Those Awkward Moments - An IshRa OS [Based on last scene of 12/ 05]

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Aani

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Posted: 11 years ago

#61

Originally posted by: B5144331
👏👏👏 well i m new here..u r writings r perfect..dear..😳😳..waiting for u r update..lot..want all this in screen too..wonderful written😊😊❤️

thanks dear and since this is an OS it ends here 😳 and welcome to IF 😊

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pomegranate

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Posted: 11 years ago

#62

Aani this was very good. You wrote it very elegantly without letting it become too over the top. The kiss was believable because a married couple is bound to have a moment like this if given the right opportunity. The only reason we don't see anything on screen is because this is indian television. It's unrealistic but that is the nature of television.

The bhalla's just came in at the wrong time and ruined the moment, otherwise I would have liked to see them linger in their awkwardness a little bit more.

Again, very well written and hope to see you write more.

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Aani

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Posted: 11 years ago

#63

Originally posted by: pomegranate
Aani this was very good. You wrote it very elegantly without letting it become too over the top. The kiss was believable because a married couple is bound to have a moment like this if given the right opportunity. The only reason we don't see anything on screen is because this is indian television. It's unrealistic but that is the nature of television.
The bhalla's just came in at the wrong time and ruined the moment, otherwise I would have liked to see them linger in their awkwardness a little bit more.

Again, very well written and hope to see you write more.

Thank you so much Zara 😊

@bold - I aimed for that... I cant do OTT stuff myself, so cant impose them on my readers too 😳

@red - Yep.. any couple married or otherwise if attracted to one another can actually end up going with the flow of the moment, but as you mentioned Indian TV is still not aiming to show things so...

@blue - this was in keeping with the spoilers of course so couldnt help it 😆

Thanks and I hope to get inspired soon again 😳

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Aani

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Posted: 11 years ago

#64

Originally posted by: NocturnalBeing
Beautiful! Loved it..

Thanks a lot! 😊

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Anu

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Posted: 10 years ago

#65

Ohh lala.. Aani that was superb..
Though the scene was the same, but thank you very much for the extra added details and all the ahem ahem's.. 😆 Ahh, the kiss.! Passionate and intense.. ❤️ Only you can make all the intimate scenes so sensuous yet so elegant...

Ofcourse, their bickering is like the icing on the cake, always makes them even more adorable.. 😆

Once again, it was an awesome OS as always.. You are gifted Aani, I am sure you would have realized that by now given the heaps of compliments you get, which you totally deserve of course.!! 😃

Edited by -IshRaDivAn- - 10 years ago

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Aani

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Posted: 10 years ago

#66

Originally posted by: YhmCraze
nice

thanks dear 😊

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Aani

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Posted: 10 years ago

#67

Originally posted by: -IshRaDivAn-
Ohh lala.. Aani that was superb..
Though the scene was the same, but thank you very much for the extra added details and all the ahem ahem's.. 😆 Ahh, the kiss.! Passionate and intense.. ❤️ Only you can make all the intimate scenes so sensuous yet so elegant...

Ofcourse, their bickering is like the icing on the cake, always makes them even more adorable.. 😆

Once again, it was an awesome OS as always.. You are gifted Aani, I am sure you would have realized that by now given the heaps of compliments you get, which you totally deserve of course.!! 😃

Hey Anu thank you so much ☺️

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Nisha0604

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Posted: 10 years ago

#68

MIND BLOWING!

The kiss was just FOUR lines, yet the magic was like super glue...

Your lines read like POETRY

I DONT think any of us understand these two characters as much as YOU do!👏

Esp the following:

It amuses him as much as it scares him - to learn she is so gullible. Her trusting nature, her helping ways have recently brought her a lot of trouble and it sends a tremble down his spine, to think of the things she needs to be protected against. For all her strength, she is such a silly, stupid, foolish girl.

He cannot let anything happen to her, EVER. She is too good for her own good, may be that is why god intended he marry her - she needs someone to keep her safe and out of harm' way at all and any time.

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Juhi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#69

awesome...nice one yet again...👏

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Aani

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Posted: 10 years ago

#70

Originally posted by: Nisha0604
MIND BLOWING!
The kiss was just FOUR lines, yet the magic was like super glue...

Your lines read like POETRY

I DONT think any of us understand these two characters as much as YOU do!👏

Esp the following:
It amuses him as much as it scares him - to learn she is so gullible. Her trusting nature, her helping ways have recently brought her a lot of trouble and it sends a tremble down his spine, to think of the things she needs to be protected against. For all her strength, she is such a silly, stupid, foolish girl.
He cannot let anything happen to her, EVER. She is too good for her own good, may be that is why god intended he marry her - she needs someone to keep her safe and out of harm' way at all and any time.

Thanks Nisha and wow @red - its really a huge compliment ☺️ thank you for saying that it truly means a lot to me 😳