Krishna, this was SO goood! I just read it all in one sitting. You really preserved the essence of the characters and their relationship as it currently stands, down to ending it with Raman claiming their relationship as one of dosti and rushing out of the room before his dil phissals. Haha. 😃
I also LOVED your dialogues! You are a really good writer and clearly have a strong grasp of the characters and what goes on inside their heads. The individual and shared dialogues of Raman and Ishita provided great depth and understanding in terms of character development, which is really important!! Using a recent example from the show, we saw everyone, including Ishita, praising Raman and their trust in him. That rubbed me the wrong way (especially the dialogues from Ishita) because it was obvious to me this was very plot driven, NOT character-driven, and I just find that to be very poor and lazy writing. A writer should never move a story forward by forcing dialogues as plot points, so I really wasn't a fan of the writing that day. In your OS, however, the dialogues were meaningful and pushed the story forward while also exploring both characters and their motivations as they relate to what's currently happening-- which thereby allowed you to naturally create an opening for your subsequent scenes/sequences. Ishita explained clearly it was the lie that hurt her more than Raman's circumstantial involvement with Shagun, and Raman explained the confusion and turmoil he was going through trying to balance Adi vs Ishita. This, in turn, layered their characters even more and further deepened their relationship, with an open and honest conversation over a hug! 😃
Kaash, aise hi show mein hojaye.
This was great, Krishna!! Loved it!!!
Edited by Isma_A - 11 years ago
