OS: Based on yesterday's precap... (28/06/2014) Final note.Pg 23 - Page 22

Originally posted by: -SakuraS-

Very beautiful and well written!!! I wish they show something similar to this on the show...The characters were so real...loved the bit when Raman said "meri biwi..."...

Thank u for the wonderful finish u had given to this track!

Originally posted by: Isma_A

Krishna, this was SO goood! I just read it all in one sitting. You really preserved the essence of the characters and their relationship as it currently stands, down to ending it with Raman claiming their relationship as one of dosti and rushing out of the room before his dil phissals. Haha. 😃

I also LOVED your dialogues! You are a really good writer and clearly have a strong grasp of the characters and what goes on inside their heads. The individual and shared dialogues of Raman and Ishita provided great depth and understanding in terms of character development, which is really important!! Using a recent example from the show, we saw everyone, including Ishita, praising Raman and their trust in him. That rubbed me the wrong way (especially the dialogues from Ishita) because it was obvious to me this was very plot driven, NOT character-driven, and I just find that to be very poor and lazy writing. A writer should never move a story forward by forcing dialogues as plot points, so I really wasn't a fan of the writing that day. In your OS, however, the dialogues were meaningful and pushed the story forward while also exploring both characters and their motivations as they relate to what's currently happening-- which thereby allowed you to naturally create an opening for your subsequent scenes/sequences. Ishita explained clearly it was the lie that hurt her more than Raman's circumstantial involvement with Shagun, and Raman explained the confusion and turmoil he was going through trying to balance Adi vs Ishita. This, in turn, layered their characters even more and further deepened their relationship, with an open and honest conversation over a hug! 😃

Kaash, aise hi show mein hojaye.

This was great, Krishna!! Loved it!!!

Originally posted by: -Srkfan4ever-

Kri. 🤗(Ekdum DivAn style jhappi.)😉😆

This was so AMAZING.

Like seriously. Read all the parts in one go. And I LOVED it. This is exactly what I want to see in the show too.

His guilt, his helplessness..Wonderfully written.

And the hug.

Lovely OS Kri.🤗

Originally posted by: suhaaana

Part 1
awsum start loved ishita's ignorance

Originally posted by: suhaaana

Part 3
raman's dilemma is well portrayed

i m glad to meet a writer who knw ins n out of yhm exactly

Originally posted by: Elita

Read all in one go...fantastically written. Ishita's character portrayal and Raman's restlessness were very well depicted in the story...loved it from start to finish. ⭐️ 👏👏

Originally posted by: suhaaana

Part 7
so chudail got jawab
n all's well at end
enjoyed a lot

Originally posted by: srgmpazee

What an amazing finish to the story. Very cute ending. When Raman was hugging Ishitha and crying a, i too felt like giving a hug to him .😭.

Very well written yaar. 👏👏👏This is the first time I have read an OS in one go and was impatiently refreshing the pages to read all the parts at one go.I so liked it very much. I sincerely hope we wish to get some of your scenes in the future tracks.

Will make it a point to read all your OS in future. Good one and well written again.😊

Originally posted by: Jyoe

Hey Kri!!

The OS was AMAZING! Loved it!

I am in office and its Monday and a busy day! But after Ishra dance yesterday could not resist myself coming to forum to check out for any updates/vids\

By chance happend to come to this post and aftre reading the 1st update..got so hooked. so that left all my work and read all the updates in one go!!! It was brilliant and very beautifully written, thought about . It was so much IshRa in it. Could easily relate with it.

I loved Ishu's accident plot (sorry Ishu, would never want you to go thru it) but I always wanted Raman to get into that fear of losing Ishu(if something happens to her) and then look after her like a proper husband. So, thatnks so much for thinking about this plot.

Please continue writing more and let us know...I so so so hope some of the scenes are atleast incorporated into the show and we get to see them!!!

You are amazing writer and if you did this in so much less time, I can just imagine what brilliant OS we will see if you ahve enough time with you!

You made my monday and I am actually imagining this OS turn into Onscreen scenes