the girls belonging to both houses.

Mihika,Vandu,Mrs Iyer everyone are there.

Toshiji "Ishita mainey kuch naheen bathaaya hain.Mainey socha tumhey hee bathaana chahiyen."

Ishita agreed and controlled her happiness.

Mys Iyer "Ishita kyaa huan ?.Kuch problem hain.?"

Mihika "Kyaa huan .Mummyji itnaa serious kyon hain."

Vandu "Kuch serious hain?"

Ishita "Aap log ghar jayiyen main abhee aoongi."

They go to their room as instructed.

Ishita goes to Mrs Bhalla.

Ishita "Mummyji aap tension math hoyiyen ,sab kuch theek hain."

Toshiji "Ishita main Raman ko kaisey samjhaon?"

Ishita "Mummyji uskee koi jaroori nahen hain.Raman mey koi problem naheen ho saktee."

Ishita then tells her about her relation with Raman and how much they she loves him and she then assures her that she will take initiative as she knows Raman also loves her.

Toshiji feels happy but she has her fears.It is about her family .

Toshiji "Ishita tum pehley jaon aur unkoo bathdoo."

Ishita goes there taking her new reports and old ones too.She kept sadden expression to confuse her mother and sisters.

Mrs Iyer "Ishita kyan huan?Tum hummey bathon naa?Kuch serious huan?"

Mihika "Aapkey haath mey kyaa hain?"

Ishita "Mummyji mujhey kall gynaecologist key pass le gayeee thee.Mainey apnaa checkup karvaaya thaa." Still controlling her outburst and keeping sad face.

Vandu "Kuch solution milaa?Koi artificial method?Any treatment?"

Ishita acting more as more sad.

Mrs Iyer "Ishita tum ro math kanna.Hum sabh hain naa?Raman ney kuch naheen kahan naa.Fir tum kyon ro rahen hon."

Mihika "Akka bathon naa kyaan huan?"

Ishita then gives her new reports to Mihika .

Mihika was shocked seeing it but controlled and came to masthi mode.

Vandu "Mihika kyaa huan.Tum kuch bolon naa."

Mihika "Akka koi solution naheen milaa."

Vandu saddened .

Vandu "Kuch tho solution hoga .Ishita tum bathon."

Mihika "Akka main sach bol rahen hon.Iss problem ka koi solution naheen hain."

Vandu then about to take report from Mihika's hand to check it herself.

The moment Vandita took.

Mihika shouted loudly "Kyon kee yaha koi problem hee nahen hain.Akka maa ban saktee hain normally."

She shouted so loudly even Toshiji came there after listening.Toshiji knew it's a happy moment for Ishita and everyone.It is the only lie thing which can break Ishita .But now it is no more.

Mrs Iyer and Vandu are shocked and happy.

Vandu "Ishita tum bathon .Sach sach bathon.Yhe sach hain tho pehley doctor ney aisaa kyon bola."

Ishita "Then tells akka who report mera thaa hee naheen.Hospital walon ney report badaldee thee."

Ishita then slowly says "Mujhey himath naheen huen thee fir sey checkup karwaaney.Main ussey baath sey rothee rahen.Aaj jab mainey karwaaya patha chala kee main bewajha ro rahen thee."

Ishita with tears in her eyes.That is the fact that changed her life.

Mihika "Uss hospital walon ney kitnaa kiyya.Akka aap itney din jho bhee problems face kiyya sab kuch unlongon key wajaha sey hain."

Mihika "Who log theek sey kaam kiyye hothey tho aaj aap Subbu sey shaadi kiye hothey aur happily hothey."Mihika slipped this accidentally.

But worse was when Raman heard this passing through.Raman has mixed feelings listening their discussion.But he goes to his room silently no onw notices him either coming or going.

Ishita "Sab kuch accha hee huan.Aaj main bahuth khush hun.Shaayad jitnaa main uss zindagee mey naheen hothe."

Mrs Iyer leaves from there to get something to share along with this happy news.

Ishita was worried with what Mihika told.She is just imagining her life without Raman and it was horrible for her.

Ishita "Aaj merey pass ek pariwaar hain ,Raman jaisa pathi,Ruhi ussey jyaada kuch nahen mil saktha ."

Ishita "Main aaj asiey pariwar mey hon,Here everyone loves me.They value me as me.Main yahan iss family ka member hun .Shaayad uss shaadi huan hotha tho mera zidagee bhe kuch naheennhoth jaisa Sabh uska hain."

Ishita "I cant even imagine that Ruhi was not a part of my family and Raman."

Mihika understood how much she hurt Ishita by bringing Subbu's name in her happy moments.

Mihika "I am sorry akka.Mainey baas uss hospital walon ko.."

Ishita "I am ready to forgive them ,I am lucky that I dint go to a family where I am a machine than a member.Where my feelings are not respected.Aaj ussey wajaha sey tho main Raman key saath hun."

Ishita could'nt speak more and she goes running away from there.The thought Raman would'nt have been wither if reports haven't crossed broke Ishita.She will not even try to imagine herself without Raman and Ruhi.

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